Today’s agenda:
1. Using quoted material
2. Sentence combining exercises
3. Shapes of sentences: coordination and subordination.
4. HW Read “The Wise Woman of Cordoba”.
We will start to work on that story Wednesday.
Using quoted material in our paragraphs
- borrowing words and vert short phrases from a story
- “ “ quotation marks
3 uses of quotation marks:
1. Titles of short stories “Roses Sing on New Snow”
e.g. Maylin is the protagonist in the short story “Roses Sing on New Snow”. She cooked a dish called Roses Sing on New Snow.
For your information, a novel or book title is underlined or written in italics.
e.g. The History of Language or The History of Language
Use italics when you typing.
Underline when you are writing by hand.
2. Direct speech-exact words
e.g. Marie said, “Come over for supper next Friday night.”
Indirect speech – not exact words, the overall meaning
e.g. Marie told me to come over for supper next Friday night.
3. Quoting material and incorporating it into our own writing
- 1,2,3,4 words, that’s it
- Less is more! Shorter is better.
- include those words into our own sentence that we wrote
Find some words or very short phrases that you want to borrow
e.g. “special banquet”
Write your own sentence and include those words inside it.
e.g. Maylin put her heart into cooking a signature dish for the “special banquet” that the people of Chinatown put on for the governor.
e.g. “delectable flavors and aromas”
The governor enjoyed the “delectable flavors and aromas” of Maylin’s food.
e.g “warmest praise”
The governor saved his “warmest praise” for Maylin.
Don’t over the quotations. In a paragraph of 150-200 words, 3,4,5 quotations is enough. A little bit goes a long way.
The quoted material makes your answer stronger. It acts as proof that your idea is a good one. It is evidence for your argument.
Try some in chat. Pick a word or two from the story, and incorporate the text into a sentence of your own.
1. Maylin only used "herbs and greens" from her garden for her cooking.
2. The governor can make “miserable” Mylin’s father life.
The governor can make her family’s “life miserable”.
3. Maylin didn't want the governor to bring "Roses Sing on New Snow" to China, she said "You can not recreate it in the Old". TOO MUCH
Maylin didn't want the governor to bring Roses Sing on New Snow to China. She told the governor that he would not be able to “recreate it” in his country.
4. ‘’ This is a dish of the New World’’ NO. JUST COPIED XXX
Mayline created a “dish of the New World” that represented her freedom.
5. Please listen to me "said Maylin" NO.
6. Maylin was thinking a "Well-cooked meal" could make people happy and joyful. GOOD
7. Maylin was upset when the governor said he will take her dish to the new world. NO QUOTATION, WHY?
8. The governor was angry and yell at her “ you dare refuse...” . NO.
The governor was angry and yelled at her how she could “dare refuse” his request.
9. Maylin said the governor "you can not recreate it in the Old". NO.
Maylin said the governor "cannot recreate it in the Old".
10. Maylin thought that the food was created in the New world, so she said "you cannot recreate it in the old". DIRECT SPEECH
11. He cried "He gave us the wrong kind of fish" TOO LONG
The brothers and father gave an excuse that they had cooked the dish with the “wrong kind of fish.””
12. The governor “His chopsticks dipped eargerly in to every dish” who loved to eat a lot! NOT A SENTENCE, TOO LONG
“ “ 2,3,4 words
The governor’s “chopsticks dipped eagerly” into all of the dishes that were presented to him.
13. Marlin create the new dish for the governor’ banquet “spare no expense”. NOT A SENTENCE
Maylin decided to create the new dish for the governor’ banquet, and she would “spare no expense”.
14. Maylin thought the governor couldn't bring "Roses on the snow" to the old world. NO.
15. Maylin and the governor chose "the same ingredients", but they got different results.
16. The governor was admired with Maylin`s dish” Roses sing on New Snow”
The governor admired Maylin`s dish Roses Sing on New Snow.
17. Maylin and the governor cooked "side by side". GOOD.
18. Maylin had" two brothers"
Maylin had "two brothers".
BETTER Maylin had useless brothers who didn’t do any work; in fact, they were “fat and lazy”.
19. The governor said "What is your secret"? DIRECT SPEECH,
NOT INCORPORATED
20. Maylin did not get any “compliments” from her customers
because they did not know it was she who cooked the delicious food.
21. Maylin's father went off to the banquet with only "his two
sons".
22. The governor’s eyes “lit up” when he saw all of the delicious
food.
23. Maylin is a "great cook" who works at her father's
restaurant. EXCELLENT! SHORT AND SIMPLE.
24. Maylin worked hard in the restaurant of her father, but she
never received any “compliments and tips”.
This is a start for using quoted material in our writing. We will keep practicing this. It is challenging at first, but it will get easier and better with time and practice.
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