EF56 11:00 Jan28

 Today’s agenda:  

1. Essay#1, worth 10 points – whole class (2hrs)

I will mark these quickly, focusing on the overall essay. I will give a few general comments and a mark.

Friday - There will be no class meeting. I will finish marking and marks.

- Email me after 12:00, and I will email your final mark to you.

Thank you for the great class. I really enjoyed it.

You all were very chatty and engaged.

It makes the class fun to teach for me.

I learn do much from talking with adult students.

I hope you learned a few new things, a couple new ideas.

Keep going with your English. Keep practicing- daily, steady practice.

Your English writing, reading, speaking, listening will continue to improve.

A year from now, you will look back and see how far you have come.

You will be so proud of your accomplishments.

Write a well-organized essay of about 300 words on the following topic.

Email it to me by 1:15. No lates.

“Why do you live in Vancouver?”

EF56 8:30 Jan28

 

Today’s agenda: 

 

1.    Essay#1, worth 10 points – whole class (2hrs)

I will mark these quickly, focusing on the overall essay. I will give a few general comments and a mark.

 

Friday                   - There will be no class meeting. I will finish marking and marks.

- Email me after 9:30, and I will email your final mark to you.

 

Thank you for the great class. I really enjoyed it. I hope you learned a few new things, a couple new ideas.

Keep going with your English. Keep practicing- daily, steady practice.

Your English writing, reading, speaking, listening will continue to improve.

A year from now, you will look back and see how far you have come.

You will be so proud of your accomplishments.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Write a well-organized essay of about 300 words on the following topic.

Email it to me by 10:40. No lates.

 

“Why do you live in Vancouver?”

EF56 11:00 Jan27

 Today’s agenda:  

1. Sentence review, Quiz#8 review

2. Continue essay work

Thursday -Essay#1, worth 10 points – whole class (2hrs)

(I will mark these quickly- focus on overall essay, no more detailed grammar correction)

Friday - no class for you, I will finish marking and marks

- Email me after 12:00, and I will email your final mark 

to you.

Homework – come up with ideas, a plan, no need to write the essay 

“Why do you live in Vancouver?”

Quiz#8 8:30 class

Combine each in two ways:

1. a. The object looks long. KERNEL

b. The object looks thin. new information

c. The object measures about 8 inches in length.

The object looks long

thin

measures about 8 inches in length

What style is most appropriate? SIMPLE? COMPOUND? COMPLEX?

Don’t forget about sentence structure and punctuation.

The object looks long and thin and measures about 8 inches in length. simple

The object which looks long and thin measures about 8 inches in length. complex-adj cl

The object looks long, thin, and measures about 8 inches in length. XXX

parallelism- putting words of the same type in a series

The object looks long, thin, and measures about 8 inches in length.

long thin- adjectives

measures- verb

2. a. The object has many flat sides. kernel

b. The object appears rounded.

c. The object has a diameter.

d. The diameter measures about 1/8 inch.

The object has many flat sides

appears rounded

has a diameter

measures about 1/8 inch

The object has many flat sides, appears rounded, and has a diameter that measures about 1/8 inch. complex – adj cl

The object which measures about 1/8 inch has many flat sides but appears rounded. complex-adj cl

The object looks long and thin, and it measures about 8 inch in length.

compound

3.  a. The object is often used by students.

b. The object is often used by artists.

c. The object is often used by office workers.

The object is often used by students, artists, and office workers. simple

There is still a lot of practice and work that needs to be done on sentence writing by you. We have covered the basics; now you have to internalize and solidify what we have done in class.

Put your examples in chat:

1. The rounded object has many flat sides and about an 1/8-inch diameter.

2. The object which measures about 8 inches in length, but it looks long and thin. XXX mix compound and complex

The object which measures about 8 inches in length looks long and thin. complex

The object measures about 8 inches in length, but it looks long and thin. compound

3. The object is often used by students; also, SV used by artists and office workers.

The object is often used by students; also, it is used by artists and office workers.

4. The object is round and has many flat sides, it also looks long and thin. CS

The object is round and has many flat sides; it also looks long and thin.

5. The object appears rounded has many flat sides which has a diameter that measures about 1/8 inch.

6. The object which has a diameter that measures about 1/8 inch appears rounded but has many flat sides.

7. The object looks long and thin because it measure about 8 inches in length. logic?

8. The object has many flat sides; likewise, it appears rounded and has about an 1/8 inch diameter. ww

9. The 8 inches in length object looks long and thin. awk

The 8-inch-long object looks long and thin.

10. The length of this object is about 8 inches even though it looks long and thin. ww

11. The object has a diameter which measures about 1/8 inch, and it has many flat sides but appears rounded.

12. The object has many flat sides and appears rounded; Therefore, the diameter measure about 1/8 inch. ww cap

13. The object has many flat sides that appears rounded in a diameter and measured about 1/8 length. RW

14. The object has a diameter measure about 1/8 inch and has many flat side, and appears rounded. rw

The object has a diameter that measures about 1/8 inch; it has many flat sides but appears rounded.

15. The object, diameter, appears about 1/8 inch with many flats and rounded side. RW

16. The object has many flat sides and appears rounded; in addition, the object has about an 1/8 inch diameter.

Lots of steady daily practice needed. You’ll get it if you keep practicing.

Quiz#8 11:00 class

Combine each in two ways:

1. a. The object has many flat sides. kernel

Find new information, avoid repetition

b. The object appears rounded.

c. The object has a diameter.

d. The diameter measures about 1/8 inch.

The object has many flat sides

appears rounded

has a diameter

measures about 1/8 inch

What kind of sentence seems appropriate? simple compound complex

simple

The object has many flat sides but appears rounded with a diameter that measures about 1/8 inch. complex

The object has many flat sides but appears rounded; it has a diameter that measures about 1/8 inch. compound

2. a. The top of the object is made of rubber.

b. The top of the object has an aluminum band around it.

c. The bottom of the object comes to a sharp point.

The top of the object is made of rubber and has an aluminum band around it; also, the bottom of the object comes to a sharp point. compound

The top of the object is made of rubber which has an aluminum band around it while the bottom of the object comes to a sharp point. complex- adj cl, adv cl

3. a. The object is often used by students.

b. The object is often used by artists.

c. The object is often used by office workers

The object is often used by students, artists, and office workers. simple

You really have to know your sentence styles- our work for the past nice weeks.

The work is just beginning. You will have to do a lot of steady daily practice to get this internalized and automatic.

Strunk and White The Elements of Style – very good style book

Put your sentences in Chat:

1. Although the object looks long, it just measures about 8 inches in length and is thin.

2. The object has many flat sides and appears rounded. missing information

3. The top of the object is made of rubber and has an aluminum band around it; instead, the bottom of the object comes to a sharp point. ww in contrast however

4. 2. However; the object has a diameter with measures about 1/8 inch. punc missing information

5. The object has a diameter measures about 1/8 inch, including many flat side and appears round. XXX RW

6. The object which is appears rounded, has many flat side and a diameter, and the diameter measures about 1/8 inch. v RW

7. 3. The top of the object is made of rubber and has an aluminum band around it. missing information

8. The object appears rounded has a diameter and many flat side; diameter measures about 1/8 inch. XXX

You must improve your sentence usage.

9. The top of the object is made of rubber, and an aluminum band, but the bottom comes to a sharp point. FIX

10. The top of the object, which is made of rubber, has an aluminum band around it, and the bottom of it come to a sharp point. punc

11. The object is often used by students, artists, and office workers.

12. The object has many flat sides; also, it appears rounded and has a diameter which measured about 1/8 inch. SV

13. The object, which is 1/8 inch in diameter, has flat sides and is rounded.

14. Because the object has many flat sides and its diameter measures about 1/8 inch, it appears rounded.

Because the object has many flat sides and its diameter measures about 1/8 inch, appears rounded. it SV

15. The object is often used by students and artists, even though is used by office workers. FIX

16. The object, which is often used by students, is also used by artists and office workers.

17. The top is made of rubber and has aluminum bands around it, this object, reaches a point where the bottom is pointed. RW

18. Although the object has many flat sides, it appears rounded and has a diameter that measures about 1/8 inch.

19. Often used by students and artists, the item is used by office workers as well.

20. The top of the object is made of rubber and has an aluminum band around it while the bottom of the object comes to a sharp point.

