11:00 7/10 Sentence combining

sentence combining
William Strong


take several short sentences - find the key words in each, put the key words together into a longer, denser sentence

start with a kernel, centre

Kai plays soccer. KERNEL, scaffold
FIND NEW INFORMATION
He scores goals.
He is a good player.

Kai plays soccer, and he scores goals, and he is a good player. LOW-QUALITY

Kai plays soccer, scores goals, is a good player. 
SIMPLE
Kai plays soccer where he scores goals and is a good player. COMPLEX - adj cl

COMPACT AND DENSE
Kai plays soccer and scores goals because he is a good player.
Kai, who plays soccer, scores goals and is a good player.
Kai is a good soccer player and scores goals.
Kai, who plays soccer well, scores goals.
Kai, a good soccer player, scores goals.

1. I like Italian cooking. KERNEL
I like Chinese cooking.
They are very different.

I like Italian cooking
Chinese cooking
very different

Gut reaction - simple, compound, complex
What kind of sentence seems most appropriate?
I like Italian cooking and Chinese cooking although they are very different.
I like Italian and Chinese cooking although they are very different. COMPLEX
I like Italian and Chinese cooking , but they are very different. COMPOUND
Our decision to make as to what sounds best. Am I being as clear as I can be?
Am I using enough variety in my sentence styles?

The mother told her daughter that she couldn't borrow her necklace because she had been given it by her grandmother.
This is not clear.

The mother told her daughter that she couldn't borrow her necklace because she had been given it by her grandmother.

2. They are both spicy.
Italian cooks use garlic and oregano.
Chinese cooks often use ginger and hot pepper.

They are both spicy.
Italian cooks use garlic and oregano.
Chinese cooks often use ginger and hot pepper.

Although Italian cooks use garlic and oregano, and Chinese cooks often use ginger and hot pepper, they are both spicy.
Avoid opening sentences with long dependent clauses.

They are both spicy although Italian cooks use garlic and oregano, and Chinese cooks often use ginger and hot pepper.

Although they are both spicy, Italian cooks use garlic and oregano, and Chinese cooks often use ginger and hot pepper.
Shorter opening clause - seems better

Choices about style.