EF6 8am June 8

 Good morning, everyone.

We will get started at 8:30.

Cameras on. Mics muted.

Today’s agenda:

1. Continue with examples of run-on sentences and comma splices DONE

2. Reading strategies

3. “Roses Sing on New Snow”

4. Sentence combining IF TIME

You may find that class attendance is dropping. This happens every term. After midterm recommendations, some students decide to quit rather than finish the class. I don’t understand why.

We have three weeks left with plenty of opportunity to learn and improve.

I don’t like to see people quit. I think quitting is the wrong move. I think you should stay with the class and keep working and improving.

I am very happy to see that you are continuing. I want you to take these next three weeks as an opportunity to push yourself, to strive to learn new written and spoken structures.

Homework sentences in Chat:

1. We had a good lunch on the patio, then we enjoyed a lovely stroll along the beach. RO FIX

2. I’ll never be able to buy a house for prices these days are just ridiculous.

I’ll never be able to buy a house, for prices these days are just ridiculous. ‘for’ is unusual

I’ll never be able to buy a house because prices these days are just ridiculous.

3. I would like togo to visit my family in this semmar because  I miss Tham a lot. RW

4. There are many reasons to visit Greece because the beaches are beautiful and the people are friendly.

I expect your writing to be free of run-on sentences.

Reading Strategies

Some people find reading for school to be challenging. They may not read much in their personal life. It seems like video is replacing books for information delivery and entertainment.

In school, you will have to read large amounts of content daily. In college and university you will be reading and processing large amounts, dozens and dozens of pages a day.

I read a book or a text at least twice.

FIRST READING – relaxing chair, cup of tea

- quiet place, earplugs, helps with concentration

- Turn off the phone! – hurts your concentrate

- minimize the distractions

-multitasking is lie- You cannot do two activities that require brainpower at once. i.e. listening to music and studying at the same time

- First reading – read for basics of the story: setting, 

characters, conflict, plot

SECOND READING- school desk, with a pencil

**- make notes- You have to make notes on what you read.

- jot down key words and ideas as you read them, “quotations”

I use a computer now, but I used to use pencil and paper.

You have to make notes because you will forget. If you refresh the new information, it will be gone in three days.

-Keep your notes in a safe place. You can go back and refer to your notes many years later. The notes will jog your memory of what the content of the book was. You can use text notes or mind maps. Mind maps are visual representation of information.

Notetaking is a very powerful tool.

I don’t make notes on every book I read. I do keep notes of things that jump out at me while I am reading. I keep notes on my phone. To be honest, all of my notes are a big mess right now.

Our class blog is just a collection of notes from the daily class.

KEY POINT: I am making the notes, not you. You have to make your own notes.

My reading routine is first reading and second reading. Then I feel like I am ready for class. It takes time, but you get faster and better at it with practice.

I am a person who sets goals for myself.

My personal daily goal for reading is 50 pages of a book.

One week is about one book.

Your personal daily goal for reading could be XX pages.

NOTE: If you are a person who does not usually read, a good to start reading is to pick up a book that is on a topic that you find interesting.

e.g. science, sports, fashion, architecture, movies, music, history, war, cooking, etc.

It is an enjoyable experience to read about a topic that you are interested in.

PERSONAL OPINION: If you watch Tiktok and Youtube videos all the time, your brain will turn to mashed potatoes.

Youtube is nice, but it is like eating baby food.

You must sink your teeth into a good book.

idiom – sink your teeth into Biology 12.

You really get into the work; you study hard.

Joan really sunk her teeth into her new job. She is really giving it her best effort.

Jun is sinking his teeth into a new healthy lifestyle. 

EF34 7pm June 7

 

Today’s agenda:

Good evening, everybody.

We will get started at 7:00.

Cameras on. Mics muted.

Today’s agenda:

1. Run-on sentences

2. Descriptive writing –

3. Test#3 on Wednesday – descriptive writing

Areas of grammar to work on in the final weeks:

• run-on sentences

• sentence fragments

• verb tenses and verb forms

• ***ALWAYS***- sentence types

Area for further work and practice:

Run-on sentences – very common error

-several clauses, several sentences all jammed together with no punctuation between them

Example:

We went to the lake yesterday it was too cold to swim we had a picnic together. run-on sentence, RO

We went to the lake yesterday it was too cold to swim we had a picnic together. 3 sentences jammed together

MY MARKING COMMENT: RO, run-on sentence

Divide. Divide your writing into sentences. Divide them. Separate them.

We went to the lake yesterday it was too cold to swim we had a picnic together. 

Rewrite these three ideas into sentences.

