Friday, 7 October 2016

E11 Sentence writing- sentence combining

The cooking class is a break. KERNEL-centre

William Strong- university professor
academic English- formality, prestige- vocabulary, specialized vocab.,
high-quality sentences- compact, dense- convey a lot of meaning with economy,
the most meaning in the shortest number of words.

20 page easy, 2 page hard
variety of sentence styles, dense, convey a lot of meaning
prestige language- academic language, professional language

1. The cooking class is a welcome break from concentrated hours of English and Math.
2. There is a relaxed and friendly atmosphere in the class.
There is a atmosphere which is relaxed and friendly in the class.
There is a relaxed, friendly atmosphere in the class.
adjectives- order of adjectives
the cute white dog
the white cute dog (weird)
Opinion Size Age Shape Colour Origin Material Purpose

beautiful  big      young  round     green/grey French    cotton    school

The beautiful green tree...
The round Japanese tea cup.... NO COMMAS
The beautiful, cute baby...  COMMA – IN THE SAME CATEGORY





COMPOUND SENTENCE
She likes cats, but he likes dogs.
FANBOYS- for and nor but or yet so
I am wearing a sweater, for it is cold. UNUSUAL
I am not going to the party, nor am I going home. UNUSUAL
She said she would be here, yet she is late. UNUSUAL
SOBA- so or but and AUTHENTIC
Jung was in love with Frank, so he felt anxious.
Jung was in love with Frank; therefore, he felt anxious.
Jung was in love with Frank; for that reason, he felt anxious.
COMPLEX
Jung felt anxious because he was in love with Frank.

VARIETY OF SENTENCES

She was given detention (for being late). prepositional phrase

SENTENCE COMBINING
3. Although there is no homework, there is delicious food that can be eaten at the end of the lab.
MODEL
Although Jook had no friends, she did have a good companion who would take her out around town in the evenings.

5. He cooked an omelette on Tuesday; it was light, perfect, and stuffed with cheese, green peppers, and spices.
On Tuesday, he cooked a spicy cheese and green pepper omelette that was light and perfect.

The omelette he cooked on Tuesday was stuffed with only cheese, green peppers and spices; as a result, the omelette was perfectly light.
ADVICE- NO MORE THAN 3-4 ADJECTIVES

cheese, green peppers and spices
cheese, green peppers, and spices OXFORD COMMA
OPTIONAL- DO YOU NEED IT?
The sandwich had butter, bread, and peanut butter and jam.
The sandwich had butter, bread, peanut butter, and jam.
COMMAS ARE VERY PERSONAL-

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