English 10 quoting practice

Clover and Boxer were “faithful disciples” (11) of the revolution.

BS

“tremendous muscles”

“hard worker”

not smart

Boxer was a huge horse with “tremendous muscles” (18) who was always eager to help.  Although he was a “hard worker”, he was not very smart.

“quite unchanged” (19)

“slow obstinate” (19)

“worst tempered” (2)

cynical” (2)

Benjamin the donkey was the oldest animal who lived on Manor Farm.  However, he was also the “worst tempered” (2).  Also, he didn’t believe in the revolution and was “quite unchanged” (19) after the animals got rid of Mr. Jones.  In general, he did his daily work but remained “cynical” (2) about everything that was happening to the farm.

NO GOOD In general, he did his daily work but didn’t care about anything that was happening to the farm: “cynical” (2).

NO GOOD Boxer was a strong horse- “tremendous muscles” (18).

GOOD Boxer was a strong horse with “tremendous muscles” (18).

NO GOOD “Boxer with his tremendous muscles always pulled them through.” (18)

EF3- More sentence combining fun

1.    Jim likes pizza and beer.

Jim likes pizza with beer.

Jim likes pizza, and he also likes beer.

Jim likes pizza, but he mostly likes beer.

2.    Abby plays soccer, hockey, and pool every weekend.

Abby plays soccer and hockey every weekend.  Also, she likes to play billiards/pool.

Every weekend, Abby plays…

3.    The bus arrived late and picked up five angry passengers.

The bus arrived late, and it picked up five angry passengers.

When the bus arrived late, it picked up five angry passengers.

The bus which arrived late picked up five angry passengers.

The bus picked up five passengers who were angry because the bus arrived late.

The bus picked up five passengers, and the passengers were angry because the bus arrived late.

EF3-Sentence combining ideas

1.   Jim and Ann like pizza.

Jim likes pizza, and Ann likes pizza, too.

Jim likes pizza, and Ann likes it, too.

Both Jim and Ann like pizza.

2.   Abby, Luis, and Carl play soccer every weekend.

Abby, Luis and Carl play soccer every weekend.

Every weekend, Abby, Luis and Carl play soccer.

Every weekend, Abby, Luis and Carl play soccer together.

Every weekend, Abby, Luis and Carl all play soccer together.

3.   The bus and the skytrain arrived late because of the snow.

Both the bus and skytrain arrived late because of the snow.

Because of the snow, both the bus and skytrain arrived late.

4.   Are the Jeep and Honda on sale?

Are both the Jeep and Honda on sale?

Is the Jeep or the Honda on sale?

Is the Jeep on sale, or is the Honda on sale?

5.   Kam Wong, Sara Smith, Pam Singh, and Ron Adams were at the party.

Kam Wong, Sara Smith, Pam Singh, and Ron Adams were all at the party.

Kam Wong and Sara Smith were at the party; also, Pam Singh and Ron Adams were at the party, too.

Kam Wong and Sara Smith were at the party; also, Pam Singh and Ron Adams were there, too.

6.   His daughter, his son, and his wife needed the car Friday morning.

Friday morning, his daughter, son, and wife needed the car.

Friday morning, his daughter, son, and wife all needed the car.

English 10 Hitchens quotation

  For scene when animals are in field after rebellion (pp13-14)

“Choked-up feelings of emotion at liberation are the surest sign that a moment of disillusion and disappointment is at hand.”

