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Today’s Agenda:
1. Talk about paragraph from yesterday
2. Descriptive writing
3. Sentence combining
Today’s picture is of
Final five days of the course:
Wednesday, Thursday – sentence combining, descriptive writing
Friday, Tuesday – sentence combining, essay writing – five-paragraph essay
Friday – another paragraph with “ “ material, “Organic Food”- I will send this to you tomorrow
Wednesday- last class – final essay, final test 10pts
Reminder: Monday, Aug 3 is a holiday, BC Day, no school
Make sure that you address the question- answer the question that I asked. Focus on the question. Do not tell me the plot of the story- no plot summary. Do not tell me about yourself no “I” cut first person
Many of you wrote a plot summary. XXX not the question
(150-200w) Good.
Format – 14-16 pt font Mostly good
- doublespace Mostly Good
- indent Mostly good.
Fix format
Sentences – simple, compound, complex
Big focus of this course – sentences
Primary importance- good sentences, real sentences
Email it to me by 10:25. Mostly in on time. Some people were late – more than 5 minutes late, minus 1pt
Everybody has a reason why they are late-
Airport – catch a flight, late
32 people in the class – usually 10 with reasons why they are late
Some students send me 5-6 emails per quiz.
I want to be flexible, but there are limits.
Class 40m for a quiz, you take 90m – fairness, equality
Some people have good reasons – I try to be reasonable
I am trying to strike a balance between structure and flexibility.
Paragraph
Topic sentence – addresses the question directly
- supporting sentences that support the topic sentence
- “ “ quoted words (3,4,5 quotations should be enough)
Topic: “Why was the Wise Woman arrested by the authorities?”
Topic sentence that addresses the question.
“A long time ago, there was a beautiful woman who lived in a town.” XXX off-topic, plot summary
“I just read a story. I liked the story. When I was a kid, my mother read stories to me.” XXX cut first person
Topic sentence – addresses the question
“Why was the Wise Woman arrested by the authorities?”
- use vocab from the question
- use synonyms – words that have the same meaning
Wise Woman – main character, protagonist, young looking woman
arrested – taken to jail, detained, got into trouble
authorities – police, men in power, government officials
Examples of TS
“The Wise Woman was arrested by the authorities because they didn’t like how powerful she had become.”
“The main character of “The Wise Woman if Cordoba” got into trouble with the government because of three reasons.”
- on topic, addressing the question
The topic sentence should come first. Open the paragraph with a good topic sentence.
*My microphone is not working right now, so you will hear the keyboard noise. FIXED
Paragraph writing – on topic, good topic sentence, addressing the question, getting to the point right off the bat
GO/ NO GO – You either get it or you don’t get it.
Eureka moment – you will get it.
One four reasons –
1. WW was so famous
many people went to her for help
2. authoritrs worried
3. people would follow WW, don’t listen to authorities
ROUGH COPY
The main character of “The Wise Woman if Cordoba” got into trouble with the government because of one main reason: the government people were afraid that she had become more powerful than they were. First of all, the Wise Woman was very famous and respected in the town. Therefore, the townspeople want to her for help. For example , the Wise Woman was called upon by the people and “fulfilled nonetheless their wishes”. The authorities were worried because the citizens were following the Wise Woman more than they were following the government officials. The government was afraid that the people might stop listening to the government. Therefore, they felt the Wise Woman had to be gotten rid of.
- add a few more quotations, and you have it
The key (!) is to have read the story carefully a few times.
– First time to read the story -surface level reading (setting, character, plot)
– Second and third times to read the story - deeper level reading (conflict, symbols, theme, deeper meanings)
When a student writes a plot summary as an answer, they are showing that they only have read the story at a surface level. They can only retell the story because they don’t understand anything deeper in the story.
We will do another paragraph on Friday.
-with “” quoted material
Optional paragraph – You can write it if you want to. You don’t have to.
If you write the paragraph in Friday, your Friday mark will replace your Tuesday mark.
Tuesday – 3/6
Friday – don’t write
Mark – 3/6
Tuesday- 3/6
Friday – 4/6
Mark – 4/6
Tuesday – 2/6
Friday – 5/6
Mark – 5/6
Tuesday – 6/6
Friday – 3/6
Mark – 3/6
A few bunch of people were asking if they could do a rewrite.
You can decide if you want to do the optional paragraph or not.
Descriptive writing
Modes of writing – types of writing, different intentions when we write
- narrative writing – tell a story
- descriptive writing – describe something
- literary writing – write about fiction or poetry
- persuasive writing – convince somebody
- compare and contrast writing – show differences or similarities between two things
descriptive writing – appeal to the five senses
five senses – our points of contact with the world, how we gather information from our surroundings
- sight- seeing- visual information – colour, shape, size, shade, brightness
vocabulary to describe what we see – colour- green, red, blue (boring, mundane, baby vocab) more subtlety in our colours – deep forest green, lime green, ocean green, sky blue, navy blue, royal blue, robin’s egg blue, fire engine red, sunset red
“The girl’s eyes were robin’s egg blue.”
- smell – sweet, flowery, acrid, burned, ocean, smoky, earthy, peaches, leathery, wet dog
- hearing – loud, quiet, sharp, soothing, startling, nails on a blackboard, rumbling, wind blow, waves, birds singing, rough, tender, heavy, ponderous, melodic, croak
“His wife’s voice sounds like birds singing. His mother-in-law’s voice is like nails on a blackboard.”
“His voice is like a trumpet.”
“Farsi and French sound very romantic.”
“The mother talked to her baby tenderly.”
- touch – smooth, silky, rough, soft, fluffy, wet, dry, greasy, oily, sticky, moist, slimy, hot, cold
- taste – salty, spicy, bitter, sour, sweet, hot/cold?-taste or touch?
“My son doesn’t like mushrooms because the texture is slimy and fibrous.”
“I don’t like eggplant very much because it is mushy and a little bitter.”
“My dog eats food that is very crunchy and salty.”
describe – use descriptive words
Picture of Joffre Lake: https://www.vancourier.com/opinion/columnists/opinion-it-s-time-to-examine-day-use-reservations-at-joffre-lakes-1.23419303
For homework, come up with 10 descriptive words or phrases to describe the picture.
We will share them tomorrow.
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