Eng11 Sentence combining "In Touch"

Lots of ways- variety of styles- mix it up

EF4 - simple sentence
Eng 11- rich variety, interesting sentences
stretch our boundaries- comfortable writing

anxiety about writing, anxious- nervous, afraid

smoking cigarettes and dancing

1. Children are remarkable for something. KERNEL
Children are remarkable for something.
These children are .
Young children are remarkable for...
Children who are young are remarkable for...
The something is an ability
Children who are young are remarkable for an ability to remain "in touch" with their feeling.

She has the ability to sing opera in German.

2. They know themselves well, but they haven't learned to wear masks to cover up feelings.
They know themselves well; however, they haven't learned to wear masks to cover up feelings.
They know themselves well. However, they haven't learned to wear masks to cover up feelings.

Transition words- WAE pp296-299

She plays soccer; also, she plays volleyball.
She plays soccer. Also, she plays volleyball.
She plays soccer, also, she plays volleyball. WRONG

Which one do you know? Which ones do you not know yet?
Start to use them.


Because Although they know themselves well, they haven't learned to wear masks to cover up feelings.
although, even though, though- same meaning

VERY HIGH QUALITY WRITING

9-13
They acknowledge and show their feelings of joy, unhappiness, curiosity, and excitement.
Not only do they acknowledge their feelings, but also they also show joy, unhappiness, curiosity, and excitement. YOU CHOOSE

14-15
They do not repress feelings because they have not learned how.
They have not learned how to repress feelings.

16-19
They are in still in touch and respond with openness to the world and others.
They are in still in touch, so they respond with openness to the world and others.
As/ Since/ Becuase they are in still in touch, they respond with openness to the world and others.
They are still in touch enough to respond openly to the world and others. VERY NATURAL

MIX IT UP!!! 8>)

EF4/5 Compound sentences

Jericho Beach was windy yesterday, but North Van wasn't.
It was a beautiful day, so we went to Wreck Beach.
The kids played in the park, and we walked around.
We had a barbecue, but I burned the hamburgers.
We had a barbecue, and I got burned.
I wasn't  paying attention, so I burned my forearm.

upper arm

She had a barbecue, and she cooked salmon, potatoes, and fish.

She wrapped the salmon and potatoes in tinfoil/ aluminum foil, so it was very tender.

She slow-roasted a pork shoulder at 225 degrees for eight hours, so it was delicious.

He was vegan for ten years, but now he is not.

SOBA so or but and
FANBOYS for nor yet- uncommon

She is wearing a hat, for it is sunny today. UNUSUAL
It is sunny today, so she is wearing a hat. USUAL

He doesn't play soccer, nor does he play volleyball. UNUSUALLY FORMAL
He doesn't play soccer or volleyball. REAL ENGLISH

It is hot today, yet she is wearing a sweater.
It is hot today, but she is wearing a sweater.

SV , SOBA SV.

semicolons ;

therefore
however
also
otherwise
for example

It is hot today, but she is wearing a sweater.
It is hot today; however, she is wearing a sweater.

It is sunny today, so she is wearing a hat.
It is sunny today; therefore, she is wearing a hat.

She had a barbecue, and she cooked salmon, potatoes, and fish.
She had a barbecue; also, she cooked salmon, potatoes, and fish.

He plays basketball, and he plays soccer.
He plays basketball; also, he plays soccer.

He plays soccer and basketball. SIMPLE
He play soccer, and he plays basketball. COMPOUND


or and 
He celebrate Xmas and New Years. SIMPLE
We celebrate Xmas, and we celebrate New Years. COMPOUND

E11 Read history of Chinese in Canada http://www.ccnc.ca/toronto/history/info/content.html

·       Read history of Chinese in Canada

http://www.ccnc.ca/toronto/history/info/content.html

E11 Sentence combining

"Patrol"
Harris checks in at 4:00. KERNEL- centre
Jones checks in at 4:00. NEW INFORMATION, DON"T REPEAT

Jones and Harris check in at 4:00.
Both Jones and Harris check in at 4:00.
Both Jones and Harris check in together at 4:00.

Then they hustle downstairs. KERNEL
They hustle through the dispatch office.
They hustle into the garage.
Then they hustle downstairs through the dispatch office into the garage. SIMPLE SENT

Their car is gassed up.
It is ready for the night's patrol.
Their car is gassed up and ready for the night's patrol. SIMPLE
Their car is gassed up; therefore, it is ready for the night's patrol. COMPOUND
Their car is gassed up, so it is ready for the night's patrol. 
Their car is gassed up for the night's patrol. 

CHOICE- 
Their car, which is gassed up, is ready for the night's patrol. COMPLEX- ADJ CL


They nod to the people they know on the street.
They wave to the children.
But the evening stretches before them.
It stretches uneasily.

They nod to the people they know on the street, and they wave to the children.

They nod and wave to the people and children they know on the street.

YOU DECIDE

But the evening stretches uneasily before them.


They nod and wave to the people and children they know on the street; however, the evening stretches uneasily before them.

As they nod and wave to the people and children they know on the street, the evening stretches uneasily before them.

Even though they nod and wave to the people and children they know on the street, the evening stretches uneasily before them.

They nod and wave to the people and children they know on the street even as the evening stretches uneasily before them. !!