POSSIBLE SOLUTIONS:

1. We went to the lake yesterday. It was too cold to swim. We had a picnic together. 3 simple sentences

2. We went to the lake yesterday, but it was too cold to swim. We had a picnic together. compound & simple

3. We went to the lake yesterday. It was too cold to swim, but we had a picnic together. simple & compound

4. When we went to the lake yesterday, it was too cold to swim. We had a picnic together. complex & simple

**

We always have to write simple, compound or complex sentences. It is a necessity.

**

Big difference:

We went to the lake yesterday it was too cold to swim we had a picnic together. XXX

When we went to the lake yesterday, it was too cold to swim. We had a picnic together. Fabulous sentence writing.

Example of a paragraph that is ruined by run-on sentences:

One of the big mistakes I made in my life, I went on a picnic, with a group of people from my country. Everything was going well,  it was a lot of fun,  how naughty we were on the bus… ; in short, we reached the desired location,  we went to a mountain called Round Mountain, in one of the cities of my country called Newtown. It was spring and the place had a beautiful view. My friends and I started laying the mat and lighting the brazier to make lunch. After lunch we decided to play ball,  suddenly I fell and my knees come out of the bowl, it was terrible, and I was so scared. In short, I sat down and thought there was nothing, so I went with my friends to walking around. My leg started to pain, and after walking and taking pictures, we came back, my knee was very swollen, and my mom said that when we returned to the city we would go to the hospital. We went to the hospital and they emptied my knee. And I couldn’t walk for a year, and I couldn’t go to school, it was very hard for me. This was one of my mistakes when I went to that picnic.

Probably mark:2.5/6 2.8/6

POSSIBLE REWRITE, divided into sentences

One of the big mistakes I made in my life is when I went on a picnic with a group of people from my country. Everything was going well, and it was a lot of fun. How naughty we were on the bus. In short, we reached the desired location. We went to a mountain called Round Mountain in one of the cities of my country called Newtown. It was spring and the place had a beautiful view. My friends and I started laying the mat and lighting the brazier to make lunch. After lunch we decided to play ball. Suddenly, I fell and my knees came out of the bowl. It was terrible, and I was so scared. In short, I sat down and thought there was nothing, so I went with my friends to walk around. My leg started to pain, and after walking and taking pictures, we came back. My knee was very swollen, and my mom said that when we returned to the city we would go to the hospital. We went to the hospital and they checked my knee. I couldn’t walk for a year, and I couldn’t go to school, it was very hard for me. This was one of my mistakes when I went to that picnic.

ALL DIVIDED INTO NICE SENTENCES

Probably mark: 5.5/6, 6/6

*** You must divide your ideas into sentences. ***

Write your ideas from your imagination or from your paragraph in Chat:

1. How nice it was would be if we could walk to the sky.

2. It was around 1-2 AM, and he said to me let go to Vancouver now punc

It was around 1-2 AM, and he said to me, “Let’s go to Vancouver now.”

quotation marks “ “ – direct speech, reported speech

Dave said, “I will be late.”

indirect speech

Dave said that he would be late. noun clause

3. I bought a new shirt for my son, he doesn't like it. RO

I bought a new shirt for my son. He doesn't like it. SIMPLE

I bought a new shirt for my son, but he doesn't like it. COMPOUND

I bought a new shirt for my son although he doesn't like it. COMPLEX

4. I remember the three days before Christmas in December, 2019.

5. I imagined myself there. SIMPLE

6. I had dinner,and then I want to had a piece of apple pie. vf

I had dinner, and then I wanted to have a piece of apple pie.

**

MODEL

want + infinitive

She wants to go home.

We want to have a party.

I want to eat my supper.

want to AAA

wanted to AAA

I wanted to go to the party.

She wanted to get her vaccine.

**

7. I want to tell you all my story. SIMPLE

8. I am very happy because I will finish my training program about early children education. COMPLEX

9. It is very difficult. SIMPLE

10. I went to the shop, pick up the pizza. XXX

I went to the shop, and I picked up the pizza.

***

We are here to learn and practice.

Run-on sentences:

Exercises for homework. Try a few.

