E10/ EF7 Big Game Hunting/ Money

Big-Game Hunting

1.     Joshua is an eleven-year-old who works for his father as a wilderness guide, a trail cook, an equipment manager.

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2.     His father owns a ranch that caters to people who like hunting, fishing and exploring the outdoors on horseback.

3.     Joshua has accompanied his father on overnight hunting trips; indeed/in fact, he loved the outdoors all his life.

Joshua, who has loved the outdoors all his life, has accompanied his father on overnight hunting trips.

A lover of the outdoors all his life, Joshua has accompanied his …

4.     He now takes hunters, fishers and photographers into the wilderness alone for several days.

5.     He must take care of the horses and the gear and supervise the food.  Also, he must ensure the safety of his clients and make sure that they shoot, catch or photograph whatever they seek.

He must take care of the horses and the gear.  Also, he must supervise the food.  As well/ On top of that/ Most importantly, he must ensure the safety of his clients and make sure that they shoot, catch or photograph whatever they seek.

Money- much more challenging

1.     Money isn’t everything, but it’s a long way ahead of what comes next.

2.     Money is like a queen that gives rank and beauty.

3.     Money is also like muck because it is not good unless it be/ is spread.

4.     Money can’t buy friends, but it gives you a better class of enemy.

5.     When it is a question of money, everybody is of the same religion.