EF34 business letter writng

 

EF34

Good morning, everyone.

We will get started at 11:00.

 

 

Today’s agenda:

·      Finish model sentences

·      Business letter writing

·      HW   Optional practice business letter, BONUS PT

 

 

Friday (Final Day)

·      Review of term work

·      Marks day

I can give you your final mark

 

REPORT CARDS

Report Cards are usually available three business days after the end of term.  Students may request a report card by emailing southhillregistration@vsb.bc.ca   Pease note the following:

Subject line in email	“Report Card Request”
Name	Last Name, Usual First Name
DOB	Date of Birth - dd/mm/yyyy
Course	Name of Course taken
Time	Please specify the Period the course was held

 

 

 

SIMPLE COMPOUND COMPLEX?

 

 

Don’t forget to write your name before you begin the test. complex- adv cl

Don’t forget to write your name before beginning the test. functions the same as an adv cl

‘beginning’ gerund

 

; semicolons

EF5/6   She likes to go hiking; however, her husband does not.

EF34 She likes to go hiking, but her husband does not.

 

more tasty wf – tastier

one or two-syllable adjectives     -er  -est

nice    nicer   nicest

cold   colder   coldest

happy   happier   happiest

 

three-syllable adjectives   more   most

beautiful   more beautiful   most beautiful

four-syllable adjectives

cantankerous   more cantankerous   most cantankerous

five-syllable adjectives

sophisticated   more sophisticated   most sophisticated

 

 

 

The poem was simple but deep. SIMPLE

simple deep adjectives

The poem was simple but had new vocabulary. SIMPLE

 

The poem was long, but it was funny. COMPOUND

 

 

Learn English is important I think so. NOT ENGLISH SENTENCES

 

Make the decision what kind of sentence you want.

 

I think that learn English is important. HUGE IMPROVEMENT! Looks like an English sentence.

 

I think that learning English is important.

I think that English is important.

 

 

Framing your ideas in English structures.

 

‘that’ has a lot of uses in English

She said that she would be late. noun clause

She bought a sweater that is very ugly. adj cl

She really likes that boy. pronoun

 

, SOBA  compound

 

‘as’ means ‘while’

I was washing the dishes while/as you were watching a movie.

 

 

as you know – I know that you already know this. However, I’m going to say it anyway.

As you know, I can speak Spanish.

 

haunting – scary, frightening

The scary movie was haunting.

The picture of the young girl from Afghanistan is haunting.

 

 

 

Business letters – practical writing skills, practical writing for work, living in Canada, everyday useful writing,

-official writing, more formal, not casual writing

 

Reasons to write Business-style letters:

(Even emails can benefit from using the more formal style of a business letter –sets a professional, serious, mature tone)

e.g. Student emails to teachers.-

“What!!!????”

“what day the class end”

“im gonna miss class today what u gonna do in class?”

Very unprofessional looking.

We can do better.

A more professional and more formal tone and structure is advised.

-polite, not too casual

 

REASONS TO WRITE A BUSINESS-TYPE LETTER

1. interdepartmental letters (within a company)

2. cover letter for a resume (special style)

3. application letters to colleges and universities

In the Spring, many of our Grade 12 students are frantic about getting applications in to colleges and universities. The letters that they write are very important. I remember spending about two hours cowriting a letter with an E12 student.

 

4. letter to a government agency, Canadian government or the government of another country (e.g. Canada Revenue Agency, Immigration Canada, Canada Pension, City Hall)

NOTE: Communicating with Canada Revenue Agency (CRA) is really difficult.

5. employer (e.g. promotion, transfer, raise, personal leave, quit)

6. business person

7. court (e.g. jury duty)

8. lawyer

9. writing to your child’s teacher

10. report to a supervisor

11. incident report (e.g to police or ICBC)

 

Have you ever written a letter like that?

 

FORMAL, not casual like a personal letter

Formal – organized (structure), official-looking, appropriate tone, appropriate language, unemotional, a little bit of emotion can be effectice (less is more)

·     Distribute “Business Correspondence” p.c.

 

WRITE YOUR NAME AND ADDRESS

AT THE TOP OF THE PAGE

 

Mei (Sarah) Zhou

Mei “Sarah” Zhou     “ABC” not legal name, the name that you prefer

Allan Haley

GIVEN NAME  FAMILY NAME

 

Zhou, Mei “Sarah”

Haley, Allan

Zhou, Ming

 

FAMILY NAME, GIVEN NAME – I would not do it this way in a letter

 

666 Your Street

Vancouver, BC

V5P 2B6

 

SKIP A LINE

 

June 21, 2021

 

SKIP A LINE

 

THE NAME, TITLE AND ADDRESS OF THE PERSON YOU ARE WRITING TO

Mary Williamsonson

Director, Shaw Communications

123 Cordova Street

Vancouver, BC

V5R 2D2

 

Re/RE: Client/Reference/Case/Account/Purchase # 4722859   (Re-regarding)

 

OPEN YOUR LETTER WITH A GREETING, SALUTATION

 

CHOOSING THE TITLE CAN BE TRICKY: Mr? Mrs? Ms?