21. The bottom of the object comes to a sharp point; however, the top of the object is made of rubber and has an aluminum band around it.

22. The top of the object, that has an aluminum band around it, is made of rubber. However, the bottom of the object comes to a sharp point. combine more fully    ; however,

Good start. Lots of work to do to get to the next level.

Essay tomorrow

ADVICE#9: Keep the essay short and simple.

Simple – follow the plan

Short – just 300+ words, don’t write a book

writing an essay – need a lot of vocab, different words to say the same things, synonyms

thesaurus – wonderful tool

A nightmare!

Not sure what to do.

Never done it before.

Seems so difficult.

Seems so long.

It will be an interesting challenge.

The first few essays that you write will be hard and confusing.

After you write five or six essays, it will start to get much easier.

This is our first essay.

Try to get to 300 words.

Swimming analogy: You have to jump into the pool sometimes. You can’t stand on the deck forever.

Take it easy. Don’t panic. Nobody is going to die. We’re just trying something new, something challenging.

When your children are learning to write a bicycle, what would you say to them?

“Try your best” “Don’t worry.” “Keep trying.” “If you fall, fall in the grass.” “You can try again.” “Try to relax.” “You learn from your mistakes.” “Just try.” “Step by step, you will get there.” “It is ok to be worried.”

- Say those things to yourself!

Grabbers- 7 ways

1. Ask a question

2. Fact or statistic

3. Historical information

4. Short anecdote

5. Saying/Idiom in a language

6. General to specific statement

7.

EF56 8:30 Jan27

 Today’s agenda:  

1. Sentence review, Quiz#8 review

2. Continue essay work

Thursday -Essay#1, worth 10 points – whole class (2hrs)

(I will mark these quickly- focus on overall essay, no more detailed grammar correction)

Friday - no class for you, I will finish marking and marks

- Email me after 9:30, and I will email your final mark 

to you.

Homework – come up with ideas, a plan, no need to write the essay 

“Why do you live in Vancouver?”

Quiz#8 8:30 class

Combine each in two ways:

1. a. The object looks long. KERNEL

b. The object looks thin. new information

c. The object measures about 8 inches in length.

The object looks long

thin

measures about 8 inches in length

What style is most appropriate? SIMPLE? COMPOUND? COMPLEX?

Don’t forget about sentence structure and punctuation.

The object looks long and thin and measures about 8 inches in length. simple

The object which looks long and thin measures about 8 inches in length. complex-adj cl

The object looks long, thin, and measures about 8 inches in length. XXX

parallelism- putting words of the same type in a series

The object looks long, thin, and measures about 8 inches in length.

long thin- adjectives

measures- verb

2. a. The object has many flat sides. kernel

b. The object appears rounded.

c. The object has a diameter.

d. The diameter measures about 1/8 inch.

The object has many flat sides

appears rounded

has a diameter

measures about 1/8 inch

The object has many flat sides, appears rounded, and has a diameter that measures about 1/8 inch. complex – adj cl

The object which measures about 1/8 inch has many flat sides but appears rounded. complex-adj cl

The object looks long and thin, and it measures about 8 inch in length.

compound

3.  a. The object is often used by students.

b. The object is often used by artists.

c. The object is often used by office workers.

The object is often used by students, artists, and office workers. simple

There is still a lot of practice and work that needs to be done on sentence writing by you. We have covered the basics; now you have to internalize and solidify what we have done in class.

Put your examples in chat:

1. The rounded object has many flat sides and about an 1/8-inch diameter.

2. The object which measures about 8 inches in length, but it looks long and thin. XXX mix compound and complex

The object which measures about 8 inches in length looks long and thin. complex

The object measures about 8 inches in length, but it looks long and thin. compound

3. The object is often used by students; also, SV used by artists and office workers.

The object is often used by students; also, it is used by artists and office workers.

4. The object is round and has many flat sides, it also looks long and thin. CS

The object is round and has many flat sides; it also looks long and thin.

5. The object appears rounded has many flat sides which has a diameter that measures about 1/8 inch.

6. The object which has a diameter that measures about 1/8 inch appears rounded but has many flat sides.

7. The object looks long and thin because it measure about 8 inches in length. logic?

8. The object has many flat sides; likewise, it appears rounded and has about an 1/8 inch diameter. ww

9. The 8 inches in length object looks long and thin. awk

The 8-inch-long object looks long and thin.

10. The length of this object is about 8 inches even though it looks long and thin. ww

11. The object has a diameter which measures about 1/8 inch, and it has many flat sides but appears rounded.

12. The object has many flat sides and appears rounded; Therefore, the diameter measure about 1/8 inch. ww cap

13. The object has many flat sides that appears rounded in a diameter and measured about 1/8 length. RW

14. The object has a diameter measure about 1/8 inch and has many flat side, and appears rounded. rw

The object has a diameter that measures about 1/8 inch; it has many flat sides but appears rounded.

15. The object, diameter, appears about 1/8 inch with many flats and rounded side. RW

16. The object has many flat sides and appears rounded; in addition, the object has about an 1/8 inch diameter.

Lots of steady daily practice needed. You’ll get it if you keep practicing.

Quiz#8 11:00 class

Combine each in two ways:

1. a. The object has many flat side.

b. The object appears rounded.

c. The object has a diameter.

d. The diameter measures about 1/8 inch.

2. a. The top of the object is made of rubber.

b. The top of the object has an aluminum band around it.

c. The bottom of the object comes to a sharp point.

3. a. The object is often used by students.

b. The object is often used by artists.

c. The object is often used by office workers

ADVICE#9: Keep the essay short and simple.

Simple – follow the plan

Short – just 300+ words, don’t write a book

A nightmare! 

Not sure what to do.

Never done it before.

Seems so difficult.

Seems so long.

It will be an interesting challenge.

The first few essays that you write will be hard and confusing.

After you write five or six essays, it will start to get much easier.

This is our first essay.

Try to get to 300 words.

Swimming analogy: You have to jump into the pool sometimes. You can’t stand on the deck forever.

Take it easy. Don’t panic. Nobody is going to die. We’re just trying something new, something challenging.

When you children are learning to write a bicycle, what would you say to them?

“Try your best” “Don’t worry.” “Keep trying.” “If you fall, fall in the grass.” “You can try again.” “Try to relax.” “You learn from your mistakes.” “Just try.” “Step by step, you will get there.”

- Say those things to yourself!

EF56 11:00 Jan26

 Today’s agenda:  

1. Continue essay work

2. Quiz#8 sentence combining – final quiz

Wednesday -essay work

- sentence review, Quiz#8 review

Thursday -Essay#1, worth 10 points – whole class (2hrs)

(I will mark these quickly- focus on overall essay, no more detailed grammar correction)

Friday - no class for you, I will finish marking and marks

- Email me after 12:00, and I will email your final mark 

to you.

Essay (French) – ‘to try’ essay, try to explain, describe fully, deal with a 

topic in full

essay – longer piece of writing (300+ words)

Paragraph – 150-220 words, one section

Essay - 300+ words, divided into sections

3 sections in an essay

1.Introductory paragraph

2.Body paragraphs

3.Concluding paragraph

Essay – mostly commonly taught, most basic kind, 5-paragraph essay

Paragraph Essay

Grabber

Topic sentence Introductory paragraph

Supporting sentences Body paragraphs

Concluding sentence Concluding paragraph

(150-200w) (300+ words)

An essay explains more and is divided into paragraphs.

Five paragraphs is the basic model. You can use 3, 4 or 6 if you want.

With a paragraph, it is sometimes possible to get away without making a good plan before you write. However, with the complexity an essay, it is really imperative (very necessary) to make a plan before we begin to write.

WRITING PROCESS:

PLAN- !!

THEN WRITE.

IMPORTANT – AN ESSAY HAS 3 SECTIONS

Intro paragraph

Body paragraph(s)

Concluding paragraph

TOPIC:

Why do you live in Vancouver?

