Good morning, everybody.
We will get started at 11:00.
Cameras on. Mics muted.
Today’s agenda:
1. Run-on sentences
2. Descriptive writing –
3. Tomorrow Test#3 Descriptive paragraph
Areas of grammar to work on in the final weeks:
• run-on sentences
• sentence fragments
• verb tenses
• ***ALWAYS***- sentence types
Run-on sentences – several clauses, several sentences all jammed together with no punctuation between them
Example:
We went to the lake yesterday it was too cold to swim we had a picnic together. run-on sentence, RO
We went to the lake yesterday it was too cold to swim we had a picnic together. 3 sentences jammed together
MY MARKING COMMENT: Divide. Divide your writing into sentences. Divide them. Separate them.
We went to the lake yesterday it was too cold to swim we had a picnic together.
Rewrite these three ideas into sentences.
POSSIBLE SOLUTIONS:
1. We went to the lake yesterday. It was too cold to swim. We had a picnic together. 3 simple sentences
2. We went to the lake yesterday. It was too cold to swim, but we had a picnic together. simple and compound sentences
3. When we went to the lake yesterday, it was too cold to swim. We had a picnic together. complex sentence and simple sentence
We always have to write simple, compound or complex sentences.
Example of a paragraph that is ruined by run-on sentences:
I remember the three days before Christmas in December 2019 when I recently got to Vancouver with my family, my brother said to me we should go to Downtown, but my car was not big enough to everyone so we decided take a bus we did that because it was raining and we did not think it would be very cold. DIVIDE INTO SENTENCES After we started to walk maybe for 15 minutes at Marine Drive station, the rain started to get heavy and I was surprised by how cold it was, my three children were walking with us, and they were not happy because the rain was cold, we continued walking around downtown, the whole family were happy that they had good jackets to protect them from the rain and we had a lot of laughs my brother and my children never forgot that trip because it was our first trip, and we were very wet and cold but still has a good time. DIVIDE INTO SENTENCES
POSSIBLE REWRITE, divided into sentences
I remember the three days before Christmas in December, 2019. I recently got to Vancouver with my family. My brother said to me that we should go to Downtown. My car was not big enough for everyone, so we decided take a bus. We did that because it was raining and we did not think it would be very cold. After we started to walk maybe for 15 minutes at Marine Drive station, the rain started to get heavy. I was surprised by how cold it was. My three children were walking with us, and they were not happy because the rain was cold. We continued walking around downtown. The whole family were happy that they had good jackets to protect them from the rain. We had a lot of laughs. My brother and my children never forgot that trip because it was our first trip. We were very wet and cold but still had a good time.
ALL DIVIDED INTO NICE SENTENCES
*** You must divide your ideas into sentences. ***
Write your ideas from your imagination or your paragraph in Chat:
1. In Chinese has a proverb is “Newborn calves are not afraid of tigers”. RW
In Chinese, we have a proverb which says “Newborn calves are not afraid of tigers”.
In Chinese, there is a proverb which says “Newborn calves are not afraid of tigers”.
2. Yesterday I went to English bay, the weather was so cold and rainy, but it was fun. RO
Yesterday I went to English Bay. The weather was so cold and rainy, but it was fun.
Divide your ideas into short clear sentences.
3. I remember the day that my friend and I had a good day at Stanley Park.
4. Today, I am very happy that my teacher changed the time of Test#3. Today is no test. There is no test today.
Today is no test. Not English. This is a mix of English and Chinese
grammar.
There is no test today. Real authentic English
5. I barbecued in my backyare alought it was raining, and we were enjoyed our failmy day. sp
I barbecued in my backyard although it was raining, and we were enjoyed our family day.
6. I don't want to remember what happened to me this morning.
7. Ambelside is the most wonderful place to visit because of the combination of interesting architecture and scenic nature makes a beautiful landscape. RW
Ambleside is the most wonderful place to visit because of the combination of interesting architecture and scenic nature. This makes a beautiful landscape. IDEAS DIVIDED INTO SENTENCES
Ambleside is the most wonderful place to visit. The combination of interesting architecture and scenic nature makes a beautiful landscape. IDEAS DIVIDED INTO SENTENCES
*** Don’t jam 4,5 ideas into one sentence. One ideas is enough. Two ideas are enough. Three ideas? Be very cautious.
8. His dog has long ears that always hung downward. 2 ideas
His dog has long ears that always hung downward chase a cat very cute i like dogs he barked a lot i want a dog too my kids want a cat cats are cute. WHAT A MESS!
10 ideas jammed together. Don’t do it!
9. I like to play frisbee, but my son like to play badminton. 2 ideas
10. I went to the greys park with my friends hang out. And then we are enjoyed with my friends playing basketball, After game we are going to home. RW
I went to Greys Park with my friends to hang out. Then we played basketball together. After the game, we went home. BEAUTIFUL!
11. I was given the Covid 19 vaccine, and I felt terrible.2 ideas- compound sentence
12. My friend's cat is very cute and naughty. simple sentence
My friend's cat is very cute and naughty play with string drink milk i like cats. A MESS
Divide it into sentences.
My friend's cat is very cute and naughty. She plays with string and drink milk. I like cats.
13. Yesterday, my family and I walked slow at slowly around Stanley Park in the rainy weather.
***
We are here to learn and practice.
Park names are capitalized: Stanley Park, Queen Elizabeth Park, Grey’s Park, Bobolink Park
14. Yesterday, I went to Richmond Center. I bought a pair of shoes and some t-shirts. It has been a long time since I went shopping. THREE PERFECT SIMPLE SENTENCES
Exercises for homework. Try a few.
1. The car will not start it is out of gas.
POSSIBLE SOLUTIONS:
The car will not start. It is out of gas. 2 SIMPLES
The car will not start because it is out of gas. COMPLEX-ADV CL
The car will not start since it is out of gas. COMPLEX-ADV CL
The car is out of gas, so it will not start. COMPOUND
The car that will not start is out of gas. COMPLEX-ADJ CL
The car that is out of gas will not start. COMPLEX-ADJ CL
The car is out of gas and will not start. SIMPLE
Some of these ways are easy, and some of them are hard. I want you to be able to do all of way. For now, focus on the easy ways. You can do the hard ways later.
2. Eliza ran to the store, then she bought some candy.
3. The dog is running around the park, the kids are running, too.
4. Elvis Presley was a great singer, he was famous all over the world.
5. Computer are very helpful to us they can be expensive.
6. Dubai has built magnificent office towers, it is a great location to run a business.
7. Brazil has won several world cup championships in soccer, they are always considered a good team.
8. BC is considered an excellent university, it attracts many students.
9. We went to the beach yesterday it was cold.
10. His girlfriend left him, he was brokenhearted.
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Test#3- tomorrow
Tomorrow we will write a descriptive paragraph. I will show a picture. You will write a paragraph describing what you see. You don’t have to describe the whole picture. You can focus on just one part of it if you want.
(100-150 words)
What would you like a picture of?
person?
scenery?
animal?
object?
I’ll give you a choice between a person and some scenery.
You can use your dictionaries because you may want to use special vocabulary that you don’t know.
Still, don’t copy sentences. The dictionaries are just for the special vocabulary words.
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