EF56 8:30 Jan22

 Today’s agenda:  

1. More challenging sentence combining

2. Begin essay work

I emailed you two documents about essay writing. Check your email.

Test#6- I will finish marking those by Monday.

sentence writing – paragraph writing – essay writing?

Paragraph Patterns, Auerback and Snyder

https://www.amazon.ca/Paragraph-Patterns-Barbara-Auerbach/dp/015567983X

-easier level, but still not a beginner’s book

Investing in good writing books has been valuable to me.

- a good style book is great guide for a developing writer

Style: 10 Lessons in Clarity and Grace Joseph Williams

-transformative book for me, changed the way I wrote

-not a beginner’s book, not about grammar

-about style, writing sentences that are effective and beautiful

sentence combining exercises – fantastic way to practice style

From Paragraph Patterns, Auerback and Snyder

Sentence Combining Sheet 2

Example: 

a. Katherine woke up.

b. The alarm clock rang loudly at 7:00 A.M.

When the alarm clock rang loudly at 7:00 A.M., Katherine woke up.

1. a. David and Peter went on a camping trip. KERNEL

b. They went to the White Mountains in New Hampshire.

c. They went in June.

SIMPLE

David and Peter went on a camping trip to the White Mountains in New Hampshire in June. string of prepositional phrases

David and Peter, my friends, went on a camping trip to the White Mountains in New Hampshire in June. appositive

In June, David and Peter went on a camping trip to the White Mountains in New Hampshire. nice style

2. a. They checked all their equipment.

b They got into the car for the long ride to the mountains.

SIMPLE

They checked all their equipment and got into the car for the long ride to the mountains. SVV

COMPOUND

They checked all their equipment; then they got into the car for the long ride to the mountains.

COMPLEX -adv cl

After they checked all their equipment, they got into the car for the long ride to the mountains.

Before they got into the car for the long ride to the mountains, they checked all their equipment.

Four different ways- that’s good enough for any job or school or any situation.

This is our goal, to be able write freely in a variety of styles.

3. a. They arrived at the campground in the late afternoon.

b. They set up camp near a small stream.

4. a. David put up the tent.

b. Peter cooked supper over the fire.

5. a. They crawled into their sleeping bags at sunset.

b. They became nervous.

c. They began to hear animal noises.

6. a. Peter wanted to get up and go to the car.

b. David said it would be better Just to go to sleep.

7. a. They got up at sunrise.

b. They got .up before the other campers.

c. They made a hearty breakfast.

8. a. David and Peter prepared for a long hike.

b. It was their first hike.

c. They decided to go to the top of Mount Madison.

9. a. They began the climb.

b. It started to rain.

c. They decided to go home.

Your solutions:

1. They arrived at the campground in the late afternoon and set up camp near a small stream.

2. They arrived at the campground in the late afternoon and set up the camp near a small stream.

3. Peter cooked supper over the fire while David is putting was putting/ put up the tent.

4. Peter wanted to get up and go to the car, but David said it would be better just to go to sleep.

5. David put up the tent, and Peter cooked supper over the fire.

6. David and Peter before their first hike, they decided to go to the top of Mount Madison. XXX

Before their first hike, David and Peter decided to go to the top of Mount Madison.

7. David and Peter prepared for a long hike to the top of Mount Madison; that was their first hike.

8. David put up the tent; then Peter cooked supper over the fire.

9. They  got up at sunrise before the other campers and made a hearty breakfast.

10. Peter wanted to get up to go to car, but David said it would be better to go to sleep.

11. David put up the tent while Peter cooked supper over the fire.

3. David put up the tent and cooked supper over the fire. Peter?

12. Peter wanted to get up and go to the car while David said it would be better just to go to sleep.

13. Before the other campers they got up at sunrise then they made a hearty breakfast .

Before the other campers they got up at sunrise, they made a hearty breakfast.

14. Arriving at the campground in the late afternoon, they set up camp near a small stream.

15. They got up at sunrise before the other campers and made a hearty breakfast.

16. David and Peter prepared for the first long hike, they decided to go to the top of Mount Madison. CS punc

David and Peter prepared for the first long hike; they decided to go to the top of Mount Madison.

17. Peter wanted to get up and go the car; at the same time, David said it would be better just to go to sleep.

18. Peter wanted to get up and go to the car, so/but David said it would be better just to go to sleep.

19. They got up before the others campers at sunrise ; also, they made a healthy breakfast.

20. They arrived at the campground in the late afternoon, so they set up camp near a small stream.

21. David put up the tent then Peter cooked supper over the fire. XXX RO

David put up the tent; then Peter cooked supper over the fire.

These are good example of a variety of sentences. These are the kinds of sentence that you want to write in your own paragraphs.

The sentence combining is the practice that can get you there.

I practiced guitar last night for an hour. I focused on one area: harmonized scales. Tonight I will do the same thing. Over months, harmonized scales will become second nature to me. I will be able to play them when I play with other people, not just in my practice room.

second nature- you can do it without thinking about it, feels routine

It is the same thing with learning to write sentences.

Improvement comes with steady consistent practice. There’s no big secret. There is no hack.