E12 sent comb

sentence combining- most effective, improve sentence writing- depth, density, complexity, meaningful

carries a lot of  meaning, concise, dense

William Strong-

A. 1.Pet owners upset by soaring veterinary costs can now register for Medipost. KERNEL

2. Medipost is a prepaid insurance plan for cats and dogs.

ONE SOLUTION

Pet owners upset by soaring veterinary costs can now register for Medipost which is a prepaid insurance plan for cats and dogs.

complex sentence – adjective clause

E. 1. Avignon is a walled city of 93,000 inhabitants.

2. Avignon is enclosed by ramparts.

3.The ramparts stretch a circumference of three miles.

Avignon, a walled city of 93,000 inhabitants, is enclosed by ramparts which stretch a circumference of three miles.

E12 Presentation Project

Presentation Project

Choose a poem or song that you feel has meaning. This may be a favourite poem or song that speaks to you in some deep way.

You will present this poem or song to the class.

Talk about the overall meaning of the poem or song. Why should other people know about it? Who is the narrator? What is the point of view? Who are the characters?  What are the main themes?Talk about words or lyrics in terms of literary terms we have studied in class.

Include a homework activity that the students can do at home.

You can write and print sheets for the class or put the presentation on computer. You can use the LCD that I use in class. Put your stuff on USB as the internet in school is slow and unpredictable. You can use my laptop if you want.

In total, your presentation will be 15 minutes.

You will be evaluated on the quality and depth ofyour preparation, your analysis, your presentation skills, and your homework activity.

This will be marked out of 20. It will have the same value as an essay.

Marking rubric:

10pts- depth of analysis of text, reference to literary terms, etc

4pts- preparation

4pts- presentation, voice and engagement with class

2pts- homework activity

Step 1

Choose a poem or song by the end of this week. Send me a copy of it via email.

Step 2

Sign up for a presentation time slot.

Step 3

Begin your research. We will have some limited time in class to do research. I will check your work as you go along to make sure you are on track.

E12 Extrovert/Introvert Test

http://www.quietrev.com/the-introvert-test/

E12 Denomilization

She was given employment at the office.
She was employed at the office.

She will provide goverence
She will govern

My expectation is that you come to class on time.
I expect you to come to class on time.

ACADEMIC WRITING- A STRONG CONFIDENT VOICE

FAKE IT UNTIL YOU MAKE IT

We made the calculation for your refund.
We calculated your refund.

5. My boss gives me an authorization to ....
My boss authorized me to...

6. transmit
We will transmit the Whitecaps game at 7PM.

The doctor administered a needle.

9. We observed the solar eclipse.
I went to the Selena Gomez concert last year.

E12 "" and style

my college classrooms,

explicit curriculum (what the industry is requiring from our students)

also implicit curriculum, I try to develop the self and spirit of my students

“protect and nourish students’ growth”

“their guide in, rather than director of, the process of education” (Joseph 2011, p. 113).

INCORPORATE QUOTED MATERIAL

In my college classroom, there are two curriculums at play interacting with each other XXX at all times. The first is the explicit curriculum, which is dictated by dentists and other dental professionals practitioners in the dental industry.  They demand certain specific skills form CDAs that graduate from VCC.

Also is the implicit curriculum, where I try to develop the self and spirit of my students. My job is to “protect and nourish students’ growth” (Joseph 2011, p113) while they are learning specific practical skills. I strive to “guide… rather than direct” their learning. This is often called ‘guide on the side’ rather ‘sage on the stage’ teaching.

I am interested in “protect[ing] and nourish[ing] students’ growth” in the classroom. CLUNKY, NOT BEAUTIFUL

I want to “protect and nourish students’ growth” in the classroom. CLEANER-LOOKING, SHORTER, ELEGANT

PROOFREADING, EDITTING

STYLE

EF2/3

gravity- force that attracts two objects, 9.8 m/s/s

in orbit



Sentence Work A

9. The movie is on at 7:20 PM.


Verb Tense Review 1

Exercise 9.

1. He didn't feel good last night.
2. The cat will catch a bird.
3. My neighbour is waiting for a package to arrive.
4. I was watching TV for two hours last night.
5. The students took a test last week.
The students were going to take a test last week.


________X___X__________________________P_______________________

I was going to be a doctor when I lived in Iran.

I was going to go to your party, but I had to work.

6. She will be studying French next term.
 She will study French when she lives in Montreal.

8. I go swimming three times a week.

Verb tenses are very important in English!

