Eng 7/10/11 "I Confess" small group discussion

·       Small group discussion questions

1.    What is the status of a teacher in your culture?

2.    How much power does a teacher have over a student in your culture?

3.    What are five words that describe a good teacher?

4.    What are five words to describe a bad teacher?

Story

Table Talk:

                   First Response, p66

                   Checking Up

                   Talking It Over

Eng 7/10/11 Fragments and run-on sentences

SIMPLE
COMPOUND
COMPLEX

Common mistakes:
sentence fragment - frag
run-on sent - RO

LESSON 1
1. Some cash registers are actually computers.
2. Even though I missed my usual train.
frag
Even though I missed my usual train.
Even though I missed my usual train, I still got to work on time.
I still got to work on time even though I missed my usual train.

3. Stood and cheered the home team's victory. frag

The crowd stood and cheered the home team's victory.

The audience stood and cheered the actors.

5. Tomatoes that are grown in hothouses. frag

adj cl

Tomatoes are grown in hothouses.

Tomatoes that are grown in hothouses are very sweet. COMPLEX- ADJ CL

LESSON 2

1. Woodrow Wilson was our 28th president he was the only president who had a PhD degree. RO

Woodrow Wilson was our 28th president, and he was the only president who had a PhD degree.

Woodrow Wilson, who was our 28th president, was the only president who had a PhD degree.

3. Congress established the first US mint it was located in Philadelphia. RO

Congress established the first US mint. It was located in Philadelphia.
Congress established the first US mint, and it was located in Philadelphia.
Congress established the first US mint; it was located in Philadelphia.
Congress established the first US mint, which was located in Philadelphia.

4. The treasurer of the Hikers' Club.

the boy's bicycle - apostrophe shows possession
boy ' s boy's - only one boy

the boys' bicycles
boys ' boys' - five boys

the boys bicycles XXX

the cats toys - One cat or two cats?
the cat's toys - one cat, many toys
the cats' toys - several cats, several toys

' apostrophe "up comma"
, comma

LESSON 3
1. Egyptians made candy over 4000 years ago, they used dates and honey. CS comma splice
A comma is not strong enough to join two sentences.

Egyptians made candy over 4000 years ago. They used dates and honey. 
Egyptians made candy over 4000 years ago, and they used dates and honey. 
Egyptians made candy over 4000 years ago; they used dates and honey.
Egyptians made candy over 4000 years ago; interestingly, they used dates and honey.
Over 4000 years ago, Egyptians used dates and honey to make candy.
Egyptians used dates and honey to make candy over 4000 years ago.

EXERCISE 3
2. England and France fought the longest war it lasted from 1337 to 1453 and was called the Hundred Years' War. RO

England and France fought the longest war which lasted from 1337 to 1453 and was called the Hundred Years' War.

England and France fought the longest war, which was called the Hundred Years' War, from 1337 to 1453.

3. The first Black American to become a Supreme Court justice was Thurgood Marshall he was appointed in 1967 by President Lyndon Johnson. RO
The first Black American to become a Supreme Court justice was Thurgood Marshall; he was appointed in 1967 by President Lyndon Johnson.

The first Black American to become a Supreme Court justice was Thurgood Marshall; moreover, he was appointed in 1967 by President Lyndon Johnson.

The first Black American to become a Supreme Court justice was Thurgood Marshall, and he was appointed in 1967 by President Lyndon Johnson.

The first Black American to become a Supreme Court justice was Thurgood Marshall who was appointed in 1967 by President Lyndon Johnson.

Thurgood Marshall became the first Black American Supreme Court justice appointed by President Lyndon Johnson in 1967.

She became a teacher hired by VSB in 2018.

Thurgood Marshall, the first Black American Supreme Court justice, was appointed by President Lyndon Johnson in 1967. APPOSITIVE

8. The first government employee strike was the Boston police strike it happened in 1919.
The first government employee strike was the Boston police strike which happened in 1919.

The first government employee strike was the Boston police strike; this happened in 1919.

Eng 7/10/11 Business Letters

Business letters
- interdepartmental letters (within a company)
- cover letter for a resume (special style)
- letter to a government agency (e.g. CRA, immigration, pension, city hall)
-employer
- business person

FORMAL, not casual like a personal letter


666 Your Street
Vancouver, BC
V5P2B6

July 30, 2018

Joe Chan
Director, Shaw Communications
123 Cordova Street
Vancouver, BC
V5K2D2

Re: Claim # 4722859   (Re- regarding)

Robin Smith

Dear Mr. Chan:
Dear Mrs. Smith
Dear Ms. Smith
Dear Miss Smith
Dear Mme Benoit

To Mr. Chan: sounds cold

NOT AS GOOD- impersonal
Dear Sir or Madam,
To whom it may concern,

To my dear former and current patients,

Dear Sir,
Dear Sir Chan
Dear Madam Smith,


NO INDENT
Thank for meeting with me yesterday to discuss…kjjh wlkefkwnfn wkejfnwjwen wlfjh fkjkwefnli fowief welfwe wefhw fkjehf wfhwjf wefhjw wefkjwhkwkjweh fkwhfkw wkfkwjehf wekjhwefkw efkwjehfkjwe wefkjwehkw wekfjwhfw fekwjehfw fwkjfhkw wekjhwef wkwjhfkjw wkejfhwekfh wefkjwhf wkefjhwek wkfjwhef wefkwefn.