EF45 Simple Sentences

Ex 27
1. The old woman grows flowers.
The cat meows.
We study English.
2. I can draw and paint.
Mary plays soccer and dances.
Joe speaks English but doesn't speak German.
3.My mom and dad are playing badminton.
The young woman and the handsome boy work in the government.
Candy and I are very good friends.
Reading books and writing short stories are her hobbies.

Vancouver and Guangzhou are sister cities.
We used to call Beijing Peking.
We used to call Sarah Michele.
4. Are you studying now?
What time is it?
Are you kidding me?
Hey you?
What do you want?
Did you catch any Pokemon?

preposition- 

The cat is sleeping in the room.
Your passport is on the table.
Her pen is under the desk.
The dog is running in the park.
Your umbrella is beside the door.
Your umbrella is leaning against the wall.
He is looking for a job.
People in Canada are friendly to newcomers.

8. Did you get my email and reply to it?
Do you ski or snowboard?
Do you cook at home or eat out?

EF45 Sentences

She is Sarah.
Her name is Sarah.

He comes from Korea.
He came from Korea.
His home country is Korea.
He is Korean.
She is Japanese/ Canadian/ American/ Chinese/ Peruvian/ ese n / Ethiopian/ Finnish/ Swedish/ Dutch/ German/ Qatari/ Russian/ Sri Lankan/ Bangladeshi/ Vietnamese/ Laotian

She is a Vancouver person.
She is a citizen resident of Vancouver .
She lives in Vancouver.
She is a Vancouverite.
He is a New Yorker.
She is Quebecois. -Francophone
Anglophone- English speaker

He is a Torontonian.
She is a Haligonian.


bilingual
trilingual

"permanent resident"- legal term CURRENT TERM

"landed immigrant"- OLD TERM

SIMPLE SENTENCE- one subject + one verb

He has a job.
She has no job now.
He has three children.
He works in Hong Kong.
She volunteers at a community centre.
She plays tennis.
He plays ping pong.
She likes to go hiking.
She likes hiking.
He likes surfing.
She likes windsurfing.
He likes paddleboarding. He always wears a lifejacket.
You can rent a paddleboard at Deep Cove.
You can see otters and seals.
You can hike on Mount Seymour. Dog Mountain is a nice hike. We hiked to Mystery Lake.

E11 Proofreading examples

Sarah is not the only child in her family, she also has two brothers.

Sarah is not the only child in her family; in fact, she also has two brothers.

Sarah is an outgoing girl and she likes to socialize with people.

Sarah is an outgoing girl who likes to socialize with people

Sarah is an outgoing girl, and she likes to socialize with people.

She was studying in Killarney High School before she comes to South Hill.

She was studying in Killarney High School before she came to South Hill.

She is now working in/at McDonald’s, to earn some work experience.

She is now working in/at McDonald’s to earn some work experience.

She was a Canadian citizen since last year.

She has been a Canadian citizen since last year.

She wants studying business in BCIT.

She wants to study business in BCIT.

She loves to play soccer and travelling.

She loves to play soccer and travel.

She loves soccer and travel.

She loves playing soccer and travelling.

like, love, hate, prefer, can’t stand, start, begin continue

I like to run

I like running.

She prefers to stay home.

She prefers staying home.

There is a girl in my class whom I learn alot about today.

whom- unusual usage, very formal

There is a girl in my class who I learned a lot about today.

To whom it may concern,

She has no siblings and no pets as she is allergic to all types of fur.

She has no siblings. Also, she has no pets as she is allergic to all types of fur.

Her goal is to attend BCIT and take courses in Finance. Which I think is wonderful.

Her goal is to attend BCIT and take courses in Finance which I think is wonderful.

Her goal is to attend BCIT and take courses in Finance. I think that’s wonderful.

He like playing video games and playing basketball.

He likes playing video games and playing basketball.

subject verb agreement

I go

You go

He goes

She goes

careless error

I find something different about her is that she does not scare of anything that means shes a brave girl and I think brave girls are always successful.

I find something different about her which is that she is not scared of anything. That means she’s a brave girl, and I think brave girls are always successful.

Furthermore, she does not have a job but if she have a opportunity she wants to be a tutor.

Furthermore, she does not have a job, but if she has an opportunity, she wants to be a tutor.

PROOFREADING

YOU HAVE TO BE YOUR OWN PROOFREADER.

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He is a shy boy like me, because we don’t like to speak in front of people.

After graduation, he will go back to Antarctica and works over there.

While she have free time she will go to her friend’s house have a party.

He like watch movie. But, he like play soccer.

He has makes the plan go to UBC.

My partner, Fancy Pants, he comes from China.

Her future plan is go to college do accountant.

He really like basketball, he said that he play it every week.

Chilly is a kind person who always take care of he friends.

When she was in Antarctica, she taking Bachelor of Science in Pharmacy.

UBC is her dream school. But she will take general science in Langara.

Her strong heart keeps her happiness.

His hobby is computer games, then he hopes his future job will be connected with his interests.

Cookie Monster comes from Antactica and he is a International Student.

He have not yet to get a work.

He just passed his 19 year birthday.

Joe is a pen collecter, he loves to collecting expansive pens.

I meet a cool guy today, he is a Japan.