EF 2/3 sentence combining

1.    You should dress warmly because

it’s getting very cold. COMPLEX

It’s getting very cold, so you should dress warmly. COMPOUND

Because/ Since/ As it’s getting very cold, you should dress warmly. COMPLEX

2.    Carla came to the party, and/ but Rick didn’t.

Carla came to the party, so Rick didn’t.

Carla came to the party; however, Rick didn’t.

Even though Carla came to the party, Rick didn’t.

3.    I’m taking some time off in July because it will be warmer then.

It will be warmer in July, so I’m taking some time off then.

EF6 Roses Sing on New Snow discussion questions

“Roses Sing on New Snow”

Discussion Questions

1.  What is the setting of the story?

2.  Why doesMaylin cook in her father’s restaurant?

3.  Is Maylin a weak or strong person?

4.  Why are some possible reasons Maylin named her dish ”Roses Sing on New Snow”?

5.  What does Maylin mean when she says her dish is a product of the new world?

6.  Why are some reasons the governor couldn’t cook “Roses Sing on New Snow” the same as Maylin did?

7.  What theme (main idea or comment on human nature) is the story conveying?  Why did Paul Yee write the story, do you think?

EF6 quoting material

The narrator says that he has “built walls” around his heart to protect himself.
 The narrator is protecting his broken heart: “built walls”. NOT INCORPORATED
He has “no need of friendship” and would prefer to be by himself.
He wishes that he had “never loved” anyone.
He wants to have “laughter” in his life. MISLEADING
“This movie... is the best... movie ever.”
This movie stinks.  Brad Pitt thinks that he is the best, but actually this is the worst movie ever.”

... ellipsis
[] square brackets
He is so sad that even the street looks to him like it is covered in a “shroud of snow.”
INCORPORATING QUOTED MATERIAL
He has “disdain” for personal relationships.
He “disdain[s]” personal relationships.

[] Use square brackets to make minor grammatical or stylistic changes.
He feels “shielded in my armor”
He feels “shielded in [his] armor”
He is “safe within [the] womb“ of his apartment.

... ellipsis
He feels that he has “no need of friendship; friendship causes pain”.
He feels that “friendship... causes pain”, so he would prefer not to have friends.
He feels that “no need... causes pain”. NO GOOD, NOT GRAMMATICAL, DOESN’T CONVEY MEANING
[] ... powerful tools, wield them lightly

His “feelings... have died [,so he never wants to] cr[y]” again. A MESS

He doesn’t want to wake up his “feelings that have died”, so he prefers to be alone. NEATER, MORE ELEGANT
BALANCE between quoted material and readability.

EF6 KME Ex69 possible solutions 2-10

2. The dog and the two cats are lying together and enjoying the warmth of the sun.

The dog and the two cats are lying together, and they are enjoying the warmth of the sun.

The dog and the two cats which are lying together are enjoying the warmth of the sun.

3. I can’t kiss you because I have a cold.

I have a cold, so I can’t kiss you.

4. Inge wanted to cook a goose; however, her husband preferred to have turkey.

Inge wanted to cook a goose, but her husband preferres to have turkey.

5. The gravy is dark and tastes good.

The dark gravy tastes good.

The gravy is dark, and it tastes good.

This was a good year for pears; in fact, we picked a bushel of them.

800 million people speak Mandarin, which is the most spoken language on Earth.

Mandarin is the most spoken language on Earth, and 800 million people speak it.

800 million people speak Mandarin, so it is the most spoken language on Earth.

8. Dim went to the movie with her brother even though she didn’t want to go.

Dim didn’t want to go to the movie with her brother; however, she went anyway.

9. Giles likes smoked ham and smoked herrings.

Giles likes smoked ham as well as smoked herrings.

Giles likes smoked ham; also, he likes smoked herrings.

Giles likes smoked ham; he also likes smoked herrings.

10. Kristen couldn’t afford a tutor, so she worked extra hard and succeeded in her studies.

 Kristen couldn’t afford a tutor, so she worked extra hard in order to succeed in her studies.

Kristen couldn’t afford a tutor, so she worked extra hard and succeeded in her studies.

 Kristen worked extra hard because she couldn’t afford a tutor; in the end, she succeeded in her studies.

EF6 KME Ex69 #1, multiple solutions

Rhonda’s sister, a singer, sang the national anthem at the game last night.

Rhonda’s sister who is a singer sang the national anthem at the game last night.

Rhonda’s sister, who is a singer, sang the national anthem at the game last night.

Rhonda’s sister is a singer, and she sang the national anthem at the game last night.

Rhonda’s sister is a singer; in fact, she sang the national anthem at the game last night.

Becuase Rhonda’s sister is a singer, she sang the national anthem at the game last night.

I know that Rhonda’s sister, a singer, sang the national anthem at the game last night.

EF6 Possible answer about conflict in "The Sullivan Ballou Love Letter"

          What is the main conflict in “The Sullican Ballour Love Letter”?

         

          The central conflict in the story “The Sullivan Ballou Love Letter” is a person vs himself conflict between the narrator, Sullivan Ballou, and his complicated feelings of responsibility to both his country and his family.  First off, Sullivan Ballou is torn between wanting to stay with his wife and family and feeling a duty to fight in the civil war.  In order to protect his country so that it will be safe for his family, he has to leave his family for a time.  Secondly, although he wants to come home after the war to live with his family, he seems to feel that he will die in the war.  In other words, he has to leave in order to make his future life safe and happy, but in doing so, he will likely be unable to enjoy safety and happiness after the war is over.  Thirdly, as an officer in the army, he has to take on a leadership role; however, in the letter, he talks about being a father to his children and helping to guide and raise them.  On one hand, he needs to be a leader in the army; on the other hand, he wants to be a role model in his family.  Ultimately, Sullivan Ballou is left conflicted between his desire to be a family man and his duty to be a patriot.

EF6 sentence combining exercises

Ex 63.

The sky rumbled for a long time. The thunderstorm began.

The sky rumbled for a long time, and the thunderstorm began.

The sky rumbled for a long time before the thunderstorm began.

The sky rumbled for a long time; then the thunderstorm began.

The thunderstorm began after the sky rumbled for a long time.

Many people enjoy lamb although it has a unique taste.

Many people enjoy lamb because it has a unique taste.

Many people enjoy lamb which has a unique taste.

Many people enjoy the unique taste of lamb.

Lamb has a unique taste which many people enjoy.

SIMPLE COMPOUND COMPLEX

You can use my book tonight if you bring it back tomorrow.

You can use my book tonight, but bring it back tomorrow.

The radio station announced the winning name, but it was not mine.

The radio station announced the winning name; sadly, it was not mine.

Don’t look directly at the eclipse, or you’ll damage your eyes.

Zygmunt was not boring; in fact, he was interesting.

Jim napped for three hours because he exhausted from watching television.

Dorota and her sister will both bring salads.