Today’s agenda:
1. Review Test#6
-structure
-planning
- plagiarism! copying
2. Begin essay work
Tuesday – essay work
- Quiz#8 sentence combining – final quiz
Wednesday -essay work
- sentence review, Quiz#8 review
Thursday -Essay#1, worth 10 points – whole class (2hrs)
(I will mark these quickly- focus on overall essay, no more detailed grammar correction)
Friday - no class for you, I will finish marking and marks
- Email me after 12:00, and I will email your final mark
to you
Test#6-
Write a well-organized paragraph of 150-200 words on the following topic:
What are some reasons the authorities put the Wise Woman in jail?
Structure of a paragraph
-Grabber (7 to choose from)
-Topic sentence – linked to the question, mirror vocabulary from the
question, use synonyms
e.g. What are some reasons the authorities put the Wise Woman in jail?
key words- reasons authorities Wise Woman jail
Topic sentence using some or all of these key words:
e.g. There are several reasons why the authorities placed the
Wise Woman in jail.
synonyms for the key words, using your internalized vocabulary
-reasons – explanations, excuses, validations
FROM thesaurus.com causes, grounds, rationales
-authorities – government, police, rulers, leaders
-Wise Woman – her (don’t begin with a pronoun), witch,
protagonist, major character
- jail – prison, locked up, detained, arrested
e.g. The government had several excuses for locking up the protagonist, the Wise Woman.
-3-4 supporting sentences
e.g. money, power, magic
-Concluding sentence
*** The most successful students are following the Planning process
Prewriting- planning (3-5m)
1. Read and understand the question- find direction and focus.
2. Brainstorm some supporting points.
3. Organize the points. Which point will go first? second? third?
Writing
4. Write your first draft.
grabber
The government had several excuses for locking up the protagonist, the Wise Woman. First, they claimed that she had money which could not be accounted for. In fact, after she had been arrested, the police found that she had “ten barrels of gold” hidden away. Secondly, the government was not happy that the Wise Woman had so much power in the community. She was able to help the people much more than the government could. This made the government people nervous. Finally, -magic-
5. Proofread and edit – punc, CS, vt, vf.
6. Pass it in.
6/6, 5/6 – You’re doing great!
4/6 – What can you do to bring it up to 5/6?
2/6, 3/6 – Figure out what is holding you back. organization? sentences? translating from your first language?
A whole different way of looking at education for some people.
** Copying
A whole bunch of students copied phrases and sentences from the story and copied that into their paragraphs.
no “ “
Just plagiarized
0/6 – zero, fail
Copying is not what we are doing. Hopefully, you will stop doing that. Every time you copy and paste or plagiarize from a story, you will get a 0, and you will fail.
Copying from a story is not the path to any success.
There are many reasons why she was put in jail. Some believe it was because she was a witch, others believe it was because of her money, for when they arrested her they found ten barrels of gold.
The Wise Woman could do amazing things. She was often seen flying through the air above the rooftops with bright sparks coming out of her eyes.
All copied, no “ “, just plagiarized.
0/6
Do you think that a teacher is asking you to copy words and sentences from a story? It isn’t.
Follow the process: Prewriting, then Writing
In Eng 10, 11, 12, plagiarism has serious repercussion. If you copy from the story, or especially the internet answers that you find, you will get a 0, fail the class, and possible not be allowed to continue.
All plagiarized from the internet:
Roses Sing on New Snow is the story of a young woman, Maylin, who prepares delicious meals in her father’s restaurant in the New World for the “lonely and cold and bone-tired” diners. Unfortunately, she does not receive the recognition she deserves since her greedy father and lazy brothers pretend as though they are the ones cooking. When an important dignitary arrives from China wanting to sample food prepared in the New World, Maylin creates a wonderful new dish, Roses Sing on New Snow, for this special occasion. Of course, her father and brothers take credit for the dish when it is loved by the dignitary. When the dignitary wants the recipe, her father and brothers fail miserably at trying to cook the special recipe and are forced to ask Maylin for help. Maylin, side-by-side with the dignitary, teaches him how to prepare the dish. When Maylin’s is by far the better tasting of the two, she carefully explains that even though he has the same ingredients it is her gift for cooking that brings greatness to the dish!
While Maylin does the cooking for her family's Chinatown restaurant, her greedy father and two fat brothers take all the credit. When her specially prepared dish, ``Roses Sing on New Snow,'' is served to the visiting governor of South China, he asks the brothers to show him how it was made. They fail miserably; and even when Maylin is summoned and the governor works beside her in order to learn her secrets, the food he prepares is inferior to hers. ``If you and I sat down with paper and brush and black ink, could we bring forth identical paintings?'' Maylin asks, winning a reputation for wisdom as well as for cooking.
Passed in plagiarized work for me to mark, assuming that I would be too dumb to figure it out.
Plagiarized – 0/6, write a letter to the principal, trust is broken
Copying and plagiarizing is not the path to success.
The path to success is the Writing Process and learning how to quote
short amounts of borrowed material from a text.
You feel a little better about paragraphs. Huge success!
You feel a bit more confident about writing. Major step in only two months.
Essay – longer piece of writing
paragraph (150-200w)
short essay (at least 300w) – longer, not a book, not five pages
running for exercise
– begin, first day 200m
-one week later – 500m
-second week - 1km
-after a few months – 5km
Essay – multiparagraph writing, several paragraphs
-most basic type- 5-paragraph essay
“The Bare Bones of the Five-Paragraph Academic Essay” – review for homework
“Bicycle” – an example of a nice straightforward 5-paragraph essay
In EF 5/6 – 2 hours to write an essay
In English 12- 35-40 minutes
Review the essay work I have given you, carefully. We will discuss it tomorrow.
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