EF6 8:30 June 10

 

Good morning, everyone.

We will get started at 8:30.

Cameras on. Mics muted.

Today’s agenda:

 

 

1.    Test#3 -Literary paragraph about “Roses Sing on New Snow”

2.    Sentence combining from homework

 

 

 

Writing about a short story.

Paragraph – 150-200 words

 

Structure of the paragraph

Grabber (optional)

Topic sentence – closely connected to the question

e.g What is the setting of “Roses Sing on New Snow”?

Topic sentences- directly linked to that question

                               - borrow words from the question

                               -use synonyms

The setting of “Roses Sing on New Snow” is a Chinatown in North America, probably Vancouver, about 100 years ago.

SUPPORTING SENTENCES – giving evidence

 

E11 or E12 question: How does the setting of “Roses Sing on New Snow” affect how Maylin is a dynamic character?

 

TS:

The setting of “Roses Sing on New Snow” affects how Maylin changes in three ways.

NOTES TO BE WRITTEN INTO SENTENCES

cultural setting

1.difference in status between the governor and Maylin, forces Maylin to speak up for herself

2.lower position of women in the family, Mayline has to become a leader in her family because brothers and father are useless

3.societal perception of women as being unable to be community leaders- Maylin overcomes this – wise, respected- in Chinatown and China

 

 

When we write about short stories, just write about the story. Answer the question.

Don’t use first person, “I”. You are not in the story. The question is not about you. The question is about the story.

e.g. I read the story. I really liked it. For me, Maylin...

 

Do not write a plot summary. I am not asking you to retell the story.

e.g. A young named Mayline spend all of her days cooking in  the restaurant that was owned by her father. One day, there was a special visitor...

Understanding the plot if only the first level of understanding a story.

If you write a plot summary, it just won’t get a mark.

 

Question?

Answer directly connected to the question.

 

Good example question.

Why does Maylin call her dish “Roses Sing on New Snow”?

 

PREWRITING- PLANNING- 3-4 points

Roses – Maylin, new immigrant, flower beautiful, tough (snow), blossoming (new country)

Sing- joyful, happy, hopeful, expressing emotion (like cooking), positive emotion

New Snow – new country, fresh start, allusion to ‘New World’

 

 

WRITING paragraph

 

BASIC TS    Maylin calls her dish “Roses Sing on New Snow” for three reasons.

 

BETTER TS When Maylin cooks/creates/makes her special/signature/ dish for the banquet for the governor, she chooses special/specific/symbolic/meaningful words to describe it. The words “Roses”, “Sing” and “New Snow” have a lot of meaning/significance to her.

 

 

The story “Roses Sing on New Snow” revolves around a young woman, Maylin, creating a dish of the same name. When Maylin creates her dish for the banquet for the governor, she chooses meaningful words to describe it. The words “Roses”, “Sing” and “New Snow” have a lot of significance to her. First of all, the word “Roses”means EXAMPLES. Second, “Sing” could mean EXAMPLES. Finally, “New Snow” refers to EXAMPLES. All in all, for Maylin, it seems that the name of the dish is as important as the taste.

 

indirect:

She might...

It could...

The word “Roses” may

 

direct:

The “Roses” refers to Maylin herself as a young women blossoming like a flower in a new country.

 

I will ask you a straightforward question about the story. It will not be a difficult, tricky question. If you have read the story a few times and engaged with our class discussion, you should be fine to write a decent paragraph.

 

 

It is tough to find good stories that are interesting but that appropriate for EF6 level students.

There are many of compilations of short stories that have question at the end of story. If I were you, I would go to the library and talk to a librarian. They might be able to suggest some anthologies of short stories that you can read.

 

e.g. fables – simple but deep meaning

 

If you like “Roses Sing on New Snow”, go read more of Paul Yee’s work.

 

Find writers that you like. Read widely. You will find stuff that you like and then you can read more.

 

Fiction

-short stories

- novels- romance, history, sci fi, action, sports

 

Non-fiction

– history, autobiography, cooking, travel

 

Anton Chekhov short stories -short, deep meaning

 

Next week, we can read “The Ninny”. I will email it to today.

 

 

 

Paragraph tomorrow

1.Reread the story tonight.

2. Remember that I don’t want you to tell a plot summary. I will be asking a question that goes beneath the plot to a little bit of a deeper level.

