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Good morning, everyone.
We’ll get started at 8:30.
Today’s agenda:
1. Process of how to write a good paragraph - review
2. JP Chapter 9
3. JP Chapter 10
poem Lai Bi
4. HW Read JP Ch 11, make notes
How to a good paragraph for school.
Follow a process:
PREWRITING – plan, no sentence, just key words, phrases
1. Read the question. Read the question. Read the question five times. Read every word of the question.
What is the question asking?
mechanics: paragraph? essay? 3 sentences? “ “? time? how long?
content: what topic? what controlling idea? what specific topic?
Many students don’t bother to read the question carefully.
They wind up writing an answer that is off-topic, or is a simple plot summary. 1/6
2. Generate ideas. Brainstorming, Make a list of some key words and ideas. 3-4 ideas, points, choose “ “
3. Organize those ideas – time, space, or importance
WRITING- execution, sentence writing
4. Rough copy.
Begin with a topic sentence – on topic, addresses the question directly
3-6 supporting sentences
Conclusing sentence (optional)
5. Proofread, edit. Check the problems that you know you have – verb form, verb tense, punctuation, spelling, agreement
6. Good copy. You don’t have time to rewrite a beautiful good copy. Submit your rough copy after proofreading and editing it.
for example:
Discuss the significance to Jung Sum of his fight with Frank?
plot summary? NO
write about Frank? NO
Jung Sum’s childhood? NO
JS fight important why?
Ideas:
2. - learned a lot about himself – gay, loves Frank
3. - released emotion he has been hiding since childhood
1. - learned he would do anything to survive
Concluding sent- found self-acceptance and confidence
Rough copy:
Q: Discuss the significance to Jung Sum of his fight with Frank?
Borrow words form the question, use synonyms – on topic
SIMPLE TS: Jung Sum’s fight with Frank is significant to him because of three reasons.
TS: Jung Sum’s intense fight with Frank is very important because Jung Sum is forced to face hard truths about himself.
TS: The fight with Frank is cathartic/transformative for Jung Sum because is forces him to reevaluate his understanding of who he is.
Supporting sentences:
1. - learned he would do anything to survive
2. - learned a lot about himself – gay, loves Frank
3. - released emotion he has been hiding since childhood
Concluding sentence: Clearly, through his serious/physical altercation/conflict with Frank, Jung Sum found self-acceptance and a new confidence.
Good writing in any language is a mix of skill and art.
You can be a good writer with practice and process!!
In my experience, the planning is everything.
Process: PREWRITE (plan) FIRST!
THEN WRITE THE SENTENCES
e.g. Discuss how the moon figured prominently in Jung Sum’s life.
PLAN – brainstorm 3-4 key ideas
- moon is hidden, JS is hidden
- moon is feminine, JS is gay “yin”, in the context of the novel
- moon is the storyteller, JS is a Wayson Choy, autobiographical
- moon the watch from Frank, link to moon – subtle point
Read the novel carefully. Do your prep work. Make some notes for each chapter.
Some people really enjoy this kind of work.
Later this week, we will begin essay writing. The process (PREWRITING, WRITING) becomes even more important. It’s certainly possible to write a decent paragraph off the top of your head. However, with an essay, it’s tough to write a good one without a plan.
If you write your ideas clearly and give reasons why you think what you think, that’s all you can do. If a reader disagrees, that’s ok. They don’t have to agree.
A teacher will evaluate on the quality of your ideas and how they are presented, not if the teacher agrees with you.
People can be afraid of judgement by other. Have courage! Express yourself! Don’t worry too much. If someone doesn’t like you, at least they won’t like you for the right reasons.
• MY LECTURE NOTES FOR JP Ch 9
“Grandmama died” p162
Sek-Lung seven years old
insight into Poh-Poh’s childhood “My juggler… never came back” p163
albino, no pigment, genetic
her true love, he leaves, broken heart
*the title of the novel, “the precious Jade Peony” p164 READ SENTENCE
“she and Sek-Lung poke through garbage” p164
- like a magpie, likes shiny things
“what was appropriate in a poor village in China was shameful here” p165
“she was inconvenient, unsettling” p165
“Grandmama… harmlessly crazy”
“make lovely toys… Why?”
juggler – love of her life
“stories… of the juggler… flashed in my head” p165
“searching for splendid junk” p165
“this Mandarin only confuses us. We are Cantonese speakers” p167
conflict between old world and the new world
“now in a scientific, logical world”
Father “wanted his children to have both the old ways and the new ways”
“troubling talk about old and new ways should stop”
“the waving motion of her ghost chimes” p168
“my body fighting with Death”
“the small peony of white and light-red jade, her most lucky possession” p169, pink not green
“This colour is the colour of my spirit” (169)
“given to me by the young acrobat”
“it held the unravelling strands of her memory”
“her last windchime”
“Not a sound… until I have died” p170
“That was not a cat” p171
cat and juggler “pale as white jade, and… pink eyes” p171
juggler was an albino, no pigment in their skin, eyes, or hair
“basement of St. Paul’s hospital, where the sick Chinese were allowed to stay” p172
“lifted the windchimes”
READ FINAL PARAGRAPH
Beautiful ending for Poh-poh’s life
MY LECTURE NOTES FOR JP Ch 10
• “science of medicine” p173
Western medicine, TCM – traditional Chinese medicine, herbal medicine
-alternative medicine
“”powders and stems… make your lungs stronger”
“No more herbs!”
“You’re a damn mess,” Liang said p175
“Is it always this damp?” p175
“TB” tuberculosis
“I wanted to be taught… by a real teacher” p176
“I always felt cheated”
“He can’t get over it” p178
“a haunted son”
“yin and yang forces”
“fung suih” e.g. don’t put a mirror in front of your bed
“each mix require an external balance” p179
“Chinatown ghosts..no more than a hundred or so.. somewhat confused”
“incidents”
“I saw the Old One” p180
“the world of Chinatown was the world of what if” p180
superstition, good luck, bad luck, omens
“visions and good sense… make us pay attention” p181
“my clinging to the Old One’s presence” p182
Sekky is grieving, maybe has not accepted that she has really died
-everyone wants Sekky to move on
“Is the boy hurting anyone?” (182)
Is Sekky going through the normal stages of grief or is really seeing Poh-poh’s ghost?
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