EF34 7pm June 15

 

 

 

 

Good evening, everybody.

We will get started at 7:00.

Cameras on. Mics muted.

 

 

Today’s agenda:

1.    Sentence combining work from homework

2.    Begin process writing– teaching, how-to, step by step instruction– imperatives

 

Wednesday: Test#4 process paragraph (100-150 words)

 

 

 

 

Sentence combining work

 

Sentence combining – excellent way to improve sentence writing

 

IDEA: Take several short sentences and find the key words in each sentence. Combine the elements together into one longer, denser but concise sentence.

dense- carrying a lot of information

concise – as short as possible

 

Sentence combining will help you write shorter, compact, dense sentences.

 

Not just for beginners. Not for ESL/EAL student. Designed for native speakers. From basic level to university level.

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You can find good prices if you shop around.

 

 

Middle level- not that hard.

Combine all of the short sentences into one longer sentence.

 

1.    The group met at the beach. KERNEL

FIND NEW INFORMATION

They met at 10:00 a.m.

They met every day.

The beach was public.

The group met if it was sunny.

 

 

The group met at the beach

at 10:00 a.m

every day

was public

if it was sunny

Combine these elements into one sentence: simple, compound, complex

 

COMPLEX The group met at the public beach every day

at 10:00 a.m if it was sunny.

SIMPLE The group met at the public beach every sunny day

at 10:00 a.m.

 

Try these for homework:

2.    The beach was hot. KERNEL

Find new information.

The beach was crowded.

There were children.

There were adults.

 

Combine these elements into one sentence.

Decide what kind of sentence do you want?

Simple compound complex?

Gut reaction, gut feeling- comes with experience and familiarity with English

The beach was hot

crowded

There were children

adults

Compound:

The beach was hot and crowded, and there were children and

adults.

Simple

The beach was hot and crowded with children and adults.

Complex

The beach that was hot was crowded with children and adults.

 

If you can write an idea in three different ways, you can do anything. You are ready for UBC.

 

3.    Mr. Isaac sold ice cream.

The truck was small.

The truck was in the parking lot.

4.    The teenagers lay in the sun.

They played volleyball.

The children swam.

The children ran in the sand.

5.    A group of clowns juggled.

They played with children.

The children were laughing.

The clowns gave out balloons.

The balloons were filled with helium.

6.    The beach was sandy.

The sand was white.

The white was glaring.

The water was beyond the beach.

The water was blue.

The blue was vibrant.

 

Share some of your examples from homework in Chat:

1.    Mr. Isaac was selling ice cream in/from a small truck that was in the parking lot.

2.    Mr Isaac sold ice cream in small truck at parking lot. art prep

Mr Isaac sold ice cream in a small truck in the parking lot.

3.    In the parking Mr Issac sold ice cream in small truck.

In the the parking lot, Mr Issac sold ice cream in/from a small truck.

 

4.    It was a sunny day, and the water was blue. ORIGINAL

5.    Mr. Isaac sold small ice cream with ice packed by small truck in the parking lot. XXX

Mr. Isaac sold ice cream from a small truck in the parking lot.

 

6.    The white sand was glaring on the beach. the The blue water which was beyond the beach was vibrant. cap

7.    The white sand was glaring, and the vibrant blue water was beyond the beach. COMPOUND

8.    Mr Issec sold ice cream with his small truck that it is in the parking lot vt punc

Mr Issec sold ice cream with his small truck that was in the parking lot. period

9.    Ihe teenagers layed in the sun, then they played volleyball, but the children swam. RO

The teenagers lay in the sun. Then they played volleyball, but the children swam.

10.                       Mr. Issac sold ice cream with the small truck which was in the parking lot.

11.                       The teenagers lay in the sun and played volleyball, and the children swam and ran in the sand.

12.                       After played volleyball, the teenagers lay in the sun while children swam and run in the sand.

After they played volleyball, the teenagers lay in the sun while children swam and ran in the sand.

 

13.                       If it was sunny, every day the group met at the public beach.

14.                       Mr Isaac sold has ice cream, and truck was in the parking lot it was small. RO RW

15.                       A group of clowns juggled and played with laughing children, and they gave out balloons were filled with helium.

16.                       The beach was glaring white sand, and the water was vibrant blue beyond the beach.

17.                       The teenagers lay in the sun after they played volleyball, while the children swam and ran in the sand. SV

18.                       The teenagers lay in the sand, and they played volleyball. Also, the children ran in the sand and swam too.

Good!

 

19.                       The teenagers played volleyball  then lay in the sun and the children ran in the sand and swam. RO Divide into sentences

The teenagers played volleyball  and then lay in the sun. The children ran in the sand and swam. 2 simples

 

20.                       Ater the teenagers played volleyball, they lay in the sun. Some of children was swiming,some of children was running in sand.

After the teenagers played volleyball, they lay in the sun. Some of the children were swimming. Some of the children were running in the sand.

 

A person who fixes little mistakes is called an editor. I have a small business editing writing for university students. If you practice this sentence combining work, you will be able to do your own editing. You will be able to do it yourself.

 

 

MORE SENTENCE EXERCISES- A LITTLE BIT HARDER MORE CHALLENGING.

 

MOVING DAY

1.     We had not been looking forward to the move.

It was the smoothest in memory.

