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Sentence combining from homework
Some of your examples from homework
1. The object has
many flat sides, but appears rounded with a diameter that measures about 1/8
inch.
2. The body of the
object appears to be made of wood while the inside is made of lead.
3. The inside of the
object is actually made of lead, but the body appears to be made of wood.
4. The longer you
use the object, the shorter and duller it gets.
5. The object is
often used by students, artists and office workers.
6.
-
It comes in many colors outside and inside; usually, the outside
is yellow and the inside is grayish black.
-
It comes in many colors outside and inside, but the outside is
usually yellow and the inside is usually grayish black.
-
It comes in many colors outside and inside; while the outside is
yellow, the inside is grayish black.
7.
-
The top of the object that is made of rubber has an aluminum band
around it, but the bottom of it comes to a sharp point.
-
While the top of the object made of rubber with an aluminum band
around it, the bottom of it comes to a sharp point.
8.
-
The body of the object appears to be made of wood, but the inside
of it is actually made of lead.
-
While the body of the object appears to be made of wood, the
inside of it is actually made of lead.
9.
-
The object is often used by students, artists and office workers.
10.
3) There is often writing along the outside of the object and a
number such as a 2 or 3.
11.
4) The top of the object is made of rubber, and it has an aluminum
band around it with the bottom comes to a sharp point.
12.
It comes in many colors outside and many colors inside, but
usually is yellow outside while inside is grayish black.
13.
There is often writing and number along the outside of the object,
such as a 2 or a 3.
14.
The object has many flat sides,but it appears rounded with a
diameter that measures about 1/8 inch.
15.
The top of the object is made of rubber with an aluminum band
around it, and the bottom of it comes to a sharp point.
16.
The object that looks long and thin measures about 8 inches in
length.
17.
The object has many flat sides, but it appears rounded with a diameter that measures about 1/8 inch.
18.
It comes in many colors outside and inside, but usually the
outside is yellow, and the inside is grayish black.
19.
The object is often used by students, artists, and office workers.
20.
It comes in many colors outside and inside, but usually the
outside is yellow and/while the inside is grayish black.
21.
There is often writing and a number, which is often a 2 or a 3, along
the outside of the object.
22.
The top of the object is made of rubber with an aluminum band
around it, and the bottom comes to a sharp point.
23.
The object has many flat sides, but it appears rounded with a
diameter that measures about 1/8 inch.
24.
There is often writing along the outside and a number which is
often a 2 or 3 along the outside of the object.
25.
The object is often used by students, artists, and office workers.
CHOICE:
The
object is often used by students, artists, and office workers.
The
object is often used by students, artists and office workers.
A, B,
and C -optional comma, Oxford comma-
a bit old-fashioned
A, B
and C -more modern looking
A; B;
C XXX
; SV
EXAMPLE:
The object is often used by the artist students and the
office workers. art
A , and
B XXX
A and
B
A, B,
and C optional Oxford comma
She plays
a lot of sports. She likes basketball, soccer, football, hockey, etc.
etc- et cetera (Latin) and others
She
likes basketball, soccer, football, hockey ...... (Chinese punc, not English)
CHOICES
for etc
She
likes basketball, soccer, football, hockey, etc.
She
likes basketball, soccer, football, hockey, and so on.
She
likes basketball, soccer, football, and hockey, among others.
Yan
has visited China, Japan, and Canada, among other countries.
MORE
LATIN THAT WE USE IN ENGLISH:
e.g. examplia gratis free
example
We
have lots of nice parks in Vancouver, e.g. Stanley Park, QE Park, Central Park,
etc.
i.e. id est
that is
I
love Canadas’ national sport, i.e hockey.
am - morning,
before noon ante meridian- before
halfway
pm –
after noon, before midnight post meridian
– after halfway
meridian
- halfway
evening
– around sunset, early evening, late evening
Really
good sentences. Good enough for any levels.
- grabs
the reader’s attention, hooks your reader
-optional
attention-getting device for writing
-makes
them pay attention, makes them want to read your writing
MY
ADVICE: Use a grabber. It will make your writing way more interesting.
- for
paragraphs, for essays
Some example of grabbers
1. -general to specific
statement, funnel
-say something big and general, then narrow it down to
specific topic
funnel
\ /
||
People
often fear what they do not understand. In “The Wise Woman of Cordoba”, the
protagaoist is put in jail because she is misunderstood and feared.
2. -short anecdote
short personal story, very short (1-2 short sentences)
personalizes, first person
I was a kid, I used
to be afraid of witches.
3. -historical reference
Throughout
history, woman have usually been in less powerful positions than men.
In
the Middle Ages, thousands of women and some men were hunted and persecuted for
being witches.
persecuted(v) – to be treated unfairly
prosecuted(v)- taken to a court for trial
4. -fact or statistic
80%,
four out of five, 2/3 of ..., 37,000,000 people...
Living creatures cannot survive for more
than a few hours if their core temperature drops and they become hypothermic.
TOPIC SENTENCE
5. question (answered by
thesis statement)
Do
you believe in witches? Do you think that powerful woman are dangerous? Follow
with TS
6. -relevant quotation by a
famous person
Barack
Obama once said, “Blah blah blah.”
My mother
said, “Blah blah blah.”
Buddha
said, “Life is suffering. We must have empathy for all living creatures.”
** PRO TIP
Books of quotations.- Have some quotations in your memory. It
is very helpful to reference when you are writing.
7. -relevant
idiom from any language, proverb, saying
-don’t translate well,
have a lot of meaning
In Chinese, we say that a good job is like a ‘golden rice
bowl.’
In Persian, we say...
There is a saying in Japanese: ‘Even monkeys fall from
trees.’ It means everyone makes mistakes. It’s important to keep going after
you did something wrong.
REVIEW
of ways to do grabbers/hooks:
1.
funnel
2.
anecdote
3.
historical
4.
fact/statistic
5.
question
6.
quotation
7.
idiom/saying
Choose
one. it will make your paragraph or essay livelier.
MY ADVICE: Write the grabber last. You can mull it over as
you are writing the rough draft.
IDIOM mull it over = think it over I mulled it over all night and made a
decision in the morning.
IDIOM sleep on it I want to sleep on it. I’ll make a decision
tomorrow.
Q. What class do want to take next term.
A. I can’t decide right now. Can I sleep on it? I’ll let you
know tomorrow.
Ok. Let me know, ASAP. as soon as possible
Text
LOL – laugh out loud
IMO- in my opinion
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