Friday, 2 October 2020

E10/11 Oct.2

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Good morning, everyone.

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Today’s agenda:


1. Sentences that include quoted material

2. JP Chapter 4, Part 2 “Jung-Sum, second brother”

3. HW Read JP Chapter 5, make notes




incorporating quoted material into our writing “  “

a few words

beginning next week, we will use quoted material in out writing.

challenge – with practice, it will become easier



Please share some of your sentences on Chat:

1. On one hand, Kiam always takes his “my salary bonus” home. pron

On one hand, Kiam always takes his “salary bonus” (page number? 16) home.

2. Especially, Dai Kew appreciates that the turtle is “named after the king”(#?) by Jung-Sum.

3. Kiam rewards his brother “with some lucky money.” (17?)

4. The first one is Jung-Sum’s dream come true that he wanted a “wild animal for a pet” long time ago. XXX

The first one is Jung-Sum’s dream came true because he wanted a “wild animal for a pet” for a long time.

5. Secondly, this turtle is very funny for its furious WW and its aspect WW just like the plate-like shell, the long neck , the fist-sized head and the yellow eyes .  ””

6. The last one is easy to feed -“it eats everything”.  XXX

The turtle is easy to feed because “it eats everything.”(18?) INCORPORATED

7. This name made Dai Kew think about “God save the King,… lonnngg livadah King.”(18?)

8. He “snapped his fingers, as if struck by a revelation.” TOO LONG XXX

You have to write the sentence. The quoted material is just icing on the cake.


9. “An omen!” He said. “Today is the day!”  XXX TOO LONG

10. Dai Kwe likes to gamble and “always looked for omens directing his luck.” TOO LONG

Dai Kwe liked to gamble and “looked for omens” for luck.

11. First, he liked to keep weird pets. “He dreamed of having a wild animal as a pet.” XXX Don’t copy down a whole sentence. Incorporate a few quoted words into our sentence.

12. Second, he made more friends via the turtle, and he attracted of his classmates.” He had lured some of his classmates to come and admire his turtle.”  XXX

13. Bobby Steimnberg though that the turtle should be called like “ George, Jum-Sum asked like “king George” rather than Lao Kei which means in Chinese culture old turtle. XXX RW This is not a sentence.



When people start writing paragraphs, the sentences often go way down in quality.


half to write good sentences and  a well-organized paragraph


People have not practiced sentence nearly enough.


14. The Lao kiwe,which means “old turtle” in Chinese, frag XXX

15. Jung was excited that he had a pet as the boy in the movies did, so he thought "he's mine!" (18)

16. He gave Sum Jung a dollar to go to the movie and had an ice cream with “low fan” to make them happy. punc

17. He told Bobby Steinberg that the turtle was called “Lao Kwei”(19) and “Old turtle” by the family.

18. “turtles bring good luck.”  (page 74 ) XXX Not a sentence.

19. According to Poh-Poh, “Turtle very good fortune, Long life”. The turtle was welcomed by whole family. TOO LONG. Not incoroprated

20. Dai Kew wanted to make a kind of trick, so he could take the “King George” by himself on the trip.

21. Jung- Sum call the turtle King George because it is “a Canada turtle”. (18)


More practice with sentence writing.

Sperate sentence practice is going really well.

The sentences tend to fall apart when we write paragraphs.


22. Jung-sum was excited about his new pet because when he and his  friend, bobby, saw this movie about an old man a boy who made friends  with all kinds of creatures in the forest. Ever since, he had been day  dreaming of having a wild animal for a pet. When Jung-sum found the NO QUOTATION MARKS

23. “hissing lao-kwei” he thought of it as a “incredibly, monstrously splendid”  ??

24. However his friend Bobby called the turtle George protesting “This is a Canada turtle.” AWK CAP

However his friend Bobby called the turtle George protesting that it was “a Canada turtle.”(18)

25. It is considered as a symbol of luck and good life AWK so Poh-Poh says "turtle very  good fortune.  Long life."

It is considered as a symbol of luck, so Poh-Poh says "turtle very  good fortune”(19)

26. First, Dai Kew wanted to appreciate Sum Jung because he paid attention and took care of “King George”(19).



MY CHAPTER 4 LECTURE NOTES


new narrator- Jung-Sum second brother

Uncle Dai Kew “hellhole kitchens” p75

“buckets of sawdust” hog fuel p76, verisimilitude for Vancouver


“our clapboard two-story house” family living in poverty (77)


“No work, no will”

“God of Longevity” Old Longlife? p77


The Great Depression – 1930s

“scare off any Depression hobo”


“Turtle talk to ghosts- all the time, ghost talk!” p79

“Good fortune, Grandmother had said, long life.” p80

“I have a pet like the old man and the boy in the woods.” 

“had seen a movie” (78)

turtle has symbolic meaning in Chinese turtle

part of Chinese mythology


tension with meaning

“This is a Canada turtle” p84

“This low fan boy… said it was a low fan turtle.” p84

“low fan” gwei lo - 

“King George”



Last thing for today – surprise, special surprise

Surprise Quiz

Quiz – sentence combining



Quiz #3

Combine each exercise in two different ways. Six sentences in total.

Email it to me by 9:30.


1. We were preparing.

The preparation was for the performance.

The performance was our second.

The performance was of our play.

The dressing room was a mess.


2. Racks were scattered.

The racks were for costumes.

Trays were scattered.

The trays were for makeup.

They were scattered about the room.


3. The female lead could not do something.

She could not get her wig to stay on properly.

The male lead was having a tug-of-war.

The tug-of-war was with a pair of suspenders.

The suspenders would not cooperate.



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