Good morning.
We will get started at
8:30.
Today’s Agenda:
· Return Replacement Test- paragraph
· Begin sentence combining, Student examples from
homework
· Appositives
· Review compare and contrast essay in preparation for
tomorrow Essay#2
Tuesday
· Final
Essay, Essay #2- Compare Contrast Essay
On Tuesday night, I will do all the marking
and get your final marks and reports finished.
I will not mark your essay the same way as the
other tests. I will read it and put a mark on it. If you want a marked essay
with comments like usual, please find me in the summer. I will mark your essay
in detail and give it to you. Deadline:
July 18th.
Wednesday, June 29
· No
instruction
· Marks
day, final reports
If you are here, we talk about the term and
how things went. If not, send me an email and I will email you back your final
grade.
These are some of your sentence combining solutions
from homework:
1.
His mind screamd
one repeated thought that “what am I doing here?”
His mind
screamed one repeated thought which was “What am I doing here?”.
His mind
screamed one repeated thought: “What am I doing here?”.
colon : list or explanation
Maria is
taking two classes: English 12 and Chemistry 11.
Dave has
three kids: two girls and a boy.
2.
Far below was the
parking lot, and the car windows glinted in the sun. COMPOUND
3.
Max squeezed his
eyes shut; in the same way, Max wished he’d never accepted the dare.
Max squeezed
his eyes shut; at the same time, he wished he’d never accepted the dare.
4.
His boss who was
a hardworking women had praised his efforts.
His boss,
who was a hardworking woman, had praised his efforts.
man men
woman women
child children
5.
His boss, a
hardworking women, had praised his efforts.
His boss, a
hardworking woman, had praised his efforts.
, noun, APPOSITIVE – descriptor, not SV, just a noun
My sister,
who is named Kathy, lives in Spain. ADJ CL
My sister, Kathy,
lives in Spain. APPOSITIVE
Kathy, who
is my sister, lives in Spain. ADJ CL
Kathy, my
sister, lives in Spain. APPOSITIVE
Michael’s
home country, China, is a huge economic power in the world.
6.
When he said that
there must be some mistake, she just smiled and assured him otherwise.
I assure that you your car
will be ready by 3pm.
assure- reassure(v) – comfort,
alleviate doubt, put someone at ease
assurance(n)
7.
Tony liked the
extra money, but the recognition which acknowledged his efforts pleased him
even more.
recognize- acknowledge(v)
recognition- acknowledgement(n)
I acknowledge that I made a
mistake.
1.
Acknowledgment
The staff of South Hill Education Centre acknowledge(s)
that we live, learn, work and play on the unceded and traditional territories
of the Coast Salish peoples – sḵwx̱wú7mesh (Squamish), sel̓Ãl̓witulh
(Tsleil-Waututh), and xÊ·məθkÊ·É™y̓É™m (Musqueam) nations.
8.
Considering maybe
his attitude and effort really mattered, his job could be more than a meal
ticket. WEAK STRUCTURE
Where is the
subject?
9.
When the moment
of truth arrived, Max had felt a raw panic.
Sarah had a panic attack.(n)
Sarah felt panicky.(a)
She panicked when she was doing
her driving test.(v)
10.
When he stood atop
of atop the bungee tower, he felt as if he had a jackhammer in his chest.
on top of
the bungee tower
atop – prep-
rarely used on top of
11.
When While the traffic streamed by on the highway,
a small plane droned in the distance. SIMPLE PAST
While the
traffic was streaming by on the highway, a small plane was droning
in the distance. PAST CONTINUOUS/PROGRESSIVE
drone(v)-
made a low monotonous sound
Mei went out
on a date, and the person droned on and on about themself.
12.
Then suddenly he
was weightless and falling headlong toward the earth.
headlong(prep)- rarely used- headfirst
The kid dove headfirst off
the high diving board.
13.
He had gotten a
raise because he had worked hard, but the raise was unexpected. SHORTEN
He had
gotten an unexpected raise because he had worked hard.
He had
gotten a raise because he had worked hard, which was unexpected.
raise- every
paycheck extra $
bonus-
one-time extra $
performance
bonus, Christmas bonus
holiday bonus
14.
The paycheck
contained a small bonus, but it has worthwhile after she had handed him a
paycheck. RW
After she
had handed him his paycheck, he saw that it contained a small but worthwhile bonus.
She is a shy
but sporty kid.
Math 12 is a hard but interesting class.
Vancouver is
beautiful but very expensive city.
expansive –
huge, very large
reward- you do a nice thing
for a stranger, they give you a small gift, token of their thankfulness
token- small symbolic item, gesture
or gift
podium – medal, award ceremony
reward/award NOT THE SAME
Doris got a reward when she
returned a lost dog.
Mavis got an award for her
community work.
15.
Tony liked the
extra money when the recognition acknowledged his efforts so he was pleased
even more. RW
Tony
liked the extra money, but the recognition of his efforts pleased him even
more.
16.
Max felt raw
panic when the moment of truth had arrived.
moment
of truth- important moment when you have to make a decision
Yes
or no?!
EXPRESSION
FROM NOVA SCOTIA It’s time to fish or cut bait.
17.
Traffic streamed
by on the highway while a small plane droned in the distance. NICE COMPACT
CONCISE COMPLEX
18.
He was suddenly
weightless and falling headlong toward earth. SIMPLE ELEGANT
19.
Max wished he'd
never accepted the dare; however, he squeezed his eyes shut and make
the dare.
Max squeezed
his eyes shut and wished he'd never accepted the dare.
dare(n)(v)-
challenge
Two kids: I
dare you to eat that worm. I double dare you.
Greta Thunberg:
How dare you!
20.
Car windows
glinted in the sun, and far below was the parking lot.
21.
He felt a
jackhammer in his chest when he stood atop the bungee tower.
jackhammer(n)- machine for
digging up concrete, cement, asphalt
Comparison and Contrast Essay
-
multi-paragraph format
Five–Paragraph Essay
– most basic model
Introductory
paragraph
Body paragraphs
Concluding
paragraph
Comparison and Contrast Essay
CC – refinement of the basic IKEA, stock,
go-to 5-pargraph model
Comparison and or Contrast Essay
Decide what you want to do.
compare(v)- find similarities, similar traits,
attributes
contrast(v)-find differences, dissimilarities,
dissimilar traits
Don’t do both.
Two ways to organize CC essay
Block (One side at a time)- one paragraph for
each subject to be compared or contrasted
Point by point- deal with both subject at the same
time, attribute by attribute
Compare or contrast –
Beijing // Vancouver
Compare or contrast?
contrast
-language?
-culture (HUGE)
-life (HUGE)
-tourist attractions
*-access to natural spaces within the city-
trees, parks, grass
close to the ocean and mountains
*-traffic, public transit – convenience, cost,
speed, policy around cars
*-population, crowds-
*building differences-
*air quality, pollution
Right to Die, Euthanasia – Contrast two opinions
Pro or Con, For or Against
Normally – compare or contrast two different
but related things
PLANNING
BLOCK (ONE SIDE AT A TIME)
Introduction
Body #1 BEIJING
BODY #2 VANCOUVER
Concluding paragraph
POINT BY POINT
Intro
Body#1- access to nature
Body#2-public transportation, traffic
Body#3 – size, population
Body#4- building differences, housing
Conclusion
Intro para
-Grabber
-Thesis statement
-Preview
I
have had the pleasure of living in two wonderful major world-class cities: Beijing,
China and Vancouver, Canada. Although I love them both, they are very different
in several important ways. A few of the key differences are access to nature,
public transit, population, and housing.
Clear. Well-organized. Makes sense.
5.8/6
