Good morning.
We will get started at 8:30.
Today’s Agenda:
· Return
Test#3- review, rewriting “ “
· Continue
adjective clauses, your examples from homework
· Begin
career module, pres sign up
· Begin
multi-paragraph writing, essay
· The
Ninny” – discussion, power, authority
Tuesday
·
Continue career module
·
Continue with multi-paragraph writing
·
Begin business letters
·
Pick vocab for the adjective clause
quiz
·
11:30 WOW presentation
Wednesday
·
Quiz#5- adjective clauses
·
Begin noun clause
·
Continue career module
·
Continue career module
·
Continue with multi-paragraph writing
·
Begin business letters
·
Thursday
·
Continue noun clause
·
Continue career module
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Friday
·
Quiz#6- noun clauses
·
Talk about replacement quiz and test
FINAL WEEK
Tuesday
·
Return quiz- noun clause
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Wednesday
·
Replacement quiz
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Thursday
·
Replacement test
Friday
·
Final essay
·
Final marks
Test #3- 150-200 word paragraph
I hope this is becoming routine for you. This
paragraph writing hopefully is becoming boring, comfortable, everyday work.
FORMAT
-
One block of writing
-
Double-spaced
-
Pen
-
Indent
CONTENT
- Begin
with a grabber (7 ways to choose from)
- Good
clear topic sentence that addresses the writing prompt (question) directly. There
must be no confusion about what you are writing about. PRO TIP: Use words from
the writing prompt, or use synonyms.
- 3-4
supporting ideas written into sentences
Balance
the supporting ideas
e.g Supporting point #1
subpoint
subpoint
Supporting
point #2
subpoint
subpoint
Supporting
point #3
subpoint
subpoint
Really clearly organized. The reader should be able
to follow easily.
Avoid disorganization of the ideas.
ESSENTIAL: Make a plan before you start to write.
Avoid writing of the top of your head. It often comes out in a jumble. Making a
plan will give you a structure to follow; it will also stimulate vocabulary.
vf- verb form
Did you experienced embarrassment when you were
a kid in school. vf
Did you experience embarrassment
when you were a kid in school.
Did you go to the party? Did you went to the party? Vf
The knowledge of verb form is shaky for many of
you. You have to learn. It is holding you back.
These are some of your example of sentences with
adjective clauses
from homework.
1.
Mary who was the best in class dropped
out from school.
Mary who was the best in class dropped
out of school.
Mary, who was the best in class,
dropped out of school.
2.
Gowan that golden retriever dog knows
a lot of tricks. RW
Gowan, that is a golden retriever, knows a lot of tricks. AWK
Gowan, who is a magician, knows a lot of tricks.
Gowan, a golden retriever, knows a lot
of tricks. APPOSITIVE
Gowan is a golden retriever that knows
a lot of tricks.
3.
My mom's old photo which is in my
wallet is missing.
which- special
4.
The first tobacco control policy was
released in Ottawa, which passed the smoking bylaw in Canada restricting
smoking indoors insince 1976. RW
The first tobacco bylaw which restricted
indoor smoking in Canada was passed in Ottawa in 1976.
*This is exactly what I do as an editor.
5.
Messi, who is a powerful football player,
won the Golden Ball.
6.
Tom has a leather wallet that his
grandfather gave him at his wedding.
Tom has a leather wallet that his
grandfather gave him as a wedding gift.
7.
A fridge is a cold machine appliance
that keeps my food fresh and cold.
8.
The queen has a diamond crown, which
the king gave her on their wedding anniversary.
9.
The horse that has a graceful tail
appears from the darkness.
10.
I am harvesting the vegetables that I
planted last spring.
11.
My sister, who is 40 years old, prefers
to stay in our village than to move to the city.
12.
My brother who my mother is proud of
is very lazy. MEANING?
My brother who my mother is proudest
of is very lazy.
13.
The woman that/who my uncle met acted
very strangely. That was a red flag.
red flag – sign of trouble
I realized that Joe lied about his job.
That was a red flag.
14.
The table which my dad made even since
1990. XXX
The table which my dad made in 1990 is
still in great shape.
15.
The guy who I love is very funny.
16.
Joe likes to collect coins that come
from different countries and years/time periods.
17.
Sinji who is a chief from Italia
is learning Taekwondo from a Korean.
Sinji who is a chef from Italy is
learning Taekwondo from a Korean teacher/instructor.
18.