EF2/3 Verb Tense Review 1

Exercise 8

1.When our friend arrives, we will finish cooking.
When our fruiend arrives, the party will start. She is the life of the party.
3. When the dancing starts, we will stop eating.
When the dancing starts, it will be fun.
When the dancing starts, we will all get on the floor and shake a leg.

dancing- gerund, singular
Cooking is fun.

fun- a good time
funny- laugh

4. When the music stops, the light will come on.
When the music stops, everybody sits down on a chair.
When we finish singing "Happy Birthday", we will cut the cake.

5. When the cake is served, everybody will get a piece.

when, car
if, cat
because, school
since, door
after supper

E12 ellipsis and square brackets

... ellipsis

..... NOT ENGLISH!!!!!!! ,etc

... 
She had a "good strong figure, ruddy cheeks, hair that was changing form brown to gray, and a determined face."

She had a "good strong figure... and a determined face." SHOWS WORDS WERE CUT, STILL HAS BE GRAMMATICAL

She had a "good strong figure... determined face." NO GOOD

She had "never thought of marrying" and was "quite alone in the world".

She had "never thought of marrying... [and was] quite alone in the world".

She had "never thought of marrying... [but did not] regret it".

SQUARE BRACKETS MAKE THE SENTENCE GRAMMATICALLY CORRECT

She was completely unprepared to deal with the children as their needs were "wholly unexpected" by her.

IF POSSIBLE, STAY AWAY FROM ... []

SHORTER IS BETTER

E12 Using Quotations

Here are some key points to remember when using quotations:

1)   Incorporate quotations into your sentences.

"Mamselle Aurelie possessed a good strong figure, ruddy cheeks, hair that was changing form brown to gray, and a determined face.":

INCORPORATE KEY WORDS

The main character of the story, Mamselle Aurelie, was described by Kate Chopin as being not feminine in her appearance or her personality. She had a "good strong figure" which suggsts that she was more masculine in her appearance. Also, she had a "determined face" which suggested that she was not a typical passive woman of the day.

2)   Keep quotations to a few words.  Quotations are like salt in food: a little bit gives flavour; too much ruins the dish.

She "possessed a good strong figure, ruddy cheeks, hair that was changing from brown to gray, and a determined face.":

3)   Use quoted material to support your points.

evidence, proof

You still have to make your point

4)   Don’t use too many quotations.  Pick two or three quotations to support your brainstormed points and leave the rest.

5)   Make sure the quoted material is exactly as written in the story.  Use … and [] to make minor grammatical or stylistic changes.

... ellipsis

[] square brackets

6)   Avoid repeating quotations.

"good strong figure"

7)   After quoting material, go on to explain why the quotation is relevant.

You make your own points. You can have make the argument.

8)   Avoid ending paragraphs with quotations.

have to text to refer to

borrowing quotations from text- 

EF2/3 Verb tense exercises

3. She always runs on the track behind the school. SIMPLE PRESENT
She always ran on the track behind the school. SIMPLE PAST- HARDER
4. They will leave for their honeymoon tomorrow night. SIMPLE FUTURE
5. He sits beside me every day in class. SIMPLE PRESENT- EASY
He sat beside me every day in class when he was 11. SIMPLE PAST- HARDER

My son plays with his Lego every day when he gets home from school.

My son played with his stuffies every day when he was little. SIMPLE PAST

6. Last night, I talked to my boyfriend for hours.

EXERCISE 2

1. They probably won't go to the meeting tonight. SIMPLE FUTURE
will not go 


'''''' apostrophe-
contractions She is She's, I am I'm, He is He's, does not doesn't
let us let's, I would like I'd like

possession, own something, have something- Nino's house, his house, my phone, Sarah's phone, your phone, Rosario's phone, Rose's mother, Dave's father, Fatima's sister,
Rose's mother's sister's uncle's house, their house, uncle's house

Dan's job interview went well.
Michele's new baby is cute.
Mary's English class starts at 10:25. 

2. John usually studies for his math tests.
John usually doesn't study for his math tests.

3. The car swerved and didn't hit the tree.
4. The restaurant owner gets mad when his employees don't wash their hands.

5. We didn't win the game, but we had a great time. MODEL SENTENCE

6, She won't finish her homework tomorrow.
She will not finish her homework tomorrow.
How does she know? 
She doesn't think that she will finish her homework tomorrow. NOUN CLAUSE


I get mad when my daughter does not listen/ do her homework/ walk the dog.
I get mad when my daughter doesn't get up on time.