1. The car will not start it is out of gas. RO

The car will not start and is out of gas. SIMPLE

The car will not start, and it is out of gas. COMPOUND

The car will not start because it is out of gas. COMPLEX- adverb cl

The car will not start since it is out of gas. COMPLEX- adverb cl

The car that will not start is out of gas. COMPLEX-adjective cl

2. Eliza ran to the store, then she bought some candy.

3. The dog is running around the park, the kids are running, too.

4. Elvis Presley was a great singer, he was famous all over the world.

5. Computer are very helpful to us they can be expensive.

6. Dubai has built magnificent office towers, it is a great location to run a business.

7. Brazil has won several world cup championships in soccer, they are always considered a good team.

8. BC is considered an excellent university, it attracts many students.

9. We went to the beach yesterday it was cold.

10. His girlfriend left him, he was brokenhearted.

Your solutions:

1. Elvis Presley was a great singer, and he was famous all over the world.

2. His girlfriend left him, so he was brokenhearted.

3. Eliza ran to the store, and she bought some candy.

4. Eliza ran to the store and bought some candy.

5. Eliza ran to the store, and she bought some candy.

6. Computer are very helpful to us ,but they be can  expensive.

Computer are very helpful to us, but they can be expensive.

7. Eliza ran to the store for bought to buy some candy.

8. We went to the beach yesterday, but it was cold.

9. Today was pretty good at work, but I was very tired.

10. His girlfriend left him, Since than he was broken hearted. RO

His girlfriend left him. Since then, he was broken hearted.

11. The dog is running around the park, and the kids are running, too.

12. The dog is running around the park, and the kids are running too.

13. We are going everday for wolk but  today I don't have time. RW

We are going everyday for a walk, but today I don't have time.

We go for a walk everyday, but today I don’t have time.

14. Brazil has won several world cup championships in soccer because they are always considered a good team.

15. Elvis Presley that was a great singer, and he was famous all over the world.

Elvis Presley was a great singer, and he was famous all over the world. COMPOUND

Elvis Presley who was a great singer was famous all over the world. COMPLEX- adj cl

16. The dog is running around the park, and the kids are running too. COMPOUND

17. Dubai has built magnificent office towers because is a great location to run a business. COMPLEX- adv cl

18. Because Dubai has built magnificent office towers, it is a great location to run a business. COMPLEX- adv cl

19. His girlfriend left him because he was broken her hearted. RW

His girlfriend left him because he broke her heart. COMPLEX- adv cl

This is what we want!!

SIMPLE COMPOUND COMPLEX

Your sentences must be SIMPLE COMPOUND COMPLEX. If not, they are not English.

We did narrative writing already – tell a story

Descriptive writing- describe using our 5 senses

1.sight

2.hearing

3.touch

4.taste

5.smell

descriptive words for the five senses, adjectives

FOCUS ON 

1.sight -colour - red, candy apple red, russet red, fire engine red

- blue, navy blue, sky blue, robin’s egg blue, turqoise

-green, forest green , lime green, foam green

-shape

-size

-location – next to, above, below

2.hearing

3.touch

4.taste

5.smell

I will give you a picture and ask you to describe what you see.

Paragraph –Error! Hyperlink reference not valid.

Grabber

Topic sentence

Supporting sentences

Concluding sentence

There is a confident-looking older woman sitting in a chair. She has silver-grey hair. It is medium-short and is parted on the side. She has black or dark brown almond-shaped eyes. Her eyes are friendly and warm. She is wearing large reddish glasses. Her skin is pale with laugh lines. Her cheeks are glowing with health. She has a wide nose. She has a round face. Her smile is not wide but is warm. She is very beautiful and nice looking.

We will write a descriptive paragraph on Wednesday. I will show you two pictures. You can choose one. Write a paragraph of 100-150 words describing what you see.

HOMEWORK:

Write a short paragraph describing the face of one of your family members: son, daughter, mother-in-law, wife, husband, mother, grandfather, baby, cousin, nephew, dog, cat.

Tomorrow, I will ask you to read some of them out loud. We can enjoy the reading.

 

I will stay on Zoom for a while if anyone wants to talk.

EF34 11am June 7

 

Good morning, everybody.

We will get started at 11:00.

Cameras on. Mics muted.

Today’s agenda:

1. Run-on sentences

2. Descriptive writing –

3. Tomorrow Test#3 Descriptive paragraph

Areas of grammar to work on in the final weeks:

• run-on sentences

• sentence fragments

• verb tenses

• ***ALWAYS***- sentence types

Run-on sentences – several clauses, several sentences all jammed together with no punctuation between them

Example:

We went to the lake yesterday it was too cold to swim we had a picnic together. run-on sentence, RO

We went to the lake yesterday it was too cold to swim we had a picnic together. 3 sentences jammed together

MY MARKING COMMENT: Divide. Divide your writing into sentences. Divide them. Separate them.

We went to the lake yesterday it was too cold to swim we had a picnic together.

Rewrite these three ideas into sentences.

