Eng7/10 Oct 15

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See you at 11!!

Good morning.

We’ll get started at 11.

Today’s agenda:

1. Review sentence combining quiz

2. “ “ quoting

Tomorrow – Review “ “

- Paragraph test on Ch1-3, no quotations

Combine each exercise in one way- six sentence in total

1. kernel

2. find new information

3. decide what kind of sentence

1. Samuel babysits on Saturday night.

He babysits Jeffrey.

Jeffrey is two.

He babysits Catelina.

She is four.

He babysits for several hours.

Samuel babysits Jeffrey who is two and Catelina who is four on Saturday night for several hours.

Samuel babysits two-year-old Jeffrey and four-year-old Catelina on Saturday night for several hours.

a ten-year-old kid

a two-hour movie

a five-dollar pair of shoes

a seven-inch screen

hyphen – 

Samuel babysits Jeffrey and Catelina, who are two and four, on Saturday night for several hours.

Samuel babysits Jeffrey and Catelina, who are two and four, respectively, on Saturday night for several hours.

respectively – described in order

I have a son and a daughter, 15 and 17, respectively.

Sarah has a morning and an evening class, Chem 12 and Math11, respectively.

2. They love him.

He pillow fights.

He lets them be noisy.

He lets them watch TV.

He lets them stay up late.

parallelism – the same types of words or phrases in a series

e.g. Michelle is shy, quiet, and reserved. adjectives

Michelle is shy, quiet, and doesn’t like to talk. XXX adj, adj, and verb.

Parallel structures make much better sentences.

They love him because he pillow fights and lets them be noisy, watch TV and stay up late.

parallelism

3. Sometimes, Erich comes over.

He is Samuel's friend.

He cooks fudge.

He cooks with the children.

Sometimes, Erich, who is Samuel’s friend, comes over and cooks fudge with the kids.

4. They laugh.

They make a mess.

They laugh and make a mess.

5. Bathtime is fun.

It usually involves a water fight.

The water fight is hilarious.

The fight requires a clean-up.

Bathtime is fun because it is usually involves a hilarious water fight that requires a clean up.

6. The parents return at midnight.

They find the children in bed.

They find the house clean.

They find Samuel asleep.

He is sleeping on the couch.

parallelism

The parents return at midnight to find the children in bed, the house clean, and Samuel asleep on the couch.

Parallelism is about style and writing beautiful sentences.

Quoting material

“ “ borrow material from a book, quote text

  Talk about quoting, instead of copying

 - plagiarism is copying, 0%, fail

 Uses of quotation marks 1.reported speech

2.titles

3.quoting from text

direct quotation- My sister said, “Feed the dog.”

indirect quotation- My sister told me to feed the dog.

title of an article, poem, short story, not a book “I Confess”

title of a book Animal Farm or Animal Farm

quoting material in answers

Using “ ” quotation marks

INCORPORATE quoted material

MIX in quoted material

• STRESS Writing Process necessary for effective incorporation of quotations

EXAMPLES OF REPLACING YOUR VOCAB WITH QUOTED MATERIAL FROM TEXT

Old Major was the oldest pig on the farm. Everyone respected him.

INCORPORATE “wise and benevolent”

Old Major was a “wise and benevolent” (1) pig whom the other animals respected. VERY HIGH-QUALITY WRITING

Benjamin was a pessimistic donkey who was loyal to Boxer but who was serious around the other animals.

INCORPORATE QUOTED MATERIAL FROM THE BOOK INTO OUR WRITING “cynical” “devoted” “never laughed” 

Benjamin was a “cynical” (2) donkey who was “devoted” to Boxer but who “never laughed” around the other animals.

ALL THREE TOO MUCH, PICK ONE

Benjamin was a pessimistic donkey who was “devoted”(2) to Boxer but who was unsmiling around the other animals.

This kind of writing gets top marks.

Students practice one about Boxer.

Try a sentence of your own about Boxer. Include a few quoted words. Share them in the chatbox:

1. Boxer was strong and hardworking. No “”?

2. Boxer is one of the "cart-horses" (2) on the farm.

3. Boxer who has a "white stripe" on his noise nose was a horse.

Note: Some are relying on spellcheck, and it isn’t their friend.

4. Boxer is a horse “enormous “  and honest. XXX

5. Boxer is an “enormous” and honest horse.

6. Boxer was an "enormous horse who was "not of the first rate intelligent". XXX very confused RW

7. Boxer was an "enormous beast" horse. XXX

Boxer was an "enormous beast" of a horse.

Where are the page numbers? (2) (4)

8. Boxer was a "strong and hardworking" horse. XXX ??

9. Boxer was a horse who "likes to work". XXX ??

10. Therefore Boxer is one the strongest animal in the farm is because of his motto “ I will work harder”. XXX RW

11. Boxer was strong, but "dimwitted". Quoation? NO XXX

12. Boxer said “I will work harder.” Direct quotation

13. Boxer and Benjamin liked to spend time in silence "grazing side by side." (2) Exactly right!

14. Box was a ''enormous and strong''horse;he was "steadiness of character" and honest. XXX

15. Boxer is a hardworking, but innocent and ignorant horse. NO quoted material

16. Boxer is described as a hardworking XXX

17. The boxer is a work hard and “most faithful discipleship”animal. XXX

Boxer is a hardworking and “most faithful” (?) animal.

work hard – verb adv

hardworking- adj

You must learn English word forms- noun, verb, adjectives

Put quotations marks around words from the book, not from our own mind.

e.g. Boxer was very strong but had a “stupid appearance” (2).

The animals “universally respected” (2) Boxer because he was honest and hardworking.

We have to keep working on this. You’ll get it. Don’t worry- you’ll get it with practice.

Homework- Try a few sentences about Banjamin with a few quoted words. We’ll share them tomorrow.

1. Boxer is "nearly eighteen hands high" (2). BIT LONG