Today’s agenda:
1. Sentence review, Quiz#8 review
2. Continue essay work
Thursday -Essay#1, worth 10 points – whole class (2hrs)
(I will mark these quickly- focus on overall essay, no more detailed grammar correction)
Friday - no class for you, I will finish marking and marks
- Email me after 12:00, and I will email your final mark
to you.
Homework – come up with ideas, a plan, no need to write the essay
“Why do you live in Vancouver?”
Quiz#8 8:30 class
Combine each in two ways:
1. a. The object looks long. KERNEL
b. The object looks thin. new information
c. The object measures about 8 inches in length.
The object looks long
thin
measures about 8 inches in length
What style is most appropriate? SIMPLE? COMPOUND? COMPLEX?
Don’t forget about sentence structure and punctuation.
The object looks long and thin and measures about 8 inches in length. simple
The object which looks long and thin measures about 8 inches in length. complex-adj cl
The object looks long, thin, and measures about 8 inches in length. XXX
parallelism- putting words of the same type in a series
The object looks long, thin, and measures about 8 inches in length.
long thin- adjectives
measures- verb
2. a. The object has many flat sides. kernel
b. The object appears rounded.
c. The object has a diameter.
d. The diameter measures about 1/8 inch.
The object has many flat sides
appears rounded
has a diameter
measures about 1/8 inch
The object has many flat sides, appears rounded, and has a diameter that measures about 1/8 inch. complex – adj cl
The object which measures about 1/8 inch has many flat sides but appears rounded. complex-adj cl
The object looks long and thin, and it measures about 8 inch in length.
compound
3. a. The object is often used by students.
b. The object is often used by artists.
c. The object is often used by office workers.
The object is often used by students, artists, and office workers. simple
There is still a lot of practice and work that needs to be done on sentence writing by you. We have covered the basics; now you have to internalize and solidify what we have done in class.
Put your examples in chat:
1. The rounded object has many flat sides and about an 1/8-inch diameter.
2. The object which measures about 8 inches in length, but it looks long and thin. XXX mix compound and complex
The object which measures about 8 inches in length looks long and thin. complex
The object measures about 8 inches in length, but it looks long and thin. compound
3. The object is often used by students; also, SV used by artists and office workers.
The object is often used by students; also, it is used by artists and office workers.
4. The object is round and has many flat sides, it also looks long and thin. CS
The object is round and has many flat sides; it also looks long and thin.
5. The object appears rounded has many flat sides which has a diameter that measures about 1/8 inch.
6. The object which has a diameter that measures about 1/8 inch appears rounded but has many flat sides.
7. The object looks long and thin because it measure about 8 inches in length. logic?
8. The object has many flat sides; likewise, it appears rounded and has about an 1/8 inch diameter. ww
9. The 8 inches in length object looks long and thin. awk
The 8-inch-long object looks long and thin.
10. The length of this object is about 8 inches even though it looks long and thin. ww
11. The object has a diameter which measures about 1/8 inch, and it has many flat sides but appears rounded.
12. The object has many flat sides and appears rounded; Therefore, the diameter measure about 1/8 inch. ww cap
13. The object has many flat sides that appears rounded in a diameter and measured about 1/8 length. RW
14. The object has a diameter measure about 1/8 inch and has many flat side, and appears rounded. rw
The object has a diameter that measures about 1/8 inch; it has many flat sides but appears rounded.
15. The object, diameter, appears about 1/8 inch with many flats and rounded side. RW
16. The object has many flat sides and appears rounded; in addition, the object has about an 1/8 inch diameter.
Lots of steady daily practice needed. You’ll get it if you keep practicing.
Quiz#8 11:00 class
Combine each in two ways:
1. a. The object has many flat sides. kernel
Find new information, avoid repetition
b. The object appears rounded.
c. The object has a diameter.
d. The diameter measures about 1/8 inch.
The object has many flat sides
appears rounded
has a diameter
measures about 1/8 inch
What kind of sentence seems appropriate? simple compound complex
simple
The object has many flat sides but appears rounded with a diameter that measures about 1/8 inch. complex
The object has many flat sides but appears rounded; it has a diameter that measures about 1/8 inch. compound
2. a. The top of the object is made of rubber.
b. The top of the object has an aluminum band around it.
c. The bottom of the object comes to a sharp point.
