Tuesday, 19 July 2022

Eng 10 11 SUMMER 12 class- parallelism

 

Good morning.

We will get started at 8:30.

 

Today’s Agenda:

·      Quiz#4 adverb clauses

·      “Parallelism” from homework

·      Quoting text

·      Begin “Dead Man’s Path”

·      HW   Prepare for Test#3 on Thursday – “I Confess” and “Dead

Man’s Path”

 

Wednesday

·      Continue parallelism

·      Continue quoting text

·      Begin adjective clauses

·      Finish “Dead Man’s Path”

·      Prepare for Test#3 on Thursday – “I Confess” and “Dead

Man’s Path”

·       

 

Thursday

·      Continue parallelism – more challenging

·      Continue adjective clauses

·      Test#3 “I Confess” and “Dead Man’s Path”

 

Friday

·      Continue parallelism – more challenging

·      Continue adjective clauses

·       

 

 

 

***NOTE***

I started assigning spoken marks for the first half of the course. The first spoken mark is out of 5. Usually it is either 5/5, 3/5, 1/5, 0/5.

I will assign the second spoken mark in the final week.

You can check your marks with me at any time. I would love to be able to share them with you via email; sadly, the school software will not allow me to do that. I can show you your marks on my computer any time.

 

Quiz#4

Write a complex sentence with an adjective clause for each.

Submit it to me by 9am. No lates.

1.    although    monitor

2.    because     recently

3.    so that        decorate

4.    since           interrupt

5.    even if        reimburse

6.    while           pupil

 

In the final week, I will give everyone an opportunity to replace one quiz and one test. You can choose one quiz and/or on test that you are not satisfied with or that you missed. I will give a new quiz and/or test to replace that one. This will be optional. I will talk more about this in detail later.

Scenario

Q1 2/6 4/6 1/6

Q2 4/6

Q3 3/6

Q4 5/6

Q5 6/6

SCENARIO#1 Opt to replace Q1. Replacement quiz 4/6

SCENARIO#2 Opt to replace Q1. Replacement quiz 1/6

 

IDIOM You have nothing to lose. Try it.

 

 

 

 

Parallelism

 

parallel- geometry term, two lines that never cross

grammar/sentences- words in a series, same kind of word

 

Parallelism is a higher-level aspect of writing style. Parallelism means using words and phrases that are similar or in structure or form. This technique adds symmetry, strength, and balance to your writing.

Words, phrases, and clauses have to go together, just like clothes. If they don’t go together well, they clash. When your writing clashes with itself, readers lose confidence in you. When they lose confidence in you, they stop reading.

Make sure lists of words, series of phrases match within your sentences:

1.       word forms for words in a series. Adjectives go with adjectives, nouns go with nouns, verbs go with verbs- INCLUDING TENSE! This is also true for adjective/noun combinations.

2.       prepositional phrases

3.       clauses. Independent clauses in compound sentences often

sound better when they are parallel.

This is style more than grammar.

 

A few examples of parallelism within sentences:

1.       You need to work quickly and decisively.

2.       Like father, like son. Like mother, like daughter.

3.       This is not only just what I wanted, but also just what I needed.

4.       Congress needs to either reduce spending or raise taxes.

5.       She is sneaky and manipulative.

6.       In the parade the Boy Scouts presented the colors, the band marched, and the mayor rode in a convertible. SV, SV, and SV

7.       Your mother was very busy gathering the laundry, dusting the furniture, and washing the dishes. Gerunds gathering dusting washing

8.       To survive, you need water, food and shelter. noun, noun, and noun

 

EASIER EXERCISES

1.       The understudy had bright green eyes, a great mass of blonde hair, and her face was red a red face.

2.       When winter comes, the Joneses will have to find either a warmer house or they will have to find a wood stove.

3.       When Moe was in high school, his parents spent a good deal of time not only helping him with his homework assignments but also they participated with him participating with him in school activities.

4.       It is better to be happy than being to be sad.

5.       The word for left means "deceitful" in Italian, "awkward " in German, "malicious" in Spanish, and Russians define its meaning as "sneaky." “sneaky” in Russian.

