Good morning, everyone.
We will get started at 8:30.
Today’s agenda
1. Sentence combining from homework
2. Continue tomorrow- “Literary Terms”
3. Test#4- paragraph on a general topic
Adults watch.
They are in awe.
They are cringing.
Some children are crying.
Some children cover their ears.
They want to see more.
My example:
Adults watch
in awe
are cringing
Some children are crying
cover their ears
want to see more
Cringing adults watch in awe while some crying children cover their ears; they all want to see more.
adj noun parallelism – similar structures repeated, nice style
Skydivers float to earth.
They are 1000 metres up.
They float gently.
They float down.
They guide their falls.
They land on a cross.
The cross is white.
Skydivers float to earth
1000 metres up
gently
down
guide their falls
land on a cross
white
From 1000 metres up, skydivers float gently down to earth and
guide their falls to land on a white cross.
Biplanes engage in fights.
The planes are imitations of early aircraft.
The fights are typical of WW1.
Biplanes engage in fights
imitations of early aircraft
typical of WW1
Biplanes which are imitations of early aircraft engage in fights that were typical of WW1.
Your solutions:
1. Adults watch some children cringing, crying, and covering their-ears; they want to see more of children who are in awe. XXX They are watching airplanes, not children.
2. Adults who are in awe and cringing watch; also, some children are crying and cover their•ears but they want to see more. AWK
3. Adults who watch are in awe and cringing, but some children are crying and cover their ears; though, they want to see more. ww
4. Adults watch in awe and cringing while some children cover their ears and are crying; however, they want to see more. WO
5. When the cringing adults watch in awe, some crying children cover their ears; nevertheless, they all too see more.
6. Adults watch in awe and are cringing; likewise, some children are crying and cover their ears, but they want to see more. Good.
7. Skydivers who float to earth about 1000 meters up, float gently down and land on the white cross while they are guiding their falls. Good
8. The biplanes that are imitations of early aircraft engage in fights that are typical of WW1. Mine
9. Cringing adults are watching in awe and some crying children cover their ears; even though, they still want to see more. Good
10. Skydivers who are 1000 metres up guide their falls while they float gently down to earth; furthermore, they land on a white cross. Good
11. Skydivers whichc are 1000 metres up float down to earth gently, and they land on a white cross because they guide their falls.
12. The skydivers float gently down to earth from 1000 metres up to land on a white cross by guiding their falls. Good
13. Biplanes which are imitations of early aircraft engage in fights that are typical of WW1. Mine
14. Skydivers float gently down to earth from 1000 metres up to guide their fall and land on a white cross. Good
You have work to do to be able to write more authentic sounding English. You have to use English, not just study it.
Your familiarity with real everyday English needs to increase.
This is challenging and important work.
Try some of these for homework:
A Memory
1. Ike remembers water skiing.
It was his first experience.
He remembers it vividly.
It was with his uncle.
His uncle lives on the Lake of the Woods.
2. Ike bobbed up and down.
He was in the water.
The water was cold.
He was trying to keep his skis pointed at the boat.
His skis were oversized.
His life jacket was floating him high out of the water.
3. The outboard screamed alive.
The outboard was a 75-horse.
It pulled Ike forward.
It pulled him out of the water.
He felt a sense of flying.
He felt this for a moment.
He fell forward.
He came out of his skis.
He was pulled along.
He was bouncing on his stomach.
4. He held on.
He didn't know why.
He swallowed water.
It seemed like gallons.
He found himself unable to breathe.
5. He went under.
He let go.
He came to the surface.
He wondered why people thought that this was fun.
6. He tried again.
He tried later.
He stayed up for a minute.
He knew that he was hooked on this sport.
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