Today’s agenda
1. Paragraph review
2. Sentence combining from homework
3. Continue tomorrow- “Literary Terms”
We will begin short stories on Monday
4. Quiz#6 tomorrow – sentence combining, 6 sentences
** Paragraph
Structure- approx. 5-8 sentences, 150-200 words
Begin with a TS (topic sentence) – addresses the topic directly and clearly
“What would you do with a million dollars?”
TS- If I had a million dollars, I would do some things to help poor people, to help my parents, and to help myself.
GOOD OPTION – begin with a GRABBER, HOOK
-grabber- gets the attention of the reader
goes before the TS
Choices:
1. short anecdote – personal story
I was very poor when I was growing up. We had no money, so I know how important money is. If I had a million dollars, I would do some things to help poor people, to help my parents, and to help myself.
2. historical information
Humans have been using currency or money for thousands of years.
It exists in most cultures. It is essential for most human societies. If I had a million dollars, I would do some things to help poor people, to help my parents, and to help myself.
3. fact or statistic- numbers
The average worker in Canada has under $1000 saved for their
future. I would like to have a million dollars saved. If I had a million dollars, I would do some things to help poor people, to help my parents, and to help myself.
4. expression or adage
We say that the love of money is the root of all evil. Nevertheless, I would love to have a million dollars. If I had a million dollars, I would do some things to help poor people, to help my parents, and to help myself.
5. quotation from a famous person –
FREE ADVICE- Learn some quoations on various topics. Have them in your memory.
6. ask a question
Would you like to have a millions dollars? So would I. If I had a million dollars, I would do some things to help poor people, to help my parents, and to help myself.
7. general to specific statement
There are many things that are important in life such as family, health, and peace of mind. Money is also very important. If I had a million dollars, I would do some things to help poor people, to help my parents, and to help myself.
Paragraph structure:
Grabber
TS
Supporting sentences
Concluding paragraph
Things to remember:
1. indent your first word
2. doublespace
3. font size
4. *** sentences – simple, compound, complex
Time is a challenge when we are writing.
Please remind me - 40-45m
I am noticing a steady improvement in the writing.
- paragraphs, sentences
We will just keep going with sentences and paragraphs.
When should we start on essays?
Try some of these for homework:
1. Ike remembers water skiing.
It was his first experience.
He remembers it vividly.
It was with his uncle.
His uncle lives on the Lake of the Woods.
Your solutions from #1:
1. Ike vividly remembers his first experience of water skiing with his uncle who lives on the Lake of the Woods. adj cl
2. Ike remembers vividly his first experience of water skiing with his uncle who lives on the Lake of the Woods.
3. Ike remembers water skiing vividly that was his first experience and with his uncle who lives on the Lake of the Woods.
Ike remembers water skiing vividly; that was his first experience with his uncle who lives on the Lake of the Woods.
4. Ike vividly remembers his first water skiing with his uncle, who lives on the Lake of the Woods.
5. Ike vividly remembers his first water skiing experience with his uncle who lives on the Lake of the Woods.
6. Ike vividly remembered vividly his first experience of water skiing vividly with his uncle, who lives on the Lake of the Woods.
7. Ike remembers vividly his first experience of water skiing with his uncle who lives on the Lake of the Woods.
8. Ike remembers his first water skiing vividly with his uncle that/who lives on the lake of the Woods.
2. Ike bobbed up and down.
He was in the water.
The water was cold.
He was trying to keep his skis pointed at the boat.
His skis were oversized.
His life jacket was floating him high out of the water.
Your examples of #2:
1. Ike bobbed up and down in the cold water, his life jacket was floating him high out of the water while he was trying to keep his oversized skis pointed at the boat. CS comma splice
Ike bobbed up and down in the cold water; his life jacket was floating him high out of the water while he was trying to keep his oversized skis pointed at the boat.
2. Ike bobbed up and down in the cold water and was trying to keep his oversized skis pointed at the boat while his life jacket was floating him high out of the water.
3. Ike bobbed up and down in the cold water as he was trying to keep his oversized skis pointed at the boat; accordingly, his life jacket was floating him high out of the water.
4. Ike who bobbed up and down in the cold water was trying to keep his oversized skis pointed at the boat while his life jacket was floating him high out of the water.
5. Ike bobbed up and down in the cold water with a life jacket that was floating him high out of the water, and he was trying to keep his oversized skies pointed at the boat.
6. Ike bobbed up and down in the cold water and was trying to keep his oversized skis pointed at the boat while his life jacket was floating him high out of the water.
7. Ike bobbed up and down in the cold water while he was trying to keep his oversized skis pointed at the boat and his life jacket was floating him high out of the water.
Good job. Excellent sentences! Top quality.
3. The outboard screamed alive.
The outboard was a 75-horse.
It pulled Ike forward.
It pulled him out of the water.
He felt a sense of flying.
He felt this for a moment.
He fell forward.
He came out of his skis.
He was pulled along.
He was bouncing on his stomach.
The outboard screamed alive
75-horse
pulled Ike forward
out of the water
felt a sense of flying
for a moment
fell forward
came out of his skis
was pulled along
was bouncing on his stomach
held on
horsepower- strength of an engine
When the 75-horse outboard screamed alive and pulled Ike forward out of the water, he felt a sense of flying for a moment before he fell forward out of his skis and was pulled along bouncing on his stomach.
Very complex and dense sentence.
Higher level writing- not basic level writing.
Too hard? Good goal to look toward.
Practice and keep getting better.
You can do it. You have all of the tools.
We will finish these tomorrow:
4. He didn't know why.
He swallowed water.
It seemed like gallons.
He found himself unable to breathe.
5. He went under.
He let go.
He came to the surface.
He wondered why people thought that this was fun.
6. He tried again.
He tried later.
He stayed up for a minute.
He knew that he was hooked on this sport.
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