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Boxer was a horse who had “steadiness of character”. (2) Boxer, “an enormous beast” (2), was a friend of Benjamin’s. SHORT, INCORPORATED Boxer was a work horse who was “nearly eighteen hands high”. (2) Boxer was a huge horse who worked hard, and he was an “enormous beast”. (2) Boxer, who was an “enormous beast” (2), was a dumb horse who worked hard. Boxer, who was “an enormous beast” (2), was “nearly eighteen hands high”. TOO MUCH QUOTATION Boxer, who was “an enormous beast” (2), was unusually tall. WHERE TO PUT THE PERIOD? Boxer was a horse who had “steadiness of character”. (2) Boxer was a horse who had “tremendous powers of work.” (2) DETAIL, IMPORTANT BUT NOT CRITICAL … ellipsis …… NOT ENGLISH , etc I like dogs, cats, fish, goats, ……. NOT ENGLISH I like dogs, cats, fish, goats, etc. ENGLISH et cetera, and others … shows that words have been removed Benjamin and Boxer were great friends and loved to hang out on “Sundays together… never speaking.” (2) MUST BE GRAMMATICAL Benjamin and Boxer were great friends and loved to hang out on “Sundays… speaking.” (2) NOT GRAMMATICAL Benjamin, who was a donkey, was the “oldest… and the worst tempered” (2) of all the animals. GRAMMATICAL Benjamin, who was a donkey, was the “oldest… tempered” (2) of all the animals. NOT GRAMMATICAL … POWERFUL TOOL, USE IT WISELY, USE IT SPARINGLY [ ] square brackets- USED TO CHANGE WORDS, ONLY FOR GRAMMAR OR CLARITY Stephen Harper said, “[Obama] is a very nice man.” Benjamin and Boxer liked “spent their Sundays together”. (2) NOT GRAMMATICAL Benjamin and Boxer liked “spen[ding] their Sundays together”. (2) [] POWERFUL TOOL, USE IT WISELY, USE IT SPARINGLY Boxer and Benjamin “usually [liked] spen[ding] their Sundays together… never speaking.” (2) UGLY, NOT ELEGANT, AWKWARD, BETTER TO REWRITE IN A DIFFERENT WAY