E10/11 3 class - sentence examples, Correction Codes

 

Good morning.

We will get started at 8:30.

 

Today’s Agenda:

1.    Go over some example sentences from your writing on Friday

2.    “Correction Codes”

3.    Return papers- edit, correct

4.    HW   Exercises on simnple sentences

 

Tuesday

1.    Begin sentence review

2.    “English 10 Expectations for Sentence Writing”

3.    Simple sentences exercises from homework

 

Wednesday

1.    Compound sentences

2.     

 

SLANG bus – proletariat chariot

proletariat (Marxist term) – worker

chariot – a horse-drawn cart, usually for war

 

Today is the end of Ramadan.

fasting – sunrise to sunset

fasting – no eating (or drinking sometimes)

 

Eid-al-Fitr- celebrating the end of Ramadan

 

This week:

·      Teach sentence types: simple, compound, complex

·      Begin paragraph form, structure, and writing

 

 

Some examples of your sentences from Friday- sentences that can be improved a bit:

 

1.    With many years hardworking, I had a successful business.

phrasing

After many years of hard work, I had a successful business.

hard work – adj noun

hardworking- adj  She is very hardworking person.

 

2.    I want to get a job so I can feed my family. ww

I want to get a job so I can support family.

I want to get a job so that I can support my family. adv cl

support – financial support, emotional support

context – what kind of support

context – the way a word is used

bad(adj) – context good, terrible

I supported my friend through her divorce. – sounds like emotional

He works hard to support his three children. – sounds like financial

 

I want to get a job so I can take care of my family.

She supports herself.

I want to get a job to take care of my family.

 

I want to ABC.

I want to go for a walk.

I want to ride my bicycle.

I want to break free.

Queen- Freddie Mercury

 

3.    I live in Vancouver since 1987. vt- verb tense

I live in Vancouver since 1987. -long time

I have lived in Vancouver since 1987.

present perfect- started in the past, continues to now

She has done yoga since December.

since – useful word for present perfect

 

She has done yoga for five months.

 

CHOICE since TIME

               for PERIOD OF TIME

 

Mei has played piano since 1992.

Mei has played piano since she was a kid. adverb clause

Mei has played piano for 30 years.

 

 

4.    I was born in ABCLand for about six years.  RW rewrite

I was born in ABCLand.

I was born in ABCLand 21 years ago.

I was born in ABCLand in 2001.

I was born in ABCLand on October 16, 2001.

 

I lived in ABCLand for about six years.

I lived in ABCLand where I was born for about six years. adjective clause

I was born in ABCLand and lived there for about six years. SIMPLE SENTENCE

 

I was born in ABCLand, and I lived there for about six years. COMPOUND SENTENCE

 

I had lived there for about six years. past perfect- not used often by native English speakers, slightly too formal, substitute simple past

I lived there for about six years.

 

DIFFERENT MEANINGS:

I lived there for about six years. span of time

I lived there six years ago.

I have lived there for six years.

 

 

5.    I have a sister, her name is Jane. CS comma splice

FIXES

I have a sister. Her name is Jane. two simple sentences

I have a sister, and her name is Jane. compound sent

I have a sister; her name is Jane. compound sent

I have a sister whose name is Jane. complex sent- adjective clause

I have a sister, Jane. appositive

 

6.    I found was very helpful when customers talking to me. vf

I found that it was very helpful when customers talked/were talking to me. noun clause

 

7.    But, my son is too young to travel for a long time. ww wrong word

awk awkward, phrasing

* Don’t start a sentence with ‘but’ ‘and’ ‘so’  - too casual for school writing

However, my son is too young to go on long trips.

 

8.    Me and my family came here in Canada because we want to get a better life. RW prep

My family and I came (here) to Canada because we wanted to get/have a better life.

 

I have been living here in Vancouver for five years. sounds very natural

I have been living in Vancouver for five years.

I have worked here at South Hill since 1993.

 

9.    I spend time to watch TV. vf wf

I spend time watching TV. gerund

She likes to spend time walking in the park.

 

10.                       I always out of my mind in class and dreamed something.

phrasing Meaning?

When I was a kid, I could not pay attention in class and daydreamed a lot.

distracted

I was lost in my thoughts.

 

11.                       i have two brothers and i have three sisters.

i I

I have two brothers and I have three sisters.

 

12.                       My first language is German but, I speak English at home.

My first language is German, but I speak English at home.

 

13.                       I want to be a nurse however it will take a lot of work. punc

I want to be a nurse; however, it will take a lot of work.

 

edit papers- SFU- nursing students

 

original planned name – Fraser University FU

Simon Fraser University SFU

True story.

 

 

 

I want to go to university.

I want to go to a university.

I want to go to an university.

 

She ate an apple.  apple- begins with a vowel

university – begins with a vowel , but not a vowel sound

oo-niversoty

you-niveristy

 

an Uber

a unit

 

a horse

an honest person

 

a/an – about pronunciatrion, not really about vowels and consonants

 

an ugly dog

a useful tip

 

 

Correction, editting.

 

 

prepositions- usually short words that show place or direction:

in on for under over near, etc.

 

I have one daughter named Joy.

I have one daughter who is named Joy.

I have one daughter, Joy. appositive

I have one daughter. She is named Joy.

I have one daughter, and she is named Joy.

Her name is Joy.

I have one daughter called Joy.

She is called Joy.

My dog is called/named Butter.