POSSIBLE SOLUTIONS:

1. We went to the lake yesterday. It was too cold to swim. We had a picnic together.  3 simple sentences

2. We went to the lake yesterday. It was too cold to swim, but we had a picnic together. simple and compound sentences

3. When we went to the lake yesterday, it was too cold to swim. We had a picnic together. complex sentence and simple sentence

We always have to write simple, compound or complex sentences.

Example of a paragraph that is ruined by run-on sentences:

I remember the three days before Christmas in December 2019 when I recently got to Vancouver with my family, my brother said to me we should go to Downtown, but my car was not big enough to everyone so  we decided take a bus we did that because it was raining and we did not think it would be very cold. DIVIDE INTO SENTENCES After we started to walk maybe for 15 minutes at Marine Drive station,  the rain started to get heavy and I was surprised by how cold it was, my three children were walking with us, and they were not happy because the rain was cold, we continued walking around downtown, the whole family were happy that they had good jackets to protect them from the rain and we had a lot of laughs my brother and my children never forgot that trip because it was our first trip, and we were very wet and cold but still has a good time. DIVIDE INTO SENTENCES

POSSIBLE REWRITE, divided into sentences

I remember the three days before Christmas in December, 2019. I recently got to Vancouver with my family. My brother said to me that we should go to Downtown. My car was not big enough for everyone, so  we decided take a bus. We did that because it was raining and we did not think it would be very cold. After we started to walk maybe for 15 minutes at Marine Drive station, the rain started to get heavy. I was surprised by how cold it was. My three children were walking with us, and they were not happy because the rain was cold. We continued walking around downtown. The whole family were happy that they had good jackets to protect them from the rain. We had a lot of laughs. My brother and my children never forgot that trip because it was our first trip. We were very wet and cold but still had a good time.

ALL DIVIDED INTO NICE SENTENCES

*** You must divide your ideas into sentences. ***

Write your ideas from your imagination or your paragraph in Chat:

1. In Chinese  has a proverb is  “Newborn calves are not afraid of tigers”. RW

In Chinese, we have a proverb which says  “Newborn calves are not afraid of tigers”.

In Chinese, there is a proverb which says  “Newborn calves are not afraid of tigers”.

2. Yesterday I went to English bay, the weather was so cold and rainy, but it was fun. RO

Yesterday I went to English Bay. The weather was so cold and rainy, but it was fun.

Divide your ideas into short clear sentences.

3. I remember the day that my friend and I had a good day at Stanley Park.

4. Today, I am very happy that my teacher changed the time of Test#3. Today is no test. There is no test today.

Today is no test.  Not English. This is a mix of English and Chinese 

grammar.

There is no test today. Real authentic English

5. I barbecued in my backyare alought it was raining, and we were enjoyed our failmy day. sp

I barbecued in my backyard although it was raining, and we were enjoyed our family day.

6. I don't want to remember what happened to me this morning.

7. Ambelside is the most wonderful place to visit because of the combination of interesting architecture and scenic nature makes a beautiful landscape. RW

Ambleside is the most wonderful place to visit because of the combination of interesting architecture and scenic nature. This makes a beautiful landscape. IDEAS DIVIDED INTO SENTENCES

Ambleside is the most wonderful place to visit. The combination of interesting architecture and scenic nature makes a beautiful landscape. IDEAS DIVIDED INTO SENTENCES

*** Don’t jam 4,5 ideas into one sentence. One ideas is enough. Two ideas are enough. Three ideas? Be very cautious.

8. His dog has long ears that always hung downward. 2 ideas

His dog has long ears that always hung downward chase a cat very cute i like dogs he barked a lot i want  a dog too my kids want a cat cats are cute. WHAT A MESS!

10 ideas jammed together. Don’t do it!

9. I like to play frisbee, but my son like to play badminton. 2 ideas

10. I went to the greys park with my friends hang out. And then we are enjoyed with my friends playing basketball, After game we are going to home.  RW

I went to Greys Park with my friends to hang out. Then we played basketball together. After the game, we went home.  BEAUTIFUL!

11. I was given the Covid 19 vaccine, and I felt terrible.2 ideas- compound sentence

12. My friend's cat is very cute and naughty. simple sentence

My friend's cat is very cute and naughty play with string drink milk i like cats. A MESS

Divide it into sentences.

My friend's cat is very cute and naughty. She plays with string and drink milk. I like cats.

13. Yesterday, my family and I walked slow at slowly around Stanley Park in the rainy weather.

***

We are here to learn and practice.

Park names are capitalized: Stanley Park, Queen Elizabeth Park, Grey’s Park, Bobolink Park

14. Yesterday, I went to Richmond Center. I bought a pair of shoes and some t-shirts. It has been a long time since I went shopping.  THREE PERFECT SIMPLE SENTENCES

Exercises for homework. Try a few.

