EF56 CW567
Good morning, everyone.
We will get started at 9:15.
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Today’s agenda:
ultimate - last, best
penultimate – 2nd last, 2nd best, second
last, second best
Today is our penultimate class.
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Sentence combining work
Distribute Sentence Combining Sheets
3,4,5,6 for your extra practice
·
Final paragraph Test#6
general topic, not specifically about short
stories
Last hour of class
Friday- Last day of the course
·
Marks day
·
No instruction
·
Get final marks, etc.
The marks on Friday will be unofficial. I will submit my
marks to the office on Friday afternoon. The official marks will be in the
system by next week.
Next week is a term break. We will be back on Monday,
November 14th.
Sentence Combining Sheet 2
Sentence combining – taking several short sentences, condense them
into one dense but concise sentence
dense but concise – dense – a lot of meaning
-concise
– as short as possible
balance of competing impulses-
dense, but not too dense
short, but not too short
Big challenge – having a feel for style
How does the sentence feel? Does it feel too long? Does it
feel too short? Does it feel too heavy withe information? Does it feel insubstantial?
These are always the question in my mind.
-beyond just grammar- this is about style and feel
The next steps for many of us, after we have mastered the grammar.
Sheet 2
1.
a. David and Peter went on a camping trip.
b. They went to the White Mountains in
New Hampshire.
c. They went in
June.
first impression 1. lots of prepositional phrases
What kind of sentence do I want to write? gut reaction
SIMPLE COMPOUND COMPLEX
David and Peter went on a camping trip.
They went to the White Mountains in New Hampshire.
They went in June.
David and Peter went on a camping trip to the
White Mountains in New Hampshire in June. SSV
move prep phrases around
e.g. In June, David and Peter went on a camping trip
to the White Mountains in New Hampshire.
In June, David and Peter went to the White
Mountains in New Hampshire on a camping trip.
Good for UBC.
2.
a. They checked all their equipment.
b. They got into their car for the long ride
to the mountains.
SIMPLE COMPOUND COMPLEX- adv cl
POSSIBLE SOLUTIONS
After they checked all their equipment, they got into their
car for the long ride to the mountains.
They got into their car for the long ride to the mountains after
they checked all their equipment.
They checked all their equipment before they got into their
car for the long ride to the mountains.
Before they got into their car for the long ride to the
mountains, they checked all their equipment.
NEW STYLE: substitute SV in ADV CL with a gerund
After they checked checking all their equipment,
they got into their car for the long ride to the mountains.
They got into their car for the long ride to the mountains after
they checked checking all their equipment.
They checked all their equipment before they got getting
into their car for the long ride to the mountains. AUTHENTIC-SOUNDING
ENGLISH
Before getting into their car for the long ride to the
mountains, they checked all their equipment.
Use this model for other sentences.
After I came to Canada, I started to learn more English.
After coming to Canada, I started to learn more English.
I was very happy after meeting my old friend.
I was very happy after I met my old friend.
After talking with my doctor, I decided to quit
smoking.
5. a.They crawled
into their sleeping bags at sunset.
b.They became nervous.
c.They began
to hear animal noises.
SIMPLE COMPOUND COMPLEX?
They crawled into their sleeping bags at sunset, and
became nervous
began to hear animal noises
SIMPLE
They crawled into their sleeping bags at sunset, became
nervous, and
began to hear animal noises.
They crawled into their sleeping bags at sunset, began to
hear animal noises, and became nervous. BETTER
SIMPLE
COMPOUND
They crawled into their sleeping bags at sunset and began to
hear animal noises; therefore, they became nervous.
COMPLEX
They crawled into their sleeping bags at sunset after beginning
to hear animal noises; then they became nervous.
After crawling into their sleeping bags at sunset, they became
nervous because they began to hear animal noises.
You can decide which one you like best.
- just like shopping for clothes
9. a.They began
the climb
b.It started to
rain.
c.They decided
to go home.
SIMPLE? COMPOUND? COMPLEX?
COMPOUND
They began the climb, and it started to rain, so they decided
to go home.
SV, SOBA, SV, SOBA SV. – not great style
They began the climb, and it started to rain; therefore, they
decided to go home.
COMPOUND-COMPLEX
When/As they began the climb, it started to rain, so they
decided to go home.
After they began the climb, it started to rain, so they decided
to go home.
After beginning the climb, it started to rain raining,
so they decided to go home. parallel
Final Paragraph Test#6
What are the benefits of having high-level English skills?
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