E10/ EF7 parallel exercise

Exercise #2 Create parallel form in the following sentences: 1. To become a scout leader, a parent attends a training weekend to learn scouting fundamentals, or the parent simply pays dues and attends meetings. A parent becomes a scout leader by attending a training weekend to learn scouting fundamentals or by simply paying dues and attending meetings. 2. The report considers important factors in choosing an investment, the ratings of companies, and superiority of stocks over futures. 3. The Muscle Club offers a variety of services: health checks, weightlifting spotting, large personal locker, free towels, bathing suits drying machines, expert massages, and complete workout trainer advice. Parallelism

E10/ EF7 Writing style- parallelism

Writing Style Parallelism-parallel structure within sentence List in series “I like walking, running, and biking.” Parallel- same word form, Gerunds- looks like a verb, is a noun “Skiing is fun.” “I like walking, running, and to ski.” Not parallel- different word forms “Three examples of intolerance in the novel are (how) Dakar’s cat got killed, David got beaten up by his father, and Sophie was hidden for her extra toes.” “Three examples of intolerance in the novel are Joseph’s “purification” of Dakar’s cat, his physical punishment of David, and his condemnation of Sophie.” Structures all different parallel

E10/ E7

Have you written the letter? Present perfect Did you write the letter? Did you finish writing the letter? Had done- past perfect- sub simple past What the action had done/ did was anger the already frustrated homeowners? vf- verb form present past participle begin began begun hurt hurt hurt speak spoke spoken blow blew blown know knew known sing sang sung forbid forbade forbidden do did done present perfect- very high frequency

E10/ EF7 sentence writing point

for example There are many instances of intolerance in the first four chapters of the novel. For example, Sophie’s foot, Dakar’s cat and the Great Horses. FIX #1 There are many instances of intolerance in the first four chapters of the novel. For example, there are Sophie’s foot, Dakar’s cat and the Great Horses. FIX #2 There are many instances of intolerance in the first four chapters of the novel, for example Sophie’s foot, Dakar’s cat and the Great Horses. There are many instances of intolerance in the first four chapters of the novel. First, Sophie’s foot. FIX #1 There are many instances of intolerance in the first four chapters of the novel. First, there is Sophie’s foot. FIX #2 There are many instances of intolerance in the first four chapters of the novel. First is Sophie’s foot. FIX #3 There are many instances of intolerance in the first four chapters of the novel. The first one is Sophie’s foot. SIMPLE SENTENCE- CLEAR, DIRECT First, there is Sophie’s foot. First is Sophie’s foot. The first one is Sophie’s foot. Sentence fragment- missing a subject or a verb

E10/ EF7 "The Chrysalids" online text

http://hrsbstaff.ednet.ns.ca/engramja/ENG_11/The%20Chrysalids.pdf

E10/ EF7 Paragraph advice/ review

Paragraph Begin with Introductory sentence- grabber (option) -question? -anecdote (short personal story) -historical -statistic, fact Topic sentence- topic, controlling idea -clear -focussed -direct -unambiguous 3-4 supporting points (on topic) ***Don’t drift.*** Concluding sentence- restatement of Topic Sentence One unified entity, one thing Organized, coherent, unified. Academic writing

EF 2/3 Website for good stories

from http://www.rong-chang.com/qa2/stories/story025.htm