PLAN (~10m)

1. Read and understand the question. Read the question five times. Read every word. Make sure you understand what the question is asking you to write about.

e.g. I live in Canada for three reasons. Vancouver

I left my home country for three reasons. off-topic 

2. Brainstorm reasons- 3 reasons

1.work opportunities

2.close to mountains and ocean

3.opportunities for my kids 

3. Put in order

WRITE

4. Write a rough draft

Intro para – grabber, thesis statement, preview 3 points

Body paras

Concluding para

Intro para (draft)

There are many cities to choose from when deciding where to live in Canada. For me, Vancouver is clearly the best city to live in. There are three reasons why I chose to live in Vancouver. First, Vancouver offers good job opportunities. Second, the city is close to beautiful mountains and the Pacific Ocean. Third, Vancouver has many opportunities for my kids to take advantage of.

Vancouver is a big thriving city, so there are lots of jobs available.

aaa

bbb

ccc

There are beautiful mountains and ocean surrounding the city.

ddd

eee

fff

Finally, the city offers lots of opportunities for my kids to experience.

ggg

hhh

iii

Concluding paragraph

That’s it! That’s an essay.

Both the introductory paragraph and the concluding paragraph will have many of the same elements:

-thesis statement

-preview of 3 points

-grabber/clincher

The concluding paragraph is a restatement of the introduction.

nor repeat, but restate- same information, different words

Sandwich – bread on top

-stuff in the middle

-bread on bottom

- you can almost switch the bread, they are very similar

Homework – come up with ideas, a plan, no need to write the essay 

“Why do you live in Vancouver?”

Quiz#8

Email it to me by 12:25

Combine each in two ways:

1. a. The object has many flat side.

b. The object appears rounded.

c. The object has a diameter.

d. The diameter measures about 1/8 inch.

2. a. The top of the object is made of rubber.

b. The top of the object has an aluminum band around it.

c. The bottom of the object comes to a sharp point.

3. a. The object is often used by students.

b. The object is often used by artists.

c. The object is often used by office workers

EF56 8:30 Jan26

 Today’s agenda:  

1. Continue essay work

2. Quiz#8 sentence combining – final quiz

Wednesday -essay work

- sentence review, Quiz#8 review

Thursday -Essay#1, worth 10 points – whole class (2hrs)

(I will mark these quickly- focus on overall essay, no more detailed grammar correction)

Friday - no class for you, I will finish marking and marks

- Email me after 12:00, and I will email your final mark 

to you.

Esssay (French) – ‘to try’ essay, try to explain, describe fully

essay – longer piece of writing (300+ words)

Paragraph – one section

Essay -divided into sections

3 sections in an essay

1.Introductory paragraph

2.Body paragraphs

3.Concluding paragraph

Essay – most basic kind, 5-paragraph essay

Paragraph Essay

Topic sentence Introductory paragraph

Supporting sentences Body paragraphs

Concluding sentence Concluding paragraph

(150-200w) (300+ words)

An essay explains more and is divided into paragraphs.

Five paragraphs is the basic model. You can use 3, 4 or 6 if you want.

PLAN- !!

THEN WRITE.

IMPORTANT

Intro paragraph

Body paragraph(s)

Concluding paragraph

TOPIC:

Why do you live in Vancouver?

PLAN

1. Read and understand the question. Read the question five times. Read every word. Make sure you understand what the question is asking you to write about.

e.g. I live in Canada for three reasons. Vancouver

I left my home country for three reasons. off-topic 

2. Brainstorm reasons- 3 reasons

1.work opportunities

2.close to mountains and ocean

3.opportunities for my kids 

3. Put in order

WRITE

4. Write a rough draft

Intro para – grabber, thesis statement, preview 3 points

Body paras

Concluding para

Intro para (draft)

There are many cities to choose from when deciding where to live in Canada. For me, Vancouver is clearly the best city to live in. There are three reasons why I chose to live in Vancouver. First, Vancouver offers good job opportunities. Second, the city is close to beautiful mountains and the Pacific Ocean. Third, Vancouver has many opportunities for my kids to take advantage of.

Vancouver is a big thriving city, so there are lots of jobs available.

aaa

bbb

ccc

There are beautiful mountains and ocean surrounding the city.

ddd

eee

fff

Finally, the city offers lots of opportunities for my kids to experience.

ggg

hhh

iii

Concluding paragraph

Sandwich – bread on top

-stuff in the middle

-bread on bottom

- you can almost switch the bread, they are very similar

Homework – come up with a plan 

“Why do you live in Vancouver?”

Quiz#8

Email it to me by 9:55

Combine each in two ways:

1. a. The object looks long.

b. The object looks thin.

c. The object measures about 8 inches in length.

2. a. The object has many flat side.

b. The object appears rounded.

c. The object has a diameter.

d. The diameter measures about 1/8 inch.

3.  a. The object is often used by students.

b. The object is often used by artists.

c. The object is often used by office workers.

EF56 8:30 & 11:00 Jan 25

 Today’s agenda:  

1. Review Test#6 

-structure

-planning

- plagiarism! copying

2. Begin essay work

Tuesday – essay work

- Quiz#8 sentence combining – final quiz

Wednesday -essay work

- sentence review, Quiz#8 review

Thursday -Essay#1, worth 10 points – whole class (2hrs)

(I will mark these quickly- focus on overall essay, no more detailed grammar correction)

Friday - no class for you, I will finish marking and marks

- Email me after 12:00, and I will email your final mark 

to you

Test#6-

Write a well-organized paragraph of 150-200 words on the following topic:

What are some reasons the authorities put the Wise Woman in jail?

Structure of a paragraph

-Grabber (7 to choose from)

-Topic sentence – linked to the question, mirror vocabulary from the 

question, use synonyms

e.g. What are some reasons the authorities put the Wise Woman in jail?

key words- reasons authorities Wise Woman jail

Topic sentence using some or all of these key words:

e.g. There are several reasons why the authorities placed the 

Wise Woman in jail.

 

synonyms for the key words,  using your internalized vocabulary

-reasons – explanations, excuses, validations

FROM thesaurus.com causes, grounds, rationales

-authorities – government, police, rulers, leaders

-Wise Woman – her (don’t begin with a pronoun), witch, 

protagonist, major character

- jail – prison, locked up, detained, arrested

e.g. The government had several excuses for locking up the protagonist, the Wise Woman. 

-3-4 supporting sentences

e.g. money, power, magic

-Concluding sentence

*** The most successful students are following the Planning process

Prewriting- planning (3-5m)

1. Read and understand the question- find direction and focus.

2. Brainstorm some supporting points.

3. Organize the points. Which point will go first? second? third?

Writing

4. Write your first draft.

grabber

The government had several excuses for locking up the protagonist, the Wise Woman. First, they claimed that she had money which could not be accounted for. In fact, after she had been arrested, the police found that she had “ten barrels of gold” hidden away. Secondly, the government was not happy that the Wise Woman had so much power in the community. She was able to help the people much more than the government could. This made the government people nervous. Finally, -magic-

5. Proofread and edit – punc, CS, vt, vf.

6. Pass it in.

6/6, 5/6 – You’re doing great!

4/6 – What can you do to bring it up to 5/6?

2/6, 3/6 – Figure out what is holding you back. organization? sentences? translating from your first language?

A whole different way of looking at education for some people.

** Copying

A whole bunch of students copied phrases and sentences from the story and copied that into their paragraphs. 

no “ “

Just plagiarized

0/6 – zero, fail

Copying is not what we are doing. Hopefully, you will stop doing that. Every time you copy and paste or plagiarize from a story, you will get a 0, and you will fail.

Copying from a story is not the path to any success.

There are many reasons why she was put in jail. Some believe it was because she was a witch, others believe it was because of her money, for when they arrested her they found ten barrels of gold.

The Wise Woman could do amazing things. She was often seen flying through the air above the rooftops with bright sparks coming out of her eyes.

All copied, no “ “, just plagiarized.

0/6

Do you think that a teacher is asking you to copy words and sentences from a story? It isn’t.

Follow the process: Prewriting, then Writing

In Eng 10, 11, 12, plagiarism has serious repercussion. If you copy from the story, or especially the internet answers that you find, you will get a 0, fail the class, and possible not be allowed to continue.