 

 

 

Sentence combining – put into practice the grammar and sentence style work that we have studied

simple, compound, complex

- very effective way to improve sentence writing and speaking

- practice old patterns, stretch and try new ideas

 

 

Backstage

PROCESS:

1.                We were preparing. KERNEL- the foundation of the sentence

FIND NEW INFORMATION, AVOID REPETITION

The preparation was for the performance.

The performance was our second.

The performance was of our play.

The dressing room was in a state.

 

 

We were preparing

for the performance

our second

of our play

The dressing room was in a state

 Combine these bits of information all together into one sentence.

What kind of sentence do we want? gut feeling- simple compound complex?

‘in a state’ idiom – very messy, very upset

“Emiko was in a state when her boyfriend broke up with her.”

 

COMPOUND

We were preparing for the second performance of our play, and/so the dressing room was in a state.

 

COMPLEX – adv cl

The dressing room was in a state because we were preparing for the second performance of our play.

While we were preparing for the second performance of our play, the dressing room was in a state.

 

We can practice writing a wide variety of sentences. You need the practice.

 

Serena Williams is arguably the best tennis in the world. She still hits the ball hundreds of time a day for practice.

 

 

Try some of these for homework:

 

2.                Racks were scattered.

The racks were for costumes.

Trays were scattered.

The trays were for makeup.

They were scattered about the room.

3.                Helpers were dressing cast members.

Helpers were applying their makeup.

Nearly everyone was nervous.

4.                The female lead could not do something.

She could not get her wig to stay on properly.

The male lead was having a tug-of-war.

The tug-of-war was with a pair of suspenders.

The suspenders-would not cooperate.

 

 

Write some of your solutions in Chat:

1.                The scattered racks were for costumes, and the scattered trays were for makeup about the room.

 

2.                Costumes racks and makeup trays were scattered about the room.

3.                As well as nearly everyone was nervous, helpers were dressing cast members and applying their makeup.

Everyone was nervous while helpers were dressing cast members and applying their makeup.

 

4.                When helpers were applying their makeup to dress cast members, nearly everyone was nervous.

When helpers were applying cast members’ makeup and dressing them, nearly everyone was nervous.

 

5.                Nearly everyone was nervous that/when/while/because helpers were dressing the cast members and applying their makeup.

6.                The racks for costumes and the trays for makeup were scattered about the room.

7.                Helpers were dressing cast members and applying their makeup because Nearly everyone was nervous.

Helpers were dressing cast members and applying their makeup, and nearly everyone was nervous.

 

8.                Although the female lead could not do something since because she could not get her wig to stay on properly, the male lead was having a tug-of-war, which was with a pair of suspenders that would not cooperate. TOO LONG

 

While the female lead could not get her wig to stay on properly, the male lead was having a tug-of-war with a pair of suspenders that would not cooperate.

 

9.                The female lead could not get her wig to stay on properly while the male lead was having a tug-of-war with a pair of not cooperating / uncooperative suspenders.

 

10.           The female lead could not get her wig to stay on properly, and the male lead was having a tug-of-war with a pair of suspenders that would not cooperate.

 

11.           Racks were scattered for costumes. Trays were scattered for makeup and it about the room. XXX

 

Makeup trays and costume racks were scattered around the room. SIMPLE

 

 

More sentence combining for Monday:

Choose a few. You don’t have to do them all.

 

EASIER

Dad at Home

 

1.    Jackie's dad is a truck driver.

He has driven for twenty years.

He is taking a year off.

He will be with Jackie.

2.    He now works at home.

He works-with Jackie.

He works as a parent.

The parenting is a full-time job.

3.    They clean the house.

They repair the house.

They cook the 1neals.

They shop.

They have fun.

4.    They play in the afternoon.

They paint.

They picnic.

They go to movies.

They cycle.

5.    Jackie is four.

She enjoys each day.

Each day is spent with her dad.

 

HARDER

New Canadians

 

1.    Canada accepts people.

The people are from other countries.

The countries are troubled.

The trouble is political.

2.    Many Canadians are immigrants.

They have come here recently.

They have come here within the last 100 years.

3.    The people fit in well.

They add to the culture.

The culture already exists.

4.    They also have a culture.

Their culture is their original one.

They add to our cultural mix.

5.    Canada is a mixture.

It is a mixture of races.-

6.    This mixture adds to our national character.