EF34 7PM May 26

 

 

 

Good evening, everybody.

We will get started at 7:00.

Cameras on. Mics muted until you are ready to talk.

 

We have already completed four weeks of the course.

We have five weeks left.

 

Next week, I will be away Tuesday and Thursday. I have provincial meetings to discuss Adult Education. There will be a substitute teacher for those two days.

 

 

Today’s agenda:

 

·      Begin paragraph writing.

·      Idioms

OR

Topic for discussion: Old people should live with their families, not in an old-age home.

Reflect on the topic. Be prepared to contribute to the discussion

 

 

Step 1 – sentences – a solid introduction to sentence types

 

Step 2 – paragraphs

1.general structure of paragraphs Test#1 paragraph Monday

2.specific types of paragraphs

                     -narrative – tell a story Test#2

                     -descriptive – describe looks, sounds, tastes, etc Test#3

          -process – teach how to do something, explain how

something works Test#4

-persuasive – give an opinion, argument, making points Test#5

 

 

Structure of a paragraph

EF34 - length – approximately 100-150 words

EF6, Eng10,Eng11, Eng12- approximately 150-200 words

 

**  Our goal for length of a paragraph**

EF34 - length – approximately 100-150 words

-approximately 6-8 sentences

 

 

STRUCTURE OF A PARAGRAPH

 

Grabber/ Hook (optional) – 1,2 short sentences - gets the readers attention, makes them want to read your writing, 7 ways

 

Topic sentence – gives the topic and your take on the topic, your focus, your direction for the topic, one sentence

 

Supporting sentences – 5-6 sentences- details of your points,

tells the story, description, explains the steps, explain your opinion

meat in the sandwich

 

Concluding sentence- wrap up, way to end the paragraph

 

 

Example topic:

Why did you move to Canada?

 

Goal – 3-4 reasons why ( 3 is a good number)

 

BRAINSTORMING – MAKING NOTES OF KEY IDEAS

1.    good education system for kids

2.    nature – lakes, forests, clean fresh air

3.    many immigrants, different cultures – multicultural

4.    freedom-  democracy, freedom of thought, religion, speech, movement, women’s rights

5.    good food, clean food, low pesticides and chemicals

6.    peace, no war, safety and security, women and children outside

7.    people are friendly, nice and kind

 

 

 

Grabber-

Topic sentence

Supporting points

Concluding sentence

 

 

Grabber- introductory sentence to get the reader’s attention

7 ways:

1.    funnel – general to specific statement, broad to focussed

Why did you come to Canada?

There are almost 200 countries in the world. Many of them are very attractive. For me, Canada is one of the most attractive countries to immigrate to.

 

2.    anecdote – short personal story (1-2 sentences)

Why did you come to Canada?

When I was a little kid growing it in Kaiping, I always dreamed about moving to the West. When I was 27, I had a chance to go to Canada.

 

3.    Ask a question.

Where would you like to live? What country would you most like to live in? For me, it was Canada.

 

4.    Fact or statistic (number percentage %, fraction ¾)

Around 20% of all Canadians are immigrants. It is a country that is made up of immigrants.

 

5.    Historical

Since Canada became a country in 1867, it has always allowed in many immigrants.

 

6.    Quotation from a famous person.

Canadian Prime Minister Justin Trudeau said that Canada is “a country where people have come to have a better life.”

 

Paragraph about women’s rights:

Mao Tse Dong “Women hold up half of the sky.”

 

You can learn quotations from reading books.

 

7.    Saying, adage, expression, idiom from your language.

 

In Chinese, we have a proverb that says, “If a tree is moved, it may die; if a man person moves, he they will make a good life.” When I moved to Canada, I wanted to start a new life for me and my family.

 

In Farsi we say, “ABC blah blah blah.”

 

Do you have a saying in your language about moving to new country or immigrating?

 

A Somali/English poet said, “Noone leaves their home unless their home is the mouth of a shark.” I also left my home country because it was dangerous.

