EF6 July 25

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Agenda

1. Review paragraph

my marking - less grammar correction, don’t that enough

- for grammar, refer to your earlier work – same errors and problems that tend to persist until they are dealt with

e.g vt verb tense, vf verb form, punc, cap, phrasing

- read your paragraph, engage with your ideas, what you are saying

What I’m looking for:

1. Format -what the paragraph looks like on the page

-font 14-16 pt font

-indent

-left justify

-doublespace

2. Structure

-Begin with a topic sentence

supporting sentences

concluding sentence

Sentences – simple, compound, complex – every time, every one!

Length – 150-200w approximately

90w – too short

600w – too long

140w -ok

210w – ok

e.g. What is one conflict in your life?

topic sentence addresses the question directly, usually first sentence

Grabber and Topic sentence “We all have conflicts in our life. For me, the biggest conflict in my life is a person vs person conflict between me and my father.”

- supporting sentences

If you don’t have a topic sentence, then your paragraph has no direction.

“My father controls everything in my life. He has always don’t this. He doesn’t like to listen to me opinion”

-writing and writing with no direction

topic sentence shows the direction of the paragraph

2. Comma splices

3. “The Wise Woman of Cordoba“

Quotations “ “

4. Quiz on adjective clauses

Writing about “Wise Woman (paragraph with “   “) to pass on Monday.

 Comma splices – check your email

e.g. I completed my essay, I have not submitted it. two independent clauses

1 I completed my essay

2 I have not submitted it

seperated with a comma, comma is not strong enough

I completed my essay, I have not submitted it. CS comma splice

two independent clauses What kind of sentence is that? compound

, SOBA ; ;TRANS

PROBLEM: I completed my essay, I have not submitted it. CS

SOLUTIONS: I completed my essay, but I have not submitted it.

I completed my essay; I have not submitted it.

I completed my essay; however, I have not submitted it.

CS – comma splices

I come from Venezuela, I have lived in Canada for one year, I like is here, Vancouver is nice. CS

 I come from Venezuela, and I have lived in Canada for one year. I like is here because Vancouver is nice.

Comma Splice Exercises

Fix the sentences that need to be fixed.

1. I love eating durian, it is one of my favourite things.

I love eating durian because it is one of my favourite things.

I love eating durian; in fact, it is one of my favourite things.

Good enough for UBC.

2. We had a good lunch on the patio, we enjoyed a lovely stroll along the beach.

We had a good lunch on the patio, and we enjoyed a lovely stroll along the beach. 

We had a good lunch on the patio; then we enjoyed a lovely stroll along the beach. 

then – special word no comma Why? I don’t know. small detail

We had a good lunch on the patio before we enjoyed a lovely stroll along the beach. 

After we had a good lunch on the patio, we enjoyed a lovely stroll along the beach.

We had a good lunch on the patio before enjoying a lovely stroll along the beach. 

After having a good lunch on the patio, we enjoyed a lovely stroll along the beach.

We had a good lunch on the patio. We enjoyed a lovely stroll along the beach.

3. There are many reasons to visit Greece, the beaches are beautiful and the people are friendly.

There are many reasons to visit Greece; for example, the beaches are beautiful and the people are friendly.

There are many reasons to visit Greece, which has beautiful beaches and friendly people. non-essential clause

There are many reasons to visit Greece. For example, the beaches are beautiful; in addition, the people are friendly.

4. I'll never be able to buy a house, prices these days are just ridiculous. 

5. I can not afford a house in Vancouver, so I am moving to Hope. 

6. This is a delicious cake, you must give me the recipe one day. 

7. I'm not surprised the residents were upset, the repair bills are going to be astronomical.

8. Hungary is an interesting country, the churches contain some of the finest frescoes found anywhere in Europe.

9. I dreamt I was eating the world’s largest marshmallow, now my pillow is gone.

Using quoted material in our writing “  “

Avoid plagiarism!

borrow words or a phrase from a text

There are many reasons to visit Greece; for example, the beaches are beautiful, and the water is known all around the world for being “crystal clean and clear” (visitgreece.gr). Also, the people are friendly.

“The Wise Woman of Cordoba”

Free Advice #6: Read the story twice - once to get setting, character and plot

-second to put deeper meaning (symbol, theme) and also words to quote “   “

Describe the Wise Woman.

sentence – “She was a very beautiful woman who had “strange black eyes”. Also, she … blah blah blah”

Quote just a few words (1,2,3 words), Incorporate them into your sentence.

Your examples:

1. She could fly “above the rooftops”.

2. She could fly “above the rooftops”, so people knew that she had special powers.

3. The Wise Woman of Cordoba liked to use “her magic powers” to help the poor.

4. She was very powerful woman who help those in difficulty. XXX no “” plagiarized

She was very powerful woman who “helped those in difficulty”.

5. When a Mexican ask an impossible favour, They will said “I am not the Wise Woman of Cordoba.” XXX Copied

6. She was "a good person" who helped people.

7. People knew that "she was married to the devil". Too long

8. She was not married to anyone and didn`t care about any man. NO “”” XXX

9. She did workout "like a pro", so she lost weight. From where? XXX

10. sShe has a special power “ Some believe it was because she was a witch” XXX Too long. Not grammatical. Not incorporated

11. She is so mystery mysterious ,so people said that she was "in contact with the devil'.

12. I like volleyball very much, "it is a summer Olympic sport". XXX CS Not a quotation. Source?

13. The wise woman was thought as "married to the devil" because she could "appear at the same time to different people, in different places". Too long

14. Some people didn’t like her because they believed that she is “a witch”.

15. The wise woman was thought as "married to the devil", because she always showed up "in different places" unexpectedly. 

Great!

16. people said that she is a “powerful person” in the world. Not in the story- don’t put quotation marks around it

People said that she is a powerful person in the world.

17. Because she had done "good deeds" to the people, she was arrested by the government because she has special power.

18. The guards get shocked that "she escaped from the prison". Not a quotation. Make sure the quotation is right.

The guards were shocked that she "had escaped” from the prison.

19. She needed someone to help her escape, so she cheated the judge by asking him “what does this ship need to make it perfect.” Too long (2,3,4 words)

REWRITE AND SHORTEN THE QUOTATION

She needed someone to help her escape, so she cheated the judge by asking him if the ship that she drew was “perfect”.

20. She was very rich because she had “ten barrels of gold”.

Quotations – quote special or important words from the story

Quiz on adjective clauses.

Please, email the quiz to me by 10:40.

Regular format

Add an adjective clause to each sentence. Vary your styles.

e.g. I have a dog.

I have a dog that is white.

1. May bought a bicycle for her son.

2. John is moving to Calgary.

3. Here’s the key.

4. Maria bought some BC wine.

5. The fashionable woman has many pairs of shoes.

6. All of Michelle’s friends will have a barbecue next Saturday.