2.     We picked up the truck.

The truck was rented.

It was eight o'clock.

We drove to the apartment.

3.     Our timing was perfect.

No one else was moving.

This meant something.  *’something’ is a placeholder word. Don’t use it.

The elevator was free. *noun clause

4.     Four of us carried the furniture.

Four of us positioned the furniture.

Four of us tied the furniture into the truck.

We did this in less than an hour.

5.     Even the plants did well.

The move was fast enough.

They didn't go into shock.

6.     We were at the house.

It was ten o'clock.

People really flew into action.

LONGER, TRICKY CHALLENGING

7.     The truck was empty.

We were sitting on the deck.

We were eating lunch.

We were turning moving day into a party.

It was a housewarming.

We did this within two hours.

 

 

I was listening to a Zoom meeting that my wife was having with VCC administrator. They said the word ‘challenging’ about 100 times. They also used ‘issues’ about 500 times. 

 

issues problems

challenging difficult

 

If you want to sound like a manager, you can ‘challenging issues’ every minute.

 

 

 

Types of paragraphs:

narrative -tell a personal story

descriptive – describe something, usually what it looks like

process- teach, explain to do something

 

 

 

A Process Paragraph Teaches

 

          A process paragraph explains to your reader how to do something, how to make something, or how something works. A process paragraph walks your reader through a step-by-step process.

          When you write a process paragraph, you are writing as a teacher.  To teach well, you must speak to the student at a level that is appropriate- neither too high nor too low.  Also, you must explain each step of the process clearly but succinctly.

 

This is how you do it:

A.               PREWRITING (5-8 minutes)

Organize your thoughts.

1.    Break down the process into 4-5 steps.

2.    Brainstorm action words (verbs) and specific vocabulary to describe the steps in detail.

3.    Outline the points chronologically (in time).

          B.       WRITING (55 minutes)

                     Write your paragraph.

1.    Begin with a grabber (optional, but highly suggested)

2.    Introduce the topic in a clear TOPIC SENTENCE.

3.    Write a sentence of two for each of the steps.

4.    End with an optional concluding sentence.

 

(100-150 words)

 

 

Here is a plan for the topic “How to Fry an Egg”:

PLAN

1. preheat the pan with butter or oil

2. crack egg into the pan

3. put the spatula under the edges of the egg when the edges get crispy, get the butter underneath, around and around

4. when the spatula can go completely under the egg, flip it gently

5. do the same thing again for the other side

6. serve and enjoy

 

 

 

ROUGH DRAFT

 

I have been frying eggs since I was two years old. Frying an egg is very easy if you follow these steps. First, preheat the pan with butter until the butter is melted and crackling. Next, crack the egg directly into the pan. Some people use two hands and some people use one hand. Next, put the spatula under the edges of the egg when the edges get crispy. BLAH BLAH BLAH

(100-150 words)

 

 

GRABBERS

ANECDOTE- I have been frying eggs since I was two years old.

QUESTION- Do you think frying eggs is tricky? No, it’s easy.

FACT,STATISTIC- Eggs are an excellent source of protein and Omega6.

QUESTION/ANECDOTE- What came first: the chicken or the egg? For me, an egg comes first for my breakfast.

FUNNEL- All people can cook their own breakfast. You can, too!

SAYING- People say that breakfast is the most important meal of the day.

 

Topic sentence: Frying an egg is very easy if you follow these steps.

 

* When you write sentences for process paragraphs, you will often write imperative sentences.

 

imperatives – command sentences, tell someone to do something

 

I emailed you a document called “Giving Instructions” a couple days ago.

 

e.g. You should crack the egg into the pan.

Crack an egg into the centre of the hot pan. You Imperative sentence

 

 

Tomorrow, I will give you a choice of a few topics. They will be easy topics.

I want you to write a paragraph in a paragraph format – one block of writing, indented.

 

 

MODEL

 

1.                I have been frying eggs since I was two years old.

2.                Frying an egg is very easy if you follow these steps.

3.                First, preheat the pan with butter until the butter is melted and crackling.

4.                Next, crack the egg directly into the pan.

5.                Some people use two hands and some people use one hand.

6.                Next, put the spatula under the edges of the egg when the edges get crispy. BLAH BLAH BLAH

 

I have been frying eggs since I was two years old. Frying an egg is very easy if you follow these steps. First, preheat the pan with butter until the butter is melted and crackling. Next, crack the egg directly into the pan. Some people use two hands and some people use one hand. Next, put the spatula under the edges of the egg when the edges get crispy. When the spatula can go under the egg completely, flip it gently. Then BLAH BLAH BLAH.

 

 

IDIOMS

 

-hit the roof  - get angry

“Her mother hit the roof when she saw the mess in the kitchen.”

 

-hit the hay –sleep, take a nap

“Cheryl was tired, so she hit the hay.”

 

-hit the road – leave, go, time to go

“I have to hit the road in 10 minutes.”

“May said that she wants to hit the road early tomorrow.”

 

-hit the books- study

“I have a math test tomorrow. I have to hit the books tonight.”

 

-hit the sack–sleep, take a nap

“It’s 9 o’clock. Time to hit the sack.”

 

-hit the nail on the head – exactly correct, agree

“You hit the nail on the head. I agree with what you said.”