All plagiarized from the internet:

Roses Sing on New Snow is the story of a young woman, Maylin, who prepares delicious meals in her father’s restaurant in the New World for the “lonely and cold and bone-tired” diners. Unfortunately, she does not receive the recognition she deserves since her greedy father and lazy brothers pretend as though they are the ones cooking. When an important dignitary arrives from China wanting to sample food prepared in the New World, Maylin creates a wonderful new dish, Roses Sing on New Snow, for this special occasion. Of course, her father and brothers take credit for the dish when it is loved by the dignitary. When the dignitary wants the recipe, her father and brothers fail miserably at trying to cook the special recipe and are forced to ask Maylin for help. Maylin, side-by-side with the dignitary, teaches him how to prepare the dish. When Maylin’s is by far the better tasting of the two, she carefully explains that even though he has the same ingredients it is her gift for cooking that brings greatness to the dish!

While Maylin does the cooking for her family's Chinatown restaurant, her greedy father and two fat brothers take all the credit. When her specially prepared dish, ``Roses Sing on New Snow,'' is served to the visiting governor of South China, he asks the brothers to show him how it was made. They fail miserably; and even when Maylin is summoned and the governor works beside her in order to learn her secrets, the food he prepares is inferior to hers. ``If you and I sat down with paper and brush and black ink, could we bring forth identical paintings?'' Maylin asks, winning a reputation for wisdom as well as for cooking. 

Passed in plagiarized work for me to mark, assuming that I would be too dumb to figure it out.

Plagiarized – 0/6, write a letter to the principal, trust is broken

Copying and plagiarizing is not the path to success.

The path to success is the Writing Process and learning how to quote

short amounts of borrowed material from a text.

You feel a little better about paragraphs. Huge success!

You feel a bit more confident about writing. Major step in only two months.

Essay – longer piece of writing 

paragraph (150-200w)

short essay (at least 300w) – longer, not a book, not five pages

running for exercise

– begin, first day 200m

-one week later – 500m

-second week - 1km

-after a few months – 5km

Essay – multiparagraph writing, several paragraphs

-most basic type- 5-paragraph essay

“The Bare Bones of the Five-Paragraph Academic Essay” – review for homework

“Bicycle” – an example of a nice straightforward 5-paragraph essay

In EF 5/6 – 2 hours to write an essay

In English 12- 35-40 minutes

Review the essay work I have given you, carefully. We will discuss it tomorrow.

 

EF56 11:00 Jan22

 Today’s agenda:  

1. More challenging sentence combining

2. Begin essay work

I emailed you two documents about essay writing. Check your email.

Test#6- I will finish marking those by Monday.

camping – glamping (camping + glamour)

Getting away into the woods for a couple of days is really reenergizing for me.

sentence writing – paragraph writing – essay writing?

sentence writing – practice

good books that you can use, be your own teacher

Paragraph Patterns, Auerback and Snyder

https://www.amazon.ca/Paragraph-Patterns-Barbara-Auerbach/dp/015567983X

-easier level, but still not a beginner’s book

Investing in good writing books has been valuable to me.

- a good style book is great guide for a developing writer

Style: 10 Lessons in Clarity and Grace Joseph Williams

-transformative book for me, changed the way I wrote

-changed the way I thought about sentences

-basis of my proofreading business

-not a beginner’s book, not about grammar

-about style, writing sentences that are effective and beautiful

sentence combining exercises – fantastic way to practice style

From Paragraph Patterns, Auerback and Snyder

Sentence Combining Sheet 2

Example: 

a. Katherine woke up.

b. The alarm clock rang loudly at 7:00 A.M.

When the alarm clock rang loudly at 7:00 A.M., Katherine woke up.

Katherine woke up when the alarm clock rang loudly at 7:00 A.M.

The alarm clock rang loudly at 7:00 A.M., and Katherine woke up.

1. a. David and Peter went on a camping trip. KERNEL

b. They went to the White Mountains in New Hampshire.

c. They went in June.

SIMPLE

David and Peter went on a camping trip to the White Mountains in New Hampshire in June. string of prepositional phrases

In June, David and Peter went on a camping trip to the White Mountains in New Hampshire. nice style

Just for fun, we add some of our information:

David and Peter, my friends, went on a camping trip to the White Mountains in New Hampshire in June. appositive

David and Peter, who are good friends, went on a camping trip to the White Mountains in New Hampshire in June.

2. a. They checked all their equipment.

b They got into the car for the long ride to the mountains.

SIMPLE

They checked all their equipment and got into the car for the long ride to the mountains. SVV

COMPOUND

They checked all their equipment; then they got into the car for the long ride to the mountains.

COMPLEX -adv cl

After they checked all their equipment, they got into the car for the long ride to the mountains.

Before they got into the car for the long ride to the mountains, they checked all their equipment.

Four different ways- that’s good enough for any job or school or any situation.

This is our goal, to be able write freely in a variety of styles.

3. a. They arrived at the campground in the late afternoon.

b. They set up camp near a small stream.

4. a. David put up the tent.

b. Peter cooked supper over the fire.

5. a. They crawled into their sleeping bags at sunset.

b. They became nervous.

c. They began to hear animal noises.

6. a. Peter wanted to get up and go to the car.

b. David said it would be better Just to go to sleep.

7. a. They got up at sunrise.

b. They got up before the other campers.

c. They made a hearty breakfast.

8. a. David and Peter prepared for a long hike.

b. It was their first hike.

c. They decided to go to the top of Mount Madison.

9. a. They began the climb.

b. It started to rain.

c. They decided to go home.

Your solutions:

1. After they arrived at the campground in the late afternoon, they set up camp near a small stream.

2. David put up the tent, and Peter cooked supper over the fire.  

3. Peter wanted to get up and go to the car, but David said it would be better just to go to sleep.

4. David and Peter prepared for their first long hike by deciding to go to the top of Mount Madison.

5. David and Peter prepared for a long hike, their first hike, and decided to go the top of Mount Madison. appositive

6. It started to rain; they decided to go home.

7. David and Peter,  prepared, their first hike for a long hike.

8. When they began the climb, it started to rain, so they decided to go home.

9. They got up at sunrise before the other campers, and they made a hearty breakfast.

10. David put up the tent; at the same time, Peter cooked supper over the fire.

11. It started to rain when they began the climb, so they decided to go home.

12. They crawled into their sleeping bags at sunset, and they became nervous when they began to hear animal noises.

13. They got up at sunrise before the other campers; as a result, they made a hearty breakfast.

14. They got up at sunrise before the other campers and made a hearty breakfast. SIMPLE

15. When it started to rain, they began the climb, so they decided to go home.

16. While David put up the tent, Peter cooked supper over the fire.

17. They got up at sunrise before the other campers; after that, they made a hearty breakfast.

after that = then, next, afterwards

18. David and Peter prepared for their first long hike, and they decided to go to the top of Mount Madison.

hearty – substantial

“a hearty lunch” “a hearty soup”

“ a thin broth”

If you are sick, you should have some thin chicken broth.

These are good example of a variety of sentences. These are the kinds of sentence that you want to write in your own paragraphs.

The sentence combining is the practice that can get you there.

I practiced guitar last night for an hour. I focused on one area: harmonized scales. Tonight I will do the same thing. Over some months, the harmonized scales will become second nature to me. I will be able to play them when I play with other people, not just in my practice room.

second nature- you can do it without thinking about it, feels routine

It is the same thing with learning to write sentences.

Improvement comes with steady consistent practice. There’s no big secret. There is no hack.

EF56 8:30 Jan22

 Today’s agenda:  

1. More challenging sentence combining

2. Begin essay work

I emailed you two documents about essay writing. Check your email.

Test#6- I will finish marking those by Monday.

sentence writing – paragraph writing – essay writing?

Paragraph Patterns, Auerback and Snyder

https://www.amazon.ca/Paragraph-Patterns-Barbara-Auerbach/dp/015567983X

-easier level, but still not a beginner’s book

Investing in good writing books has been valuable to me.

- a good style book is great guide for a developing writer

Style: 10 Lessons in Clarity and Grace Joseph Williams

-transformative book for me, changed the way I wrote

-not a beginner’s book, not about grammar

-about style, writing sentences that are effective and beautiful

sentence combining exercises – fantastic way to practice style

From Paragraph Patterns, Auerback and Snyder

Sentence Combining Sheet 2

Example: 

a. Katherine woke up.

b. The alarm clock rang loudly at 7:00 A.M.

When the alarm clock rang loudly at 7:00 A.M., Katherine woke up.