I love the
jade necklace which my grandma gave (to) me when I was 7
year-old.
SOURCE OF CONFUSION
7 year-old XXX
when I was seven years old.
when I was a seven years old kid XXX
nouns modifying a noun
when I was a seven-year-old kid
No ‘s’. Link the words with hyphens.
This class is five weeks long.
This is a five weeks class. XXX
This is a five-week class.
Cheryl got a four dollars
specialty coffee. XXX
Cheryl got a four-dollar
specialty coffee.
Her specialty coffee cost four dollars.
19.
I prefer the cat that seems more
energetic.
20.
The woman in the yellow dress is
feeding the ducks that are near the edge of the pond.
21.
The lady who was talking to you in the
church is my aunt.
22.
The shoes that I’m planning to buy
are very expensive.
23.
The book which my conductor gave to me
is an old English vocabulary.
The book which my conductor gave to me
is in old English.
24.
The food that my brother made last
night was so very/quite/extremely/too spicy and salty.
25.
We visited the British Columbia
Parliament Buildings which is are in Victoria BC.
26.
I like the red Audi car which
is parking parked near the right corner of the sidewalk.
27.
Can I get the tool that is behind your
chair?
28.
I remember a great English teacher who
taught me English patiently after school.
Any language or culture is capitalized:
Mandarin, Swahili, Tagalog, Persian, Korean, Vietnamese, Dutch
29.
This fountain pen is unique for me
which was bought from my grandmother. XXX
This fountain pen
which was bought by my grandmother is special to me.
MISPLACED MODIFIER- adjective clause is in the
wrong place
The man saw a lost dog who was driving a
truck. MISPLACED MODIFIER
The man who was driving a truck saw a lost dog.
I gave a stool to my sister that has three
wooden legs. MISPLACED MODIFIER
I gave a stool that has three wooden legs
to my sister.
30.
That dirty blue pant is my work pant.
#
Those dirty blue pants are my work
pants. SIMPLE
31.
I lost a necklace that everyone
likes which I made many years ago. Two adj cl
32.
Although the antique desk lamp which
my grandmother gave me was broken, I still kept it in the storage room. adv
cl adj cl
33.
Most of the people who live in
Ted’s apartment are seniors; therefore, he tries not to make noise after he
goes home from work at midnight.
34.
The woman that/who Yin’s younger
brother married treated her mother-in-law badly.
Really good sentences. Top quality.
CAREER
MODULE
STEP 1
1. Do
the Holland Code Quiz
Rogue Community College
https://www.roguecc.edu/Counseling/HollandCodes/test.asp
Alternative career questionaire: TRUITY
https://www.truity.com/test/career-personality-profiler-test
Take the time to reflect, think deeply about the
questions.
Choose five suggested careers that might interest
you.
Email me a list of those careers by Monday at 3.
(2pts)
STEP2
2.Choose one of the careers that interests you.
Investigate aspects of that career-
1. Overview
of the scope of the job, what the job entails
2. Why
you are interested in it
3. What
training is required
4. What
are some job opportunities
5. What
are potential challenges
STEP 3
3.Written component (10 points)
Submit a multi-paragraph piece covering these
topics. (350 words approx)
OPTIONAL BONUS
Spoken component (5 points)
Prepare a 5-minute presentation on your chosen
career for the class. Distill the content of the written work into an oral
presentation for the class. You will be presenting the same information as your
written work.
*Do not read just the writing out loud. That is not
what this is about.*
ALTERNATIVE: Pretend interview. Role play.
Sign up your name on the sign up sheet. We will
probably do this Friday.
Essay work
sentences—paragraphs—essays – papers (5,10,20
pages) – thesis (80-120 pages) – book (300-600 pages)
** sentences- sentence types: simple, compound,
complex
** paragraphs – structure Grabber
Topic sentence
Supporting sentences,
Concluding sentence
(150-200 words)
- format -
font size, doublespace, indent, paper orientation
** essay -multi-paragraph writing, 3-5,6,7
paragraphs on a topic
“essay form” “in paragraphs” “multi-paragraph” –
means essay
essay- French “to try” , try to explain something
in full, attempt to describe a subject completely, endeavour to explicate an
idea
essay – an attempt to write a longer piece that
covers a topic well
From a paragraph to an essay- expand the paragraph
in to the essay.
