Good
morning, everyone.
We
will get started at 8:30.
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on. Mics muted.
Monday,
August 2nd is a holiday. BC Day
We
will have no school on Monday.We will be back Tuesday.
Next
week, we will an optional replacement test. Also, we will write an essay.
Today’s agenda
·
Talk about replacement test.
·
Continue with “Roses Sing on New Snow”
·
Paragraph work-quoting “ ”
·
Finish literary terms
·
Sentence combining work from homework PROBABLY
NO TIME
·
Test#3 tomorrow – paragraph focussed on RSoNS
Optional replacement test (paragraphs)- same structure and
intent of the replacement quiz
Email me by Tuesday at 1 which test you would like to replace.
*This is optional*
Test 1, 2 or 3.
Titles:
“Roses Sing on New Snow” -title of a short story “ “
12 Rules of Life OR 12 Rules of Life – title of
a book, underline OR italics
e.g. I am reading a book called 12 Rules for Life about
how people who feel that their lives are chaotic can start to organize themselves.
I am reading a book called 12 Rules for Life about
how people who feel that their lives are chaotic can start to organize themselves.
In the short story “Roses Sing on New Snow”, profound themes
of personal transformation are explored.
We saw Titanic last night. We saw Titanic last
night.
I really like the song “Yesterday”.
Faranak enjoyed watching Lost.
Friends is a very popular TV show all around the
world.
Hopefully everyone has read the story a couple of times at
least.
Primary importance is to have read the source texts.
If you come to class not having read the source texts, then
you are lost.
If you come to class having read the source texts, then you
are in the driver’s seat, ready to engage.
I’ve done both, and being prepared is better.
First reading- armchair, cup of tea, relaxed- read for the
bascs: setting, plot, character, summary of the story, overall image in your
mind, overall unity *Important to read the story all in one sitting.
Second reading- desk, focus, go deeper, look for deeper
ideas: which characters are title? Why those words?, dynamic?, symbols,
phrases, vocab, conflicts person vs ?, theme- deeper message about human nature
*Make notes, write it down- key ideas, key vocab, key
phrases
You will have things to say. You will have ideas floating around.
This is my process. It might work for you.
“Roses Sing on New Snow”
Basic Questions
1. What is the
setting of the story?
2. Why does Maylin
cook in her father’s restaurant?
3. What are some
reasons the governor couldn’t cook “Roses Sing on New Snow” the same as Maylin
did?
-skill, experience
-signature dish
-cooks with her heart, governor is mimicing her
- deeper meaning – metaphor
-different power, different use of power
4. In what ways was
Maylin a dynamic character?
-Is Maylin abused forced/exploited or free?
bold, confident, quietly assertive, wise
More in-depth
5. What are some
possible reasons Maylin named her dish “Roses Sing on New Snow”? Why those
words?
Roses metaphor
Sing
6. What did Maylin
mean when she told the governor, "This is a dish of the New World. You
cannot recreate it in the Old."
7. What did Maylin
mean when she asked the governor, "If you and I sat down with paper and
brush and black ink, could we bring forth identical paintings?"
8. What theme (main
idea or comment on human nature) is the story conveying? Why did Paul Yee write the story, do you
think?
National Film Board animated “Roses Sing on New Snow”,
search
https://www.nfb.ca/film/roses_sing_on_new_snow/
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=DbIpPDfQD3s
Paragraph structure:
Grabber (optional, but recommended) – 7 ways to choose from
Topic sentence – related directly to the question
*Your topic sentence must be clear and obvious. The teacher/reader
should be able to tell which question you are answering. If you write about the
story without a topic sentence, then the paragraph will have no focus or
direction.
Some of you wrote about the story and about Maylin but you
did not have any topic sentence to direct the paragraph. The writing is loose and
unfocussed and directionless like a feather in the wind.
You must write a paragraph that answers one of the
questions. You can just write about the story in a general way.
Supporting sentences, supporting points related to the topic
sentence. They support the topic sentence.
Different purposes in writing:
-for academic writing- clear and direct is the way to go
-for creative writing, writing your own short stories- indirect,
ambiguous, symbolic, circling the topic
Concluding sentence
(150-200 words)
Writing about a short story.
Paragraph – 150-200 words
Structure of the paragraph
Grabber (optional)
Topic sentence – closely connected to the question
e.g What is the setting of “Roses Sing on New Snow”?
Topic sentences -
directly linked to that question
- borrow words
from the question
-use synonyms
TS example:
The setting of “Roses Sing on New Snow” is a Chinatown in
North America, probably Vancouver, about 100 years ago.
eg Why did Maylin challenge the governor?
- borrow words or use synonyms
TS In
“Roses Sing on New Snow”, the protagonist, Maylin, challenged the antagonist, the governor for three
reasons.
There are a number
of key factors in “Roses Sing on New Snow” that caused the protagonist, Maylin,
to challenge the antagonist, the governor.
TS and preview e.g. “for
three reasons”
HIGHER LEVEL TS: In “Roses
Sing on New Snow” the protagonist, Maylin, challenged the the governor becuase
she wanted the show him that he couldn’t push her around, and she wanted to
teach him a lesson about how to treat people.
eg Was Viola Desmond
right to protest the way that she did?