1. a. David and Peter went on a camping trip. KERNEL

b. They went to the White Mountains in New Hampshire.

c. They went in June.

SIMPLE

David and Peter went on a camping trip to the White Mountains in New Hampshire in June. string of prepositional phrases

David and Peter, my friends, went on a camping trip to the White Mountains in New Hampshire in June. appositive

In June, David and Peter went on a camping trip to the White Mountains in New Hampshire. nice style

2. a. They checked all their equipment.

b They got into the car for the long ride to the mountains.

SIMPLE

They checked all their equipment and got into the car for the long ride to the mountains. SVV

COMPOUND

They checked all their equipment; then they got into the car for the long ride to the mountains.

COMPLEX -adv cl

After they checked all their equipment, they got into the car for the long ride to the mountains.

Before they got into the car for the long ride to the mountains, they checked all their equipment.

Four different ways- that’s good enough for any job or school or any situation.

This is our goal, to be able write freely in a variety of styles.

3. a. They arrived at the campground in the late afternoon.

b. They set up camp near a small stream.

4. a. David put up the tent.

b. Peter cooked supper over the fire.

5. a. They crawled into their sleeping bags at sunset.

b. They became nervous.

c. They began to hear animal noises.

6. a. Peter wanted to get up and go to the car.

b. David said it would be better Just to go to sleep.

7. a. They got up at sunrise.

b. They got .up before the other campers.

c. They made a hearty breakfast.

8. a. David and Peter prepared for a long hike.

b. It was their first hike.

c. They decided to go to the top of Mount Madison.

9. a. They began the climb.

b. It started to rain.

c. They decided to go home.

Your solutions:

1. They arrived at the campground in the late afternoon and set up camp near a small stream.

2. They arrived at the campground in the late afternoon and set up the camp near a small stream.

3. Peter cooked supper over the fire while David is putting was putting/ put up the tent.

4. Peter wanted to get up and go to the car, but David said it would be better just to go to sleep.

5. David put up the tent, and Peter cooked supper over the fire.

6. David and Peter before their first hike, they decided to go to the top of Mount Madison. XXX

Before their first hike, David and Peter decided to go to the top of Mount Madison.

7. David and Peter prepared for a long hike to the top of Mount Madison; that was their first hike.

8. David put up the tent; then Peter cooked supper over the fire.

9. They  got up at sunrise before the other campers and made a hearty breakfast.

10. Peter wanted to get up to go to car, but David said it would be better to go to sleep.

11. David put up the tent while Peter cooked supper over the fire.

3. David put up the tent and cooked supper over the fire. Peter?

12. Peter wanted to get up and go to the car while David said it would be better just to go to sleep.

13. Before the other campers they got up at sunrise then they made a hearty breakfast .

Before the other campers they got up at sunrise, they made a hearty breakfast.

14. Arriving at the campground in the late afternoon, they set up camp near a small stream.

15. They got up at sunrise before the other campers and made a hearty breakfast.

16. David and Peter prepared for the first long hike, they decided to go to the top of Mount Madison. CS punc

David and Peter prepared for the first long hike; they decided to go to the top of Mount Madison.

17. Peter wanted to get up and go the car; at the same time, David said it would be better just to go to sleep.

18. Peter wanted to get up and go to the car, so/but David said it would be better just to go to sleep.

19. They got up before the others campers at sunrise ; also, they made a healthy breakfast.

20. They arrived at the campground in the late afternoon, so they set up camp near a small stream.

21. David put up the tent then Peter cooked supper over the fire. XXX RO

David put up the tent; then Peter cooked supper over the fire.

These are good example of a variety of sentences. These are the kinds of sentence that you want to write in your own paragraphs.

The sentence combining is the practice that can get you there.

I practiced guitar last night for an hour. I focused on one area: harmonized scales. Tonight I will do the same thing. Over months, harmonized scales will become second nature to me. I will be able to play them when I play with other people, not just in my practice room.

second nature- you can do it without thinking about it, feels routine

It is the same thing with learning to write sentences.

Improvement comes with steady consistent practice. There’s no big secret. There is no hack.

EF56 11:00am Jan21

 Today’s agenda:  

1. Continue with appositives

2. Paragraph on “The Wise Woman of Cordoba”

Possible topics for tomorrow and next week:

-essay work****

sentence writing – paragraph writing – essay writing?

-poetry*, non-fiction

-sentence review- focusing on the skills that we have already covered, 

practicing, more sentence combining, some harder****

-paragraph writing*

Tomorrow: harder more challenging sentence combining, begin essay

If you have preferences for what you want to do in the final week, let me know. I will guide my planning based on what you as students would prefer.

** Appositives **

Adjective clauses and appositives are similar. They do the same job, but the grammar is different.

adjective clause

I like my teacher whose name is Mrs. Loo.

I like my teacher who is named Mrs. Loo.

appositive

I like my teacher, Mrs. Loo.

I like my teacher Mrs. Loo. XXX small error, but not right

PRO TIP #5: When there is a name, put commas around it.

I was talking with my friend, Michele, about the party next week.

appositive , Michele,

I come from a very small country, Malta, which is in the Mediterranean.

appositive , Malta,

My lunch smells great. It is an onion and garlic sandwich.

My lunch which is an onion and garlic sandwich smells great. adj cl

My lunch, an onion and garlic sandwich, smells great. appositive

Fatima’s son is an engineer. He is moving to Toronto next week.

Fatima’s son who is an engineer is moving to Toronto next week. adj cl

Fatima’s son, an engineer, is moving to Toronto next week. appositive

Combine these using appositives:

1. Jessica is the youngest student in the class. She had the highest mark.

2. The baby is six months old. He does not sleep well.

3. Eileen was the marketing manager. She organized the ad campaign.

4. The class was taught by Mrs. McKnight. She is a retired teacher.

5. The car was a red convertible. The car was speeding through the neighbourhood.

6. Friends is an American sitcom. It is very popular with ESL students.

7. The Nakdong River is the longest river in Korea. It is over 500 km long.

8. English is the language of business. It is a challenging language to   

 learn.

Put your solutions using appositives into chat:

1. The baby, a six-month-old, does not sleep well. noun

2. Jessica, the youngest student in the class, had the highest mark.

3. 1. The Nakdong River, the longest river in Korea, is over 500 km long.

4. English, the language of business, is a challenging language to learn.

5. The longest river in Korea, the Nakdong River, is over 500 km long.

6. The class was taught by Mrs. McKnight, a retired teacher.

7. The class was taught by, Mrs. McKnight, she is a retired teacher.

The class was taught by Mrs. McKnight; she is a retired teacher.

8. My sister, Sara, likes Chinese food.

9. The baby, six months old, does not sleep well.

a six-month-old

a six months old XXX Very common error

10. The class was taught by a retired teacher, Mrs. McKnight.

11. The baby , a six-month-old , doesn’t sleep well.

12. I put on my boots, hiking boots, and headed for the mountains.

13. The, baby is six months old, he does not sleep well.

14. Eileen, the marketing manager, organized the ad campaign.

15. The class was taught by Mrs. McKnight, a retired teacher.

16. friends is an American sitcom, whose are, very popular with ESL students

Friends, an American sitcom, is very popular with ESL students.

17. The car, a red convertible, was speeding through the neighbourhood.

These are a very good start. Review appositives. Search online for material about appositives.

e.g. https://grammarwritingrevision.wordpress.com/2012/08/11/exercises-on-appositives-and-appositive-phrases/

You can be your own teacher.

Test#6-

Write a well-organized paragraph of 150-200 words on the following topic. Email it to me by 12:25 am.

Subject Line: Name, Class, Time, Test

What are some reasons the authorities put the Wise Woman in jail?

EF56 8:30 Jan21

 Today’s agenda:  

1. Continue with appositives

2. Paragraph on “The Wise Woman of Cordoba”

Possible topics for tomorrow and next week:

-essay work sentence writing – paragraph writing – essay writing?

-poetry, non-fiction

-sentence review- focusing on the skills that we have already covered, 

practicing, sentence combining **

-paragraph writing *

If you have preferences for what you want to do in the final week, let me know. I will guide my planning based on what you as students would prefer.

** Appositives **

Adjective clauses and appositives are similar. They do the same job, but the grammar is different.

adjective clause

I like my teacher whose name is Mrs. Loo.