 

French ‘gauche’ ‘gauche’ crude unsophisticated, show wealth in a flashy way

Italian ‘sinastre” ‘sinister’ evil, devil

Left-handed (adj)  That’s a left-handed idea.  crazy idea

discrimination

 

6.       The contract was illegible, lengthy, and it is awkward.

7.       To think that you can do anything is deceiving yourself.

infinitives or gerunds

To think that you can do anything is to deceive yourself.

Thinking that you can do anything is deceiving yourself.

Wrong message to send to children.

 

8.       Aspiring actors go to Hollywood to become stars and because they want to make money.

Aspiring actors go to Hollywood to become stars and to make money.

Aspiring actors go to Hollywood because they want to become stars

and because they want to make money. parallel – slightly overwritten, a lot of REP

Aspiring actors go to Hollywood because they want to become stars

and because they want to make money.

 

9.       The tourists amused themselves by playing shuffleboard, watching plays, and they went going to trendy restaurants in the center of the city.

The tourists amused themselves by playing shuffleboard, watching plays, and going to trendy restaurants in the center of the city.

Gerunds- playing watching going

 

10.     Before you order anything, you should not only check with the purchasing agent but also the comptroller.

Before you order anything, you should check not only with the

purchasing agent but also with the comptroller.

 

High-level decisions.

 

11.     The radiologist examined the MRI both carefully and with competence.

The radiologist examined the MRI carefully and competently.

 

This is writing, going through each sentence to make sure it is

not only grammatically correct but also parallel.

Try the rest for homework. Email me a few by 3.

Quotation marks   

·      Uses of quotation marks      1.titles

2.reported speech

3.irony, ironic finger quotes (for talking, casual)

4. borrow words from a text

 

1.    titles – short story, chapter in a book, magazine article, newspaper article, part of a book, not a whole book

“I Confess”
In the story “I Confess”, a main conflict is the person vs person conflict between Mr. Wei, the teacher, and Wang Wei, the student.

 

novel, book by itself, has its own covers

Choice: Impact  OR Impact  (Ctrl i)

Ddhdhjdjdfjdf  ddjdjdjdj

writing with a pen Impact

writing on computer Impact    italics

Impact   ctrl+i

In the novel He Came to Set the Captives Free, the theme of ….

In the novel He Came to Set the Captives Free, the theme of ….

 

“The Sniper”   “Charles” titles of short stories

 

<<Impact>>  Not English

<<The Sniper>> NOT ENGLISH  “The Sniper”

Math   5>4 greater than   4<6 lesser than

> alligator’s mouth   The alligator always eats the bigger number.

 

     usually double quotation marks, not single ‘ 

 

e.g. The class really enjoyed reading Animal Farm. The class really enjoyed reading “Roses Sing on New Snow”.

Luis is reading a book called Two Pieces of Clothes. computer

Luis is reading a book called Two Pieces of Clothes. handwriting

Charlotte’s Web  is a very popular kids’ book.  

 

“Animal Farm”   XXX, not both, just one or the other

either belt or suspenders

IDIOM He is a belt and suspenders kind of person.

 

kids’ book  - ‘  apostrophe, shows possession

 

Joe’s new bicycle is pretty rad/cool.

Joe’s sister’s bike is also really nice. one sister

Joe’s sisters’ bikes are also really nice. two sister, three sisters

 

The student’s writing is improving. 1 person

The students’ writing is improving. all of them

Is the noun singular or plural. Put the apostrophe after the word.

 

The dogs’ leashes got tangled.

 

punctuation – umbrella term – comma, period, apostrophe, semicolon, colon, exclamation point, quotation mark, hyphen, dash

 

Jun read an article in The Vancouver Sun called “What does Putin Want?”.

Jun read an article in The Vancouver Sun called “The Future for Ukraine”.

 

Good Food has an article called “Old-Fashioned Apple Pie”.

Good Food has an article called “Old-Fashioned Apple Pie”.