E12 Thesis statement work

Writing an Effective Thesis Statement

A thesis statement helps unify an essay. It should summarize the main point and guide the essay's development. A thesis statement can be expressed in one or two sentences.

Five General Rules

1. A thesis statement makes an assertion; it is not a simple statement or observation.


Fact or observation: More people are attending community colleges.


Thesis: Community colleges are attracting more students because they offer job training programs as well as academic courses of study.

2. A thesis takes a stand; it does not make an announcement.


 Announcement: The thesis of this paper is the difficulty of solving the environmental problems of the Indian River Lagoon.


Thesis: Solving the environmental problems of the Indian River Lagoon will prove more difficult than many people believe.

3. A thesis is a main idea, not a title.


Title: The effect of the Internet on society.


Thesis: Continuing advances in the Internet are having a great impact upon communication in modern society.

4. A thesis statement narrows the topic. 


Too Broad: The American automobile industry has many problems.


Thesis: The primary problem facing the American automobile industry is competition from foreign auto makers.

5. A thesis statement is specific.


Too Vague: John D. MacDonald’s stories are very good.


Thesis: John D. MacDonald’s stories advanced the thriller genre by employing intelligent dialogue, introducing environmental and economic concerns, and delving into moral issues.

Here are some examples we will try together:

Write a thesis statement for an essay for the following three topics:

1.    Gender roles in “Boys and Girls”.

Gender roles in the story “Boys and Girls” are well-defined/ clearly-defined.

Alice Munro, in the story “Boys and Girls”, uses clearly-defined gender roles to highlight stereotypes about women’s and men’s roles in society.

Alice Munro, in the story “Boys and Girls”, uses clearly-defined gender roles to show XXX sexism in our society.

Alice Munro, in the story “Boys and Girls”, uses clearly-defined gender roles to challenge our assumptions about the validity of traditional gender roles in our modern society.

2.    Contrast two characters in “Boys and Girls”.

3.    Discuss conflict in “Boys and Girls”.

person vs person, Laird and the narrator

person vs society,

person vs herself,

person vs nature, nature vs nurture?

E12 Freedom flying essay plan mockup

Flight is a metaphor for freedom



INTRO PARA GRABBER?

“dom” is old English word for “law”- the law gives priviledge, but also demands compliance XXX follow it/ obedience
¬¬

Thesis- idea
disagree,not so simple
THESIS STATEMENT NOTE: flight can bring some freedom but comes with a price
The pursuit of flight can bring XXX personal/ great/ immense freedom but comes with demands a XXX significant/ steep price.


BODY PARA 1
1.Jonathan Livingston Seagull
-risk of personal danger along with personal freedom
nearly killed himself in dive
-end of chapter, free, but lost family

BODY PARA 2
2.Icarus -free from captivity, but foolishly died
-freedom must be used with caution
-free from some restraints, but still subject to repercussions
of choices, actions

BODY PARA 3
3.Wright bros. Orville and Wilbur
-slaves to dream of flying, all-consuming pursuit, single-minded passion
-no family, children, only airplanes,Wilbur said not time for a wife and an airplane


CONCLUDING PARA- restatement
CLINCHER- What do you think?
Aren’t birds XXX

CLEARLY ORGANIZED- 3 distinct ideas

EF2/3 Adverb clauses continued

because
She doesn't want to go to the beach because it is raining.
Because it is raining, she doesn't want to go to the beach.

since
She doesn't want to go to the beach since it is raining. REASON WHY
She has lived in |Vancouver since she moved here in 2009. TIME

if
You can go home if you feel sick.
If you feel sick, you should go home.

can could should would might may will must- modal auxiliaries

can + to go= can go

You can go if you want.

unless

I will go to the park unless it rains.

I will go to the park if it doesn't rain.

You can go if you want to.

You can go unless you don't want to.

I don't not like ice cream. DOUBLE NEGATIVE, NO GOOD

Never never run with scissors. OKAY

an icy road icy (adjective)

an ice cream ice (noun)

an icy bar, Kingsway

Mango is popular with foreign tourists in TaiPei.

TaiPei has a great recycling program.

although, though, even though

I went to the park even though it rained.

Although she was very tired, she still went to the party. still

Even though I find English very difficult, I still want to get better at it.

