EF6 July 23

 

Today’s agenda

·      Quiz#5-adj cl

 

·      Talk about replacement quiz for next week

·      Discuss Test#2 Rosa/Viola

·      Begin sentence combining

·       

·      HW   Do “Cherries” sentence combining

Paragraph on Monday

 

 

** Optional replacement quiz **

 

A few people have asked me about rewriting quizzes. I  my classes, I offer a replacement quiz for anyone who would like to do that.

 

Next week, you will have an opportunity to replace one of the quizzes you wrote. This is optional. You don’t have to do it if your don’t want.

 

As of today, we will have done five quizzes:

 

Quiz#1- simple sentences              x/3

Quiz#2 – compound                        x/3

Quiz#3- adverb clauses                   x/3

Quiz#4- noun clauses                      x/3

Quiz#5- adjective clauses               x/3

 

(I will try to get your quiz back today, but it might be Monday.)

 

You can replace one of those quizzes. You choose which one.

One is one. Not two, not three. 1=1

 

The replacement quiz will be a new quiz. The replacement quiz will be a mix of all sentence styles. You will do the replacement quiz during regular class time, as usual.

 

The replacement quiz will be six sentences- mix of simple, compound, complex

 

Your old mark will be replaced with the new mark. It will not be the higher of the two marks.

 

 

 

SCENARIO#1

Q1 2/3

Q2 0/3 2/3

Q3 3/3

Q4 2.8/3

Q5 2.5/3

 

Replace Q2.

Replacement quiz 2/3

 

 

SCENARIO#2

Q1 2/3 1.5/3

Q2 2.2/3

Q3 3/3

Q4 2.8/3

Q5 2.6/3

 

Replace Q1.

Replacement quiz 1.5/3

 

Think about if you would like to replace one of your quiz marks.

If you pretty good marks, just leave them. Don’t bother with the replacement quiz.

 

Email me by Tuesday at 1PM which quiz you would like to replace.

 

Make sure you use a proper Subject line:

 

Name, Class, Time, Replacement quiz.

I will not accept late emails.

 

Hi Al,

I want to replace Quiz#2.

Thanks,

Betty

 

I will respond.

Ok. Thanks.

Al

 

 

 

We might do a replacement test in the final week if we have time.

 

 

The final piece of writing will be an essay. We will do that right at the end of the course.

We will likely do the essay on the final Thursday, Aug 5.

I will mark very quickly and get them back to you.

The last day, Friday, Aug 6, will be review, and also I will give you your final mark, final average. That will be one-on-one.

 

Your average will from the quizzes, the tests, and the essay. %

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Monday

·      Test#2 – paragraph about Viola Desmond/Rosa Parks

Paragraph, 150-200 words

Grabber

Topic sentence that relates directly to the question

Supporting sentences

Concluding sentence

(45-50m)

 

OPTIONS:

I give two topics.

1.    narrative-tell a personal story

2.    academic- write about the stories either/or Rosa/Viola, no first person “I”

 

Either way, make reference to the source texts.

You should refer in your writing to stories about Rosa/Viola.

Let the teacher know that you are familair with the stories.

I will not ask you to summarize the stories. Don’t just summarize the stories.

 

 

2.some possible questions

a.     Why did Rosa and/or Viola protest the way that they did?

b.    Were Rosa and/or Viola right to break the law in protest?

c.     ...

d.    Tell the story of Rosa and/or Viola. Write a summary of what they did.

 

For homework, make sure you are familiar with the what Rosa/Viola did. I suspect you are already.

 

 

 

Next steps in writing

 

Review:

Sentence styles

SIMPLE

COMPOUND

COMPLEX

COMPOUND COMPLEX

 

These are the foundations of writing for me, for you, for everybody.

We will continue to work on this for the next two weeks.

 

I’m all about strong sentences.

I use these sentences in my writing and in my editting business. I use these sentences as a foundation for everything I write.

 

Let’s put this into practice.

 

#1 best to improve and practice sentence writing is sentence combining.

Sentence writing- William Strong

He has lots of books out. They tend to be college level and higher.

It is possible to find beginner level and intermediate level.

EF6 -somewhere between upper intermediate and advanced.

 

sentence combining exercises – some very challenging, some much easier

-some are hard for me to do

 

-wide range of levels- we will start mid level, we can stay easy or get as hard as you want

 

You can find books on sentence combining. You may have to dig for them.

I got a bunch from a UBC professor when he retired.

 

 

Sentence combining- take several short sentences and combine to make one dense concise sentence.

dense- a lot of meaning

concise- as short as possible

 

Example sentence combining exercise:

 

 

 

 

 

 

Dad at Home

 

1.    Jackie's dad is a truck driver. KERNEL

Find new information.

He has driven for twenty years.

He is taking a year off.

He will be with Jackie.

 

Jackie's dad is a truck driver

has driven for twenty years

is taking a year off

will be with Jackie

Combine these elements into one dense concise sentence.

What kind of sentence should you choose: simple, compound, complex, compound complex.

This is gut reaction, a feeling.

 

Lot of information. simple compound, complex

 

Jackie's dad is a truck driver who has driven for twenty years; he is taking a year off and will be with Jackie. compound complex

 

Jackie's dad has been a truck driver for twenty years and

is taking a year off to be with Jackie. simple

 

Jackie’s dad who is a truck driver with 20 years of driving history is going to take a year off to be with Jackie. complex- adj cl

 

 

I am showing the steps very clearly and methodically. With practice, you will do the steps in your head.