 

bold- not necessary, used for visual effects

bald

 

 

 

 

2.    reported speech, direct speech- exact words that someone says, quote, quotation

Mary said, “I am going to be late today.”

You said, “I will pick up the kids.”

 

indirect speech

Mary said that she will be late today. noun clause

She said that would be fine. noun clause

 

She said, “That will be fine.”

She said that that would be fine.

 

 

FURTHER INSTRUCTION ON QUOTING DIRECT AND INDIRECT SPEECH:

https://owl.purdue.edu/owl/general_writing/punctuation/quotation_marks/index.html

 

CONFUSION

Mary said that she is going to be late today. indirect speech, noun clause

 

COMMON ERROR

Mary said that I am going to be late today.

FIXES

Mary said that she is going to be late today. noun clause indirect

Mary said, “I am going to be late today.” direct

 

ERROR My mother said that you should do your homework. Who is ‘you’?

FIXED My mother said to me, “You should do your homework.” direct

FIXED My mother said that I should do my homework. indirect

 

My daughter said, “Let’s go to the pet store.” DIRECT SPEECH

My daughter said that we should go to the pet store. INDIRECT SPEECH

that we should go to the pet store - noun clause

 

let’s – let us

 

 

3.    irony, finger quotes- informal, speaking

three kinds of irony –

 

1. verbal irony – say something but mean the opposite,

not hurtful, gentle humour

 

sarcasm- meant to hurt someone, rough humour, biting humour

He is a sarcastic person.

 

SPOKEN Joan went to a party last night. She missed work today because she is “sick”. She has the “party flu.” She is hungover. She has a hangover.

a hangover- headache, dehydration, and nausea from drinking too much the night before

 

2. dramatic irony – you know something that the character

in the book or movie doesn’t know

 

3. situational irony- you try to do something to help someone but you wind up hurting them, you get the opposite result from what you intended

 

IDIOM  wind up – what happens in the end

“Dora wanted to move to Chicago, but she wound up going to Toronto.”

“Sue is studying business in college. She will probably wind up being a manager in a company.”

 

 

proposterous (adj) – ridiculous, outrageous

 

 

MOST IMPORTANT FOR US

4.    borrowing words from a story , putting them into your paragraph,

essay

Borrow words from a text. Incorporate the words into our writing. Include the words in our sentence.

 

For example.

Peking duck- definition writing

 

PLAGIARIZED  plagiarism

Peking duck is a dish from Beijing (Peking)[1] that has been prepared since the Imperial era. The meat is characterized by its thin, crispy skin, with authentic versions of the dish serving mostly the skin and little meat, sliced in front of the diners by the cook. Ducks bred especially for the dish are slaughtered after 65 days and seasoned before being roasted in a closed or hung oven. The meat is often eaten with spring onioncucumber and sweet bean sauce with pancakes rolled around the fillings. Sometimes pickled radish is also inside. Crispy aromatic duck is a similar dish to Peking duck and is popular in the United Kingdom.

 

Peking duck is well-known for its tasty flavours and “thin, crispy skin”

(Wikipedia.com). It is a very popular dish in China.

 

“Ducks bred especially for the dish are slaughtered after 65 days and seasoned before being roasted in a closed or hung oven.”

NO GOOD, TOO LONG, NOT INCORPORATED INTO YOUR WRITING

 

Quote only a few words at a time- 1,2,3,4 words

 

citation – showing where the borrowed words come from

 

Plagiarism – copying someone else’s words and claiming that you wrote them

          -stealing intellectual property

 

Often easy to detect.

 

 

Use other people’s words the right way- “ “ citation

 

How to Prepare to use Quotations in School Writing:

Second reading:

1 Read the story/ text.

2 Underline good words and phrases that you may want to use as quotations.

3 When you write your paragraph or essay, you can sprinkle in quoted words and phrases.

sprinkle – a little bit

 

When should I quote a word?

Why am I using this word? Is it a word that I use on my own, or am I borrowing it from the story? You have to make a judgement call.

 

 

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