E10/ EF7 Big-Game Hunting possible solutions

Big-Game Hunting

1.Joshua is an eleven-year-old who works for his father as a wilderness guide, a trail cook, and an equipment foreman.

Joshua is eleven years old, and he works for his father as a wilderness guide, a trail cook, and an equipment foreman.

1.Joshua is an eleven-year-old wilderness guide, a trail cook, and an equipment foreman who works for his father.

What sounds best?

Adjectives modify nouns “a blue chair”

Nouns modify nouns “a work chair”

“a nice boy”

“a school boy”

“an eleven-year-old boy”

2.         His father owns a ranch which caters to people who like hunting, fishing, and exploring the outdoors on horseback.

His father owns a ranch which caters to hunters, fishermen and horseback riders.

XXX, XXX, and XXX.- Oxford comma

XXX, XXX and XXX.

Comma usage is very personal.

3.         Joshua has accompanied his father on overnight hunting trips; in fact, he/Joshua has loved the outdoors all his life.

Joshua, who has loved the outdoors all his life, has accompanied his father on overnight hunting trips.

Joshua has accompanied his father, who has loved the outdoors all his life, on overnight hunting trips.

4.         He now takes hunters, fishers, and photographers into the wilderness alone/by himself for several days.

Now he takes…

5.        

Pick an appropriate level of language.

You have to jump into the pool!

5.         He must take care of the horses and the gear, supervise the food, ensure the safety of his clients, and make sure that they shoot, catch or photograph whatever they seek.

He must take care of the horses and the gear; also, he must supervise the food and ensure the safety of his clients.  As well, he must make sure that they shoot, catch or photograph whatever they seek.

He must take care of the horses and the gear; also, he must supervise the food all the time ensuring the safety of his clients so that they can shoot, catch or photograph whatever they seek.

all the time= meanwhile most important