Good morning, everyone.
We will get started at 8:30
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Collect homework letters
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Return Quiz#6- Go over, show solutions and
pitfall.
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Continue with quoting work. Using quotation
marks “ “
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Begin First Nations
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Optional replacement quiz for those who signed
up (Final 30m of class)
Tuesday
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Sentence style review from Friday
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First Nations
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Optional replacement test for those who signed
up (Final 55m of class)
Wednesday
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First Nations
Thursday
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Begin review
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Final test – paragraph about First Nations
(I will mark this quickly in order to get the
final marks done.)
Friday (Final day)
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Review
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Final marks- one-on-one meetings if you want
Many ways to do these.
Aim for simplicity.
Aim for clarity.
Good indication of where your sentence writing skill are.
A high mark would suggest your sentence writing is strong.
A low mark would suggest that you have work to do.
1.
Pete and his friends landed a job for one month which/that
was painting a house which/that belonged to Mr. Langois.
COMPLEX- 2 adj cl
Pete and his friends landed a one-month job
which was painting a house which belonged to Mr. Langois.
one-month - noun
modifying a noun, hyphen
Pete and his friends landed a one-month job
painting a house which belonged to Mr. Langois. DENSE
Pete and his friends landed a one-month job
painting Mr. Langois’ house. DENSER
2.
The house was large.
It would take days to clean, to scrape, and
to paint. SERIES, PARALLEL
It would take days to clean, scrape, and paint.
The house was large, so it would take days
to clean, scrape, and paint. COMPOUND
The house was large so that it would take
days to clean, scrape, and paint. COMPLEX- adv cl
,so so that
Because the house was large, it would take
days to clean, scrape, and paint. COMPLEX
It would take days to clean, scrape, and paint
the large house. SIMPLE
The large house would take days to clean, scrape,
and paint. SIMPLE
Two ways to punctuate items in a series.
It would take days to clean, scrape,
and paint. Oxford comma
It would take days to clean, scrape
and paint. – looks more modern
Either way is ok. The Oxford commas looks a
little old-fashioned, bit stodgy.
*All of these ways of combining sentence is based on the
sentence work we have been doing.
3.
Mr. Langois was confident.
He knew the teenagers.
He knew that they would do well.
They were young.
Mr. Langois was confident and knew the young teenagers would
do well. SIMPLE
Mr. Langois was confident and knew the teenagers would do well
because they were young. LOGIC?
Mr. Langois was confident and knew the teenagers would do well
although they were young.
NEW STYLE: Mr. Langois was confident, knowing the young teenagers
would do well.
We had fun yesterday, hiking and talking.
, GERUNDS
Marie spends her Friday nights at home, watching movies and
surfing the web.
4.
Mr. Langois would pay Pete $700 when the job was done,
and Pete would pay the others.
Mr. Langois would pay Pete $700 when the
job was done, and then Pete would pay the others.
Mr. Langois would pay Pete $700 when the
job was done; then Pete would pay the others.
COMPOUND
When the job was done, Mr. Langois would
pay $700 to Pete who would pay the others. COMPLEX- adv cl adj cl
5.
Pete hoped for something. ‘something’ place
holder
This job would lead to others.
This job would lead to a business.
The business would be painting houses.
He would do this every summer.
Pete hoped that this job would lead to
others.
This job would lead to a business which would
be painting houses, and he would do this every summer.
COMBINE MORE FULLY
Pete hoped that this job would lead to other
business painting houses that he would do every summer.
Pete hoped that this job would lead to other
business painting houses every summer. n cl
EASIER WAY
Pete hoped that this job would lead to others and a painting
houses business that he would do this every summer.
painting houses business – not a structure in English
POSSIBLE SOLUTION
Pete hoped that this job would lead to other jobs and a house-painting
business that he would do this every summer.
6.
Pete was young and wanted to be self-employed, and he
wanted to be his own boss. COMPOUND
Pete, who was young, wanted to be
self-employed and to be his own boss; Pete was an entrepeneur who didn’t want
to work for anyone else. OK
ANOTHER VERSION
Pete, who was a young entrepeneur, wanted to
be self-employed and to be his own boss; he didn’t want to work for anyone else.
COMPOUND COMPLEX
Pete was a young entrepeneur, so he wanted to be
self-employed and his own boss; also, he didn’t want to work for anyone else.
COMPOUND COMPLEX
ANOTHER POSSIBLE SOLUTION
Pete was a young self-employed entrepeneur who wanted
to be his own boss; he didn’t want to work for anyone else.
The sentence combining work is really valuable.
William Strong’s books
e.g. https://www.amazon.ca/Sentence-Combining-Composing-William-Strong/dp/0070625352
You will have to dig a little bit.
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