I like my teacher who is named Mrs. Loo.

appositive

I like my teacher, Mrs Loo.

I like my teacher Mrs Loo. XXX small error, but not right

PRO TIP #5: When there is a name, use a comma.

I was talking with my friend, Michele, about the party next week.

appositive , Michele,

I come from a very small country, Malta, which is in the Mediterranean.

appositive , Malta,

My lunch smells great. It is an onion and garlic sandwich.

My lunch which is an onion and garlic sandwich smells great. adj cl

My lunch, an onion and garlic sandwich, smells great. appositive

Fatima’s son is an engineer. He is moving to Toronto next week.

Fatima’s son who is an engineer is moving to Toronto next week. adj cl

Fatima’s son, an engineer, is moving to Toronto next week. appositive

Combine these using appositives:

1. Jessica is the youngest student in the class. She had the highest mark.

2. The baby is six months old. He does not sleep well.

3. Eileen was the marketing manager. She organized the ad campaign.

4. The class was taught by Mrs. McKnight. She is a retired teacher.

5. The car was a red convertible. The car was speeding through the neighbourhood.

6. Friends is an American sitcom. It is very popular with ESL students.

7. The Nakdong River is the longest river in Korea. It is over 500 km long.

8. English is the language of business. It is a challenging language to   

 learn.

Put your solutions using appositives into chat:

1. The baby, six months old, doesn't sleep well. AWK

The baby, a six-month-old, doesn't sleep well. noun

2. Jessica, is the youngest student in the class. She had the highest marks.

Jessica, the youngest student in the class, had the highest mark. Friends, an American sitcom, is very popular with ESL students.

3. The Nakdong River, the longest river in Korea, is over 500 km long.

4. English, the language of business, is a challenging language to learn.

5. Jessica is the youngest in the class, she has the highest mark.

6. Jessica, the youngest student in the class, had the highest mark.

7. I live in ,Vancouver, that is very beautiful.

8. The class was taught by Mrs. McKnight, she is a retired teacher. CS

The class was taught by Mrs. McKnight, a retired teacher.

9. Fatima's son, an engineer, is moving to Toronto next week.

10. The Nakdong River is the longest river in Korea and it is over 500 km long. compound

11. Eileen, the marketing manager, organized the ad campaign.

12. The class taught  by Mrs. Mcknight, a retired teacher.

13. The language of business, it is English, a challenging language to learn.

14. My friend, Andersa, is the superviser at the store.

15. Friends, an American sitcom,  is very popular with ESL students.

16. Jessica, the youngest student in the class, had the highest mark.

17. Jessica, is the youngest student in the class  and  had the highest mark.

18. English, the language of business, is a challenging language to learn.

19. The class was taught by Mrs. McKnight, a retired teacher.

20. The class by Mrs. Mcking , a retired teacher, was taught.

21. The baby, does not sleep well is six months old.

22. The car, a red convertible, was speeding through the neighbourhood.

Review appositives.

Test#6-

Write a well-organized paragraph of 150-200 words on the following topic. Email it to me by 10am.

Subject Line: Name, Class, Time, Test

What are some reasons the authorities put the Wise Woman in jail?

EF56 11:00 Jan20

 Today’s agenda:  

1. “The Wise Woman of Cordoba”

2. Appositives

Next week: essay work

possibilities: poetry, non-fiction

sentence review

If you have areas that you would like to see covered in the last time, tell me.

“The Wise Woman of Cordoba”

walkthrough of my thoughts on the story-

*First reading- basics of the story 

– setting-where & when

- characters- major, minor, protagonist, antagonist, static, dynamic

- plot- plotline – exposition, rising action, climax, falling action, 

denouement

*Second reading – deeper look- relevance of setting, symbolism, 

metaphors

- guide us to a deeper understanding of the story, find deeper meaning

-on the surface, children’s story, scary story

on deeper level – meanings and significances that we can come to understand

Not reading on the surface, like a child.

Read deeper, like a mature, thoughtful human.

trust the author- meaning to be found, investigation is worthwhile

some stories have no deeper meaning, that’s fine – plot-driven stories

good fiction and movies have layers

worthwhile to uncover those layers, see what’s there

you may look at a work of fiction, movie and guess that there’s nothing there, but there may be something valuable there

matter of investigation, caring, experience, thoughtful reading,

stories can reveal what makes us human, universal experience

resonate with your life, experience

The gold is there. You have to dig. You may need someone to show you where to dig.

“long ago” – suggests fairy tale, children’s story, deeply metaphorical

Cordoba- city in Spain, city in Mexico- relationship?

history of colonialism

religion – Catholicism, Catholic Church

Mexico – syncretic- mix of religions, mix of Catholicism and pre-Contact beliefs 

association between women and devil

internal conflict in the character WW – associated with the devil, yet very helpful, community-minded

Wise Woman – independent, powerful, strange, magic powers

story about powerful women – feared distrusted by men, disliked by men

WW put in jail – metaphor, keeping women under control, controlling powerful women

the judge – represents power

Story could be a metaphor for the oppression of women in the world.

This is my reading of the story.

a reading – an interpretation based on some knowledge of literary tropes, world history, sociology, human nature

Sometimes people can have interpretations of stories that are really out to lunch. Their reading of the story doesn’t seem to based in anything other than what’s in their head.

Your reading and interpretation of the text should be based in evidence from the text.

These are my thoughts. You can disagree or agree. This is my reading of the story. Take what you like from it.

superstition – based in culture

superstition – actions or object that bring good or bad luck

rabbit’s foot – good luck

walking a ladder – bad luck

* witches – female, women – negative connotation

popular culture- witch in Snow White, Wicked Witch of the West -The Wizard of Oz

negative portraits of magical women

characteristics – ugly, green skin, wart, ugly clothes, terrible voices, scary, fly on brooms

*wizard, warlock – male – no negative connotations

characteristics – strong, noble, powerful, knowledgeable, educated

sexism in Western portrayal of magic women

cultural symbols of fear, scariness

-full moon – Western - symbol of fear, madness, insanity

Asia – full moon- happy, joyful, symbol for family, gathering, festival. e.g. Mid-Autumn Festival

gender of moon and sun

the moon – feminine- French ‘la lune’, Spanish ‘la luna”

the sun – masculine- French ‘le soliel’, Spanish ‘el sol’

In most cultures, the moon is thought of a being female.

moon – ‘la lune’ ‘la luna’

lun-  root for moon, associated with madness, scariness, fear

lunatic – ‘crazy’ person, make insane by the influence of the moon

loony- foolish (adj)

loonie – one-dollar coin

loon -waterbird like a duck

In my culture, references to femininity are often associated with madness and evil.

hysteria – hysterical – lose control of your emotions, freak out

witch – associated with broom- domestic tool

- cat- femininity

Black cats are bad luck.

- nothing about dogs, horses, etc.

nightmares – bad dreams – night -mare- female horse

witches have brooms

wizards have staffs

- Deeper ideas in “The Wise Woman of Cordoba”

- symbolism, importance of setting, cultural references

*TRUTH: When you reading a story or poem from another culture, if you don’t understand the culture references, then you don’t understand the story or poem.

vocab? questions?

bewildered (adj) – really confused, unable to understand what it happening, overwhelmed

We will do some writing about the story tomorrow. Test #6 paragraph

Appositives - 

like an adjective clause, but shorter

e.g.

My sister’s name is Kathy. She lives in Spain.

My sister whose name is Kathy lives in Spain. adj cl

Kathy, who is my sister, lives in Spain. adj cl

appositive

My sister, Kathy, lives in Spain. appositive

Kathy, my sister, lives in Spain. appositive

My home country which is Iran is very beautiful. adj cl

Iran, which is my home country, is very beautiful. adj cl

My home country, Iran, is very beautiful. appositive

Iran, my home country, is very beautiful. appositive

My home country is very beautiful.

Iran is very beautiful.

**often used with names

Keep it to names for now.

My dog, Butter, is very loyal to our family.

Butter, my dog, is very loyal to our family.

Kai, my son, loves to play soccer.

My son, Kai, loves to play soccer. SIMPLE? COMPLEX? I don’t know.

My son Kai loves to play soccer. XXX

WeiQing wants to visit her home city, KaiPing.

