English Foundations 5/6
Good morning, everyone.
We will get started at 8:30
Hump Day – Wednesday
Today’s agenda
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Continue letter writing, business letter
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Sentence combining – coordination and
subordination
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Optional replacement test on “Wise Woman of
Corboba” for the people who signed up for it
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HW
Thursday
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Sentence combining
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Final test Choice:
- Paragraph on a general topic, not a short story
- Business letter on a topic I will give you
Friday
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Review
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Marks day
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I can give you your final mark.
Continue business writing
Business letters – practical
writing skills, practical writing for work, living in Canada, everyday useful
writing,
-official writing, more
formal, not casual writing
Reasons to write Business-style
letters:
(Even emails can benefit from
using the more formal style of a business letter –sets a professional, serious,
mature tone)
e.g. Student emails to
teachers.-
“What!!!????”
“what day the class end”
“im gonna miss class today
what u gonna do in class?”
Very unprofessional looking.
We can do better.
A more professional and more
formal tone and structure is advised.
-polite, not too casual
REASONS TO WRITE A
BUSINESS-TYPE LETTER
1. interdepartmental letters
(within a company)
2. cover letter for a resume
(special style)
3. application letters to
colleges and universities
In
the Spring, many of our Grade 12 students are frantic about getting
applications in to colleges and universities. The letters that they write are
very important. I remember spending about two hours cowriting a letter with an
E12 student.
4. letter to a government
agency, Canadian government or another country (e.g. Canada Revenue Agency,
immigration, Canada Pension, City Hall)
NOTE: Communicating with
Canada Revenue Agency (CRA) is really difficult.
5. employer (e.g. promotion,
transfer, raise, personal leave, quit)
6. business person
7. court (e.g. jury duty)
8. lawyer
9. writing to your child’
teacher
10. report to a supervisor
11. incident report (e.g to
police or ICBC)
Have you ever had to write a letter
like that?
FORMAL, not casual and
personal like a personal letter
Formal – organized
(structure), official, appropriate tone, appropriate language, unemotional, a
little bit of emotion can be effectice (less is more)
· Distribute “Business Correspondence”
p.c.
WRITE YOUR NAME AND ADDRESS
AT THE TOP OF THE PAGE
Mei (Sarah) Zhou
Mei “Sarah” Zhou
GIVEN NAME FAMILY NAME
Zhou, Mei “Sarah”
FAMILY NAME, GIVEN NAME – I
would not do it this way in a letter
666 Your Street
Vancouver, BC
V5P 2B6
June 21, 2021
THE NAME, TITLE AND ADDRESS
OF THE PERSON YOU ARE WRITING TO
Mary Williamsonson
Director, Shaw Communications
123 Cordova Street
Vancouver, BC
V5R 2D2
Re/RE: Client/Reference/Case/Account/Purchase
#4722859 (Re-regarding)
OPEN YOUR LETTER WITH A
GREETING, SALUTATION
CHOOSING THE TITLE CAN BE
TRICKY: Mr? Mrs? Ms?
Robin Smith
Hui Yu Chen
Singh Kaur
Dear Grandma, comma for a personal letter ,
comma- friendly, casual, not
formal
Sarah Chen colon for a business letter :
more formal, not friendly,
business :
Dear Mr. Chen:
Dear Mrs. Smith:
Dear Ms. Smith:
Dear Miss Smith:
Dear Mme Benoit:
Dear Sir or Madam:
Use a colon for a business
letter, professional, formal, business, not friendly or personal
GREETING
To Mr. Pacquiao: sounds cold,
very formal
To Sarah Chen:
To my dearest Mme Benoit: TOO
MUCH
e.g. student emails
To my dear teacher: TOO
PERSONAL
Dear Maria, A BIT MORE RELAXED
Hi Al, QUITE INFORMAL AND RELAXED, FRIENDLY
Hello Al, SLIGHTLY MORE FORMAL, BUT STILL
FRIENDLY
Dear Sarah: colon is formal, first name is casual
Dear Sarah, SEEMS LIKE A BETTER CHOICE
Hello Justin,
You’re doing a good job as
Prime Minister of Canada.
WAY TOO INFORMAL
To the Right Honourable Prime
Minister of Canada, Justin Trudeau:
To Her Excellency, President
Janice Alloud:
To His Excellency, AAA BBB:
To Her Excellency, Governor
General of Canada, Mary Simon:
Research what title the
person might have.
Health
Insurance BC
PO Box 9035 Stn Prov Govt
Victoria, B.C. V8W 9E3
Dear MSP,
To whom it may concern,
To who it concerns,
To someone who can concern,
Dear Sir or Madam, :
Choose one , OR :
NOT AS GOOD- impersonal,
sometimes necesasary, for example when you are writing to the government
Dear Sir or Madam,
To whom it may concern,
(reference letter)
ADVICE: It is always better
to get the name of the person who you are writing to. Call and find out. Ask,
“Who can I address me letter to?”
