Eng 7/10/11 Parallelism

EASIER EXERCISES
1. The understudy had bright green eyes, a great mass of blonde hair, and her face was red.

adj adj noun
bright red face
florid red face
hot red face
cherry red face

The understudy had bright green eyes, a great mass of blonde hair, and a florid red face.


adjectives modify nouns "a red face"
nouns modify nouns "a school bus"
school bus, school is a noun
book store
computer expert
business woman

nouns can act like adjectives

no s

He is a computer expert.
He is a computers expert. XXX

We went to a shoe store.
We went to a shoes store. XXX

He went camping with his four years old son. XXX
He went camping with his four-year-old son.

- hyphen

This is a five weeks class. XXX
This is a five-week class.

Sarah went on a five hours hike in the woods. XXX

Sarah went on a five hours hike in the woods. 

'five hours' is describing 'hike'
five-hour

Sarah went on a five-hour hike in the woods.

MORE CHALLENGING EXERCISES
1. The English teacher spoke in a nasal tone, unpleasantly, but conveying the information clearly and was funny.

The English teacher spoke unpleasantly in a nasal tone but conveyed the information clearly in a funny way.

2. The coach told his players that they should get plenty of water, to not eat sugary snacks, and being sure that they are getting plenty of sleep.

that they should get plenty of water, noun clause

The coach told his players that they should get plenty of water, should not eat sugary snacks, and should be sure to get plenty of sleep.

The coach told his players that they should get plenty of water, not eat avoid sugary snacks, and be sure to get plenty of sleep.

She has xxx, yyy, and zzz. Oxford comma

She has xxx, yyy and zzz.

I bought apples, oranges. XXX

I bought apples, and oranges. XXX

I bought apples and oranges.

I bought apples, oranges, and kiwis.

I bought apples, oranges and kiwis.

She made peanut butter and jam, ham and cheese, and chicken and tomato sandwiches. A little confusing

She made peanut butter and jam, ham and cheese, and chicken and tomato sandwiches. Clearer choice

MUCH MORE CHALLENGING EXERCISES

4. In order to convey the information correctly to the crowd, the police officer was speaking loudly, he told people where they should be standing, repeating information so they would remember and gesturing.

In order to convey the information correctly to the crowd, the police officer was speaking loudly, telling people where they should be standing, repeating information so they would remember, and gesturing.

EDIT

In order to convey the information correctly to the crowd, the police officer was speaking loudly and telling people where they should be standing. He repeated information and gestured at them so they would remember.

In order to convey the information correctly to the crowd   Avoid beginning sentences with long phrases or clauses. Get to the subject and verb as quickly as possible

The police officer was speaking loudly to the crowd in order to convey the information correctly. He was telling people where they should be standing.

EASIER TO ABSORB

The police officer was speaking loudly to the crowd in order to convey the information correctly; mostly, he was telling people where they should be standing.