1. The car will not start it is out of gas.

POSSIBLE SOLUTIONS:

The car will not start. It is out of gas. 2 SIMPLES

The car will not start because it is out of gas. COMPLEX-ADV CL

The car will not start since it is out of gas. COMPLEX-ADV CL

The car is out of gas, so it will not start. COMPOUND

The car that will not start is out of gas. COMPLEX-ADJ CL

The car that is out of gas will not start. COMPLEX-ADJ CL

The car is out of gas and will not start. SIMPLE

Some of these ways are easy, and some of them are hard. I want you to be able to do all of way. For now, focus on the easy ways. You can do the hard ways later.

2. Eliza ran to the store, then she bought some candy.

3. The dog is running around the park, the kids are running, too.

4. Elvis Presley was a great singer, he was famous all over the world.

5. Computer are very helpful to us they can be expensive.

6. Dubai has built magnificent office towers, it is a great location to run a business.

7. Brazil has won several world cup championships in soccer, they are always considered a good team.

8. BC is considered an excellent university, it attracts many students.

9. We went to the beach yesterday it was cold.

10. His girlfriend left him, he was brokenhearted.

Check the blog: haleyshec.blogspot.com

Test#3- tomorrow 

Tomorrow we will write a descriptive paragraph. I will show a picture. You will write a paragraph describing what you see. You don’t have to describe the whole picture. You can focus on just one part of it if you want.

(100-150 words)

What would you like a picture of?

person?

scenery?

animal?

object?

I’ll give you a choice between a person and some scenery.

You can use your dictionaries because you may want to use special vocabulary that you don’t know.

Still, don’t copy sentences. The dictionaries are just for the special vocabulary words.

EF6 8:30 June 7

 Good morning, everyone.

We will get started at 8:30.

Cameras on. Mics muted.

Today’s agenda:

1. Areas of concern- Run-on sentences, comma splices

2. Literary Terms

3. Sentence combining

4. Read story for homework. I will email it to you this morning.

“Roses Sing on New Snow”. This is our first short story. I will teach about the story. I will not walk you through the story. It is very important that you do the work of reading the story several times with your full attention.

So far in this course:

Focus on sentences!! simple, compound complex

Focus on paragraph writing! 

Grabber

Topic sentence

Supporting sentences

Concluding

Next week – focus on details of sentence and paragraph writing.

-areas of concern, areas where we can improve, polish

1. Area of concern- run-on sentences, comma splices

run-on sentence – string of sentences, string of clauses put together that should be broken up, should be divided

My corrections note: “Divide” “Divide this into sentences.” 

PROBLEM-long long strings of sentences and clauses that need to be divided up

Example of a run-on sentence:

I went out with my family we had a good time we went to Stanley Park and the kids played together we also brought some lunch.

I went out with my family we went to Stanley Park we had a good time the kids played together we also brought some lunch.

Five ideas all jammed together with no separation. We must divide this into sentences.

POSSIBLE SOLUTIONS:

I went out with my family. We went to Stanley Park. We had a good time. The kids played together. We also brought some lunch. SIMPLE- repetitive

I went out with my family to Stanley Park. We had a good time, and the kids played together. We also brought some lunch. SIMPLE & COMPOUND

I went out with my family. We had a good time when we went to Stanley Park. The kids played together, and we also brought some lunch. SIMPLE COMPLEX COMPOUND

I went out with my family. We had a good time when we went to Stanley Park. The kids played together; also, we brought some lunch.

SIMPLE COMPLEX COMPOUND ; TRANS,

All good solutions  to fixing run-on sentences.

Comma splices: very common kind of punctuation error

Example of a comma splice:

I went out with my family, we had a good time, we went to Stanley Park, and the kids played together, we also brought some lunch.

You cannot divide sentences with commas. Commas are not strong enough.

I went out with my family, we had a good time, we went to Stanley Park, and the kids played together, we also brought some lunch.

SOLUTIONS:

I went out with my family. We had a good time.

I went out with my family; we had a good time.

I went out with my family, and we had a good time.

I went out with my family. We had a good time when we went to Stanley Park. The kids played together, and we also brought some lunch.

GOAL- To write our ideas into sentences that are high-quality English.

Your ideas in Chat?

1. We had a good time: we went to Stanley Park; the kids played together; we also brought some lunch. A LITTLE OVERDONE

2. We had a good time in Stanley Park. SIMPLE

3. If you win a million dollars in the lottery tomorrow. What would you do?

sentence fragment – only half of a sentence- I will teach this later in the week.

SOLUTION: If you win a million dollars in the lottery tomorrow, what would you do?

