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Today’s Agenda:
1. Continue with descriptive writing
2. Sentence combining
3. Pass-in descriptive writing
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Optional paragraph with “” quoted material tomorrow. Email me by 1PM today to confirm if you want to write the optional paragraph tomorrow. If you do not want to write it, you do not have to email me. I emailed you text earlier today.
If you do the paragraph tomorrow, the mark will replace your mark from Tuesday.
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Tomorrow - essay writing
- optional paragraph
Final five days of the course:
Wednesday, Thursday – sentence combining, descriptive writing
Friday, Tuesday – sentence combining, essay writing – five-paragraph essay
Friday – another paragraph with “ “ material, “Organic Food”- I send this to you earlier this morning.
Wednesday- last class – final essay, final test 10pts
The Ministry of Education announced that K-12 will be returning to school in September. We do not know how this will work with Adult Education. We are waiting for information from Vancouver School Board.
I’m sure that you will get an email from the school when the administration make their decisions about Adult Education for September.
Today’s picture is of
Work from homework:
Joffre Lake: https://www.vancourier.com/opinion/columnists/opinion-it-s-time-to-examine-day-use-reservations-at-joffre-lakes-1.23419303
10 descriptive words or phrases to describe the picture.
Brainstorm vocabulary – it will be a challenge.
Write some of those words in Chat:
• dark green trees and emerald green grass, and as well as light gray and dark gray rocks around blackish green lake.
• Joffre Lake is beautiful. Anyone that had been there are surprise about their pacific views. The water is light blue and transparent like a crystal. That you can see through the water; the rocks place on the ground. The water is looks sweet and cold??. The place is looks quiet???, so you can hear the birds singing and flying between pine and palm trees.
When you write a descriptive paragraph, just describe what you see, hear, taste, etc. Don’t tell a story. Don’t make up things that aren’t there.
• The lake is surrounded by mountains which are light grey colour. On the left, there are rough rocks in a light and dark brown colour.
• White clouds float in the royal blue sky,
• The water of the lake is clear like a mirror.
• robin's egg blue water
• Those fluffy clouds look like cotton candy.
• a variety of shades of gray.
• The clear water has a beautiful colour between turquoise and aquamarine.
• The quiet place?? which has wavey clean blue water.
• The trees of the picture are as bushy as pine trees.
• There are some fluffy clouds in the clear blue sky.
• Some rough stones which have stricked?? slimy plants.
• There are some snow white clouds like fluffy cotton floating in the clean, light blue sky.
• The flowers in a lake is very beautiful.
• The mountain is cover with snow like baby powder.
• The quite and soothing sound relaxes are body and mind.
• A tender sound is heard from the water hitting the rock.
• crystally clean water with reflection of mountains
• with brown cliff
• There are very fluffy clouds in the sky.
• Mountains are so high that can touch the clouds.
• The lake water looks quite cool as it directly comes from the glaciers.
• surrounded by mountains
• I can see beautiful snow- covered hills.
• The view of Jeffrey lake is striking and amazing. The water is clean, and the air is fresh??.
• There is a slight breeze that stirred the waves of the lake.
• The tree is very tall.
• The lake looks like transparent like a blue sky.
• clean???, cold??, pure, deep and fresh water
clear, clean??
• the place looks quiet and peaceful
• The mountain cover with snow that make us feel looks cool and refreshing.
Choose 4,5,6 descriptive ideas. Put in order
Order – physical order- Choose one: top to bottom, bottom to top, side to side, front to back, back to front
Close up to far away
TS – The photograph of Joffre Lake, which is in BC, shows a very beautiful, rugged natural scene.
-rocks - rough stones which have stricked?? slimy plants, a light and dark brown colour
-lake - transparent like a blue sky, slight breeze that stirred the waves, clear water has a beautiful colour between turquoise and aquamarine
-trees - very tall AAA
-mountain- BBB
-sky- CCC
Concluding sentence- personal note
“I would really like to go to this place with my family and enjoy the peaceful calm of Nature there.”
Topic sentence
- 5-7 supporting sentences
Concluding sentence
6/6 Ready for UBC.
We will do a paragraph to pass in today on a different picture.
* Sentence Combining
Sentences- full explanation of sentences
Simple
Compound
Complex
It’s time to start using them.
Practical work – hands on, put it in practice for everyday usage
sentence combining – very good way to get better at sentence writing, my opinion - #1 way
studying grammar – not effective, does not work well
Read books about swimming, but don’t get into the pool.
You have to jump in the pool!
several short sentences – combine them into one sentence that is denser
EASY EXAMPLE”:
Sarah has a dog. – kernel (centre)
The dog has long ears. – find new information
The dog has a long tail. – find new information
Sarah has a dog, and the dog has long ears, and the dog has a long tail. Poor writing – sprawl, repetitive, not beautiful
Sarah has a dog.
long ears
a long tail
dense, compact, meaningful and short
Sarah has a dog that has long ears and a long tail. complex sent
Sarah has a dog with long ears and a long tail. simple
Sarah has a dog, and it has long ears and a long tail. compound
Sarah has a dog that has a long tail and ears. Variation
Sarah who has long ears and a long tail has a dog. misplaced modifier
MANY WAYS TO COMBINE SENTENCES
Try these two short sentences as examples:
“The hardworking student is happy.”
“She passed the test.”
Here are six possible solutions. You may find others.
1. simple sentence
The hardworking student passed the test and is happy.
2. compound sentence
The hardworking student passed the test, and she is happy.
3. compound sentence
The hardworking student passed the test; therefore, she is happy.
4. complex sentence- adverb clause
The hardworking student is happy because she passed the test.
5. complex sentence, adverb clause
Because the hardworking student passed the test, she is happy.
6. complex sentence- adjective clause
The hardworking student who passed the test is happy.
The only kind that is missing is noun clause
Homework:
Try it yourself. Use a variety of styles. Don’t use the same style over and over again. Some sentence styles will work well, and others won’t.
We will share these tomorrow.
1) The girl is happy. She won the race.
2) The student is from China. She sits next to me.
3) The taxi driver was friendly. He took me to the airport.
4) I am running late. I have to skip breakfast.
5) --- Create one of your own.---
Test – descriptive paragraph (150-200w)
Email it to me by 10:35
Describe the picture:
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