Distribute photocopy
Model Paragraph #1 “Man’s Best Friend” OR “The
Benefits of Living Alone”
Model Essay #1 “Man’s Best Friend” OR “The Benefits
of Living Alone”
Model paragraph
Topic sentence
Body- supporting points
Supporting idea 1
-point
-subpoint
1
-subpoint
2
Supporting idea 2
-point
-subpoint
1 & subpoint 2
Supporting idea 3
-point
-subpoint
1
-subpoint
2
Concluding sentence- restate the topic sentence
(150-200ww)
*The writer chose to not start with a grabber.
Starting with a grabber is a good idea.
Possible grabbers: ask a question, short anecdote,
fact or statistic, history, etc.
**
An essay has three sections:
**
1. Introductory
paragraph – usually one paragraph, introduces the topic, thesis, and main
points of the essay
2. Body
paragraphs– usually several paragraphs- 2,3,4,5 paragraphs (3 is the magic
number for a standard five-paragraph), discussion, explanation, description of
the main points of the essay
3. Concluding
paragraph- usually one paragraph, restatement of the introduction, restates the
topic, thesis and main points, ends with a clincher (like a grabber only at the
end of the piece)
Length -300-350 words, not long, short compact
paragraphs, twice as long as one paragraph, not a book
***THESIS- Latin ‘idea’ theory, theoretical,
English 12 – paragraph – “at least 150 words”
-
essay – 5 paragraphs X 150=750 words, “at least 300 words”
**
The paragraphs in an essay have to be shorter than
the stand-alone paragraphs we have been doing.
**
essay- French “to try”, an attempt
Teach “The Bare Bones of a Five-Paragraph Academic
Essay”
Five-paragraph essay – most basic form, 3X5 essay,
academic essay, go-to model for essays, IKEA essay
PARAGRAPH begin
with a grabber (optional)
topic sentence
ESSAY Introductory
paragraph – expands on the paragraph,
- expands
the grabber and TS into s short paragraph
- Thesis
statement, thesis (idea)
3 Body paragraphs -
supporting points, each one will get a
short paragraph
Concluding
paragraph-
It is not necessary to write a concluding sentence
for each body paragraph. You are already stating the points in the Introductory
paragraph, the Body paragraphs, and the Concluding paragraph.
Essay writing is a balance of giving information
and repeating information.
*Essay is all about giving and restating
information*
REASSURANCE: With practice, this will become
routine. After you’ve written 10 essays, you will be able to do it in your
sleep.
A teacher will give reasonable topics in class.
“Explain how modern nuclear power plants are safer
than those built a generation ago.” Unreasonable topic
“Why did you choose to live in BC?” Reasonable
topic. EF6 level
“Explain why the US went off the Gold Standard in
1971.” Unreasonable topic
“How to Be a Good Friend.” Reasonable topic
As you move to higher coursework, more specified
levels of education, your essay topics will become more specialized.
CHALLENGE IN ESSAY WRITING: Vocabulary, depth of
vocabulary
Build vocabulary! It is good to have five or six
synonyms for common words.
https://www.thesaurus.com/
TEACH “The Benefits of Cycling”
How does it look on the page?
-five paragraphs
-paragraphs balanced in length
-introductory and concluding paragraphs are a bit
shorter, OK
Different modes of writing, writing for different
purposes, different intentions
“The Benefits of Cycling”- PERSUASIVE MODE
“How to Pass a Course at the Top of the Class”-
EXPOSITORY, PROCESS MODE (teach)
DESCRIPTIVE MODE
NARRATIVE MODE
I am teaching the most basic kind of essay.
It is basic but really effective.
This is like following a recipe.
When you get comfortable writing essays after 3-4.
6-7 tries, then you can get more creative and follow your own style. You can
choose the format that will work best for your subject matter.
The style that I am teaching is very basic and
clear. It is simple and ‘easy’ to do. You can get fancier with your essays
later.
There are lots of different kinds of essays.
I think about writing like cooking. A beginner
writer has to follow a recipe very closely. When you get some experience
cooking, you don’t need the recipe book anymore.
Plan first!
Then write.
You have to make a plan before you write.
An essay has to be organized.
If the essay is disorganized, I’m not going to take
time to figure it out.