 

 

 

 

 

Begin with a short Grabber (1-2 short sentences)

 

Grabber: In Chinese, we have a proverb that says, “If a tree is moved, it may die; if a person moves, they will make a good life.”

 

 

Next- Topic sentences- gives the topic, your opinion, your focus

 

Why did you come to Canada?

 

Topic sentence: I came to Canada to build a new and better life for me and my family. There are four reasons why I chose Canada.

 

THIS IS WHAT WE HAVE SO FAR:

In Chinese, we have a proverb that says, “If a tree is moved, it may die; if a person moves, they will make a good life.” I came to Canada to build a new and better life for me and my family. There are four reasons why I chose Canada.

 

Next – supporting sentences

1.    many immigrants – multicultural

2.    good education system for kids

3.    nature – lakes, forests

4.    freedom-  democracy, freedom of thought, religion, speech, movement

 

Decide on what order. Put the most important one last. Choose an order.

 

First of all, Canada is a country that has many immigrants from all over the world. It has a policy of multi-culturalism which is very different from my home country. I wanted to live in a diverse country.

 

Second, the education system is very friendly toward children. The studying is not as intense as it is in my home country. I wanted my children to learn to love education, not to hate it.

 

Next, Canada has lots of natural beauty, such as lakes and forests. I love being in nature so I wanted to live in Canada.

 

Finally, in Canada, we have the freedom to live our lives the way we wish. We can express ourselves fully without fear of the law, government, religious leaders, etc.

 

 

 

SO FAR, THIS IS WHAT WE HAVE:

 

In Chinese, we have a proverb that says, “If a tree is moved, it may die; if a person moves, they will make a good life.” I came to Canada to build a new and better life for me and my family. There are four reasons why I chose Canada. First of all, Canada is a country that has many immigrants from all over the world. It has a policy of multi-culturalism which is very different from my home country. I wanted to live in a diverse country. Second, the education system is very friendly toward children. The studying is not as intense as it is in my home country. I wanted my children to learn to love education, not to hate it.

Next, Canada has lots of natural beauty, such as lakes and forests. I love being in nature so I wanted to live in Canada. Finally, in Canada, we have the freedom to live our lives the way we wish. We can express ourselves fully without fear of the law, government, religious leaders, etc.

TOO LONG

 

SHORTEN TO 100-150 words;

In Chinese, we say, “If a tree is moved, it may die; if a person moves, they will make a good life.” There are four reasons why I chose to come to Canada to build a new and better life for me and my family. First of all, Canada is a multi-cultural country that has many immigrants from all over the world, unlike my home country. Second, the education system is not as intense hard as it is in my home country. I wanted my children to learn to love learning. Next, Canada has lots of natural beauty, such as lakes and forests. I love being in nature. Finally, in Canada, we have the freedom to live our lives the way we wish. We can express be ourselves fully without fear. I’m glad that I chose Canada as my adopted home.

(139 words)

6/6

Beautiful well-organized paragraph.

 

 

multiculturism – policy in Canada-         immigrants can preserve their heritage and culture

the Melting pot – policy in the US          immigrants change to fit

American culture

 

 

 

 

 

HOMEWORK:

Here are three topics for a paragraph. Choose one and write a nice, well-organized paragraph of about 100-150 words for homework. You can email it to me if you want. This is not for marks. This is practice for you. We will do our Test#1 paragraph on Monday.

1.    Why did you come to Canada?

2.    Adapting to a new culture is difficult.

3.    Is the internet harmful to children?

 

-Grabber

-Topic sentence

-3-4 supporting points

-Concluding sentence

 

In EF34, for a test, you will have about 60 minutes to write a 100-150 words paragraph.

In English 12, for a test, , you will have about 25 minutes to write a 100-150 words paragraph.

 

About 100-150 is an approximation. 160 words is ok. 250 words is not ok. 100 words is the minimum.

 

I will wait for your emailed paragraph.