EF7/11 Class 15 Quoting text

 

Good morning, everyone.

 

Summer: I will be teaching EF6/7 in the summer in the morning (8:30-12). The summer term will run from July 4th to August 4th.

 

Today’s agenda:

·      Return Test#2

Optional RW for a bonus point

·      Using quotation marks

 

Thursday

·      Continue COMPOUND SENTENCES

Quiz on simple and compound sentences- When?

·      Begin adverb clauses

·      Revisit “I Confess”

·      Continue “ ”

·      Begin “Dead Man’s Path”

 

Friday

 

 

 

 

Test #2

General feedback:

3 good points before the first criticism

-Format was great- doublespace, margins, name and class

 

1.    Be on topic. Address the question that is asked.

“Why did the boys save the pheasants?”

plot summary, retold the story

Begin with a topic sentence that addresses the question.

 

2.    Avoid first person- No “I” except for the grabber- short anecdote.

First person is for narrative writing. For literary writing, avoid inserting yourself into the paragraph.

3.    Review verb tense and form

AREA OF CONCERN- have to learn essential verb tenses

SIMPLE PRESENT

SIMPLE PAST

SIMPLE FUTURE

PRESENT CONTINUOUS

PAST CONTINUOUS

PRESENT PERFECT

PRESENT PERFECT CONTINUOUS

*Make this your special project to learn these cold.

 

4.    comma splices – putting commas between sentences

The boys were looking at the pheasants, the pheasants were unable to fly away. CS

FIX

The boys were looking at the pheasants; the pheasants were unable to fly away. COMPOUND

The boys were looking at the pheasants, and the pheasants were unable to fly away. COMPOUND

The boys were looking at the pheasants. The pheasants were unable to fly away. SIMPLES

The boys were looking at the pheasants although the pheasants were unable to fly away. COMPLEX- ADVERB CLAUSES

 

5.    frags= sentence fragments- incomplete sentences

The birds were unable to move because of the weather. For example, icy rain, freezing temperatures, unable to see. frag  SV

FIX

The birds were unable to move because of the weather. For example, they were unable to see because of the icy rain and freezing temperatures.

 

** All of your sentences must be simple, compound or comlex. If not, it’s probably not correct English.

 

6.    begin quoting module “   “   - borrowing words from the text

You can quote short phrases.- 3-4 word

 

You can do the optional rewrite as usual for a bonus point.

Submit it to me today or first thing tomorrow.

 

Grabber

Topic sentence

Supporting sentences

Concluding sentence

 

 

Starting a sentence with ‘but’ and ‘and’.

And then the boys ran home. ww

SOBA- middle of compound sentences, not for the beginning of sentences

And then the boys ran home

FIX

Then the boys ran home.

Afterward, the boys ran home.

 

And then the boys ran home. VERY CASUAL FEEL, STYLE

 

For school writing, academic writing, it is a good choice to be more formal.

And Finally, then the boys ran home.

Finally, the boys ran home.

 

FULL DISCLAIMER- I tend to be more formal than many people in my speaking and writing. It may be too stiff and formal for your style.

 

The boys changed their mind to catch the birds. prep

The boys changed their mind about catching the birds.

 

MODEL I changed my mind about GERUND.

She changed her mind about going to the party.

 

The boys felt sorry to for/about the pheasants. prep

 

PHRASAL VERBS- the heart of real, authentic English

verb + preposition

look + at

look into – research, investigate

look after- take good care of

look up-

look up to – respect

look down

look down on – disrespect

 

MY SUGGESTION: If you want to have natural sounding Englihs, learn phrasal verbs and use them as mch as possible to get them into your heart.

390 phrasal verbs: https://skypeenglishclasses.com/english-phrasal-verbs/

More than a 1000 phrasal verbs: https://7esl.com/phrasal-verbs/

 

 

The another reasons is that the boys... RW # ww

FIXES

Another reason is that the boys...   many reasons, this is just one more

The other reason is that the boys...  there is just this one more

Other reasons are that the boys...   many reasons, these are a couple more

 

pronoun

Joe is a friend of mine.

Joe is my friend.

 

article- newspaper, magazine

short story- story 1-12 pages

 

The boys loved the nature.

She loves getting out into nature/Nature.

variation – Mother Nature

 

‘poor’ – does not translate well from Mandarin

The pheasant were poor. ww

Better synonyms: helpless, pitiable, pitiful, pathetic, vulnerable, defenseless

 

thesaurus.com

 

 

 

Using quoted text from a story

borrow words from a story  “   “ quotation marks

borrow just a few words, incorporate the borrowed into our sentence

 

The boys were in the same situation as the pheasants. “Their breath came out in slow puffs of steam. The pheasants' breath came out in quick little white puffs.” TOO LONG

Using a quotation as evidence that what you’re wiritng is good.

 

-choose a couple of words (2,3,4 words) to borrow, a little phrase

 

The breath of both the boys and the birds could be seen as “slow puffs of steam” because they all were out in the cold. This showed how the they were experiencing the harshness of nature in the same way.

 

“helpless pheasants”

The boys felt sympathy for the “helpless pheasants” when they found them beside the road.

 

“unborn birds”

Because the boys and the birds were covered with the ice, they resembles “unborn birds”.

 

We will work on this for the next while.

 

“slid their feet along slowly”

The weather was very cold, and the ground was so icy that the kids had to move “their feet along slowly” to avoid slipping.

 

Using quoted text is like cropping photographs. Just choose what you want.

 

Quoting is really fun once you get used to it. If you go to university and do academic work, your life will be about reading and quoting.