7/10 Paragraph work

well-organized paragraph -
PREWRITE - PLANNING no sentences (5-8m)
1. Read the question carefully. Read the question five times - every word.
2. Generate ideas - brainstorm, list, mindmap, vocabulary, key words
3. Organize the points 1. 2. 3. 4. TIME, SPACE, IMPORTANCE

WRITING - SENTENCES
4. Rough copy
Begin with a topic sentence. The first or second sentence should address the topic. Use some vocab or synonyms from the question.
3-4 points in sentences
Not too long.
I asked for a paragraph. If you pass in four paragraphs, it's too long. Not an essay!
We are looking for compact, concise, well-organized writing.
How can we edit out writing down?
- avoid repetition
- avoid "I"
I think that Mr. Wei was the better role model for his students.
Save "I" for narrative writing
- If you make a plan first, than your paragraph will be organized more efficiently, and it will be shorter.

Challenge for the RW
Organize if it's not organized.
Shorter it if it's too long. Edit, proofread

Grade 12 English class and provincial exam
short answer - paragraph (125w)

We want cheesecake, not angel cake. Dense, high-quality. Not fluffy and full of air.

Who was a better role model for the students, Mr.Wei or Mr. Obi?