Robin Smith

Hui Yu Chen

 

Singh- man

Kaur- woman

 

MY SUGGESTION: Call and ask.

 

Dear Grandma,        comma for a personal letter ,

                                    comma- friendly, casual, not formal

 

Dear Sarah Chen:             colon for a business letter :

                                             more formal, not friendly, business :

 

Dear Mr. Chen:

Dear Mrs. Smith:

Dear Ms. Smith:

Dear Miss Smith:

Dear Mme Benoit:

Dear Sir or Madam:

 

Use a colon for a business letter, professional, formal, business, not friendly or personal

 

GREETING

To Mr. Pacquiao: sounds cold, very formal

To Sarah Chen:

To my dearest Mme Benoit: TOO MUCH

 

e.g. student emails

To my dear teacher: TOO PERSONAL

 

Dear Maria,     A BIT MORE RELAXED

Hi John,     QUITE INFORMAL AND RELAXED, FRIENDLY

Hello Al,        SLIGHTLY MORE FORMAL, BUT STILL FRIENDLY

 

Dear Sarah:   colon is formal, first name is casual

Dear Sarah,    SEEMS LIKE A BETTER CHOICE

 

 

Hi Justin,

You’re doing a good job as Prime Minister of Canada.

WAY TOO INFORMAL

 

To the Right Honourable Prime Minister of Canada, Justin Trudeau:

 

To Her Excellency, President Janice Alloud:

To His Excellency, AAA BBB:

 

To Her Excellency, Governor General of Canada, Mary Simon:

 

 

Research what title the person might have.

 

If you do not know the name of the recipient of your letter-

 

Health Insurance BC
PO Box 9035 Stn Prov Govt
Victoria, B.C. V8W 9E3

 

Dear MSP,

To whom it may concern,

To who it concerns,

To someone who can concern,

Dear Sir or Madam,  :  Choose one ,  OR :

 

 

NOT AS GOOD- impersonal, sometimes necesasary, for example when you are writing to the government

 

Dear Sir or Madam,

To whom it may concern, (reference letter)

 

ADVICE: It is always better to get the name of the person who you are writing to. Call and find out. Ask, “Who can I address me letter to?”

 

 

Hi there,  VERY CASUAL

Hi all,  VERY CASUAL

Hi everybody,  VERY CASUAL

 

 

Dear Sir:

Dear Madam,

Dear Sir Chan,

Dear Madam Smith,

Dear Teacher Jones,

Dear Teacher,

My Dear Teacher,

Dear Sir Teacher Jones,

too submissive

 

honorifics, titles – Mr., Mrs., Ms., Miss, Professor, teacher, Doctor, President, Dean, Prime Minister, Vice-President, Chancellor, Father, Captain, Lieutenant, Sergeant, Corporal, Officer, manager, Sheriff, Mayor, MP, MLA, Principal, Senator, Queen, King, Prince, Princess, Emporer

 

Dear Professor Mahed,

Dear Teacher Jones, XXX

Teacher Haley polite translation, not English

To Mayor Kennedy Stewart:

Dear Principal Williams,

 

In class – Sir, Madam – very polite

 

 

 

BUSINESS WRITING – DON’T INDENT THE PARAGRAPHS

                                    - SINGLE-SPACE YOUR WRITING

 

e.g. SCHOOL WRITING

 

Thank you for meeting with me yesterday to discuss the job opportunity. I am very eager to speak further with you about this. Please let me know what day and time you will be available to meet.

BUSINESS WRITING

Thank you for meeting with me yesterday to discuss the job opportunity. I am very eager to speak further with you about this. Please let me know what day and time you will be available to meet.

 

I would like to setup an interview with you in the next few weeks. I can be available any workday betwee 10 and 3.

 

SKIP A LINE BETWEEN PARAGRAPHS

 

*Business writing uses a different format than school writing.*

 

 

** ENDINGS FOR BUSINESS LETTERS

 

Yours truly,

Sincerely,

Yours,

Yours sincerely,

Best regards,

Regards, (cold sounding, more formal sounding)

Respectfully, (talking to someone higher in the business than you)

Kind regards,

Warm regards, (sounds very friendly, very nice)

Thank you,

MY FAVOURITE: Best,

 

PERSONAL

Sincerely yours,

Yours sincerely,

Faithfully,

Cheers,  VERY CASUAL, Also a friendly way to end a conversation

 

TALKING

Australian speech:  Thanks. No worries.