The top of the object is made of rubber and has an aluminum band around it; also, the bottom of the object comes to a sharp point. compound
The top of the object is made of rubber which has an aluminum band around it while the bottom of the object comes to a sharp point. complex- adj cl, adv cl
3. a. The object is often used by students.
b. The object is often used by artists.
c. The object is often used by office workers
The object is often used by students, artists, and office workers. simple
You really have to know your sentence styles- our work for the past nice weeks.
The work is just beginning. You will have to do a lot of steady daily practice to get this internalized and automatic.
Strunk and White The Elements of Style – very good style book
Put your sentences in Chat:
1. Although the object looks long, it just measures about 8 inches in length and is thin.
2. The object has many flat sides and appears rounded. missing information
3. The top of the object is made of rubber and has an aluminum band around it; instead, the bottom of the object comes to a sharp point. ww in contrast however
4. 2. However; the object has a diameter with measures about 1/8 inch. punc missing information
5. The object has a diameter measures about 1/8 inch, including many flat side and appears round. XXX RW
6. The object which is appears rounded, has many flat side and a diameter, and the diameter measures about 1/8 inch. v RW
7. 3. The top of the object is made of rubber and has an aluminum band around it. missing information
8. The object appears rounded has a diameter and many flat side; diameter measures about 1/8 inch. XXX
You must improve your sentence usage.
9. The top of the object is made of rubber, and an aluminum band, but the bottom comes to a sharp point. FIX
10. The top of the object, which is made of rubber, has an aluminum band around it, and the bottom of it come to a sharp point. punc
11. The object is often used by students, artists, and office workers.
12. The object has many flat sides; also, it appears rounded and has a diameter which measured about 1/8 inch. SV
13. The object, which is 1/8 inch in diameter, has flat sides and is rounded.
14. Because the object has many flat sides and its diameter measures about 1/8 inch, it appears rounded.
Because the object has many flat sides and its diameter measures about 1/8 inch, appears rounded. it SV
15. The object is often used by students and artists, even though is used by office workers. FIX
16. The object, which is often used by students, is also used by artists and office workers.
17. The top is made of rubber and has aluminum bands around it, this object, reaches a point where the bottom is pointed. RW
18. Although the object has many flat sides, it appears rounded and has a diameter that measures about 1/8 inch.
19. Often used by students and artists, the item is used by office workers as well.
20. The top of the object is made of rubber and has an aluminum band around it while the bottom of the object comes to a sharp point.
21. The bottom of the object comes to a sharp point; however, the top of the object is made of rubber and has an aluminum band around it.
22. The top of the object, that has an aluminum band around it, is made of rubber. However, the bottom of the object comes to a sharp point. combine more fully ; however,
Good start. Lots of work to do to get to the next level.
Essay tomorrow
ADVICE#9: Keep the essay short and simple.
Simple – follow the plan
Short – just 300+ words, don’t write a book
writing an essay – need a lot of vocab, different words to say the same things, synonyms
thesaurus – wonderful tool
A nightmare!
Not sure what to do.
Never done it before.
Seems so difficult.
Seems so long.
It will be an interesting challenge.
The first few essays that you write will be hard and confusing.
After you write five or six essays, it will start to get much easier.
This is our first essay.
Try to get to 300 words.
Swimming analogy: You have to jump into the pool sometimes. You can’t stand on the deck forever.
Take it easy. Don’t panic. Nobody is going to die. We’re just trying something new, something challenging.
When your children are learning to write a bicycle, what would you say to them?
“Try your best” “Don’t worry.” “Keep trying.” “If you fall, fall in the grass.” “You can try again.” “Try to relax.” “You learn from your mistakes.” “Just try.” “Step by step, you will get there.” “It is ok to be worried.”
- Say those things to yourself!
Grabbers- 7 ways
1. Ask a question
2. Fact or statistic
3. Historical information
4. Short anecdote
5. Saying/Idiom in a language
6. General to specific statement
7.
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