EF2/3 ADVERB CLAUSES

Because it is cold, she is wearing a sweater. COMMA
She is wearing a sweater because it is cold. NO COMMA

when
When the baby is crying, rock it.
Answer the phone when it rings.

while
She watched TV while he made supper.

While my daughter was calling me, I was watching TV.
My daughter called me while I was watching TV.

She talks on the phone while she walks around the park every day.

I read a book while |I waited for my son to finish his soccer.

She turned off the stove when the water boiled.

We can go out for dinner when you get home.
When you get home, we can go out for dinner.

whenever
You can visit whenever you want to.
Whenever you have time, let's go for a coffee.
Her son gets scared whenever he watches a scary movie.

before/ after
The kids must finish their homework before they watch TV.
After the movie was over, we went home.
After I studied English for five years, I could speak it well.

than- comparing

She is smarter than you (are).
He is taller than she (is).
Today is colder than yesterday (was).

then- next

as... as
He is as tall as his mother (is).
Today is as warm as yesterday (was).
That sweater is as nice as the other one (is).
She is as smart as you (are).

He is as skinny as a toothpick.
She is as smart as a whip.
He is as tall as a tree.
He is as dirty as a pig.
She is as stubborn as an ox/ mule.
I have a mind like a sieve.
In one ear, and out the other.
We'll see. Time will tell.



if
If I study English for five years, I may be able to speak it well.

EF2/3 Links to phrasal verbs

http://www.englishclub.com/vocabulary/phrasal-verbs-list.htm

MUCH HARDER: 

http://www.learn-english-today.com/phrasal-verbs/phrasal-verb-list.htm

EF2/3 Compound sentence homework practice

1. My puppy stole my wallet, and now he has a new collar.
3. There was a meteor shower, so the photographer took out his camera.
4. I wanted to buy a Groodle puppy, so I started to save my money.
I wanted to buy a Groodle puppy; therefore, I started to save my money.
11. I want to show off my new swimsuit, so let's go to the swimming pool.
12. I was not very hungry, but I ate six cookies.
I ate six cookies, so I was not very hungry.
16. Bears wreck your house and eat all your honey, so they do not make good pets.
18. I didn't do my homework, so I feel like I let myself down.
19. I have never visited Japan; also, I have never visited Korea.
I have never visited Japan, nor have I ever visited Korea.
20. You can make teo big cakes; on the other hand, /; instead, you can make two small cakes.



TEN SENTENCES

1. house but

I bought a house, but it is very small.

2. school and

My daughter goes to school, and I go to school.\

8. bicycle however

I have a bicycle; however, I never ride it.

EF2/3 Compound sentences

Her car won't start, so she will be late for work.
Her car won't start; therefore, she will be late for work.
Her car won't start. Therefore, she will be late for work.

THREE WAYS TO CHOOSE FROM

We can go to Seattle for a few days, or we can go to Calgary.

We can go to Seattle for a few days; otherwise,  we can go to Calgary.
We can go to Seattle for a few days; if not, we can go to Calgary.

My puppy doesn't bark much, but he does bark a little at night.

My puppy doesn't bark much; however, he does bark a little at night.

My puppy doesn't bark much. However, he does bark a little at night.

My puppy doesn't bark much. He does bark a little at night. BLAND

She likes to rollerblade, and she likes to ski.

She likes to rollerblade; also, she likes to ski.

She likes to rollerblade; in addition, she likes to ski.

EF2/3 Compound sentence exercises

1. I haven't been to Mexico, and I haven't been to Spain.
I haven't been to Mexico; also, I haven't been to Spain.
I haven't been to Mexico, nor have I been to Spain.
I haven't been to Mexico, nor have you been to Spain.

2. I don't like spaghetti, nor do I like lasagna.

3. I don't drink coffee, nor do I drink tea.
I don't drink coffee or tea.
I drink coffee and tea.
I don't drink coffee and tea. STRANGE- SOUNDS LIKE TOGETHER IN ONE CUP

SEMICOLONS

1. He wanted the apartment; however, I wanted the house.
He wanted the apartment, but I wanted the house.

EITHER WAY IS GREAT!
He wanted the apartment. However, I wanted the house.

ALL WAYS ARE GOOD- YOU CHOOSE

2. She talked, and we listened.

She talked; however, we listened.

She talked; meanwhile, we listened.