American speech: Thanks. Uh huh.

Casual speech: Thanks. Sure. No problem.

More polite: Thank you. You’re welcome. Certainly. My pleasure. Happy to.

 

CASUAL-FUN

See you later. Not if I see you first.

Keep your stick on the ice.

Check you later.

 

See you soon, I hope. Take care.

Keep in touch.

Don’t be a stranger.

 

OLD-FASHIONED, BUT SOUNDS NICE, PERSONAL LETTERS, NOT FOR BUSINESS

I remain,

 

 

EF56 sentence combining

 

English Foundations 5/6

Good morning, everyone.

We will get started at 8:30

 

 

Never quit! Keep going.

If you think too much about it, it can become overwhelming/too much.

Then you will shut down.

Keep going day by day. Don’t worry too much about your progress. The progress will come unexpectedly.

Have faith in the process- daily practice. Believe in your ability. Believe in yourself.

Keep reaching for the next level if you want to make progress.

 

 

Today’s agenda

·      Sentence combining, your examples from homework

·      Final test   Choice:

- Paragraph on a general topic, not a short story

- Business letter on a topic I will give you

 

 

Friday (Final day)

·      Review of work covered this term

·      Marks day

·      I can give you your final mark.

No report card tomorrow.

 

 

 

 

REPORT CARDS

Report Cards are usually available three business days after the end of term.  Students may request a report card by emailing southhillregistration@vsb.bc.ca   Pease note the following:

Subject line in email	“Report Card Request”
Name	Last Name, Usual First Name
DOB	Date of Birth - dd/mm/yyyy
Course	Name of Course taken
Time	Please specify the Period the course was held

 

 

 

 

 

1.    There is an atmosphere which is relaxed and friendly in the class.

complex – adj cl

There is a relaxed and friendly atmosphere in the class.

simple

 

2.    There is no homework,and SV delicious food ,so that it can be eaten at the end of lab.   , and ,so   RW

 

3.    Hamish is learning recipes this week that use eggs and dairy products which include milk and cheese.

complex- adj cl

 

4.    There is no home work and there is delicious food that can be eaten at the end of the lab. REP

 

5.    There is an atmosphere in the class that is relaxed and friendly.

6.    Hamish is learning recipes this week. The recipes use eggs and dairy products it include milk and cheese. RO run on sentence

Hamish is learning recipes this week. The recipes use eggs and dairy products. It includes milk and cheese.

not combined fully

 

This week, Hamish is learning recipes that use eggs and dairy products that include milk and cheese.

This week, Hamish is learning recipes that use eggs and dairy products such as milk and cheese.

This week, Hamish is learning recipes that use eggs and dairy product including milk and cheese.

 

She plays many sports including soccer, baseball and lawn bowling.

 

Margot has travelled to many countries including Canada, the US, Ireland, and India.  – there are more-

 

7.    He cooked an omelette on Tuesday.The omelette was lightness and perfect ;also,it was stuffed with cheese, green peppers and spices.

He cooked an omelette on Tuesday. The omelette was light and perfect; also, it was stuffed with cheese, green peppers and spices. learn spacing after punctuation . ; , put a space afterward

 

8.    Hamish is a growing boy he ate the omelette that contained four large.eggs.He did the dishes and clean the lab in which he worked ,after that he left for lunch. XXX

Hamish is a growing boy. He ate the omelette that contained four large eggs. He did the dishes and cleaned the lab in which he worked. After that, he left for lunch.

 

9.    On Tuesday He cooked a light omelette which had perfect lightness stuffed with cheese, peppers, and spices.

 

10.                       There is a relaxed and friendly atmosphere in the class. simple

11.                       There is no homework, and the food that can be eaten at the end of the lab is delicious. compound complex

 

12.                       This week, Hamish is learning recipes that use eggs and dairy products that include milk and cheese this week.

13.                       On Tuesday, he cooked an omelette that stuffed with cheese, green peppers and spices was light and lightness was perfect.  RW

On Tuesday, he cooked a perfect light omelette that was stuffed with cheese, green peppers and spices.

 

14.                       Hamish is a growing boy and ate the omelette that contained four eggs that were large. complex- adj cl

15.                       He did the dishes and cleaned the lab in which he worked and left for lunch.   AAA and BBB and CCC XXX    

   He did the dishes, cleaned the lab in which he worked, and left for lunch.  AAA, BBB, and CCC.

 

She hikes, swims, and does yoga.

 

 

16.                       There is an atmosphere in the class that was relaxed and friendly. vt

There is an atmosphere in the class that is relaxed and friendly.

There is an atmosphere that is relaxed and friendly in the class.

In the class, there is an atmosphere that is relaxed and friendly.