4. We went to Stanley park, we had fun there and the kids play to genera and we brought some lunch. XXX run-on, comma splices

PERFECT EXAMPLE: 

We went to Stanley Park. We had fun there and the kids play to genera played and we brought some lunch.

We had fun there, and the kids played, and we brought some lunch.

BAD STYLE: SV, and SV, and SV.

BETTER STYLE: We had fun there because the kids played, and we brought some lunch. COMPOUND COMPLEX

Much better!!

5. After the trip for Maldives, I would Invest in some stocks market and another good example is, invest in some condominiums as well, and then have some more good times. TOO MUCH FOR ONE SENTENCE- DIVIDE

After the trip to the Maldives, I would invest in some stocks. Another good example would be investing in some condominiums as well.  Then I would have some more good times.

Way better- the ideas are divided into sentences.

6. we had a good time when we went to Stanley park. The kids played together ,and we bought lunch too. XXX CAP

7. If time can go back to the past, I want to see Michael Jackson! AWK 

If I could go back in time, I want to see Michael Jackson!

8. We went out to Stanley park so kids can play and have a good time ,also we grabbed some lunch. XXX comma splice

We went out to Stanley park, so the kids could play and have a good time; also, we grabbed some lunch.

9. If people don’t have a plan, they could lose much money to buy some things which is not necessary. Meaning? 3 ideas jammed together – not working well.

DIVIDE THE IDEAS INTO SENTENCES:

If people don’t have a plan/budget, they could lose a lot of money.

Meaning?

If people don’t have a financial plan/budget, they could lose/waste a lot of money because they will buy things that are unnecessary.

**NOTE: I will not fix that for you. You have to do that.

10. My family had a good time in Stanley Park; the kids played together, and we also brought some lunch.

11. I hope finished the English class to continue my education because I have a lots of goal.

RW I hope to finish the English class to continue my education because I have a lot of goals.

a lot of goals

lots of goals

Let’s stop making this mistake:

I want finished the class. XXX

I want to finish the class.

I hope to finish the class.

I want to go home.

She hope to learn the piano.

Jon wants to get a new job.

12. When we went to Stanley Park, we had a good time. The kids played some football, and we brought some lunch to eat.

13. We went camping for the weekend. The kids swam, and we made a barbecue for lunch. We had to come back early because it was raining.

14. We had a good time when we went to Stanley Park. The kids played together, and we bought lunch too.  bought/brought?

15. I would like to regret my lost time with my grandmother if there is a chance to go back into my childhood. Meaning?

I would like to get back/reclaim my lost time with my grandmother if there is a chance to go back to my childhood.

More explanation of comma splices:

Foundations 6 Haley

SHEC

What is a Comma Splice?

A comma splice happens when you use just a comma to join two complete sentences.  A comma just isn't strong enough to do the job.

Here is an example of a comma splice:

X I completed my essay, I have not submitted it.

How to Fix a Comma Splice

Solution 1: Use a period.

The simplest way to fix a comma splice is to separate the two sentences with a period.

  I completed my essay. I have not submitted it.

  I completed my English essay. Now I must go to the library to work on my history homework.

Solution 2: Use a semi-colon.

Use a semi-colon rather than a period if you want to show the sentences are very closely related.

  I completed my essay; I have not submitted it.

  I completed my English essay; next, I will tackle my history homework.

Solution 3: Use a coordinating conjunction.

A coordinating conjunction allows you to show the logical relationship between the two ideas.

  I completed my essay, but I have not submitted it.

HINT: Remember your seven coordinating conjunctions: FANBOYS

Solution 4: Use a subordinating conjunction.

You can also link your two sentences together using a subordinating conjunction.

  I completed my essay although I have not submitted it.

  Although I completed my essay, I have not submitted it.

There are lots of subordinating conjunctions that you can use.  Here are a few: while, although, because, if, since, unless, when, as, before, after, if.

HINT: The most important thing is to use a variety of solutions.  Don't always write the same kind of sentence.

Comma Splice Exercises

Fix the sentences that need to be fixed.