 

 

2.    He now works at home. kernel

He works with Jackie.

He works as a parent.

The parenting is a full-time job.

 

He now works at home

with Jackie

as a parent

a full-time job

 

simple

He now works full-time at home as a parent for Jackie.

 

complex

He now works at home with Jackie as a parent which is a full-time job.

 

          simple

          Now, his full time job is working as a parent for Jackie.

 

compound

He now works a full-time job at home, and he is a parent for Jackie.

 

This shows the wide range of sentences that you can write. Some of these are better than others. You can choose the ones you like.

 

 

3.    They clean the house.

They repair the house.

They cook the meals.

They shop.

They have fun.

4.    They play in the afternoon.

They paint.

They picnic.

They go to movies.

They cycle.

5.    Jackie is four.

She enjoys each day.

Each day is spent with her dad.

 

Your examples:

1.    Now he works at home as Jackie’s parent which is a full time job.

2.    Jackie who is now four enjoys each day spent with her dad.

3.    Jackie is four, and she enjoys each day spent with her dad.

4.    Jackie is four who enjoys each day with her dad. XXX

Jackie is four who enjoys each day with her dad.

adj cl describes a noun

‘four’ adj

Jackie who enjoys each day with her dad is four.

omitted ‘spent’

5.    Jackie who is four enjoys each day with her dad.

6.    After they repair and clean the house, they cook the meals then go to the shop for having fun. RW vf RO

After they repair and clean the house, they cook the meals. Then they go to the shop to have fun.

 

Must remember our sentence types.

 

7.    They have fun shopping and doing household chores.

8.    They clean and repair the house, cook the meals and shop, which all are fun. Nice style. parallelism

 

9.    Jackie is four and enjoys each day spent with her dad.

10.           They play, paint, picnic, cycle, and go to movies in the afternoon. simple SVVVVV.

 

11.           Jackie is four, and enjoys spending time with her dad each day. punc

Jackie is four and enjoys spending time with her dad each day. SVV

 

Jackie is four, and she enjoys spending time with her dad each day. COMPOUND  , SOBA

 

12.           Jackie is four, she enjoys spent with her dad each day. XXX

FIX

Jackie is four; she enjoys each day spent with her dad.

 

13.           They clean and repair the house after shopping and cooking the meals; they have fun. balance

 

14.           Jackie who is four enjoys each day with her dad.

15.           They had fun cleaning and doing a repair in their house. After, they cooked meals that they shopped. RW

 

16.           They play in the afternoon and paint while they picnic; go to movie and also cycling.

They play in the afternoon and paint while they picnic; they go to the movie and also go cycling.

 

17.           they paint, picnic and go to movies in the afternoon. cap

They...

 

18.           Jackie who is four enjoys each day that spend with her dad.

Jackie who is four enjoys each day that she spends with her dad.

 

19.           Four-year-old Jackie enjoys spending every day with her father/dad.

20.           Bfore they go to movies, they played, painted, and had a picnic in the afternoon, then cycle home in the end. RW

Before they went to movies, they played, painted, and had a picnic in the afternoon; then they cycled home in the end.

 

21.           Jackie who is a four-year-old enjoys each day she spent with her dad.

22.           They clean and repair the house, and they had fun with shopping for cooking the meals. awk

They clean and repair the house, and they had fun with shopping and with cooking the meals.

 

23.           They cline the house, who coined her sister’s house repair and cooked, when they were finished. RW Meaning?

 

24.           They who have fun clean and repair the house, then  cook the meals and shop. RW Not a sentence.

 

25.           They clean the house and repair. They cook meals together. Also, shop and have fun.  RW

 

 

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Hypenated nouns that modify nouns

a little kid  ‘little’ (adj)

a three year old kid ‘three year old’ (noun)

a three-year-old kid

When nouns modify nouns, hypenate them.

 

dash hyphen

dash --

hyphen –

 

em-dash? en-dash?

 

Examples of hyphenated nouns that modify nouns.

This class is three hours long.

This is a three-hour class.

 

Sarah is 38 years old.

Sarah is a 38-year-old.

 

My son is 15 years old.

He is a 15-year-old teenager.

He is a 15 year old teenager. Stands out as looking incorrect

 

 

FOR HOMEWORK- The first ones are easier then the later one.

 

Cherries

 

1.    Barb crouched behind the fence.

Helga crouched behind the fence.

The fence was broken.

Barb crouched with excitement.

Helga crouched with excitement.

2.    They looked without moving.

They looked across the orchard.

They saw Mr. Walden.

He went into the house.

3.    They stared at the tree.

The tree was laden.

The load was of cherries.

The cherries were ripe.

4.    The girls talked for ten minutes.

They talked about stealing some cherries.

They talked about punishment.

The punishment would follow getting caught.

The punishment would be from their parents.

5.    Helga laughed.

She suggested trying something new.

She suggested asking for some cherries.

She suggested asking Mr. Walden.

6.    They walked to the porch.

They met Mr. Walden.

He was coming down the steps.

They asked him.

He grinned.

He said that he had seen them earlier.

He said that he had seen them behind the fence.

7.    He laughed.

He said, “Help yourself.”

 

 

 

 

 

 

·      Read through UN Declaration of Human Rights.

https://www.un.org/en/about-us/universal-declaration-of-human-rights

Choose one of the articles that speaks to you. Prepare a few sentences to tell us which acticle you chose and a sentences about why for next class.

·      Sentence combining from homework “Cherries”