WeiQing wants to visit Kaiping, her home city.

 

I like my teacher, Mrs Loo.

I like my teacher Mrs Loo. XXX small error, but not right

Adjective clauses and appositives are similar. They do the same job, but the grammar is difference.

My lunch smells great. It is an onion and garlic sandwich.

My lunch which is an onion and garlic sandwich smells great. adj cl

My lunch, an onion and garlic sandwich, smells great. appositive

Fatima’s son is an engineer. He is moving to Toronto next week.

Fatima’s son who is an engineer is moving to Toronto next week. adj cl

Fatima’s son, an engineer, is moving to Toronto next week. appositive

Combine these using appositives:

1. Jessica is the youngest student in the class. She had the highest mark.

2. The baby is six months old. He does not sleep well.

3. Eileen was the marketing manager. She organized the ad campaign.

4. The class was taught by Mrs. McKnight. She is a retired teacher.

5. The car was a red convertible. The car was speeding through the neighbourhood.

6. Friends is an American sitcom. It is very popular with ESL students.

7. The Nakdong River is the longest river in Korea. It is over 500 km long.

8. English is the language of business. It is a challenging language to   

 learn.

EF56 8:30 Jan20

 Today’s agenda:  

1. “The Wise Woman of Cordoba”

2. Appositives

“The Wise Woman of Cordoba”

walkthrough of my thoughts on the story-

*First reading- basics of the story 

– setting-where & when

- characters- major, minor, protagonist, antagonist, static, dynamic

- plot- plotline – exposition, rising action, climax, falling action, 

denouement

*Second reading – deeper look- relevance of setting, symbolism, 

metaphors

- guide us to a deeper understanding of the story, find deeper meaning

-on the surface, children’s story, scary story

on deeper level – meanings and significances that we can come to understand

Not reading on the surface, like a child.

Read deeper, like a mature, thoughtful human.

trust the author- meaning to be found, investigation is worthwhile

some stories have no deeper meaning, that’s fine – plot-driven stories

good fiction and movies have layers

worthwhile to uncover those layers, see what’s there

you may look at a work of fiction, movie and guess that there’s nothing there, but there may be something valuable there

matter of investigation, caring, experience, thoughtful reading,

stories can reveal what makes us human, universal experience

resonate with your life, experience

The gold is there. You have to dig. You may need someone to show you where to dig.

“long ago” – suggests fairy tale, children’s story, deeply metaphorical

Cordoba- city in Spain, city in Mexico- relationship?

 history of colonialism

religion – Catholicism, Catholic Church

Mexico – syncretic- mix of religions, mix of Catholicism and pre-Contact beliefs 

association between women and devil

internal conflict in the character WW – associated with the devil, yet very helpful, community-minded

Wise Woman – independent, powerful, strange, magic powers

story about powerful women – feared distrusted by men, disliked by men

WW put in jail – metaphor, keeping women under control, controlling powerful women

the judge – represents power

men and women, witches, full moons – tomorrow

These are my thoughts. You can disagree or agree. This is my reading of the story. Take what you like from it.

superstition – based in culture

* witches – female, women – negative connotation

popular culture- witch in Snow White, Wicked Witch of the West -The Wizard of Ox

negative portraits of magical women

characteristics – ugly, green skin, wart, ugly clothes, terrible voices, scary, fly on brooms

*wizard, warlock – male – no negative connotations

characteristics – strong, noble, powerful

sexism in Western portrayal of magic women

cultural symbols of fear, scariness

-full moon – Western - symbol of fear, madness, insanity

Asia – full moon- symbol for family, gathering, festival. e.g. Mid-Autumn Festival

moon – feminine French ‘la lune’ Spanish ‘la luna”

sun – masculine French ‘le soliel’ Spanish ‘el sol’

moon – ‘la lune’

lunatic – ‘crazy’ person

loony- foolish

In my culture, references to femininity are often associated with madness and evil.

witch – associated with broom- domestic tool

- cat- femininity

witches have brooms

wizards have staffs

- Deeper ideas in “The Wise Woman of Cordoba”

- symbolism, importance of setting

vocab? questions?

We will do some writing about the story tomorrow. Test#6 paragraph

Appositives - 

like an adjective clause, but shorter

My sister is Kathy. She lives in Spain.

My sister whose name is Kathy lives in Spain. adj cl

Kathy, who is my sister, lives in Spain. adj cl

appositive

My sister, Kathy, lives in Spain. appositive

Kathy, my sister, lives in Spain. appositive

My home country, which is Iran, is very beautiful. adj cl

Iran, which is my home country, is very beautiful. adj cl

My home country, Iran, is very beautiful. appositive

Iran, my home country, is very beautiful. appositive

**often used with names

Keep it to names for now.

My dog, Butter, is very loyal to our family.

Kai, my son, loves to play soccer.

WeiQing wants to visit her home city, KaiPing.

WeiQing wants to visit Kaiping, her home city.

 

My lunch smells great. It is an onion and garlic sandwich.

My lunch which is an onion and garlic sandwich smells great. adj cl

My lunch, an onion and garlic sandwich, smells great. appositive

Fatima’s son is an engineer. He is moving to Toronto next week.

Fatima’s son who is an engineer is moving to Toronto next week. adj cl

Fatima’s son, an engineer, is moving to Toronto next week. appositive

Combine these using appositives:

1. Jessica is the youngest student in the class. She had the highest mark.

2. The baby is six months old. He does not sleep well.

3. Eileen was the marketing manager. She organized the ad campaign.

4. The class was taught by Mrs. McKnight. She is a retired teacher.

5. The car was a red convertible. The car was speeding through the neighbourhood.

6. Friends is an American sitcom. It is very popular with ESL students.

7. The Nakdong River is the longest river in Korea. It is over 500 km long.

8. English is the language of business. It is a challenging language to   

 learn.

EF56 11:00 Jan19

 Today’s agenda:  

1. “The Wise Woman of Cordoba”

2. Sentence combining quiz

Wednesday – Hump Day, over the hump of the week

The weeks are short. They fly by.

Don’t wish your Mondays away.

Blue Monday , yesterday, most depressing day of the year

Find something enjoyable in each day- something small is fine.

Always have something to look forward to. Getting to look forward to everyday.

“The Wise Woman of Cordoba”

walkthrough of my thoughts on the story-

*First reading- basics of the story 

– setting-where & when

- characters- major, minor, protagonist, antagonist, static, dynamic

- plot- plotline – exposition, rising action, climax, falling action, 

denouement

*Second reading – deeper look- relevance of setting, symbolism, 

metaphors

- guide us to a deeper understanding of the story, find deeper meaning

-on the surface, children’s story, scary story

on deeper level – meanings and significances that we can come to understand

Not reading on the surface, like a child.

Read deeper, like a mature, thoughtful human.

trust the author- meaning to be found, investigation is worthwhile

some stories have no deeper meaning, that’s fine – plot-driven stories

good fiction and movies have layers

worthwhile to uncover those layers, see what’s there

you may look at a work of fiction, movie and guess that there’s nothing there, but there may be something valuable there

matter of investigation, caring, experience, thoughtful reading,

stories can reveal what makes us human, universal experience

resonate with your life, experience

The gold is there. You have to dig. You may need someone to show you where to dig.

“long ago” – suggests fairy tale, children’s story, deeply metaphorical

Cordoba- city in Spain, city in Mexico- relationship?

 history of colonialism

religion – Catholicism, Catholic Church

Mexico – syncretic- mix of religions, mix of Catholicism and pre-Contact beliefs 

association between women and devil

internal conflict in the character WW – associated with the devil, yet very helpful, community-minded

Wise Woman – independent, powerful, strange, magic powers

story about powerful women – feared distrusted by men, disliked by men

WW put in jail – metaphor, keeping women under control, controlling powerful women

the judge – represents power

men and women, witches, full moons – tomorrow

These are my thoughts. You can disagree or agree. This is my reading of the story. Take what you like from it.

Quiz#7

Email it to me by 12:30

Combine each exercise in two ways using two different sentence styles.

1. Students have gathered.

Coaches have gathered.

Parents have gathered.

They have gathered for the provincial final.

The final is in senior girls’ basketball.

2. The players enter the floor area.

They enter from the dressing rooms.

