Sarah is not the only child in her
family, she also has two brothers.
Sarah is not the only child in her
family; in fact, she also has two brothers.
Sarah is an outgoing girl and she likes
to socialize with people.
Sarah is an outgoing girl who likes to
socialize with people
Sarah is an outgoing girl, and she likes
to socialize with people.
She was studying in Killarney High
School before she comes to South Hill.
She was studying in Killarney High
School before she came to South Hill.
She is now working in/at McDonald’s, to
earn some work experience.
She is now working in/at McDonald’s to
earn some work experience.
She was a Canadian citizen since last
year.
She has been a Canadian citizen since
last year.
She wants studying business in BCIT.
She wants to study business in BCIT.
She loves to play soccer and travelling.
She loves to play soccer and travel.
She loves soccer and travel.
She loves playing soccer and travelling.
like, love, hate, prefer, can’t stand,
start, begin continue
I like to run
I like running.
She prefers to stay home.
She prefers staying home.
There is a girl in my class whom I learn
alot about today.
whom- unusual usage, very formal
There is a girl in my class who I learned
a lot about today.
To whom it may concern,
She has no siblings and no pets as she
is allergic to all types of fur.
She has no siblings. Also, she has no
pets as she is allergic to all types of fur.
Her goal is to attend BCIT and take
courses in Finance. Which I think is wonderful.
Her goal is to attend BCIT and take
courses in Finance which I think is wonderful.
Her goal is to attend BCIT and take
courses in Finance. I think that’s wonderful.
He like playing video games and playing
basketball.
He likes playing video games and playing
basketball.
subject verb agreement
I go
You go
He goes
She goes
careless error
I find something different about her is
that she does not scare of anything that means shes a brave girl and I think
brave girls are always successful.
I find something different about her which
is that she is not scared of anything. That means she’s a brave girl, and I
think brave girls are always successful.
Furthermore, she does not have a job but
if she have a opportunity she wants to be a tutor.
Furthermore, she does not have a job,
but if she has an opportunity, she wants to be a tutor.
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He is a shy boy like me, because we
don’t like to speak in front of people.
After graduation, he will go back to
Antarctica and works over there.
While she have free time she will go to
her friend’s house have a party.
He like watch movie. But, he like play
soccer.
He has makes the plan go to UBC.
My partner, Fancy Pants, he comes from
China.
Her future plan is go to college do
accountant.
He really like basketball, he said that
he play it every week.
Chilly is a kind person who always take
care of he friends.
When she was in Antarctica, she taking
Bachelor of Science in Pharmacy.
UBC is her dream school. But she will
take general science in Langara.
Her strong heart keeps her happiness.
His hobby is computer games, then he
hopes his future job will be connected with his interests.
Cookie Monster comes from Antactica and
he is a International Student.
He have not yet to get a work.
He just passed his 19 year birthday.
Joe is a pen collecter, he loves to
collecting expansive pens.
I meet a cool guy today, he is a Japan.
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