Eng 7/10/11 Sentence combining

"Moving Day"

1. We had not been looking forward to the move.
It was the smoothest in memory.

Meaning? contrast

Even though we had not been looking forward to the move, it was the smoothest in memory. COMPLEX- ADV CL

We had not been looking forward to the move; nonetheless, it was the smoothest in memory. COMPOUND

2. We picked up the truck,
The truck was rented.
It was eight o'clock.
We drove to the apartment.

We picked up the rented truck at eight o'clock and drove to the apartment.

After we picked up the rented truck at eight o'clock, we drove to the apartment.


"self-directed, self-monitoring, self-correcting"

other/another singular/plural

Joan has another bicycle in the garage.
Joan has three other bicycles in the garage.


"Frisbee Afternoon"

1. Rob's motion is quick.
His motion is snakelike.
Rob's motion is quick and snakelike. SIMPLE
Rob's quick motion is snakelike. SIMPLE
Rob's motion which is snakelike is quick. COMPLEX - ADJ CL

Rob's motion is quick, even snakelike.
Rob's motion is as quick as a snake.

SIMILES
as ... as a ...
She is as tall as a tree.
Joe is as thin as a dime.
Joe is as sly/cunning as a fox.
Joe is a deaf as a post.
Joe is as blind as a bat.
Joe is as happy as a clam.
Joe is as happy as a pig in shit. FAMILY TALK

2. His underhand, sidearm flick sends the frisbee into flight. SIMPLE

He is underhanded. dishonest

3. It spins clockwise.
It rides a puddle of air.
It spins clockwise and rides a puddle of air.
It spins clockwise, and it rides a puddle of air.
It spins clockwise while it rides a puddle of air.

It spins clockwise while it ridesing a puddle of air.

It spins clockwise while riding a puddle of air.

It spins clockwise, riding puddle of air.
Spinning clockwise, it rides puddle of air.

counter-clockwise

4. It slices through sunlight and shadow, and it glides across a grassy clearing. COMPOUND

It slices through sunlight and shadow as it glides across a grassy clearing. COMPLEX - ADV CL

It slices through sunlight and shadow, gliding across a grassy clearing.

Slicing through sunlight and shadow, it glides across a grassy clearing.

5. Then a breeze catches the disc, making it climb and dip.
Catching the disc, a breeze makes it climb and dip.

6. The Frisbee hovers, following the surface currents.
Hovering, the Frisbee follows the surface currents.

I CAN'T THINK OF ANY PRESCRIPTIVE GRAMMAR RULE. I'M SHOWING A DESCRIPTIVE STYLE.

7. Whirling soundlessly, dropping lower and lower, it settles onto my outstretched index finger.

Whirling soundlessly, it drops lower and lower, settling onto my outstretched index finger.

It whirls soundlessly, dropping lower and lower, settling onto my outstretched index finger.

Not only whirling soundlessly, but also dropping lower and lower, it settles onto my outstretched index finger.

Different ideas. New ideas to think about and try.


"Panic"

3. I felt the panic which was like an enormous crushing wave.
I felt the panic like an enormous crushing wave.

I felt an enormous crushing wave of panic.

panic attack -