CONTINUE TOMORROW
1.PREWRITING – planning your essay, making a little
plan to organize what you want to say in each paragraph in your essay
2.WRITING- actually writing the sentences and
paragraphs
Essay work-
Five-paragraph essays
essays “multi-paragraphs” “in a multi-paragraph essay” “in paragraphs”
five-paragraph essay- mother of all essays, IKEA
essay form
foundation of essay writing- you can learn
different essay forms later, next week – compare and contrast essay
Essay writing- lots of good guide books for essay
writing
ALL ESSAYS
Introductory paragraph
-Grabber
-TS Thesis Statement
-Predictor – gives an indication of what to be discussed
in the essay
Body paragraphs (for a five-paragraph essay, you
need three body paragraphs)
Body para#1
Topic sentence
Supporting points
Body para#2
Topic sentence
Supporting points
Body para#3
Topic sentence
Supporting points
Concluding paragraph
-Restatement
- Restate the Thesis statement
-Restate the 3 points
-End with a clincher*
*Clincher – fun, engaging sentence at the end of
the essay. connects with the reader
*No topic sentence? No paragraph.
(fiddle and violin- same instrument, different
genres- different types of music)
genre- type of book, type of music, type of movie
-former EF6 student
“How to Pass a Course at the Top of the Class”
How does it look on the page? Does it look like an
essay
- five
paragraphs
- lengths
are balanced, some length differences
Reading
Looking for the Thesis Statement. If not TS, then I
don’t want to read it.
-friendly, inviting tone
-well-organized, the path is clear
IDIOM teacher’s pet- a student who ingratiates
themselves with a teacher in an artificial way
Good writing- fluent, personal voice, strong voice,
good sentences, well-organized
MY TEACHING: , SOBA for compound sentence
She chose to use a casual, informal tone- in
keeping with her friendly tone:
So, you should be on time every day.
books laid out tidily- organized work space,
organized desk
Know your audience.
Writing for Bio12, use a more formal tone.
Writing a narrative essay, you can choose a more personal,
casual tone.
Three examples of five-paragraph essays:
1. Living
Alone essay
2. Bicycle
essay
3. Top
Student essay – Barbara’s
Let’s practice!
CHOOSE ONE TOPIC:
1.Why did you come to Vancouver?
2.What pieces of advice would you give to your
16-year-old self?
PROCESS:
A. Plan.
Brainstorm some ideas. Generate ideas. Generate vocabulary, key words.
Organize the ideas.
*PRO TIP: Make sure you have a clear Thesis
Statement in the Introductory paragraph. Make sure you hae clear Topic
Sentences in the Body paragraphs.
B. Start
to write.
Plan. Then write.
Secret to essay success.
PRO TIP: Do not begin by writing sentence. if you
are writing sentence already, you are on the wrong path.
Make a plan first.
Essay – 300-350 words (shorter paragraphs)
Introductory para
Body paragraphs
Concluding paragraph
1. job opportunities
2. access to nature
3. multicultural
Example Paragraph
There
are 10 wonderful provinces and three territories that you can choose to live in
in Canada. I moved to BC because of everything that this province has to offer.
First of all, there were work opportunities for me here, much more than in my
home province. Add AAA Secondly, I love being around nature, and BC has lots of
forest, ocean, and mountains to enjoy. Add BBB Finally, I like the
multicultural, multi-ethnic makeup of the province, such as restaurants,
festivals, and stores. Add CCC In essence, BC is my chosen home because it
offers so much.
Essay – five paragraphs, expand the paragraph to
five paragraphs
There are 10 wonderful provinces and three
territories that you can choose to live in in Canada. Each has its own
attractions. You could make a great life in any of them. However, in my opinion,
BC is special and stands out from the rest of them. I moved to BC because of
everything that this province has to offer. Namely, BC has many job
opportunities, access to wonderful nature, and rich multicultural experiences.
First of all, there were work opportunities for me
here, much more than in my home province. I wanted to go to grad school, and
UBC offered me work as a teaching assistant. After I graduated, I was able to
find work as a teacher quite easily. In my home province, there were very few
opportunities for good jobs. Blah blah blah
Secondly, I love being around nature, and BC has
lots of lots of forest, ocean, and mountains to enjoy. You can go hiking in the
Northshore Mountains. There are lots of parks to go camping. Also, blah blah
blah
Finally, I like the multicultural, multi-ethnic
makeup of the province, such as restaurants, festivals, and stores. When you
walk down the street, you hear a dozen languages being spoken. blah blah blah
In essence, BC is my chosen home because it offers so
much. BC has a lot of chances to get good meaningful employment. Also, it is
one of the most beautiful places on earth in terms of nature. Finally, BC has a
rich tapestry of ethnicities, languages, and cultures. BC is the place for me.