They begin to warm up.

They receive a standing ovation.

The ovation is from their supporters.

3. The players step onto the court.

The ref steps onto the court.

The ref blows his whistle.

The game begins.

EF56 8:30 Jan19

 Today’s agenda:  

1. “The Wise Woman of Cordoba”

witches, full moon, luck

2. Sentence combining quiz

“The Wise Woman of Cordoba”

walkthrough of my thoughts on the story-

First reading- basics of the story 

– setting-where & when

- characters- major, minor, static, dynamic

- plot- plotline – exposition, rising action, climax, falling action, 

denouement

Second reading – deeper look- relevance of setting, symbolism, 

metaphors

- guide is to a deeper of the story, find deeper meaning

on the surface, children’s story, scary story

on deeper level – meanings and significances that we can come to understand

Not reading on the surface, like a child.

Read deeper, like a mature, thoughtful human.

trust the author- meaning to be found, investigation is worthwhile

some stories have no deeper meaning, that’s fine

good fiction and movies have layers

worthwhile to uncover those layers, see what’s there

you may look at a work of fiction, movie and guess that there’s nothing there, but there may be something valuable there

matter of investigation, care, experience, thoughtful reading,

stories can reveal what makes us human, universal experience

resonate with your life, experience

Cordoba- city in Spain, city in Mexico- relationship?

 colonialism

religion – Catholicism, Catholic Church

Mexico – syncretic religion, mix of Catholicism and pre-Contact beliefs 

association between women and devil

internal conflict in the character WW – associatred with the devil, yet very helpful, community-minded

Wise Woman – independent, powerful, strange, magic powers

WW put in jail – metaphor, keeping women under control, controlling powerful women

the judge – represents power

men and women – tomorrow

These are my thoughts. You can disagree or agree. This is my reading of the story. Take what you like from it.

Quiz#7

Email it to me by 9:55.

Combine each exercise in two ways using two different sentence styles.

1. Family have gathered.

Friends have gathered.

They have gathered for the special day.

The special day is a wedding.

The wedding is Joe and Sarah.

2. The guests have gathered.

The gathering is in a tent.

The tent is white.

The tent is big.

The tent is full of tables.

The tent is full of chairs.

3. The wedding is beside a beach.

The beach is sandy.

The sand is gold.

The sand is white.

The sand is soft.

The water is blue.

The water is clear.

EF56 11:00am Jan18

 

Today’s agenda:  

1. Sentence combining homework

2. Literary term – conflict

3. “The Wise Woman of Cordoba”

witches, full moon, luck

4. Homework – Prepare for sentence combining quiz tomorrow

Quiz#7/Replacement quiz tomorrow.

For the students who contacted me by the deadline, this quiz will replace the quiz mark that you indicated to me.

For everyone else, this will be a regular quiz.

The quiz will be three sentence combining exercises, two answers each, same as last time.

HOMEWORK

Combine each exercise

Saturday Night with the Kids

1. Samuel babysits on Saturday night.

He babysits Jeffrey.

Jeffrey is two.

He babysits Catelina.

She is four.

He babysits for several hours.

MY SOLUTION

Samuel babysits on Saturday night. KERNEL

He babysits Jeffrey.

Jeffrey is two.

He babysits Catelina.

She is four.

He babysits for several hours.

Samuel babysits on Saturday night. KERNEL

Jeffrey

two

Catelina

four

for several hours

Samuel babysits Jeffrey who is two years old and Catelina who is four years old for several hours on Saturday night.

Samuel babysits two-year-old Jeffrey and four-year-old Catelina for several hours on Saturday night.

two-year-old -description, noun acting like an adjective, hyphen, no plural ‘s’

Samuel babysits two-year-old Jeffrey.

Samuel babysits two-years-old Jeffrey. XXX

Samuel babysits two year old Jeffrey. XXX

Nouns acting like adjectives:

He has a red balloon. adjective

He has a helium balloon. noun acting like an adjective

She bought some new books. adjective

She bought some school books. noun like an adjective

I need new tennis shoes. new-adjective, tennis-noun

both doing the same job, both modifying ‘shoes’

lunch box

snow tires

winter gloves

work clothes

diamond ring

several nouns together acting like an adjective

The dog is five years old.

It is a five-year-old dog. hyphen, no ‘s’

It is a five-years-old dog. XXX, very common error

This course is nine weeks long.

This is a nine-week course. hyphen, no ‘s’

He is fifteen years old.

He is a fifteen-year-old teenager.

He is a fifteen-year-old.

‘fifteen-year-old’ is describing ‘teenager’ – hyphen, no ‘s’

Sarah cooked a delicious ten-pound turkey for Xmas.

‘ten-pound’ is  a noun, but it functions as an adjective.

The turkey was ten pounds.

It was a ten-pound turkey.

Put a few your examples in chat.

1. The puppies are six-month-old. XXX

The puppies are six months old.

These are six-month-old puppies.

2. How is six-year-old birthday today? Meaning? RW

3. He is a one-year-old kitty.

4. My dad has a fifty-year-old watch that he got on his wedding's day.

5. She has a nine-year-old son.

6. My hometown is 600 years old.

I come from a 600-year-old town.

7. It is my one-year-old bag.

Top-quality sentence, ready for UBC

2. They love him.

He pillow fights.

He lets them be noisy.

He lets them watch TV.

He lets them stay up late.

They love him because he pillow fights; also, he lets them be noisy, watch TV, and stay up late.

This is real authentic English writing.

3. Sometimes, Erich comes over.

He is Samuel's friend.

He cooks fudge.

He cooks with the children.

Sometimes, Erich who is Samuel's friend comes over and cooks fudge with the children. complex sent – adj cl

4. They laugh.

They make a mess.

They laugh and make a mess.

They laugh while they make a mess.

They laugh while making a mess.

They laugh; at the same time, they make a mess.

5. Bathtime is fun.

It usually involves a water fight.

The water fight is hilarious.

The fight requires a clean-up.

Bathtime is fun; it usually involves a hilarious water fight that requires a clean-up.

6. The parents return at midnight.

They find the children in bed.

They find the house clean.

They find Samuel asleep.

He is sleeping on the couch.

The parents return at midnight and find the children in bed, the house clean, and Samuel asleep on the couch.

Your examples in chat:

1. Erich who is Samuel's friend sometimes comes over to cook fudge with the children.

2. Sometimes, Samuel's friend’s, Erich, comes over; in addition, he cooks fudge with the children.

appositives- My sister, Kathy, is a nurse.

Kathy, my sister, is a nurse.

Our classmate, Bahareh, is a very hardworking learner.

Our teacher, Joe, is late.

Joe, our teacher, is late.

I will teach appositives later this week.

3. Since he pillow fights and lets them be noisy, watch TV, and stay up late, they love him.

4. The parents return at midnight; they find the house clean and the children in bed. They also find Samuel sleeping on the couch.

Fully combine the sentences.

The parents return at midnight and find the house clean and the children in bed; also, they find Samuel sleeping on the couch.

5. The water fight is hilarious and fun; however, the fight is involves and requires a clean-up.

6. When the parents return at midnight, they find the house clean; also, they find Samuel asleep and the children in bed.

7. Fun bathtime Bathtime, which is fun, usually involves a hilarious water fight but requires a clean-up.

This is step 1 and 2 of working with sentence combining. There are many more steps to take.

Find sentence combining books in VPL, online, etc. You may have to dig to find some.

This is daily, steady practice that can and will make your sentence writing great.

Literary Term – conflict

A conflict is a problem or struggle that drives a story.  Common forms of external conflict are person vs person, person vs society, person vs nature, person vs technology, and person vs supernatural.  Internal conflict is person vs himself or herself.

vs – versus (against)

person vs XXX

External conflicts – conflict from outside ourselves

person vs person

person vs society/culture

person vs nature

person vs technology- genetically-modified food

person vs supernatural – ghosts, witches, monsters, vampires, devil

Internal conflict

person vs herself, himself

soul – your inner spirit inside you, conscience?, deamon- inner voice?

ghost – the leftover spirit or energy of a dead person, real?

poem “My spirit is flying.” your soul, your heart, your spirit

metaphors – where is your soul? your heart is a pump for blood

religious and spiritual beliefs

soul, ghost, spirit, deamon – hard to translate