Eng 11 Essay rewrite

You will have many important people in your life; for example, friends, family and romantic partners. frag

You will have many important people in your life; for example, you will have friends, family and romantic partners.

You will have many important people in your life, for example, friends, family and romantic partners.

This program has problems — for example, it's hard to retrieve lost data.

— dash

same as a semicolon, but more casual
relaxed writing use a dash —

; serious, academic, not fun, business and school

— dash, casual, fun, gives energy to your writing

; = —
serious , fun


A flock of sparrows – some of them juveniles – alighted and sang.
energetic writing, casual, story, fun to read, cool

A flock of sparrows, some of them juveniles, alighted and sang.
academic style, serious, formal, staid, not so fun

Focus of rewrite:

Introduction:

-Grabber

-Thesis statement

-Predictor

Topics:

1. Alternative Medicine

2. Music

3. Social media

4. Art

5. Nature

OR

Topics WAE p7