2. Screaming jets fly low and overhead in teams because their pilots display skills. FIRST PASS
In teams, screaming jets fly low overhead as their pilots display their skills. MORE NATURAL
Teams of screaming jets fly low overhead as their pilots display their skills.
3. Adults watch in awe and cringing, but some children are crying and cover their ears; however, they want to see more. FIRST PASS
Adults watch in awe and cringe, but some children are crying and cover their ears; however, they want to see more.MORE NATURAL
Cringing adults watch in awe, but some crying children cover their ears; however, they want to see more PARALLEL, CONCISE, DENSER, TIGHTER
SIMPLE, COMPOUND, COMPLEX
4. Skydivers float gently down to earth from 1000 meters up; then they guide their falls to land on a white cross. HIGH QUALITY SENTENCE WRITING
5. Biplanes which are imitations of early aircraft engage in fights that are typical of WW1. STRONG SENTENCE- ADJECTIVE CLAUSES
awe- absolute amazement
awful - terrible
awesome - debased, means 'good'
Sounds good!
King James 11 St Paul's Cathedral, London
"amusing, awful, artificial" 1660s
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