Eng 12 Incorporating quoted material

Borrowing text from a story to put into our own answers.

Quoting whole sentences XXX

Jonathan said, "I don't mind being skin and bone, Mum"

Incorporating quoted material, few important key words, good phrase

being skin and bone

For Jonathan, "being skin and bone" was helpful for him because it allowed him to fly faster. V1

For Jonathan, "being skin and bone"(1) was helpful because it allowed him to fly faster. V2
INCORPORATED


"It was all so pointless."

Jonathan wasn't interested in spending his time searching for food. "It was all so pointless."(1) XXX
Not incorporated. Orphans.

"It was all so pointless."
Jonathan found searching for food all day was "so pointless"(1) that he didn't want to spend his time doing that. Incorporated. V1

Jonathan thought that spending his days searching for food was "so pointless"(1) that he couldn't bring himself to do it with the flock.(1) V2

Jonathan felt that his flock were leading lives that were "pointless"(1). He wanted to do more with his life. V3

"But victory was short-lived."(2)

Even when Jonathan was successful, his feelings of accomplishment were "short-lived"(2) because he always wanted to do better. V1

Even when Jonathan achieved one of his flying goals, his feelings of accomplishment were "short-lived"(2) because he always wanted to stretch his ability. V2

Incorporated quoted material.

Jonathan was depressed when he told himself that he was only a "poor limited seagull"(2) who would never be able to fly the way he wanted to.

He realized that he was nothing special, only a common seagull "like every other seagull"(2) in the world.

He held out only the "daggers of his wingtips... and fell into a vertical dive."(3) This allowed him to fly "under control" at an amazing speed.

"daggers of his wingtips extended into the wind, and fell into a vertical dive."

... ellipsis

He held out only "his wingtips... and fell into a vertical dive."(3) This allowed him to fly "under control" at an amazing speed.

He stuck out his wings only a little bit and then went into a "vertical dive"(3) which allowed him to fly the fastest he had ever gone.

In fact, Jonathan reached "terminal velocity"(Bach 3) which was the fastest possible speed he could attain.

Practice makes perfect.