An essay gives you some room to breathe. Make sure
you have a plan before you begin to write.
Adjctive clause
Adjective clause
Basic level of knowledge
who- people
that- things, animals
which- special things, unique things
Deeper level
commas or no commas around adjective clauses
-commas – special, unique, only one- a good time to
use commas
SLIGHTLY DIFFERENT MEANINGS / MESSAGES
A. Dave’s
dog, that has white fur, loves to swim.
B. Dave’s
dog that has white fur loves to swim.
A. Dave’s
dog, that has white fur, loves to swim. Suggests that Dave has one dog.
B. Dave’s
dog that has white fur loves to swim. Suggests that Dave has more than one dog.
* detail, subtle, not a major problem if you get it
wrong
A. My car
that I bought at Richmond Auto Mall is a 2018.
B. My
car, that I bought at Richmond Auto Mall, is a 2018.
GRAMMAR: difference between main subject and
complete subject
main subject – just one noun, subject of the
sentence
complete subject
- main noun plus all the modifiers, subject of the sentence
A. My car
that I bought at Richmond Auto Mall is a 2018.
B. My
car, that I bought at Richmond Auto Mall, is a 2018.
complete subject
My car that I bought at Richmond Auto Mall is a
2018. suggests 2+ cars
My car, that I bought at Richmond Auto Mall, is a
2018. suggests 1 car
commas around an adjective clause means just extra
information
Look it up in a grammar book:
restrictive and non-restrictive clauses
OR
essential and non-essential clauses
Examples:
A. Her
son who is nine is very shy. essential
information, we need that information
B. Her
son, who is nine, is very shy. not essential, extra information
MEANING IS A BIT DIFFERENT
A. Her
son who is nine is very shy.
B. Her
son, who is nine, is very shy. Her son is very shy.
A. Her
son who is nine is very shy. How many sons?
B. Her
son, who is nine, is very shy. How many sons?
main subject complete subject
Her son who is nine is very shy. How many sons? 2+
Her son, who is nine, is very shy. How many sons? 1
Mohamed moved to Edmonton, which is the largest
city in Alberta.
comma or no comma? How many Edmontons are there?
which is the largest city in BC – extra information
Your school, which is at Fraser and 43rd, is
holding in-class classes. 1 school
Your school which is at Fraser and 43rd is holding
in-class classes. suggests 2+ schools eg. SHEC, VCC
Let’s meet at Starbucks. enough information?
Let’s meet at Starbucks which is on Main and 13th.
essential information
Let’s meet at SHEC, which is on Fraser and 43rd.
not essential information, extra
Your son is outgoing.
Your son, who is 7, is outgoing.
Your brother who is shy lives in Vancouver.
essential information, distinguish between them
My mom, who is 79, likes to walk everyday. one
mother
My mom who is 79 likes to walk everyday. two woman
who you consider your mothers
My uncle who is retired loves to fish. more than
one
speaking – commas are breath marks, take a beat,
slight pause
Let’s meet at Scienceworld, which is open right
now. not necessary information, just extra information, non-essential clause
** subtle difference – has meaning to an English
listener
*** If you get it wrong, it is a small problem.
Shirin’s mother, who is retired, likes to travel. 1
mother
Shirin’s mother who is retired likes to travel. 2+
mothers
MORE LIKELY EXAMPLE:
Shirin’s aunt who is retired likes to travel. 2+
aunts
REVIEW
A. My
sister who lives in Spain volunteers for a dog rescue society.
B. My
sister, who lives in Spain, volunteers for a dog rescue society.
A. How
many sisters do I have? One or more than one? suggest 2+
Subject is “My sister who lives in Spain”
The adjective clause is restricting the meaning of
‘sister’.
Grammar book: restrictive clause, essential clause
B. How
many sisters do I have? One or more than one? 1
Subject is “My sister”
The adjective clause is not restricting the meaning
of ‘sister’.
Grammar book: non-restrictive clause, non-essential
clause
I never met my grandmother who passed away five
years ago. several GMs
I never met my maternal/paternal grandmother who
passed away five years ago.
I never met my paternal grandmother. I knew my
maternal grandmother very well.
maternal(adj) maternity(n) maternity ward, mat
leave
matriarch- head woman in the family, the boss woman
in the family
My wife wears the pants in the family.
IDIOM ‘wear the pants’ boss in the family
She has the last word.
IDIOM ‘have the last word’- you get final decision,
last one to talk
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