1. I love eating durian, it is one of my favourite things.

2. We had a good lunch on the patio, we enjoyed a lovely stroll along the beach. 

3. There are many reasons to visit Greece, the beaches are beautiful and the people are friendly.

4. I'll never be able to buy a house, prices these days are just ridiculous. 

5. I can not afford a house in Vancouver, so I am moving to Hope. 

6. This is a delicious cake, you must give me the recipe one day. 

7. I'm not surprised the residents were upset, the repair bills are going to be astronomical.

8. Hungary is an interesting country, the churches contain some of the finest frescoes found anywhere in Europe.

9. I dreamt I was eating the world’s largest marshmallow, now my pillow is gone.

YOUR SOLUTIONS:

1. I love eating durian because this is one of my favorite things.

2. I love eating durian. It is one of my favourite things.

3. I love eating durian which is one of my favourite things.

THREE DIFFERENT WAYS TO SAY THE SAME IDEAS

4. We had a good lunch on the patio, and we enjoyed a lovely stroll along the beach.

5. I love eating durian because it is one of my favourite things.

6. I love eating durian which is one of my favourite things.

7. I love to eat durian which is my favourite fruit.

8. This is a delicious cake, so you must give me the recipe one day.

9. I love eating durian, and it is one of my favourite things.

10. We had a good lunch on the patio, and strolled along the beach. XXX punc

11. There are many reasons to visit Greece because the beaches are beautiful and the people are friendly.

12. I would never be able to buy a house these days since the price are ridiculous.

13. There are many reasons to visit Greece: the beaches are beautiful and people are friendly.

14. We had a good lunch on the patio, also we enjoyed a lovely stroll along the beach. XXX punc

15. These days, the price of the house is ridiculous, so I am not able to buy it. RW phrasing

16. I love eating durian and this is one of my favourite fruit. XXX punc

17. I stared Writing my own story, it is all are the real story, about what happened to me. XXX RW

18. I am moving to Hope because I can’t afford the house prices in Vancouver.

19. I'm not surprised the residents were upset because the repair bills are going to be astronomical.

20. Hungary is an interesting country because the churches contain some of the finest frescoes found anywhere in Europe.

21. I’ll never be able to buy a house because prices these days are just ridiculous. COMPLEX

SIMPLE SENTENCE- one idea

COMPOUND SENTENCE- two ideas, balanced

COMPLEX SENTENCE- two ideas, one more important than the other

HOMEWORK: Go through your paragraphs and find some run-ons or comma splices. I usually use a correction code like ‘Divide” or “run-on”. Fix them.

This week:

• Paragraphs- 

Grabber

Topic sentence

• Sentence fragments

EF34 7PM June 2

 

 

 

Good evening, everybody.

We will get started at 7:00.

Cameras on. Mics muted until you are ready to talk.

 

 

Today’s agenda:

 

·      Discuss midterm recommendations and summer registration

·      Narrative writing

·      Test#2 Narrative paragraph

 

 

A bunch of people emailed me for midterm recommendations. I responded.

 

My response:

***

Hello,

The midterm mark is an average of the marked work we have done so far.

The cutoff average for early registration for next term is 65%.

The final passmark for the class is 50%.

Your midterm mark is 59%.

You should not register for the next level, yet.

Best,

Al

 

OR

 

Hello,

The midterm mark is an average of the marked work we have done so far.

The cutoff average for early registration for next term is 65%.

The final passmark for the class is 50%.

Your midterm mark is 79%.

You should register for the next level.

Best,

Al

 

I sent my recommendations to you if you emailed me and to the office.

 

A few people emailed me and said, “Can I have my midterm?”

NO NAME, NO CLASS, NO TIME.

DELETE

If you emailed me and didn’t hear back, that’s probably why.

 

 

Registration for summer began today. You can register is you have a midterm recommendation to go to the next level.

New way to register:

https://moodle.vsb.bc.ca/summer.php 

 

You need a Moodle account.

 

PEN – Personal Education Number. All VSB students have one. You do, too.

When you are singing up for the summer class, use the email that you use for school business. The program will find your PEN for you. If the program can not find your PEN, a teacher will get a message and will find it for you.

 

***Very important ***

It doesn’t matter what your average is. It’s not important.

What’s important is that your English is getting better a little bit each week.

 

 

 

Summer schedule Monday-Friday

https://www.vsb.bc.ca/Student_Learning/Adult_Education/Documents/Summer%20Schedule%202021%20Final.pdf

 

We do a smaller term in the summer. We have a bare bones schedule.

There are no evening classes in the summer.

 

Register as quickly as you are able, if you have the midterm recommendation for early registration.

 

Registration for September courses will begin in the summer. You will get an email.

 

I have been teaching in this school since 1993. I always do summer school.

 

One course is the maximum.

I will teach English Foundations 6 in the summer.

For September, I don’t know yet.

 

A lot of student retake their English in the summer just for review.

I recommend students not take English 10 or 12 in the summer. You have more time in September.

 

Test#2 – narrative paragraph

 

narrative writing – tell a story, “I” first person

Grabber

Topic sentence

Supporting sentences

Concluding sentence

(100-150 words)

 

 

 

Test#2

Write a narrative paragraph of about 100-150 words on one of the following topics.

