EF67
Return books next Monday and Tuesday
Writing to Communicate
The Least You Should Know about English
Today’s agenda
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Continue sentence combining “Washing the Car”
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Continue essay work
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Continue presentation project
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Email about replacement quiz and/or test-
deadline 5pm.
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HW Sentence
combining “At the Beach”
Friday
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I will be absent. Another teacher will be
here.
TOPICS: Essay writing
Sentence combining
MONDAY –
We will write our first essay. Worth 20pts
Monday
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Talk about presentation, microphones
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Essay#1 (2hrs)
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Collect books
Tuesday
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Presentations
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Collect books
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Optional replacement quiz
Wednesday
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Finish presentations
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Optional replacement test
Thursday
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Essay#2- final work for marks
Friday
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Final day
Final marks and reports
No instruction
-parallelism
Sentence Combining
PROCESS
1.
Kernel
2.
Find new information
3.
Decide what kind of sentence
“Washing the Car”
1.Janet woke up early on Saturday. SIMPLE
2.She prepared to wash the car; therefore, she prepared
REP quickly and with excitment. XXX
She prepared quickly and excitedly to wash her
mother’s new car.
-parallelism – words in a row should be the same type of
word, similar word form, structure
She prepared quickly and with excitement to wash her
mother’s new car.
Which one sounds better?
3.Her mother carefully drove the car out of the
garage. SIMPLE
Her mother drove the car out of the garage, and the
driving was careful XXX. UNNECESSARY REP, OVERWRITTEN
Carefully, her mother carefully drove the car carefully
out of the garage carefully. Lots of choice for where to put adverbs,
4.They gathered the supplies that were for cleaning outside.
COMPLX- ADJ CL
They gathered the cleaning supplies outside. SIMPLE
The supplies were for cleaning, so they gathered them
outside. WEAK
5.They unwound the hose, and Janet sprayed the car gently.
CMPND
After they unwound the hose, Janet sprayed the car gently.
COMPLX ADV CL
Janet sprayed the car gently after they unwound the hose.
COMPLX ADV CL
6.They washed the car together with soft sponges. SIMPLE
Together, they washed the car with soft sponges.
7.Afterwards, Janet sprayed the car to rinse it. SIMPLE SV
Afterwards, Janet sprayed and rinsed the car. SIMPLE SVV
Janet sprayed and rinsed the car afterwards.
Janet sprayed the car to rinse it afterwards.
Afterwards, we went home.
We went home afterwards.
We went to a movie; afterwards, we went home.
We went to a movie. Afterwards, we went home.
We went to a movie; we went home afterwards.
TRUTH- Comma usage is very personal. Good writers use commas
in slightly different ways. My advice is to find a writer that you like and
trust and follow their style.
8.They dried and polished it thoroughly. SIMPLE
They thoroughly dried and polished it.
They dried it, and then they polished it thoroughly.
OVERWRITTEN
9.In an hour, they had a shiny car in the driveway.
They had a shiny car in the driveway in an hour.
HOMEWORK “At the Beach”
REVIEW “The Bare Bones of a Five-Paragraph Academic Essay”
Five-paragraph essay – most basic form, 3X5 essay, academic
essay, go-to model for essays, IKEA essay
PARAGRAPH begin
with a grabber (optional)
topic sentence
ESSAY Introductory paragraph – expands on the
paragraph,
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expands the grabber and TS into s short
paragraph
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Thesis statement, thesis (idea)
3 Body paragraphs - supporting points, each one will get a
short
paragraph
Concluding
paragraph-
It is not necessary to write a concluding sentence for each
body paragraph. You are already stating the points in the Introductory
paragraph, the Body paragraphs, and the Concluding paragraph.
Essay writing is a balance of giving information and
repeating information.
*Essay is all about giving and restating information*
What we wind up with is a five-paragraph essay.
REASSURANCE: Writing an essay can feel daunting. Rest
assured, with practice, writing an essay will become routine. After you’ve
written 10 essays, you will be able to do it in your sleep.
A teacher will give reasonable topics in class.
“Explain how modern nuclear power plants are safer than
those built a generation ago.” Unreasonable topic
“Why did you choose to live in Vancouver?” Reasonable topic.
EF6 level
“Compare or contrast Mr Wei and Mr Obi as role models for
their students.”
“Explain why the US went off the Gold Standard in 1971.”
Unreasonable topic
“How to Be a Good Friend.” Reasonable topic EF45
As you move to higher coursework, more specified levels of
education, your essay topics will become more specialized.
CHALLENGE IN ESSAY WRITING: Vocabulary, depth of vocabulary
Build vocabulary! It is good to have five or six synonyms
for common words.
Why did you come to Vancouver?
come- move, immigrate, relocate, live, stay, settle, put
down roots, etc
PREWRITING - brainstorming
YOUR BEST FRIEND https://www.thesaurus.com/
TEACH “The Benefits of Cycling”
How does it look on the page?
-five paragraphs
-paragraphs balanced in length
-introductory and concluding paragraphs are a bit shorter,
OK
Read through, see structure and content
Different modes of writing, writing for different purposes,
different intentions
“The Benefits of Cycling”- PERSUASIVE MODE
“How to Pass a Course at the Top of the Class”- EXPOSITORY,
PROCESS MODE (teach)
DESCRIPTIVE MODE
NARRATIVE MODE
I am teaching the most basic kind of essay.
It is basic but really effective.
This is like following a recipe.
When you get comfortable writing essays after 3-4. 6-7
tries, then you can get more creative and follow your own style. You can choose
the format that will work best for your subject matter.
The style that I am teaching is very basic and clear. It is
simple and ‘easy’ to do. You can get fancier with your essays later.
There are lots of different kinds of essays.
I think about writing like cooking. A beginner writer has to
follow a recipe very closely. When you get some experience cooking, you don’t
need the recipe book anymore.
Plan first!
Then write.
You have to make a plan before you write.
An essay has to be organized.
If the essay is disorganized, I’m not going to take time to
figure it out.
PROCESS- even more inportant for an essay than for a paragraph
PREWRITING (5m, 10m)– planning your essay, making a little
plan to organize what you want to say in each paragraph in your essay
1.Read and understand the question.
2.Brainstorm ideas and vocab
3.Organize, outline
WRITING- (45m-1hr) actually writing the sentences and
paragraphs
4.Write the sentences and paragraphs.
5.Proofread and edit.
6.Submit legible rough copy
Essay work-
Five-paragraph essays
essays “multi-paragraphs”
“in a multi-paragraph essay” “in
paragraphs”
five-paragraph essay- mother of all essays, IKEA essay form
foundation of essay writing- you can learn different essay
forms later, next week – compare and contrast essay
Essay writing- lots of good guide books for essay writing
ALL ESSAYS
Introductory paragraph
-Grabber
-TS Thesis Statement
-Predictor – gives an indication of what to be discussed in
the essay
Body paragraphs (for a five-paragraph essay, you need three
body paragraphs)
Body para#1
Topic sentence
Supporting points
Body para#2
Topic sentence
Supporting points
Body para#3
Topic sentence
Supporting points
Concluding paragraph
-Restatement
- Restate the Thesis statement
-Restate the 3 points
-End with a clincher*
*Clincher – fun, engaging sentence at the end of the essay.
connects with the reader
CHOICES: Read the
essay for tomorrow
Do
the sentence cpombining homework
Prepare
your presentation
*No topic sentence? No paragraph.
(fiddle and violin- same instrument, different genres-
different types of music)
genre- type of book, type of music, type of movie