IDIOM six of one, half dozen of the other- either way is fine, the same

 

17.                       Hamish is learning recipes this week, which use eggs and dairy products. The products include both milk and cheese.

18.                       He cooked an omelette on Tuesday that was light and perfect. The stuffed that was with It was stuffed with cheese, green peppers and spices.

 

A teddy bear has stuffing inside.

A turkey has stuffing inside.

He is a stuffed shirt.

 

19.                       The cooking class is a welcome break from English and math concentrated.   hours of study  XXX

 

20.                       There is a relaxed and friendly atmosphere in the class.

21.                       There is no homework, but delicious food can be eaten at the end of the lab.

The delicious food can be eaten.  -passive voice

She ate some of the delicious food. – active voice

 

I fed the dog. active voice

The dog was fed (by me). passive voice

*In general, active voice sounds better and stronger.

 

22.                       Hamish is learning recipes this week, and the recipes use dairy products like/example such as milk and cheese.

 

23.                       He cooked an omelette on Tuesday, and the lightness was perfect stuffed with cheese, green peppers, and spices.

 

On Tuesday, he cooked an omelette stuffed with cheese, green peppers, and spices, and it was light and perfect.  busy sentene with lots oif information, put ‘on tuesday’ at the front, out of the way

 

He cooked a light omelette (that was) perfectly stuffed with cheese, green peppers, and spices.

 

24.                       Hamish is a growing boy, so he ate an omelette that was contained four large eggs.

 

The cooking class is a break from concentrated hours of Math and English.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Final Writing

 

Paragraph

What are your next steps in learning English?

OR

Business letter

Write a letter to this restaurant asking to have your wedding banquet at their venue.

 

Joe Chen, manager

Tasty Food Restaurant

2341 Hastings Street

Vancouver, BC

V6T1K7

EF34 model sentences, sentence combining

 

EF34

Good morning, everyone.

We will get started at 11:00.

 

 

Today’s agenda:

·      Model sentences

·      Sentence combining, your examples from homework

·      Final test, persuasive paragraph, last hour of class

 

 

Thursday

·      Letter writing, business letter or email, formal letter or email

 

 

Friday (Final Day)

·      Review

·      Marks day

I can give you your final mark

 

 

 

Model sentences- little bit higher EF56

Know More English

Simple

Compound

Complex

 

 

EF56   COMPOUND   ; semicolon  , SOBA

 

This focusses on the snentence style work that we have been doing for the past nine weeks. It also points to the future of what you learn next.

 

We can talk about the rest of them tomorrow if you want.

 

 

Your examples of sentence combining from homework:

1.    Barb and Helga excitedly crouched behind the broken fence. adv+V

2.    They looked without moving across the orchard, and they saw Mr. Walden who went into the house. COMPOUND COMPLEX SENTENCES

3.    They stared at the tree that was laden of with cherries. The tree was full of cherries.

4.    The girls talked for ten minutes about stealing some cherries and getting caught by their parents and the punishment by them.

5.    Helga laughed and suggested asking Mr. Walden for some cherries.

6.    They walked to the porch and saw Mr. Walden was coming down the steps, and he said with a grin that he saw them behind the fence earlier.

They walked to the porch and saw Mr. Walden was coming down the steps. He said with a grin that he saw them behind the fence earlier.

 

7.    He laughed and said, “ Help yourself “ then he gave them a large Bucket.

He laughed and said, “Help yourself.“ before giving them a large bucket. EF56 gerund ‘giving’

He gave his son a book.

He gave a book to his son.

 

 

8.    Bard and Helga crouched behind the fence with excitement breaking the fence.

9.    Bard and Helga crouched behind the broken fence with excitement.

10.                       Bard and Helga crouched excitedly behind the fence that was broken.

They talked loudly. They danced happily. He drove quickly.

She sits in class silently.

 

11.                       They looked across the orchard without moving, and saw  Mr.Walden went into the house.

They looked across the orchard without moving, and they saw Mr.Walden go into the house.

I saw a dog walk across the road this morning.

The little boy saw a squirrel climb a big oak tree.

 

12.                       They looked across the orchard without moving, and they saw Mr.Walden, and he went into the house.

SV, and SV, and SV. XXX 3 clauses – break it up into pieces

They looked across the orchard without moving. They saw Mr.Walden, and he went into the house.

They looked across the orchard without moving, and they saw Mr.Walden as he went into the house.

 

13.                       Mr.Walden went into the house while they looked at him across the orchard without moving.

14.                       They stared at the cherry trees that were laden and ripe.

 

Good work.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Persuasive paragraph.

Submit to me by 1:15.

Make this your best sentence writing of the term.

 

Choose one:

Should newscomers to Canada learn English?

OR

What are the secrets of a happy life?