SKIP A LINE BETWEEN PARAGRAPHS
Ghhd dhdhdh dhddj d jdjdjd  djdjdjd  djdjdjd djdjdj.

Yours truly,
Sincerely,
Respectfully, (talking to someone higher in the business than you)
Regards,
Best regards,
Kind regards,
Thank you,


PERSONAL
Sincerely yours,
Yours sincerely,
Faithfully,





SCENARIO:
Write a short business letter to Robin Smith at Shaw Communications, thanking her for interviewing you yesterday for the position of technician/ CEO/ XXX.

Eng 7/10/11 Grabbers

Grabbers    - optional attention-getting device for writing

- for essays, for paragraphs

- grabs the reader’s attention, makes them pay attention

          Some example of grabbers

                                                             i.      -general to specific statement

say something big, then narrow it down

funnel  \   /

               ||

    Empathy is a very normal and healthy emotion for all humans to feel toward other living creatures. The boys didn’t kill the pheasants because they too felt empathy for the helpless birds.

                                                           ii.      -short anecdote

short personal story

personalizes, first person

    I grew up next to a farm, and I know that killing animals is not easy even though it is necessary. So too, the boys couldn’t …

  

                                                        iii.      -historical reference

    Humans have been farming for many thousands of years, and harvesting animals is part of farming. However, the boys couldn’t…

                                                        iv.      -fact or statistic

80%, four out of five

   Living creatures cannot survive for more than a few hours if their core temperature drops and they become hypothermic. TOPIC SENTENCE

                                                           v.      -question (answered by thesis statement)

Have you ever clubbed a bird?

Have you ever gone hunting? For some people, it is not easy to kill an animal. TS

                                                        vi.      -relevant quotation by famous person

Barack Obama once said, “Never club a frozen pheasant.”

     My mother said, “Never eat a chicken because we don’t want to kill them.”

     Buddha said, “Life is suffering. We must empathy for all living creature.”

Books of quotations.

                                                      vii.      -relevant idiom from any language

-don’t translate well, have a lot of meaning

     In English we call someone who is afraid to do something, a “chicken”. However, the boys didn’t act out of fear, but of empathy.

Eng 7/10/11 "Ice Storm" Para examples

Why didn’t the boy harvest the pheasants?

In the winter, the rain was falling. It was very cold. The farmers put the animals into the barn, but the pheasants were out because they are wild. The boys went to “harvest” the birds. The birds were very cold. They were covered with ice. Also, the boys were very cold. Their jackets were covered with ice.

Retelling the story

Plot summary

Why didn’t the boy harvest the pheasants?

I believe The boys didn’t harvest the birds because they felt empathy toward them. The boys could see that the birds were covered in ice. The boys also were covered in ice. Also, the boys could see the bird’s breath in the cold, just like the boys could see their own breath in the cold. This made the boys feel empathy for the poor birds which were “helpless” beside the road.

ADVICE: Don’t use “I” (first person) unless the question says “What do you think?”

Why didn’t the boy harvest the pheasants?

I just read a good story. It was called “What Happened During the Ice Storm.” The story talks about a cold winter day. The weather is bad and there is freezing rain.

Why didn’t the boy harvest the pheasants?

The birds were cold. The freezing rain covered everything. People said, “How beautiful!” Farmers have to make money, so they have to take care of their livestock. Livestock can be animals like cows, which give milk and meat, and also chickens which give eggs and meat. Birds like pheasants live outdoors.   

Why didn’t the boy harvest the pheasants?

In my opinion, the boys didn’t harvest the pheasants because they knew it was not right to kill the helpless birds. The birds couldn’t even see or move because of the freezing rain. The birds were unable to protect themselves.

Why didn’t the boy harvest the pheasants?

In my opinion, I believe the boys didn’t harvest the pheasants because they were unprepared, unsure, and naïve. First of all, it’s easy to tell that they were unprepared since they didn’t have any tools to harvest the pheasant. Secondly, …

Eng 7/10/11 sentence combining "Backstage"

1. We were preparing for the second performance of our play, and the dressing room was in a state.
The dressing room was in a state because we were preparing for the second performance of our play.
The dressing room was in a state while we were preparing for the second performance of our play.

second play performance -awkward phrasing

2. Costume racks and makeup trays were scattered around the room.
The costume racks and makeup trays were scattered around the room.
"The" is for both
The costume racks and the makeup trays were scattered around the room.

3. Nearly everyone was nervous as helpers were dressing cast members and applying their makeup.

4. The female lead could not get her wig to stay on properly, and the male lead was having a tug-of-war with his uncooperative suspenders.

Eng 7/10/11 Using quoted material

The author wrote, "One winter there was freezing rain" (265)

The boys went out in the "freezing rain" (265) to get some wild birds.

The people said, "How Beautiful!". XXX

A fine skill - practice, judgement


Paragraph - 80 words, 100 words, 1-2 w, 3-4 w are appropriate
Essay - has more room for quoted material
10 or 20-page paper - quote longer sections from a text