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"Native Talents"
1. Many Native Americans possess talents. KERNEL
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Many Native Americans possess talents.
Many Native Americans possess unique and unsung talents.
Many Native Americans possess talents, and the talents are unique and unsung. REP, POOR WRITING
Many Native Americans possess unique and unsung talents. CONDENSED, DENSE - as much information in as few words as possible
Many Native Americans possess unique and unsung talents which have helped build American cities and helped win wars. adjective clause
which have helped build American cities and win wars.
Choose your style.
2. One example is the Mohawk Indians who often worked as construction laborers until supervisors saw their catlike poise in extremely high places.
adjective clause
adverb clauses
3. High bridges and tall buildings were under construction. Mohawks would walk out on narrow beams and steel girders simple out of curiosity to see how work was progressing. NOT FULLY COMBINED
High bridges and tall buildings were under construction; Mohawks would walk out on narrow beams and steel girders simple out of curiosity to see how work was progressing. COMPOUND
When high bridges and tall buildings were under construction, Mohawks would walk out on narrow beams and steel girders simple out of curiosity to see how work was progressing. COMPLEX
PUNCTUATION
4. Soon Mohawks were in demand as riveters whose dangerous and high-paying job was to work hundreds of feet up joining beams with red-hot metal bolts.
5. The grace, agility and fearlessness of Mohawks became legendary as they worked on thousands of skyscrapers including the Empire State Building and the United Nations Building.
6. Nahavo Indians proved to be equally gifted in a different area when American security interests were gravely threatened during World War II.
7. The Nahavo language is so subtle and complex that it is virtually impossible to counterfeit and master as an adult.
The Nahavo language is very subtle and complex so that it is virtually impossible to counterfeitand or master as an adult.
so...that - shows causation
It is so cold that Maria has to wear a sweater.
I can't speak German and French. XXX
I can't speak German or French.
8. Only a few non-natives spoke Navaho in 1942
and none of these persons was a German or Japanese spy. American forces saw a way to ensure safe communications.
American forces saw a way to ensure that communications were safe.
Since only a few non-natives spoke Navaho in 1942 and none of these persons was a German or Japanese spy, American forces saw a way to ensure that communications were safe.
Only a few non-natives spoke Navaho in 1942, none of who was a German or Japanese spy, so American forces saw that as a way to ensure that communications were safe.
Say it out loud. If it sounds right, it probably is.
9. A team of 420 Navahos became radio operators called "code talkers", and they played a highly-significant role in the war effort because their code could not be broken or stolen by enemies.
10. American troops gained a great tactical advantage since they could make quick changes in strategy, communicate them by radio, and implement them immediately. parallelism
Many Native Americans possess unique and unsung talents. CONDENSED, DENSE - as much information in as few words as possible
Many Native Americans possess unique and unsung talents which have helped build American cities and helped win wars. adjective clause
which have helped build American cities and win wars.
Choose your style.
2. One example is the Mohawk Indians who often worked as construction laborers until supervisors saw their catlike poise in extremely high places.
adjective clause
adverb clauses
3. High bridges and tall buildings were under construction. Mohawks would walk out on narrow beams and steel girders simple out of curiosity to see how work was progressing. NOT FULLY COMBINED
High bridges and tall buildings were under construction; Mohawks would walk out on narrow beams and steel girders simple out of curiosity to see how work was progressing. COMPOUND
When high bridges and tall buildings were under construction, Mohawks would walk out on narrow beams and steel girders simple out of curiosity to see how work was progressing. COMPLEX
PUNCTUATION
4. Soon Mohawks were in demand as riveters whose dangerous and high-paying job was to work hundreds of feet up joining beams with red-hot metal bolts.
5. The grace, agility and fearlessness of Mohawks became legendary as they worked on thousands of skyscrapers including the Empire State Building and the United Nations Building.
6. Nahavo Indians proved to be equally gifted in a different area when American security interests were gravely threatened during World War II.
7. The Nahavo language is so subtle and complex that it is virtually impossible to counterfeit and master as an adult.
The Nahavo language is very subtle and complex so that it is virtually impossible to counterfeit
so...that - shows causation
It is so cold that Maria has to wear a sweater.
I can't speak German and French. XXX
I can't speak German or French.
8. Only a few non-natives spoke Navaho in 1942
and none of these persons was a German or Japanese spy. American forces saw a way to ensure safe communications.
American forces saw a way to ensure that communications were safe.
Since only a few non-natives spoke Navaho in 1942 and none of these persons was a German or Japanese spy, American forces saw a way to ensure that communications were safe.
Only a few non-natives spoke Navaho in 1942, none of who was a German or Japanese spy, so American forces saw that as a way to ensure that communications were safe.
Say it out loud. If it sounds right, it probably is.
9. A team of 420 Navahos became radio operators called "code talkers", and they played a highly-significant role in the war effort because their code could not be broken or stolen by enemies.
10. American troops gained a great tactical advantage since they could make quick changes in strategy, communicate them by radio, and implement them immediately. parallelism
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