Email this to me as an attachment by 8:45.

No late papers.

Cameras on.

Choose one topic:

1. A time I made a mistake

2. A funny thing that happened to me

EF34 11:00 June 2

 

 

Good morning, everybody.

We will get started at 11:00.

Cameras on. Mics muted.

 

Today’s agenda:

 

1.    Midterm recommendations and summer registration

2.    Test#2 Narrative paragraph

 

 

Registration for summer began today.

You can get your midterm recommendation from me. Email me.

A few people emailed asking for their midterm recommendation.

MY RESPONSE:

 

Hello,

The midterm mark is an average of the marked work we have done so far.

The cutoff average for early registration for next term is 65%.

The final passmark for the class is 50%.

Your midterm mark is 68%.

You should register for the next level.

OR

Your midterm mark is 54%.

You should not register for the next level yet.

 

I will answer any questions tomorrow in class.

Best,

Al

 

 

Midterm recommendations to go to the next level are for students who are doing well in the class: 65% and above.

If you have 65% and below, you can still pass the class. The final passmark is 50%. You just won’t get an early recommendation.

 

 

Some student have emailed me for their midterm recommendation.

No name, no class, not time in the subject line.

 

I have asked enough times for this information to be put in the subject line.

DELETED

If you sent me an email and I did not respond, that is probably why.

 

 

Barbara said that she really liked talking with you. She told me that you are a ‘lovely class’.

 

 

Summer Registration started today.

You can register using this website.

PEN – personal education number

Use the email address that you used in last year's Learning Plan. The program will find your PEN.

https://moodle.vsb.bc.ca/summer.php 

 

 

Thursday and Friday – teachers will be Joy and Crystal

 

I’ll be back on Monday.

I plan to be here for all of the remaining classes.

We have four weeks left.

 

 

 

Test #2 Narrative paragraph

Cameras on.

Write a 100-150-word narrative paragraph on one of the following topics.

Email it to me by 12:28.

No lates.

 

Choose one:

1. A time I made mistake

2. A funny thing that happened to me

EF6 8:30 June 2

 Good morning, everyone.

We will get started at 8:30.

Cameras on. Mics muted.

Today’s agenda:

1. Discuss midterm recommendations

2. Sentence combining- I emailed a sentence combining exercise for class Thursday and Friday.

3. Literary Terms- Thursday and Friday. Check your email.

4. I emailed you the poem, “Monster”. Crystal will talk with you about the poem. Crystal is a real expert in First Nations. She has a lot of information and wisdom to teach.

5. Test#2 – narrative paragraph

I will be away Thursday, and Friday. I have provincial meetings to discuss adult education. We work on ideas about how to preserve and grow adult education in BC.

There will be a substitute teacher, Crystal.

The class will have the same Zoom link.

Recommendations:

When you send me an email, I will send your midterm recommendation to you. Also, I send a copy of the recommendations to the office.

65% is the cutoff for early registration.

50% is the pass mark at the end of the course.

If you have 65% and over at midterm, that suggests that you are doing very well and can be successful in higher classes.

If you have less then 65% at midterm, that suggests that you are not doing as well yet. You may still pass in the end, but you have some work to do.

We don’t want students who are not ready for the next level to move up. It hurts the class. It is frustrating for the student and the teacher.

My advice is to stay at the level where you are doing just ok. Practice and get better before moving up to the next level.

When you move up, you can’t go back down.

A few people have sent me an email saying, “Can I get my midterm mark?” 

Subject line of the email- no name, no class, no time

DELETE

I won’t keep asking for that information- name, class, time.

If you sent me an email and I didn’t write back, that’s probably why.

******

Here is the link for Summer registration. I just received it: https://moodle.vsb.bc.ca/summer.php

******

**

Volunteering

Two good places to start:

https://www.southvan.org/get-involved/volunteer/ 

https://govolunteer.ca/ 

I’m sure there are other opportunities that you can find.

**

I am assuming that we will be back in class in September. We have not heard any official announcement about this yet. The VSB will announce their decision soon, I hope.

I will see you next on Monday. I won’t have to be away any more days. My plan is to be here, teaching you, for the last three and half weeks.

We’ll have fun.

Test#2

STRUCTURE

Grabber

Topic sentence

Supporting sentences

Concluding sentence

(150-200 words) (60 minutes)

NOTE: Dictionaries and translators are not allowed during tests. 

Plagiarism is not allowed.

I want to read your writing.

Write a paragraph on one of the following topics:

Email it to me by 10:05.

1. What would you do if you had a million dollars?

2. If you could meet anyone from history, who would you want to meet, and why?

3. If you could change anything about yourself, what would it be?