Christopher Hitchens. A Long Short War: The Postponed Liberation of Iraq , Penguin: Toronto, 2003

English 10- Obi/Wei model process and paragraph

Ol Time

TS

Wei better role model

BS

Wei strictness fake, subsides

Obi truly inflexible

Wei willing to reconsider position based on new evidence

Obi intransigent, unable to see error of ways

Wei come down to students level

Obi superior position leads to defeat

GOLD MEDAL ANSWER

Mr. Wei from “I Confess” is clearly the better role model for his students in that he demonstrates how an adult can recognize a mistake, admit it, and change from it.  Mr. Wei’s strictness at the beginning of the story is somewhat artificial, as he is responding mainly to the jaded advice of older teachers.  Mr. Obi of “Dead Man’s Path”, on the other hand, is convinced of the correctness of his opinions.  Whereas Mr. Wei is in a position to change, Obi remains intransigent as the story develops.  When Mr. Wei realizes he has made an error with Wang Wei, he is shaken, so he goes to verify if he has been in the wrong, which he finds he has been.  Mr. Obi is unable to make such a self-realization and is arrogant in the face of the priest’s reasonable arguments to him regarding the path.  Finally, at the end of the story, Mr. Wei seeks to rectify the situation he has caused by confessing his error to his students.  His anger gone, he is humble and contrite, and somewhat the wiser.  Mr. Obi, on the other hand, is unable to make any similar concessions to the priest or the villagers due to his obstinacy, and he pays the high price of vanity by having his beautiful model school ruined by the vengeful villagers.  In the end. Mr. Wei is a role model of maturity and humility and probably wins his students’ affection whereas Mr. Obi’s scornfulness and imperiousness damages his once promising career.

SIMPLIFIED

Mr. Wei from “I Confess” is a better role model for students than Mr Obi from “Dead Man’s Path”.  Mr. Wei’s is not really as strict as he pretends to be.  On the other hand, Mr. Obi is not pretending to be so opinionated- he really is.  Therefore, Mr. Wei is willing to change his idea as the story progresses, but Obi is not.  When Mr. Wei finds out he is wrong, he changes his mind.  Mr. Obi never changes his mind despite what the priest tries to tell him.  Finally, at the end of the story, Mr. Wei solves the problem by confessing to his students.  Mr. Obi, on the other hand, is too stubborn to admit his error.  For these reasons, Mr. Wei is a better role model for his students than Mr. Obi.

Appositives possible solutions

1.     My lunch, an onion and garlic sandwich, smells great.

2.     My son, an engineer, will be moving to Toronto next week.

3.     Jessica, the youngest student in the class, had the highest mark.

The youngest student in the class, Jessica, had the highest mark.

4.     The baby, a six-month-old, does not sleep well.

The baby, a poor sleeper, is six months old.

5.     Eileen, the marketing manager, organized the ad campaign.

6.     The class was taught by Mrs. McKnight, a retired teacher.

Mrs. McKnight, a retired teacher, taught the class.

7.     The car, a red convertible, was speeding through the neighbourhood.

8.     Friends, an American situation comedy, is very popular with ESL students.

9.     The Nakdong River, the longest river in Korea, is over 500 km long.

The longest river in Korea, the Nakdong, is over 500 km long.

10.                         English, the language of business, is a challenging language to   

 learn.

          English, a challenging language to learn, is the language of business.

          The language of business, English, is a challenging language to learn.

The Final Game sent comb test

1. Students, coaches and parents have gathered for the provincial final in senior girls’ basketball.

Students, coaches and parents have gathered for the senior girls’ basketball provincial final.

2. Hundreds of fans come to the arena from the towns with teams in the provincials.

Hundreds of fans come to the arena from the towns that have teams in the provincials.

3. In the arena, there is a display of colourful banners and people who are cheering and chanting for victory.

In the arena, there is a display of colourful banners and people; the people are cheering and chanting for victory.

4. The players enter the floor area from the dressing rooms; when they begin to warm up, they receive a standing ovation from their supporters.

After the players enter the floor area from the dressing rooms, they begin to warm up; then they receive a standing ovation from their supporters.

After the players enter the floor area from the dressing rooms, they receive a standing ovation from their supporters as they begin to warm up.

5. Both teams are considered victors to their fans for getting to the finals whatever the outcome.

Whatever the outcome, both teams are considered victors to their fans for getting to the finals.

To their fans, both teams are considered victors for getting to the finals whatever the outcome.