Direct TS Viola
Desmond did the right thing when she fought against the unspoken segregation
that she was faced with. These are two main reasons why.
There are many ways
to write a TS. Just be sure your TS addresses the question directly, fits the
question like LEGO.
NOTE: If you want to
be indirect, be cautious.
SUPPORTING SENTENCES – giving evidence
Eng11 or Eng12 question: How does the setting of “Roses Sing
on New Snow” affect how Maylin is a dynamic character?
TS:
The setting of “Roses Sing on New Snow” affects how Maylin is
able to changes in three ways.
NOTES TO BE WRITTEN INTO SENTENCES
cultural setting
1.difference in status between the governor and Maylin,
forces Maylin to speak up for herself
2.lower position of women in the family, Mayline has to
become a leader in her family because brothers and father are useless
3.societal perception of women as being unable to be
community leaders- Maylin overcomes this – wise, respected- in Chinatown and
China
When we write about short stories, just write about the
story. Answer the question.
Don’t use first person, “I”. You are not in the story. The
question is not about you. The question is about the story.
e.g. I read the story. I really liked it. For me, Maylin...
Do not write a plot summary. I am not asking you to retell
the story.
e.g. A young named Maylin spend all of her days cooking
in the restaurant that was owned by her
father. One day, there was a special visitor...
Understanding the plot if only the first level of
understanding a story.
If you write a plot summary, it just won’t get a mark.
Question?
Answer directly connected to the question.
“ “ quoting from a story
Borrow words from a story
-“ “ put quotation marks
around the word or few words
-incorporate the quotation into a sentence
1. Quote only a few
words. If you quote a whole sentence, or more than a few words, that’s not
right.
If you writing 10-page papers, you can quote longer
passages; however, for a 150-200 word paragraph you must keep the quotations to
just a few words.
Goal: choose 1-4 words to quote.
2. Incorporate the
quoted word(s) into your writing. Make the quoted word(s) fit into your
sentence.
e.g. “fine food”
Maylin worked very hard to cook “fine food” for her
customers.
-short
-incorporated
Maylin cooked in “a
spot well known throughout the New World for its fine food.” XXX – way too
long, may too many words
Her father gave all the credit to her brothers even though
they were “fat and lazy”.
-short
-incorporated
Maylin worked very hard to cook well for her customers:
“fine food”. XXX short, not incorporated
The quoted words must be part of the sentence.
Some more example:
1. The governor
“eyes lit up” when the dish arrived at his table.
2. She cooked and
designed the dishes not just to fulfill her duty; in addition, she loved to
"renew the spirit" of those "bone-tired" men.
She loved to bring comfort to those "bone-tired"
men.
She loved to "renew the spirit" of her customers.
3. The brothers were
fat because of their "overeating".
4. Maylin cooks
meals using “only the best ingredients” for customers.
“ “ NOT ‘
‘
The difference is not important right now.
*Quote important words, not common words.
eg dish man woman “overeating” “delectable flavors”
Why am I using this word? Is it a word that I would use
normally, or am I using it because I found it in the story?
The food had a “delectable” taste.
There will be some grey area. Much of it will obvious.
5. Maylin refuses
the governor because he "cannot recreate the dish"
Maylin refuses the governor because he "cannot recreate
the dish". punc agr
6. The governor’s
“face paled" when he tasted his own dish even though the ingredients were
the same.
7. Maylin works
very hard “every week” at her father’s restaurant.
8. Maylin and the
governor cooked ''side by side'' in the same way.
9. The governor
chopsticks “dipped eagerly” into each food.
10. Maylin made
food for "bone-tired" men which encouraged them in a foreign country.
11.
Even Maylin’s father doesn’t treat her well. She never gave up on being
a cook because she “loved food.” frag
FIX
Even though Maylin’s father doesn’t treat her well, she
never gave up on being a cook because she “loved food.”
12.
Her father “hung his head in shame”, because He didn’t cook the food.
punc cap
Her father “hung his head in shame” because he didn’t cook
the food.
That is a really good start with quotations.
You really have to start focusing on the details such as
punc and cap.
For our paragraph on Friday, I want you to put a few
quotations into your writing. You can look at the story. If a teacher wants you
to quote a few things, they have to let look at the story. Nobody expects you to
remember the exact words of the story.
In a 150-200 word paragraph, how many quotations would be
good?
One is not enough. If you have 3-4 points, then 3-4 short
quotations should be perfect.
Like spicy peppers in food, a little goes a long way. Just a
few is enough
Try putting a few short quotations into your paragraph IF
YOU WANT.
If you don’t want to, no problem.
If you borrow words from the story, you have to quote them.
If you don’t want to quote, then don’t borrow.
SENT COMB from HW
Although we were worried about moving day, it turned out to
be the smoothest in memory.
The flight to Beijing was the smoothest in memory.
My job interview at Shaw was the smoothest in memory.
something goes smoothly – no problems, quick, efficient
in memory- moved many times, this was the best one