3. He doesn't drink wine, but he drinks beer.
He doesn't drink wine; however, he drinks beer.
He doesn't drink wine. However, he drinks beer.

EF2/3 Compound sentences

1. Jim cut the grass, and Ed weeded the garden.
Jim cut the grass, but Ed weeded the garden.

Jim cut the grass, so Ed weeded the garden.

SLIGHTLY DIFFERENT PURPOSE, INTENTION

2. I was very tired last night, so I went to bed early.

I went to bed early last night, for I was very tired. 
I went to bed early last night because I was very tired. COMPLEX

5. Mr. Smith earns a lot of money, so he never saves any.
Mr. Smith earns a lot of money, but he never saves any.

6. Jack needs a new jacket. He lost his leather one.
Jack needs a new jacket, for he lost his leather one.
He Jack lost his leather one jacket, so Jack he needs a new jacket one. 

8. I will be late for my appointment, so we have to leave in 10 minutes.
We have to leave in 10 minutes, or I will be late for my appointment.

EF2/3 Simple sent test

1. dangerous (a)
Lions are dangerous.
2. touch (v)
Don't touch the stove.
3. menu (n)
The restaurant has a small menu.
4. safe (a)
Home is a safe place.
5. chef (n)
She is a very talented chef.
shoot chef

ch- Christmas
ch- chorus
ch- choir
ch- chef

6. normal (a)
My blood pressure is normal.
7. risk (n) (v) risky (a)
It is risky to 
People like to take a risk.
take a risk
I like to take a risk playing poker.
8. delicious (a)
BBQ alligator is delicious.
9. customers
The customers are coming into the store.
The customer is always right.
 retail job- working in a store
10. allow (v)
I don't allow my son to stay home alone.
He allows her to borrow his car.
I allow my daughter to do homework. X
I allow my daughter to have a playdate.

E12 Air Show sentence combining possible solutions

1. The air show, which attracts thousands of locals and tourists, grows bigger every year.

The air show which attracts thousands of people, including locals and tourists; in fact, it grows bigger every year.

2. Teams of screaming jets fly low overhead as pilots display their skills.

3. Cringing adults watch in awe, and some crying children cover their ears; nevertheless, they want to see more.

4. Skydivers float gently down from 1000 metres up and guide their falls to land on a white cross.

5. Biplanes which are imitations of early aircraft engage in fights typical of WW1.

EF2/3 verbs followed by infinitives and gerunds

1. We started to move to a new house.
We will start to move to a new house.
We will start moving to a new house.
2. My son begins to play badminton.
She began playing tennis when she was in middle school. COMPLEX
She began playing tennis five years ago. SIMPLE
3. I hate driving a car.
I hated to drive.
I hate driving my kids everywhere.
4. I prefer to do homework rather than housework.
I would prefer to do homework over housework.
5. I like doing the laundry more than washing the dishes.
I prefer reading a book rather than a newspaper.
6. My dog loves to eat slices of apples.
You love to eat spicy food.
I love eating Ethiopian food.
I love to eat at Dosa Corner. Dosa Corner is at Fraser below Southeast Marine Drive.

Fassil Ethiopian Restaurant, East Broadway, close to Fraser

7. I can't stand talking with her.
She can't stand to talk about herself.
I can't stand talking in English.
I can't stand someone talking too loud.
8. I can't stand listening to my own voice.

I can't stand VERB- GERUND, INFINITIVE

8.I will continue to study English.
She coninued to study for two hours.

E12 Literary Terms URLs

CUTE: http://www.sd71.bc.ca/sd71/school/vanier/english/index_files/Page499.htm

SERIOUS:

http://www.sd83.bc.ca/~hleask/English12/Terms%20to%20Know.pdf


FLASHCARDS:
http://www.cram.com/flashcards/english-12-bc-provincial-vocabulary-2760355

E12 Step by step, how to begin a composition

·       Bring together many skills

1.Understand the writing prompt

2.Respond to the writing prompt in a meaningful way

a.Generate a thesis based on the writing prompt- topic and controlling idea

b.Decide what mode of writing you will use.

c.Generate evidence to support your thesis

d.Organize the evidence/support

e. Write a coherent, cohesive rough draft based on the conventions of multi-paragraph writing in English.

f. Proofread and edit

g. Good copy. Probably no time to write a good copy. Work will be assessed as “first-draft response”.

E12 Example compositions

https://www.bced.gov.bc.ca/exams/exemplars/en_oc/en12-comp-sp.pdf