Hi there, VERY CASUAL
Hi all, VERY CASUAL
Hi everybody, VERY CASUAL
Dear Sir:
Dear Madam,
Dear Sir Chan,
Dear Madam Smith,
Dear Teacher Jones,
Dear Teacher,
My Dear Teacher,
Dear Sir Teacher Jones,
too submissive
honorifics, titles – Mr, Mrs,
Ms, Miss, Professor, Doctor, teacher, President, Dean, Prime Minister,
Vice-President, Chancellor, Father, Captain, Lieutenant, Sergeant, Corporal, Officer,
manager, Sheriff, Mayor, MP, MLA, Principal, Senator, Queen, King,
Prince, Princess, Emporer
Dear Professor Mahed,
Dear Teacher Jones, XXX
Teacher Haley polite translation
To Mayor Kennedy Stewart:
In class – Sir, Madam – very
polite
BUSINESS WRITING – DON’T INDENT
THE PARAGRAPHS
- SINGLE-SPACE YOUR WRITING
e.g. SCHOOL WRITING
Thank you for meeting with me
yesterday to discuss the job opportunity. I am very eager to speak further with
you about this. Please let me know what day and time you will be available to
meet.
BUSINESS WRITING
Thank you for meeting with me
yesterday to discuss the job opportunity. I am very eager to speak further with
you about this. Please let me know what day and time you will be available to
meet.
I would like to setup an
interview with you in the next few weeks. I can be available any workday betwee
10 and 3.
SKIP A LINE BETWEEN
PARAGRAPHS
*Business writing uses a
different format than school writing.*
** ENDINGS FOR BUSINESS
LETTERS
Yours truly,
Yours,
Sincerely,
Yours sincerely,
Best regards,
Regards, (cold sounding, more
formal sounding)
Respectfully, (talking to
someone higher in the business than you)
Kind regards,
Thank you,
MY FAVOURITE: Best,
PERSONAL
Sincerely yours,
Yours sincerely,
Faithfully,
Cheers, VERY CASUAL, Also a friendly way to end a
conversation
TALKING
Australian speech: Thanks. No worries.
American speech: Thanks. Uh
huh.
Casual speech: Thanks. Sure.
No problem.
More polite: Thank you. You’re
welcome. Certainly. My pleasure. Happy to.
CASUAL-FUN
See you later. Not if I see
you first.
Keep your stick on the ice.
Check you later.
See you soon, I hope. Take
care.
Keep in touch.
Don’t be a stranger.
OLD-FASHIONED, BUT SOUNDS
NICE, PERSONAL LETTERS, NOT FOR BUSINESS
I remain,
I use the same format for important emails.
The magic words: Please. Thank you.
Sentence writing:
two ways to approach sentence-
coordination
subordination
* coordination- ‘co’ together coworker, cooperate, co-learner,
cohabitate
coordinate - on the
same level
coordinating clauses- two clauses on the same level, same
importance
CLAUSE A CLAUSE B
Mary likes hiking, but Joe likes swimming.
compound sentences , SOBA
; ; however,
NOTE: Don’t try to coordinate three clauses. Two is enough.
e.g. Mary likes hiking, but Joe likes swimming, and Dave
likes cycling.
Strung together clauses- not a nice style
Two (2) is our max usually.
Mary likes hiking, but Joe likes swimming. As well, Dave
likes cycling.
* subordination
sub- under subway, substitute, subconcious, sublime?
subordinating clauses – two clauses, one is more important
than the other
Joe drove his car today. It is raining.
Joe drove his car today because it is raining.
DIFFERENT STYLE, DIFFERENT INTENTION
Joe drove his car today. It is raining.
It is raining, so Joe drove his car today.
Joe drove his car today because it is raining.
SUBTLE DIFFERENCES- STYLISTIC DIFFERENCES,not grammatical
differences
This is the next level of writing.
Sarah is a nurse. She lives in Prince George.
Sarah is a nurse and lives in Prince George.
Sarah is a nurse, and she lives in Prince George.
Sarah who is a nurse lives in Prince George. who is
a nurse- less important information because it is in a subordinate clause
Sarah who lives in Prince George is a nurse. who lives
in Prince George - less important information because it is in a
subordinate clause
* The more sophisticated/skilled you become in your writing,
you more you will want to make decisions about which sentence style will work best
for each sentence.
Writing is hard! The more you learn, you more you realize
how much you don’t know.
Sentence combining- very effective to improve sentence writing
- take several short sentences and combine the key parts of
the sentences into one longer, dense sentence.
Cooking Class
1.
The cooking class is a break. KERNEL- centre, everything will be based on
this
Find new information in the following
sentences:
The break is welcome.
The break is from hours of
English.
The break is from hours of Math.
The hours are concentrated.
Combine these elements into one sentence:
The cooking class is a break
welcome
from hours of English
Math
concentrated
Choose a sentence style that seems appropriate. gut
reaction, feeling
SIMPLE? COMPOUND? COMPLEX?
SIMPLE The cooking class is a welcome break
from concentrated
hours of English and Math.
Homework:
Try a few of these. You don’t have to do them all. Combine
as mush as you can; if you can’t get all of the information in, that’s ok.
Email some to me if you want. We can go over them tomorrow.
